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"Old Friends" by Oscar Paco (foursome) 7, 7, 7
"Old Friends" by Oscar Paco (OscarPaco@aol.com). Guest reviewed by Poison Ivan. This is the story of Nicolas and Jacala and James and the 36C-28-35 narrator. I'm not sure what the narrator's name is, but I do know her breasts are her best feature. These four old college buddies get together every year to party and dance and have a good time. Nicolas, who is Jacala's husband, wasn't much to look at when they were all in college. But this year ... wow! What a transformation! A few extra pounds, longer hair, a stylish earring, a new goatee--Nicolas had become quite a hunk! By the time the foursome had danced all night, 36C-28-35 was practically creaming her panties! But no marriage vows were broken that night. The couples paired off, husband with wife. James and 36C-28-35 returned to their hotel room for a nice, boisterous fuck, while Jacala and Nicolas tried to sleep in the next room. It turned out Nicolas wasn't very sleepy, though. 36C-28-35 saw him standing in the bathroom door, peeking and jerking off. Needless to say, the idea of performing for an appreciative audience had 36C-28-35 popping off a couple explosive orgasms. The next morning, 36C-28-35 woke up to find her husband and Jacala gone to breakfast. She was naked. She was horny. She was alone with Nicolas. Hmm. I wonder what happens next? This story has its share of silly parts. There are quite a few extraneous details, and more than a handful of sex story cliches. The grammar and spelling are, at times, pretty bad. But other parts of this story are very well done. In fact, I thought the final sex scene had some excellent passages. Oscar Paco has some talent. I would encourage him to write more. I would also encourage him to find someone to proof his stories before he posts them. If he cleaned it up some, he could have a pretty good story here. Ratings for "Old Friends" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 7 Ivan (appeal to reviewer): 7 |