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"The Football Match" by marky92 (sex at the game). Nick: 9, 8, 8,
"The Football Match" by "marky92" (marky92@hotmail.com). Review by Nick (e- mail Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk) I think this is the first time that Celeste has sent me a story by a fellow Brit; and I feel a bit like saying, "Dr Livingstone, I presume?" Not all of us are the same, however. To start with, he is a keen football supporter and I'm not (football=soccer by the way). This in turn limits the story's appeal even amongst Brits, because even amongst "footy" fans I'm sure there are many who would be saying "Leeds United!?" (our hero's favourite team) "They're crap - I'm not reading any more of this!" (My own son's reaction was "How dare he refer to Arsenal as the enemy!") Anyway, I quite liked the story, which is the fourth in a series entitled "Two Birds and a Bloke" (="Two Broads and a Cool Guy" - I suppose). In this one, only one of the girls figures (Lisa is a Man U supporter, and they're not playing in this match), so we only get to hear of the exploits of Nicole and Phil as they watch Leeds play Chelsea. It appears that the big screen display in the stadium focuses a lot on Nicole's breasts. This, plus the resulting attention, makes her horny, and they sneak out and "do it" in the bogs just before half time. We never find out the score of the match. The story itself I found quite entertaining, but it does need a little polish. I also found the inter-dialogue paragraphing a little distracting (I find a 2 line gap easier than 1) My own ratings for this story are Technique 7 (perhaps a little too parochial), Plot and character 6 (no depth whatsoever) and appeal to me 8 (yes I enjoyed it overall). Adjusting for Celeste: Athena (technique) 9 Venus (Plot & character) 8 General appeal 8 |