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Celestial Reviews 348 – December 3, 1999

Note:  A husband and wife go visit a marriage counselor. First, the wife 
speaks to the counselor alone. The counselor asks, "You say you've been 
married 20 years. So what seems to be the problem?"

The wife replies, "It's my husband -- he's driving me crazy! I'm going to 
leave him if he continues!"

"How does he drive you crazy?"

"For 20 years," she says, "he's been doing these stupid things. First, 
whenever we go out, he's always looking at the floor and refuses to go near 
anyone. It's very embarrassing."

The marriage counselor is amused, "Anything else?"

"He keeps picking his nose all the time! Even in public!"

"Hmm, anything else?"

The wife hesitates, "Whenever we're making love, he NEVER lets me be on top! 
Once in a while, I'd like to be in control!"

"Ah," says the counselor, "I think I'll talk to your husband now."

So the wife goes out of the room and the husband enters. The counselor tells 
him, "Your wife says that you've been driving her crazy. She might even leave 
you."

The husband looks shocked, "WHAT? For 20 years I've been loving and 
considerate, and I've always given her what she wants! What could be the 
problem?"

The counselor explains, "She says that you've got these habits that are 
driving her crazy. First, you're always acting strange in public--looking at 
the floor and never going near anyone else."

The husband looks concerned, "Oh, you don't understand! It's one of the few 
things my father told me to do in his deathbed and I swore I'd obey 
everything he said."

"What did he say?"

"He said that I should never step on anyone's toes!"

The counselor looks amused, "Actually, that means that you should not do 
anything that would cause anyone else to get angry."

The husband looks sheepish, "Oh. Okay."

The counselor continues, "And you keep picking your nose in public."

"Well, its another thing my father specifically commanded me to do! He told 
me to always keep my nose clean."

The counselor looks faint, "That means that you should not indulge in any 
criminal activity."

"Oh," says the husband looking very stupid.

"And finally, she says that you never allow her to be on top during your 
lovemaking."

"This," says the husband seriously, "is the last thing my father commanded me 
to do on his deathbed, and it's the most important thing."

"What did he say?"

The husband replies, "In his dying breath, he said, 'Don't screw up.'"

Second note: A young man bought a new pair of boots, of which he was very 
proud. He decided to go dancing and give them a try. After dancing with one 
lady for a few minutes, he said, "I bet you I can guess the color of your 
panties." 

"OK," she replied. "What color do you think they are?" 

"Blue," he replied. 

"How did you know that?" she asked. 

"I saw the reflection in my shiny new boots," he said. 

"Here, she said. "Dance with my sister and tell me what color she has on." 

After dancing a while, the young man started rubbing his toes on his pant 
cuffs and started to dance again. After a few minutes, he asked the new lady, 
"What color panties do you have on? I can't seem to make them out." 

To which she replied, "I don't have any panties on." 

With a sigh of relief, the young man said, "Oh good! For a minute I thought I 
had a crack in my new boots."

Third note: Johnny was in the playground with his friend Jimmy, when he 
noticed the brand new shiny watch Jimmy was wearing.

"Did you get that for your birthday?" he asked.

"Nope," Jimmy replied.

"Well did you get it for Christmas then?" Johnny asked.

"Nope."

"You didn't steal it, did you?"

"No," said Jimmy. "I went into Mom and Dad's bedroom the other night while 
they were 'doing the nasty'. Dad gave me his watch to get rid of me.

Johnny was extremely impressed with this idea, and extremely jealous of 
Jimmy's new watch. He vowed to get one for himself. That night he waited 
outside his parents' room until he heard the unmistakable noises of 
lovemaking. 

Johnny swung the door wide open and boldly strode into the bedroom. His 
father, caught in midstroke, turned and asked him angrily, "What do you want 
now?"

"I wanna watch," Johnny replied. 

<<Can you guess the punchline?>>

Without missing a stroke, his father said, "Fine. Stand in the corner and 
keep quiet, then."

Fourth note: If anyone is interested in writing an occasional guest review, 
please let me know at celeste801@aol.com.

