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"The Lawyer from Akron" by SR (cybersex) 10, 10, 10
"The Lawyer from Akron" by SR (mailto:parasol_60@yahoo.com). Guest review by The Bear (mailto:thebear@io.com). Interesting coincidence: I had just finished reading this story on ASS and was preparing to send a complimentary note to the author when I checked my email and found that Celeste had sent me the story for a review. I already wrote my note to the author; now here is my review to let potential readers know about this new author to watch for. "The Lawyer from Akron" purports to be a captured chat session between the eponymous lawyer and a chatroom temptress using the name Paranoid. I'm not an aficionado of online chat, but this piece has the ring of authenticity to it. After some flirtatious banter and getting to know each other, the pair get down to a hot description of his preferences in getting head, and her preferences in giving it. If anyone finds the early parts of the story a bit slow, the final few paragraphs should more than make up for it. Rereading the story for purposes of this review, I had some difficulty with the first two ratings. The plot is minimal, the character development limited by the chosen format. Punctuation and capitalization seem natural for a chat session in which the chatters don't deem such niceties important. I decided that both are appropriate to the story, and gave it 10s all around. BTW, readers who enjoy this story will be pleased to learn that the author posted several other pieces in similar format (chat sessions) although with a variety of plots. They're worth a search on DejaNews, or a trip to Eli's ASSM Archive when it is back up. Ratings for "The Lawyer from Akron": Athena (technical merit): 10 Venus (plot and character): 10 Bear (appeal to reviewer): 10 |