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"Tomboy" by TJ Walker (kiddy incest) 6
"Tomboy" by TJ Walker (Reposted by Commander Jameson). Guest review by David Myers. So many of the incest stories in a.s.s.m. suffer from lack of originality. There are times when this genre can really shine, but usually I come away hoping for something a little different than the last time. Walker has a few well-written moments, but fails to show something really new. The Synopsis: Two very young teen boys each find themselves attracted to the other boy's sister. A group scene ensues and the at least one boy finds himself attracted to his own sister, too. My favorite line in this story is one that underscores how Walker fails to suspend my disbelief over the situation: "If you want, you can come in my panties..." she began. I laughed pretty hard. This point comes midway in the narrative, after the boys have been jacking off together with some magazines and one of the sisters, who is 12, is ready to join in the fun. This comes after almost no sexual build-up on the girl's part, and is one of her first lines of dialogue. I should give Walker some credit with the last third of the story. He does manage to build up some nice (and fairly hot!) scenes that are very different from the no-frills head-first start. Still, I can't help but think that this one was written in two different stages, and sewn together too quickly in the middle. It leaves a disjointed feeling for the reader. Rating: 6 |