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"Easter Tears" by Crimson Dragon (ff relationship & atmosphere)
9.7, 9, 9.8
"Easter Tears" by Crimson Dragon (dcrimson@yahoo.com). Guest review by jubjub. Story Summary: Third in a series about an on-going relationship between two girls. Wow. This is a very good story. The best that I've reviewed so far. The style and atmosphere are vivid and sensual. The sex is hot and the plot (taken over the whole series) is compelling. All in all, a story I would highly recommend--but you must read the first two stories first ("Harvest Moon" and "Christmas Present"). A word about my ratings. A 9 represents near perfection. After that, harder I have to look to find room for improvement, the closer the rating will be to a10. One further point: I consider style to be a component of technique. So even if a story has few or no grammar or spelling errors, I might still mark down for stylistic problems. I make this point because I had problems with the way the writer wrote dialog. The quotes are rarely directly attributed. This made it more difficult to follow who was speaking and tended to make the characterization harder to follow. I had more problems with the characterization. The author wrote from third- person omniscient. If the characters are not distinctly drawn, it is possible to confuse them. In this case, it took a couple of times through the story before I figured out exactly the relationship between the two girls. This despite the fact that I have read the previous stories in this series. Of course, I didn't mind reading this story several times. It is a masterpiece of atmosphere. Don't read this story until you've read the first two parts. The relationship reaches a crisis point in this story and the information in the earlier parts make this story much easier to understand. I am definitely looking forward to what I assume to be the last part of the story. Ratings for "Easter Tears" Technical: 9.7 Dialogue should be made clearer Characterization and Plot: 9 Characters were difficult to tell apart Appeal: 9.8 Lost it a bit due to character confusion |