A Critique of Nine Stories on RLM's Web Page
by Ted
I read "House Guest and enjoyed it immensely. The concept (two guys sharing one woman) is exciting and this is well written. Also read and enjoyed parts of "Enslaved Wife" I enjoyed the descriptions of Paula displaying her bod for all to see, in fact wanted more. Also I really liked the hard-core parts (anal and DP) The descriptions of Paula easily giving deep throat are exciting!
"Bridge Wives" had some good parts, but overall I thought it was a little slow. It had its moments, but not one of my favorites.
"Reluctant Wife" Started off pretty slow but kept my interest and by the end it was great. I loved the way Gordon brought her along and broke down her inhibitions, and the ultimate result('s) was great.
I just finished, "Erotic Encounters of a Hot Wife" and really enjoyed it. That was my kind of story, plenty of hot sex for everyone, everyone enjoying themselves, and a happy ending. I very much enjoyed the depiction of Dick nailing Paula with his supersize dick. Also the description of Gordon lapping Triva's clitoris was great. There isn't enough good porn about guys (or girls) going down on clittys, and I especially loved that in this story. In real life, my wife and I love doing this, altho we most always finish with some sort of traditional sex.
The story about Paula showing off for Kent in "Wife's Secrets" is great too. My first wife used to jill-off for me and that was the sexiest thing I've ever seen. She knew it was a quick and sure way to drive me crazy and she'd do it just to turn me on. She said her solo orgasms weren't as good, so she mostly wanted me to take over and finish her, but we both enjoyed her showing off this way.
"Wife's Secrets" is another strokin story. Great! I love how after he lost his cherry he began to take on all the wives. I recall when I was 21, I could recover and do it again and again. The part where she tells about him eating her out after dropping a load in her is great, too. Cremepie is a great fantasy. Coincidentally, we had a young manager of our neighborhood pool, tennnis court, rec. facility, who pretty much matched your description of Alan, the tennis coach. My wife was always the one who'se not shy to talk about any subject and she mentioned to some of the other wives how she'd like to see if Robby's package performed like his hard-body looked. Well that started them off, and after the ice broke, the neighborhood wives made a game of fantasizing about Robby (not when the guys were around, of course, but my wife told me about this later.) And they got really salacious. Coincidentally one of the wives who wears her religion right 'out front' was the most descriptive when she got into the conversation.
One criticism I have is in several of your stories, you have husbands/lovers using abusive language to and about the wives/girlfriends. I realize that you aren't writing for me exclusively, but I find this objectionable and a turn-off. Language like 'slut', 'bitch' etc to me shows disrespect and I don't use it and don't care for it. Once, I was at a fraternity party and one of my fraternity brothers started using similar language, and while I'm sure he didn't mean anything by it, when he referred to the entertainers as whores, I asked him if he felt more righteous for using such terms, or why he used them. This engendered a discussion which probably caused some hurt fielings, but I think such language is out of line.
Coincidentally, I have a (33 y.o.) daughter who worked for a time at Hooters, and then she became an ecdysiast at a local topless bar. I am no less proud of her for having done that, and certainly think no less of her. She is a great wife and mother and I love her.
"The Basement" is another great story with plenty of sex and good descriptions of it.
"The Shoe Store" starts off great with her going out with a guy at a body swap and coming back and telling her husband about it. Then the way she seduces the shoe salesman is great! Then when she steps it up to anal and DP for a finale is fantastic. Definitely strokin' stuff.
"The Club" is another great story. I love the way Gail is brought along on the dance floor. The seduction and the way she acquiesces is tantalizing, and Gloria seducing Gail's husband is erotic. I love the descriptions of Carl and Luke fondling Gail on the dance floor, and the way she doesn't acceeds to their ministrations is tres erotic. I can only imagine her allowing her breasts to be expposed and fondled on the dance floor, and with other couples (especially the women) looking on. That part is smokin'.
Then Gloria unzipping him and taking his dick in her hand is fantastic. I used to have a g/f who frequently would stroke my dick over my pants, and on occasion when we were sure we wouldn't be seen, would unzip my pants and put her hand in. I usually couldn't stand any jacking, so that was about as far as we'd go. Anyway, when the waitress takes Gail's panties off, the idea is just beyond sexy, because she is being held by two guys and a woman is undressing her. I also loved Gloria inviting him to fuck her in either (both) her holes. Then the idea that Gail is going to be fucked by all the guys and some of the ladies, is beyond beyond. As before, I don't like the disrespectful language (slut) toward the woman (Gail). I loved the description of her being made to suck and deep throat Carl's massive member.
The later spanking scene with pain was a turn-off.
The description of DP involving Gail and teenagers was only o.k. I've read better.
The last story about the 14 yr old was too brief, but pretty good. In total this was a great story.
"The Theater" involves a secret fantasy of a lot of guys. Most guys want to think their wife is attractive to other men and more than a few would like for their wife to show a little (or a lot) more.
My wife will occasionally go out without a bra, mostly to catch my reaction when I realize she is 'without'. The concept of a wife actually showing her bod to unknown men as in this story is hot! BTW this guy deplores the shaved look, rather he loves full bush, as mentioned in this story. The end of this story when she winds up pulling a train is great!
Ted
Ted,
What a thorough, well thought out, and well written critique and analysis. Thank you! I'm delighted that you enjoyed most of the stories and extend my regrets for the parts that turn you off. I hope you continue to visit my web page and read the stories, and I hope that you find most of them enjoyable. With best regards and thanks... RLM