"JAVA" by Mandible (" mandible"@deaths.door). Would YOU read a story that began like this?

"Her face glowed with humor and love as a smile played across the corners of her lips. Her left eyebrow popped up and down like a sleepy cat's tail and she tossed light brown hair out of her face with quick little shakes. Her eyes were big and brown and shone with excited good humor as she laughed and gave a little shrug which shook her impudent breasts. She was so average you'd never notice her, until you saw the smile. It was million-dollar stuff, a light that glowed from inside the girl herself, turning her generic face into a Real Person. That intent gaze, that would catch any man and freeze him for a moment if it was turned on him ...."

I would LOVE to be able to use that paragraph with my students as an example of how to catch a reader's attention; but somebody would ask where I got it - or, more likely, one of my students would KNOW where I got it, because he had just read this story the night before while he was looking for CUM-SEEKING VIRGINS WITH BIG TITS.

Anyway, she's not looking at anybody - just at a computer screen. She's in a chat room, and the narrator, who is seated at a nearby computer, gets the sudden inspiration to find out which room and to seduce her. He carries out his plan, and she's just as hot as he thought she was! READ THIS STORY!!!

As you know, I have posted my reasons why I do not engage in Cybersex. A recantation may be in order.