=====================
Celestial Reviews Index:
=====================

"Just Paul" by DrSpin (psychology of sex) 9, 9, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548432716

"A Knight to Remember" by Souvie (courtly sex) 9.5, 9, 8
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=546983893

"My Demon Lover" by Jacob (demonic sex) 8, 9, 8
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548351936

"The Mark of Cane" by Jordan Shelbourne (punishment as sex) 10, 8, 7
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=547051015

"A Letter to Vanessa" by Katie McN (young ff sex) 9, 9, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=546940301

"In the Backseat with Michelle" by Turtle (cherry popping) 8, 7, 7
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548513685

"A Posteriori" by Joanna (reverse romance) 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=550750900

"Benjamin" by GenericJoe  (vampire sex) 10, 7, 4
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542892483
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542892488

"Chocolate Dreams" by Lotuseater  (chocolate covered sex) 9.5, 9, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=555090547

"Best Served Cold" by Harry Tasker (infidelity & revenge) 10, 9, 8
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=549789366

=====================
Guest Reviews:
=====================

"Molly Farber" by thor4u  (incest).  Nick:  8, 9, 7
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551763114
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551765385
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551765409

"Darcy" by ShadowCleric (neighborly sex). BillyG: 9, 8, 7
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548445993
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548445996
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548462738
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548462740
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548462742

"Riding the Tiger" by Kellis (). Mary: 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=546770897


=====================
Reposted Reviews:
=====================

* "Watching" by Alan Mathews (emerging adolescence &
     romance) 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=210021089

* "Watching - Book 2" by Alan Mathews (romance)
     10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551946380

* "Wrapped Attention" by Uther Pendragon (young/old
           first time) 9, 8, 8
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=308537374
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=308537384
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=308537377

* "The Anniversary" by EzRiter (rekindling romance).  Rills: 9, 7, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=554520004


=====================
Here are the Reviews:
=====================

"Just Paul" by DrSpin (DrSpin_member@newsguy.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548432716

This story is apparently part of a series, in which all the stories have the 
subtitle "An Uncommon Behaviour Story."  The stories all seem to be pretty 
good. If you look them up on DejaNews, be sure to remember that the author is 
a Brit and spells Behaviour with a "u."

In this story, Paul is an ordinary guy with the uncommon habit of exposing 
himself to the women in his social group and occasionally fucking them. 
That's not all that uncommon, I suppose; the really unusual part is that the 
ladies ignore him. It seems that the ladies have read their behavioral 
psychology textbook about halfway and have a superficial understanding of the 
concept of extinction.

I learned about extinction in college. It refers to the strategy of 
eliminating problem behaviors by withholding the reinforcers that normally 
would have maintained those behaviors. For example, if a fisherman never 
catches any fish in one lake, he'll give up and try another. If a girl won't 
give a guy the time of day for a long enough time, he'll give up and go away. 
If a kid comes up to my desk and asks for help 700 times a day, I ignore him 
until he sits down and raises his hand and asks for help properly. Extinction 
also happens by accident. For example, a wife may give her husband a 
wonderful blowjob a hundred times, and he might fall asleep immediately 
thereafter each time. The principle of extinction means that the wife would 
stop giving blowjobs to this person. Hence, we have the Blowjob Principle, 
which means that if an author writes a good story, you had better write the 
author a note; otherwise the author's proclivity to write good stories for 
you will undergo extinction.

In this story, the ladies think that if they ignore Paul long enough, he'll 
stop flashing them and fucking them. This would work, IF (and only if) the 
reason he was doing this was because he was seeking their attention. It 
didn't work, and so we must surmise that there is another reinforcer at work.

Ratings for "Just Paul"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9

"A Knight to Remember" by Souvie (souvien22@yahoo.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=546983893

Sir Knight has lecherous tendencies. That is, he is wooing his sweetling with 
kind and loving words, but his heart is already given to another. The lass 
being wooed gets wind of his mischief. She doesn't get mad, she gets even. In 
other words, his perfidious ass is grass. I guess there's a place in the 
world for stories like this one.

I found an interesting error in this story. The author uses the expression, 
"By Jove's holy rood she was sore!" The term "rood" refers to a crucifix, 
which is a distinctly Christian artifact. Jove wouldn't have had a rood, even 
if he existed.

