"The Chair" by Paola Kathuria (paola@arcglade.demon.co.uk) Guest review by Anne747.
My challenge is to write a review shorter than the story today. I'm only being somewhat serious actually. This piece is in reality a short hot story about a couple having sex in a chair. It works pretty well, giving a very good hot scene. There are a few times that the wording is a little awkward, but that problem is fairly minor.
The only thing I would like is a little more description of the couple. About all we learn is that she has full breasts, and that she has pubic hair. The piece could have been so much better with just a little more description of touches. Is his skin slick with sweat? It is smooth, or can she feel his muscles as she rides him? Is her hair short, or do her long strands curl over her skin? Just a little more description could add so much more to this piece.