"Debt" by Deirdre

"Debt" by Deirdre (an65862@anon.penet.fi). I usually read one of Deirdre's stories, pause thoughtfully, and then write my review. This time I thought I'd try writing it while I read the story. Here goes.

The doorbell rings and the guy answers the door. One of the two women whom he meets says, "We're here because Claire lost a bet and has to pay up." As soon as she says that, the other girl drops to her knees in front of the man, unzips his fly, and begins sucking his cock. This is an example of what the old literature texts used to call in medias res - starting the story with a plunge directly into the action. Anyway, after the blowjob the guy listens at his door and hears the two women going to the next apartment, which is inhabited by the fair Diane. Further eavesdropping reveals a major gambling problem: Claire also appears to be eating Diane out to pay a debt.

Next our hero and Diane get invited to dinner with Claire and Shannon. Shortly after dessert is served, the other two women dive under the table; and one starts sucking the guy's cock, while the other is invisibly doing a job on Diane, who is seated at the opposite end of the table. At this point it is not clear whether the problem is compulsive gambling, an eating disorder, or simple nymphomania.

As the story reaches its denouement, we discover that the other two women have made it their personal project (apparently as a result of an unspecified bet) to get the guy and Diane into the sack together and to become their servants, with the goal of enhancing the sexual happiness of the new couple. The guy seems to like all this but can't quite figure out what's going on - which is pretty much my own reaction to the story. Another weird but excellent tale from Deirdre!