|
Return To the Celestial Review (This does NOT open a new window) Return To the Index (This does NOT open a new window) Note, to make reading multi-part stories easier, story links (links with dejanews.com or www.qz.to, NOT the review or profile links) will open up a new browser window. When you are done reading the story, or section of the story simply CLOSE the story window. |
|
"Accidental Poser" by Secal (bopping the saleslady). Jubjub: 9.5, 8, 8.5
"Accidental Poser" by Secal (secal@aol.com ). Guest review by Jubjub. {Celestial note: I am aware of another version of this story with the author . If you can clarify the authorship of this story, I'd like to hear from you.} Story Summary: Woman poses nude for a stranger This is a nicely written bit of fantasy. Nothing deep. Wife goes away someplace for an hour or so. Young woman comes around selling magazine subscriptions and trades subscriptions for dirty pictures in the bedroom. And yes, a little bit of sex--especially when the wife walks in naked. As I said: A nice little piece of fluff. There were some minor technical problems. A cluster of misspellings, the occasional garbled sentence, and a couple of conversations without a paragraph break. However, the piece has a pleasant style and is generally well written. You can't really complain about character in a throw-away story like this, but the girl didn't strike me as consistently written. The plot itself never really builds to any climax (although there is a physical one toward the end). The wife's reentry into the story slowed the momentum that was building. This isn't a long piece, and I found it quite enjoyable. A recommended read. Ratings of "Accidental Poser" Technical: 9.5 Peppered with minor errors. Plain style Characterization and Plot: 8 Poser seemed unrealistic Appeal: 8.5 Nicely written piece of fluff |