Ratings for "A Knight to Remember"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8

"My Demon Lover" by Jacob (Grumbl5000@aol.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548351936

The guy is in the midst of a dry spell, when he is accosted by a horny chick 
– literally. She's a demon – with horns and all. Specifically, she's a 
succubus. Instead of skin, she has red fur; and she comes equipped with a 
prehensile tail, which she does not use for hanging from trees – at least not 
in this story.

My favorite phrase in this story is when the author says the demon rides the 
guy's dick with abandon. The reason I like this is because it reminds me of 
the first sexual Tom Swifty I ever heard: "I'm glad you finally gave me an 
engagement ring, she said, as she ran her fingers across his dick with 
abandon." If you don't know what a Tom Swifty is, it's a specific type of 
pun, as in "The saw slipped, said Tom off-handedly." If anyone knows more 
sexual Tom Swiftys, please send them to me.

As you may expect, this story comes to a fiendishly clever climax in the end.

Ratings for "My Demon Lover"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8

"The Mark of Cane" by Jordan Shelbourne(jordan@compu-diva.com),
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=547051015

The Lampwick boy is getting a beating from a moderately dimwitted teacher. 
This gets him thoroughly aroused. She's already aroused. The classmates 
titter.

I seem to have missed something in my education. When the nuns threatened to 
beat the shit out of me for misbehaving, I behaved. It never occurred to me 
that it would have been fun – that I might have an orgasm if the nun swatted 
my ass with a paddle. I assumed they paddled us on the butt because we had 
more padding back there, whereas a similar blow to the face might have led to 
permanent disfigurement. In a way, this is sort of depressing, because there 
was a kid in my class who was a genuine dickhead, who used to get beatings 
all the time. I seriously doubt that the nun knew he was having orgasms. My 
only consolation is that I think both he and the nun remained fully clothed 
during the thrashings. I suspect that the non-nudity mitigated his pleasure 
to some extent.

I suppose it is possible that many people will enjoy this story more than I 
did. I found it a sort of interesting insight into a sexual frame of 
reference that doesn't strike me as interesting at all.

Ratings for "The Mark of Cane"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7

"A Letter to Vanessa" by Katie McN (katiemcn@my-deja.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=546940301

When I started this story, I said to myself, "Oh, shit! This is going to be 
another one of those 'you' narratives that don't work." It turned out that 
the second person point of view was just an excuse to set up a good 'I-she' 
story, and it worked very nicely.

The narrator grew up on a farm in West Texas; so she wasn't really surprised 
to see the sex in the porn films that she watched with her friend's brothers. 
However, she had never seen a bull get a blow job or three horses getting it 
on with one another. Or two cows doing each other. So there was lots of 
valuable information for her young eyes, and she and her friend managed to 
experiment quite a bit with each other.

The descriptions of the sex are hot and vivid. I especially liked the 
sentence, "We were like two mirrors making love."

Ratings for "A Letter to Vanessa"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9

"In the Backseat with Michelle" by Turtle (turtle1027@my-deja.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548513685

She's a good girl; he's a bad boy; and he humps her in the backseat of the 
car out on lover's lane. That's about it. Read the story for details.

Ratings for "In the Backseat with Michelle"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7

"A Posteriori" by Joanna (joanna_de_brito@hotmail.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=550750900

I'm afraid I missed something here. The third line of this posting says that 
the story is 'copyright July 2000.' Unless I am confused by some sort of Y2K 
problem, that date hasn't arrived yet. How can one copyright something at a 
time that hasn't come? I suspect that this may be some sort of witticism; but 
if so, I missed it.

Anyway, the guy is about 30 years old. He's a bit depressed about his 
unsatisfactory love life. One day a beautiful woman named Nicki, who appears 
to be about ten years his junior, arrives on his doorstep and seduces him. 
She seems to know all about him. What is she, his fairy godmother or 
something? Close.

Incidentally, Nicki is cheeky. That's good in Great Britain, where this story 
originated.

This is a much better story than I can describe without ruining it for you. I 
hope to see many more stories by this author.

