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"Hope" by Wayne Laredo (adult sex with young girl) 10, 9, 9
"Hope" by Wayne Laredo (laredow@hotmail.com). Hope is the narrator's cousin-in-law -- his uncle's wife's daughter. She arrives on his doorstep late one night -- actually early one morning -- and he lends support to her in her moment of distress. He's 20 and she's 13, but don't let that put any ideas into your head. They have a chaste relationship. She comes to him because she's drunk and her mother is a recovering alcoholic who would be upset at this teenage indiscretion. Other than the drinking bit, she was defending her virtue; and so Silas lets her sleep in his bed with him while he watches a sexy tape on his VCR. So when Epiphany -- the girl in the movie -- has her climax and Hope says it would be OK for Silas to feel how wet she is, Silas declines, since she is underage, her cousin-in-law, and drunk as a skunk. But then -- to demonstrate that she is sober, like the way the cops have you touch your own nose with your index finger -- she grabs his dick nicely and he says what-the-hell and away they go. Actually, when he feels her cunt, he has no real evidence that it really was all that wet BEFORE he got there…. The main problem with this story is that Hope has "aureolae" where most women have areolas. Maybe it's a birth defect or a religious thing of some kind. This story is full of bad information. Aside from the aureolae, there's the problem of birth control by withdrawal. Yeah, right! Don't bet on it. I don't want to scare anybody, but (a) sometimes it's hard to pull out before ejaculation and (b) there's sperm in that there pre-cum. Really. You can look it up. Then Silas reinserts right after he cums between her thighs. Guess what! Semen will still be oozing out that little dipstick for the next half hour or so. I suppose I am making too big a thing about the birth control issue, but the author brought it up. Aside from that gaffe and the aureolae, this is a pretty decent story. Not bad at all! There's hope for this author…. Ratings for "Hope" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 |