"Teacher" by Anne018 (Anne018bi@aol.com). One of my favorite approaches for hot sex stories is to have two scenes going at one time. Mark Aster does this by having Our Hero make love to one of the Allen sisters while the other sister has passionate sex nearby with someone else. The author alternates between descriptions of both couples, and often the participants are motivated by something one of the others does. Many authors achieve a similar effect by focusing on voyeurism: one couple gets hot and bothered while watching another couple making love. Plainman sometimes has three sequences nested in his narratives.

The present story uses a similar technique: While Anne is taking a walk with Sandy, she describes to Sandy her experience of visiting another person to help that person and a friend get over a cold feet problem during their first-time lesbian tryst. While you and I read the story, we get turned on by the hands-on assistance Anne offers to the other couple; and meanwhile Sandy has removed her top, her nipples have hardened, they have reached a quiet place by the lake, and my pussy is becoming moist. In other words, the author combines the two sets of activities very effectively, and the effect on the reader can be very nice indeed.

In short, at the most intense point of action, Anne is watching the two novices and is getting all turned on, while she is fingering her pussy and giving them instructions. Those two people are lost in heavenly rapture. Sandy, who is getting hot and bothered listening to Anne retell this story, begins to respond by removing some of her clothes and becoming increasingly intimate with the storyteller. Anne is getting turned on both by recalling the original incident and by what Sandy is doing to her. As the story continues, these different storylines combine and interact. Meanwhile, I as the reader, am experiencing all of the above.

Like I said, it's an interesting approach.

One thing that I found to be really irritating in this story is that both the person to whom Anne is narrating this story and one of the novices to whom Anne gave instructions are named Sandy. In real life this could happen, of course; but in fiction, why not help the reader out by using two different names? Occasionally, I would hear someone asking, "Did Sandy do this?" Sometimes I had to stop and think which Sandy was talking. In general, however, the context helped me out, so that this wasn't as big a problem as it might have been. My advice to the author is to use the Replace function on her word processor to change the novice Sandy to Penelope or Rachel or maybe even Yvette.