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"Lord Of Dreams: The Barbershop" by Victor Ramierez (mind control)
Nick: 9, 8, 8
"Lord Of Dreams: The Barbershop" by Victor Ramierez (lovecannibal@hotmail.com). Review by Nick e-mail nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk I believe this is part of a series of stories involving a man who is able to wander into the minds of women and explore their fantasies, then manipulate their dreams. In this one the hero is on an aircraft, and as the plane takes off he pokes around the mind of one of the stewardesses and discovers a fantasy about having her pubes shaved off. Of course she dreams this and wakes up to find that the fantasy was all true and that she was naked. Her colleague is very discreet and tells her that they just let her sleep and that her only visitor was a guy who claimed to be a friend. I had a terrible credibility issue with this aspect of it. We were asked to believe that in a busy aircraft shortly after takeoff a stewardess is stripped naked and shaved as she slept without anyone noticing. I suppose I could have forgiven this if I had been into shaving cunts, but I'm not - sorry. My marks for this: Technique 7 (it flowed well enough) Plot/character 5 Appeal 4 After Celestial Adjustments: Athena (Technique) 9 Venus (Plot/Character) 8 General Appeal 8 |