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"Rain" by Crimson Dragon (ff bondage) 10, 10, 10
"Rain" by Crimson Dragon (crimson@yahoo.com). Kat has to have a talk with Leanne. She doesn't want to do it. She really doesn't. But she has to. I won't tell you what Kat is so nervous to discuss with Leanne, but I will mention that after the conversation Leanne handcuffs Kat to a large oak tree near their cabin and makes love to her in the rain. It's really pretty sexy! I felt that the author over-used the technique of employing sentence fragments to denote disjointed thoughts. Like this. Especially when the fragments are not parallel. To give the impression of disjointed thinking. Perhaps. It's a legitimate approach, and the author does it better than I did in the previous "sentences"; but I just think maybe the author should be a little more selective in the use of this method. Ratings for "Rain" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 |