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"Soccer Mom" by Alden Bradley (no-sex romance). Sven: 8, 8, 9
"Soccer Mom" by Alden Bradley (zzztopper@aol.com). Review by Sven the Elder, who may be contacted at Sven@brass-neck.demon.co.uk. I read this story a little over a week ago when it was published and had mixed feelings over it when I did so. It's a story that doesn't have sex in it, which makes it slightly difficult to review objectively on our ng, given its title and remit. This is a bittersweet story of life and meetings and new beginnings. Two single folks meet at their children's football games, talk and find through their children's friendships that they too have things in common. They profess their love for each other and the story ends, perhaps a little abruptly, with the hint of the promise to come. The story is put together well, but does not really belong here. I get the feeling that there is an element of recounting a true to life situation, but that the author either didn't wish to or felt he could not go into the more graphic details that this ng is a little more used to. I enjoyed the story; and the promise that might be left me interested and perhaps looking forward to the next part of their growing relationship. It would be nice if the author comes up with parts two and maybe three. I would welcome that. I think the story as it stands is unfinished. Ratings for "Soccer Mom" Athena (technical quality): 08 - Nothing outstanding. Venus (plot & character): 08 - more to be developed and to come. Sven (appeal to reviewer): 09 - Gentle and hesitant, the story should be expanded. |