"Tell Me a Story" by smoot2 (smoot2@ix.netcom.com). After a session of good sex, a woman asks her lover to tell her a story. He responds with an erotic tale. While she listens, she brings him and herself to an even better orgasm. Ummm! Tell me another story! I could handle about 1001 Nights of This.

This story is by the author of "Lyrical Fantasy," which I reviewed in CR 27. That story, I said, was a good story that was ruined by faulty proofreading and bad formatting. I added that if this author ironed the kinks out of his writing, his work would be in a class with the writings of Deidre and Tammy Ng - which is a pretty good class. See! I was right! This is a wonderful story.

I would like to take credit for this improvement, but unless smoot2 and I did some time traveling or mental telepathy, he did this on his own. However, my point is still valid: the main difference between this story and the author's previous attempt is that this one is presented better. It's not that the author's exceptional creativity is unimportant - it's just that by cleaning up his final draft of this story he lets us see what he really has to say. With "Lyrical Fantasy" I was constantly distracted by the way the story was presented to me; in this story there still were grammar mistakes, but I skipped right past them and was distracted only by a warm, moist feeling in my pussy. I like this kind of distraction much better.