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"Playing with Fire" by MichaelD38 (Sex in a brushfire)
Jubjub: 10, 9.5, 9.5
"Playing with Fire" by MichaelD (MichaelD38@aol.com). Guest review by Jubjub. Story Summary: Sex in a brushfire This is an excellent story. A man describes how fire turns him on sexually. Eventually he meets, and mates, a woman firefighter who feels the same way. Technically, this story is all but perfect. I did find a few questionable points, but nothing that I could definitely say was an error without a book on grammar on hand. While the style was nothing special, the author used variety in both his vocabulary and his method. This was a story that I think would please most professional editors. Speaking of plots and characters, I had a few small complaints. The author didn’t seem to know how to get the man and the woman together. The dialogue seemed somewhat unnatural and rushed. The ending was seemed to fade a bit. Neither of these are major problems, however. Overall, the best story I’ve reviewed so far. The main character is very well drawn. While this story is not the sexiest, the most erotic, or even the most realistic, it does have something to say and says it very well. Very recommended. Technical: 10.0 No definitive errors. Sufficient style Characterization and Plot: 9.5 Felt rushed a bit through the latter half Appeal: 9.5 As close to perfect as I expect to see |