"Rock Concert Coupling" by Jackie

"Rock Concert Coupling" by Jackie (an338903@anon.penet.fi). This story is written from the perspective of a horny 14-year-old girl. She and her boyfriend meet in the midst of a crowd at a rock concert; and parental fears about the orgies that occur at rock concerts are fulfilled. The sex is hot. In fact, the sexual enthusiasm spreads like a fever to the other members of the surrounding crowd, and soon we have a small orgy on our hands. I don't for a moment believe that any responsible young people actually carry on like this. After all, I was present at Woodstock along with 4 million other sex-crazed kids, and nothing happened. We just held hands and sang along with the guy playing the accordian. All kidding aside (sorta), even if we agree that it would be a really bad idea to fuck in a public place like this, I think we can also admit that this is a really good depiction of the fantasies of a young adolescent girl. I know I have had almost this same adolescent fantasy, but I was 37 at the time

One of the few flaws in this story occurred in the first paragraph, where the narrator referred to her "unrelentless" craving for her boyfriend. There's no such word. It's either "unrelenting" or "relentless." I also question the use of the phrase "unable to contain my pent-up lust any longer" after the girl has already had at least one resounding orgasm and started to give the guy head in the middle of the crowd. I think we're already beyong pent-up.

The author concludes by asking if readers would like to see this story continue. It may surprise you to know that my answer is NO. I would prefer that the author hack off the last paragraph, replace it with a different line or two to end the story, and then write a second story. Authors should resist the urge to ruin a good thing by prolonging it too long. I want more, but not necessarily a continuation of this same story.

The moral of this story, of course, is always carry some tissue paper in your purse in case the guy doesn't like the taste of his own cum and you want to French kiss him after having oral sex in public. I think the author got this suggestion from either Miss Manners or that advice column in Seventeen Magazine..