Rogue Review No. 354 - April 15, 1999

To the Victor by Shon Richards

M/F

Length: 8,000 words

Objective Analysis: 6.5 {out of 10)

  Arousal: 3/5
  Plot and Characters: 2/5
  Editing: 5/5
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Not Good


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not
read what follows.


  SUMMARY

A bunch of guys, who recently graduated from high school, bowl 
together for the last time, before taking off for college.  To make 
the evening a little more interesting one of the guys hires an 
escort.  She goes to the victor.


  COMMENTARY

This is a somewhat arousing story.  The author does a decent job with
the sex scenes.  Unfortunately, the plot and characters do not 
measure up to the sex scenes.  The result is that in my eyes there 
was a lack of balance in the story.

I had some problems with this story.  On the up side, the plot isn't 
too complex.  On the down side, the characters are a bit lacking.  
They seemed too simplistic; more types, than actual people.  The 
action of the story is also a bit choppy.  The key elements are 
there, but they seem to need further refinement.

Well, I'm not too crazy about this story.  The plot and the 
characters were not compelling enough to catch my interest.  In the 
final analysis it seems that the story was lacking.  If the plot 
sounds like one that might interest you and you aren't as picky as I 
am when it comes to plot and characters, then you may like this 
story.  I have given it a Not Good.


  LINKS

To the Victor

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=466028998&fmt=raw

