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Rogue Reviews Digest No. 3 - June 15, 1998

by Lee Vine

Contents

	Reviews

	Rogue Review No. 42 [Christine by ShadowCleric]
	Rogue Review No. 43 [Milady by LeAnna]
	Rogue Review No. 44 [Janey's Friend by Janey]
	Rogue Review No. 45 [Friday by Uther Pendragon]
	Rogue Review No. 46 [A Yank in the Outhouse by David Shaw]
	Rogue Review No. 47 [The Swing Man by Chili Peeler]
	Rogue Review No. 48 [A City Situtation by Watcher]
	Rogue Review No. 49 [Taxi Tales: Lost and Found by Delta]
	Rogue Review No. 50 [No Tomorrow by Crimson Dragon]
	Rogue Review No. 51 [Last Night Together by Inkubus]
	Rogue Review No. 52 [Gifts by fcp]
	Rogue Review No. 53 [Wager by Alcibade(?)]
	Rogue Review No. 54 [Erotic Foolishness by Renae Nicks]
	Rogue Review No. 55 [A Great Beach Day by Bioya]
	Rogue Review No. 56 [Every Lollipop Loves A Licking by Erin Halfelven]
	Rogue Review No. 57 [On Her Leg by LeAnna]
	Rogue Review No. 58 [Hot Tub Fun! by Michelle]


Note 1: I am starting to include story links.  Rogue Review No. 53 is 
the first one to include a link.

Note 2: I send my reviews individually, when I finish them, to the Sex
Stories Discussion List.  If you are interested in joining there is a 
form for doing so on my home page.

Home Page - http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Cafe/3112/

E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com

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Rogue Review  No. 42 - June 1, 1998

Christine by ShadowCleric

M/F

Length: 2,900 words


Summary

Dave falls for his new boss, Christine.


Commentary

This was a good effort, for a first draft.  The dialogue was good.  
The dilemma was apparent and there was some tension in this story.  
The sex scenes were of an appropriate length, just enough to give the
reader an idea of what was going on.  The characters were well done, 
although they were more types than they were fully fleshed out 
individuals.

This story read like an outline.  It was not well formatted.  The 
scenes were bunched together.  My advice to ShadowCleric is to find 
someone to help him (or her?) in completing this story.  Because I 
write reviews of stories, and not first drafts, I cannot recommend 
this one.  This does not mean that there is nothing good about this 
story, simply that it needs some work.


Judgment

This was not a good story, but the plot was well handled, as were the
characters.


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Rogue Review  No. 43 - June 2, 1998

Milady by LeAnna

F/F

Length: 3,300 words


Summary

Dalara consoles her mistress before her execution.


Commentary

The descriptions in this story were very rich.  The details and the 
choice of words evoke many images for the reader.  Dalara and her 
mistress are shown to be women who are both capable of emotion and 
carnal desires.  I think this is good because it shows the reader 
more than one side of them.

The descriptions of Dalara's mistress led me to believe that she is a
woman of color, i.e. not Caucasian.  I did not pick up on any hints as 
to Dalara's ethnicity.  It was nice to see at least one character who
was not white.  It was also nice to see that it was not a major 
issue.  Diversity enriches us all.

This story definitely has some anti-male sentiment, but I did not 
take it personally.  The male characters in this story deserve the 
ill will they receive.

I would like to know more about how Dalara's mistress was feeling, 
before they got down to business.  Maybe Dalara could make 
observations about her mistress without realizing what it is she is 
seeing; observations that are telling for the reader but meaningless 
for her.  (Of course maybe she did, and they just went over my head.)


Judgment

This was an excellent story, but I would like to see some descriptions 
of Dalara's mistress that reveal more about how she is feeling (before 
they get naked).

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Rogue Review  No. 44 - June 2, 1998

Janey's Friend by Janey

F/F

Length: 4,500 words


Summary

This is a sequel to Phone Sex by Taria.  Janey and Taria finally meet
face to face.


Commentary

This is a very soft story.  It strokes the reader gently and does not
try to arouse any violent or intense feelings.  It is about 
friendship and about self-discovery.  It is very well written.

I think what I like best about this story is the way in which Janey 
describes things.  She does a good job of letting us see things from 
her point of view.  My favorite sentence is about halfway through the
story when Janey sees Taria for the first time: "My heart didn't go 
pitty pat or anything wimpy like that; it went, 'Ka-BOOM! Ka-BOOM!'"

This story was more description then plot.  Its a love letter to 
Taria and it is done beautifully.


Judgment

This was an outstanding story.  I would not change a thing.

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Rogue Review  No. 45 - June 3, 1998

Friday by Uther Pendragon

Best

Length: 800 words


Summary

Two people try to shock others by talking loudly about "their" 
personal problems in public.


Commentary

This story is fall down funny.  Its short and there is not much to 
it, but it is definitely good for a laugh.