Ratings for "A Posteriori"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Benjamin" by GenericJoe  (genericjoe@vnet.net).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542892483
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542892488

Jack is a guy who is sort of down on his luck. Then he gets recruited to 
become a vampire. This may sound like a bad idea, but when the man examined 
the pros and cons, the offer looked pretty good. First, he had access to a 
beautiful vamp who was fucking his brains out, and he was assured that there 
were plenty more where that came from.  Then there was the promise of no 
disease and no aging.  It sounded like a life of debauchery and lust with no 
end.  How could he say no?

I might point out that, aside from the minor component of debauchery and 
lust, this is almost exactly what seduced St. Anthony the Hermit when he 
founded the monk movement in Egypt many, many years ago. 

I don't understand monks, and I don't understand vampires. Maybe somebody 
that believes in vampires would like this story a lot more than I did. It's wr
itten clearly enough. It just reads more like a comic book than a sex story. 
I hope the author keeps in mind that I don't like "The Imitation of Christ" 
either. That's the book the monks read in the Dark Ages. Some still do, I'm 
told.

Let me put it this way. I went and saw a movie today called "Dogma." I didn't 
believe much that happened in that movie could happen in real life. But some 
of the emotions were real and the story actually shed some light on some 
topics of interest – like the meaning of life. I liked that movie a lot more 
than this story, primarily because the protagonists were doing things for a 
purpose that made sense to me – even though it was unreal. I'm a Catholic 
myself, and I laughed my ass off at the movie largely because my background 
gave me a basis for understanding what the movie was about, but I suspect 
"outsiders" would enjoy it too. 

As I said before, maybe a vampire or somebody who understands what vampires 
are supposed to do would like this story more than I did – or else the author 
should do a little more to make it palatable to "outsiders."

Ratings for "Benjamin"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 4

"Chocolate Dreams" by Lotuseater (posted by Ann Douglas 
<ann_douglas@hotmail.com>).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=555090547

What we have here is a story about three diverse but sexy women who have 
passionate and playful sex together in a candy story. Chocolate plays an 
important role, and "taking a woman's cherry" takes on a new and more literal 
meaning.

This story reads a lot like an Ann Douglas story, but if Ann says it's by 
someone else, I can accept that. It's a well written, sexy story. I hope we 
see a lot more of them from this author.

Ratings for "Chocolate Dreams"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9

"Best Served Cold" by Harry Tasker (harry-tasker@harry-tasker.demon.co.uk).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=549789366

This is a story about a jilted lover who doesn't just get mad; she gets even. 
When her true love comes home from the Navy on leave, she greets him warmly, 
but she eventually finds good reason to doubt his fidelity. So she doesn't 
just get mad; she gets even.

Ratings for "Best Served Cold"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8


=====================
Guest Reviews:
=====================


"Molly Farber" by thor4u  (thor4u@my-deja.com). Review by Nick e-mail 
nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk.
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551763114
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551765385
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551765409

Firstly, this story came to me uncoded. It should be MFf (pedo).

I'm not sure what to make of it. The characters were very well drawn and did 
not conform to the standard models that characterise sex stories normally. I 
could picture them and recognise them as human beings. This made the story 
somewhat disturbing.

Molly Faber herself is a slightly unhinged 60-year-old who, we are told, has 
the body of a well preserved 40 year old. Her daughter, who is 40, is a 
somewhat unattractive lawyer who looks much like her father. The hero of the 
story, a retired policeman, is charged with the care of Molly and ends up in 
bed with her of course. He is also shown videos of the father getting a 
blow-job from the daughter, then aged six.

I wrote in assd some time ago that maybe we should try writing about subjects 
that we found distasteful. This was not a well received idea, since most 
people write exclusively about whatever turns them on. Applying this 
principle it seems that this writer has tastes which range right across the 
spectrum from 6 to 60! If not, I cant help wondering what the background to 
the story was. It may even be true, but that seems incredible!

