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"Freewheeling Barbara Toys with Boys" By Unknown Author
(older woman & younger guys) 8.5
"Freewheeling Barbara toys with Boys" by Unknown Author (reposted by The Storyteller (storyteller@hempseed.com). Guest review by Dave Myers. This oldie-but-goodie has recently been reposted. I can remember when it was sent out over Usenet the first time. Ah yes! 1993...a time when a.s.s. had mostly stories instead of advertisements...when there were new messages regularly in r.a.e... Moral of the story: sometimes the best porn is old porn. Want to read about a multidimensional female character ? She stops to think about things other than sex once in a while. Want to get good tips on how to write for a female character conscious of her sexuality in ways other than, "Gee, I'm horny..." ? Go no further. Plot synopsis: Barbara, a divorcee, has pent up sexual energy. In the story, we see this released "in character". In other words, she thinks about her actions, and in many ways this makes for better (and sometimes more erotic) reading than the bump-and-grind scenes. This is a slight, but welcome, departure from the housewife-turned-crazed-animal shtick. Enter Barbara's son. I should mention there are a small number of typos in this very long story. One is quite hilarious, concerning Barbara's son: "My own sin will be eighteen next week!" Another typo later replaces "bother" for "brother" with similar effects. Of course, Barbara and son have thoughts for each other, but this writer knows how to use the tension to advantage, and builds up the steam gradually, with near misses along the way. After a number of steamy encounters, we see that Barbara is still quite attractive to younger guys, and she gets plenty of attention. The sex is hot, and Barbara experiences many new things. At one point, even, a glass bottle and a salami get used as dildos (hence, the word TOYS in the title). For some people, this may be a great thing, but for me it goes a little too far. Still, I can only marginally penalize the writer for an otherwise nice piece of work. Rating: 8.5 |