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"Boy Magnets" by Jenny Wanshel (teacher fucks student).
Story Writer: 9, 7, 6
"Boy Magnets" by Jenny Wanshel (chilly2@biosys.net). Guest review by The Story Writer. "Boy Magnets" relates how a horny middle school teacher begins an affair with a boy in one of her classes. I have the impression that "Jenny Wanshel" really is a woman. This has the feel of a true story; it contains numerous irrelevant details. and telegraphs its punches. There are a couple of incidents recounted within the story that could have been developed if this were fiction and should have been left out if it’s not. The initial seduction goes on too long to be artful, -- she really has to work on this very naive male -- but that lends an air of verisimilitude. One puzzling aspect was why a woman as pretty and hot as the narrator makes herself out to be doesn’t have several men helping keep her nailed down. But then I thought the same thing about that teacher in Seattle. Paraphrasing Borges, "Reality may escape the obligation to be interesting; stories, may not." Technical quality is good. I suppose the narrator is not in the English department because I did notice one grammatical error "Well, it wasn't her...." and at least one comma splice. Although I see it frequently, I still believe the past tense of "sneak" is "sneaked," not "snuck." "Backseat" (n) is not one word, though "backseat" (adj) can be. Perhaps the narrator is the Latin teacher, since she correctly writes areolae as the plural of areola and does not confuse it (little area) with aureole (golden crown). Definitely, she’s not the biology prof, since she believes that a bicep is the singular of biceps. Finally, (and getting to grouse about this is my only condition for doing these reviews) the author does not separate sentences with TWO -- that’s ONE, TWO -- spaces! For me, the story is neither sweet nor particularly hot. Now how do these ratings work? Athena-9 Venus-7 Homer-6. |