My ratings for this are:

Athena (Technique)      8
Venus (Plot/Character)  9
Appeal              7

"Darcy" by ShadowCleric (shadowcleric@hotmail.com) Guest Review by BillyG 
(hayden@mindless.com)
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548445993
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548445996
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548462738
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548462740
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548462742

      The story "Darcy" by ShadowCleric is a variant of a familiar theme -- 
the older male neighbor, Mr. Killroy, who lusts after the nubile, 16-year-old 
girl next door.  The subplot centers on the low-risk seduction of Darcy and 
takes the form of anonymous gifts. An extension of the "safe seduction" has 
the teen-age girl be the aggressor; accordingly, Darcy catches on and makes 
the move on Killroy.  Over several chapters, Darcy sets the pace and decides 
on the mode of her surrender of virginity.

      Darcy's parents are painted as harsh and angry people.  Once that's 
established, they disappear and it's unclear what their connection to the 
story really is.

      The low-risk approach to seduction may allay the protagonist's 
apprehensions, but it adds very little tension to a story.  As well, a 
considerable and repeated suspension of belief is necessary to to sync with a 
tale that supposes the seducer has great voyeuristic views while the seducee 
sees nothing.  The players are sufficiently buffered from reality that the 
erotic appeal is blunted.

Ratings for "Darcy"
Athena (technical quality):    9
Venus (plot & character):    8
BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 7

"Riding the Tiger" by Kellis (kellis@dhp.com). Guest review by Mary 
(maryjg@finebody.com)
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=546770897

Kellis gives us an absolute beauty - intriguing, tantalising, sensual and 
enormously sexy, no sleaze, no physical violence. This is true erotica, an 
art form, and reading it one realizes instantly the clear distinction between 
erotica and porn.

What we have is this: Perry Cross works with Ingerson; where we aren't told, 
but I'd imagine a South-East Asian/Far Eastern country, not just because of 
the tiger in the title but because of the atmosphere Kellis renders with such 
precision and economy. The air is humid, even torpid, I think; the city is 
probably a mess but it's a sprawl. Cross works for a high-tech company, 
Ingerson.

Late one evening, Cross has a surprise visitor, a woman he does not know, 
Kate who hints of her own association with Cross' employer. She is naked when 
they meet and leads him to a room. Much steamy sex follows. But when Cross 
emerges from the toilet, she's gone.

Harry looks for her at work, can't find her. There's trouble in the air. The 
project Cross has been working on is being reviewed by Kelly Frazier, the 
boss-bitch, plenty of attitude and a startling resemblance to the aforesaid 
Kate, down to the initials. Cross holds his own at the work meeting.

Cut to evening - she is at his door again. More sex, of course, but just who 
is Cross with? Kate? Kelly? And what do all those dark hints of heads rolling 
and staff that is ballast mean for him?

Well, all right, perhaps there's more than a bit of 'fem-dom' (horrid phrase, 
that) here, but it doesn't matter. The woman is manipulating, the man is 
being tormented, controlled, his life and feelings thrown into total 
disarray. But it really is stunningly well-realized: the writing is superb, 
it's well proofed - just the two errors I spotted: "he had to chuckled" and 
"*Chercher la femme*" - isn't it "cherchez"? - the plotting and structure is 
intricate, delicate, teasing. In a word, mightily sexy.

Ratings, unreservedly:
Athena (Technical Quality) : 10
Venus (Plot & Character) : 10
Mary (Appeal to reviewer) : 10

=====================
Reposted Reviews:
=====================

* "Watching" by Alan Mathews (alanmath@hotmail.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=210021089

 I got lucky tonight. No, not the way you think, although that happened too. 
I got lucky because my lessons for the rest of the week have been so well 
prepared over the years that I could afford to blow off about three hours 
reading this story. Sometimes a girl's gotta do what a girl's gotta do.

The boy and the girl first meet when the school bus breaks down and it gets 
cold and they have to share his coat. She's 13 and he's 18, but she's 
beautiful and he has a crush on her. They don't have sex. She falls asleep in 
his arms, and he doesn't even masturbate. She kisses him gently when she 
eventually gets off the bus. That's the kind of story this is going to be. 
But the action picks up quickly. Circumstances require Jenny to leave home; 
and since Alex happens to live alone most of the time he takes her in. Soon 
we discover that sleeping together and showering together leads to a certain 
level of intimacy. The sexual activities come across as both innocent and 
sexy.

