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"Sheila the Great" by Schulzie (stroke story). Owl: 5, 8, 7
"Sheila the Great" by Schulzie (schulzie@my-dejanews.com). Guest review by Watchful Owl. This story was a bit wooden. Rather than achieving a really great story (rare) or a good one (increasingly more so), this one mostly achieves mediocrity. The entire story revolves around the game "Trust Me", in which your partner's hand goes up your leg until he/she is told you don't trust them. When our protagonist plays it, he winds up being stroked to orgasm, first by a daring girl, then in front of three more. The characters did not exist beyond the sexual realm. In stories of this length, it is sometimes permissible to do away with much of character development, but the author has done away with it completely. There were several grammar/punctuation errors. I don't know about the rest of you, but they drive my compulsive mind nuts. Bottom line: If you've found you've stumbled into this story, you might as well finish it. If not, don't go seeking it out. Venus (Plot and Character) 5 Athena (Technical Quality) 8 Watchful Owl (Appeal to Reviewer) 7 |