The story includes a genuine, interesting plot. This is a really sexy, 
romantic story.

A minor problem is that the story contains numerous irritating errors. For 
example, the author consistently uses "to" instead of "too." Dr. Mathewson 
becomes Dr. Sampson a few paragraphs later. My advice to you is to ignore the 
errors and just enjoy the story. It's excellent!

Ratings for "Watching"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

* "Watching - Book 2" by Alan Mathews (alanmath@hotmail.com). 
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=551946380

This story is a sequel to "Watching," which I ranked number 16 among my Top 
100 stories of 1996. You probably should read the original (Book 1) first - 
if only because it's enjoyable and was reposted at the same time as this 
sequel; but Chapter 1 of the present Book provides a good recap of Book 1.

This story takes up the adventures of the very young couple and their baby as 
they return to their old hometown. They encounter some new problems, overcome 
some obstacles, grow closer together as a family, and have some great sex. 

Skyla is only two years old and is becoming interested in what mommy and 
daddy do in bed together, and the parents do an exemplary job of answering 
her questions in a way suited to her developmental level without introducing 
her prematurely to the rites of Venus. However, I believe some of the ideas 
that the author puts into Skyla's head would be much more realistic if she 
were, say, two or three years older. {I might also point out that there are 
almost certainly no two-year-olds in the real world who win at Monopoly 
against intelligent twelve-year-olds who are making a serious effort.}

The scene in which Alex deflowers his young sister-in-law with Jenny's 
consent is best described as Pollyanna with an Attitude. But it's sexy stuff.

The author consistently makes an interesting grammatical mistake. He uses "I" 
in situations that call for the objective case. Sportscasters do this all the 
time, but a.s.s. authors are supposed to be above that sort of thing. The 
easy way to deal with this problem is simply to mentally restate the sentence 
without the compound phrase. 

It's incorrect to use "me" as the SUBJECT of a sentence, and so it is WRONG 
to say, "Bill and me went out looking for some action." {Omit the compound 
subject. You would never say, "Me went out looking for some action."} 

On the other hand, it is correct to use "me" (and incorrect to use "I") as 
the OBJECT of a sentence or as the object of a preposition. Therefore, it 
would be WRONG to say, "John invited Sue and I over to his house for a quick 
threesome." {Omit the compound phrase. You would never say, " John invited I 
(or we) over to his house for a quick threesome."} 

It's that simple. I think the reason people make this mistake is because 
using "me" as part of the compound subject is the error that they make (and 
for which they get corrected) earlier in life; and so they overreact by 
saying "I" even in situations where "me" would be appropriate.

Ratings for "Watching - Book 2"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

* "Wrapped Attention" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net).  
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=308537374
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=308537384
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=308537377

This is a story about the first sexual experience of a young college student. 
 It occurs during Christmas vacation with a man nearly twice her age. The 
author attempts to describe the activities as comprising a tender scenario, 
but I think he slows things down so far that the events become boring.  This 
author usually writes vibrant, upbeat stories; but this one does not yet have 
those characteristics.  My assumption is that he will return to the drawing 
board and inject into this story the energetic life that it deserves.

Don't get me wrong.  I think it's beautiful in real life to make love while 
conversing actively with one's partner and caring about his/her reactions.  
The stories in this author's "For..." series give that impression.  I even 
believe that really boring lovemaking with a really wonderful person can be 
better than really exciting but meaningless stimulation with a shallow 
partner.  However, if I am going to read a story like this, I want it to be 
interesting and lively as well as tender and meaningful.

Ratings for "Wrapped Attention"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8

* "The Anniversary" by E.Z. Riter  (ezriter@hotmail.com). Guest review by 
David Rills.
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=554520004

God, I love this story.  I think it was written by a wicked woman because the 
sexuality is so loving.  The story is told by a wife who describes the fifth 
anniversary present (things are getting a little too comfortable in the 
marriage) she presents to her husband. While not all that original, the slow, 
sensuous story is hypnotic. Read it slowly and enjoy.

Ratings for "The Anniversary "
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 7
David (appeal to reviewer): 10

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