It is well written.  The dialogue is what makes the story what it is.
A discussion of plot or characters would be either unfair to the 
author or useless for the reader, so I'm not going to bother.

This is not really a story, but it is funny.


Judgment

This was a very good story.  I would not change a thing.

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Rogue Review  No. 46 - June 4, 1998

A Yank in the Outhouse by David Shaw

M/F/F, Voyeur

Length: 8,500 words


Summary

This story takes place in England during World War II.

Sarah is delivering a bottle of wine for the vicar.  She gets 
sidetracked by two English ladies and an American gentleman in a wash
house.

Commentary

This story had a good premise, but I did not care for the execution. 
The greatest strength of this story was its descriptions of rural 
England during World War II.

There was not much in the way of character development.  The 
characters seemed to be more types then actual people, the narrator  
included.

Possibly if this story had been better edited I would have enjoyed 
it more.  Quite a few of the sentences in this story seemed much 
too long.  It made the story seem rushed.


Judgment

This was not a good story, but the descriptions of rural England did 
give it some atmosphere.

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Rogue Review  No. 47 - June 9, 1998

The Swing Man by Chili Peeler

M/F, F/F, M/F/F, Inc

Length: 40,500 words


Summary

Jonas has been cheating on his wife, Stella.  She finds out.  She 
calls her lawyer and instructs him to start divorce proceedings.  
Jonas' daughter, Nikki, has a slightly different reaction.


Commentary

This story tried to do too much.  It started in one direction and 
ended in another.  In some cases this works.  In this one it did not.
The author did not do a good job of bringing the husband-cheating-on-
his-wife and father-sleeping-with-his-daughter plot lines together.  

There was a bit too much sex, for my tastes.  A little more plot and 
characterization would have done wonders for this story.  Toward the 
end the plot and characters began to disintegrate and all that was 
left was a stroke story.

Possibly if the author had not spent so much time describing sex and 
left a little more to the reader's imagination this story would have 
worked better.


Judgment

This was not a good story.  I can see the various plot lines working 
in individual stories, but not in a single one.

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Rogue Review  No. 48 - June 10, 1998

A City Situation by Watcher

No Sex

Length: 2,700 words


Summary

On an August afternoon Peter braves the heat and humidity of the city
to return Kelly's dress and shoes.


Commentary

This is the sort of story that leaves a lot to the reader's 
imagination.  Peter's inner dialogue was very well done.  The images 
of buildings and carriage rides were also well crafted.

Peter, as a character, was much more fleshed out than Kelly.  The 
author told the story from Peter's perspective, so that is not 
surprising.  It would have been nice if this story had been a little 
more explicit.


Judgment

This was a good story, but a few more details would have helped.

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Rogue Review  No. 49 - June 10, 1998

Taxi Tales: Lost and Found by Delta

M/F

Length: 2,900 words


Note

This is the third and final(?) story in the Taxi Tales series.  They 
were published in the following order:

(1) Lost Fares
(2) Missed Connections
(3) Lost and Found


Summary

Dale trades shifts with Stan on the Fourth of July, and finds some 
good in the world.


Commentary

This story is not heavy on graphic sex.  Most of the descriptions 
leave quite a bit up to the reader's imagination.  The author weaves 
several threads together, quite adeptly, and makes one story.

The quiet, observant nature of the narrator helps to illustrate the 
various characters.  There is not much plot, but this is wonderfully 
told story.


Judgment

This was an excellent story, I would not change a thing.

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Rogue Review  No. 50 - June 10, 1998

No Tomorrow by Crimson Dragon

F/F

Length: 4,700 words


Summary

Rachel is at the beach, trying to get over breaking up with Mark, 
when she meets Sara.


Commentary

I really liked the descriptions in this story.  I could feel the 
water and the sand as they caressed Rachel's body.  I could feel 
Rachel's hesitation as she tried something different.

Both Rachel and Sara felt real.  They both had emotions and showed 
some trepidation.  There was not much dialogue, but the text more 
than adequately conveyed how the two women felt.

This story was both arousing and somewhat touching.


Judgment

This was an excellent story, I would not change a thing.

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Rogue Review  No. 51 - June 11, 1998

Last Night Together by Inkubus

M/F

Length: 3,500 words


Summary

Dominic has one last night with Byronee, his demonic lover.


Commentary

I liked the idea behind this story.  I really think it could have 
been done better.  There was a plot, but the sex took center stage.  
The characters were adequate, but nothing impressive.  If the sex had
not played such a prominent role, in the text of the story, then I 
might have liked this story.


Judgment

This was not a good story, but it did have a plot.

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Rogue Review  No. 52 - June 11, 1998

Gifts by fcp

M/F

Length: 4,800 words


Note

This is the sequel to Marie's Gift (Rogue Review No. 39).


Summary

James and Donna expand their repertoire.


Commentary

I had trouble getting into the mood of this story.  It seemed kind of
forced.  I was not impressed with the dialogue or the characters.

The story was too straight forward and did not seem to have a 
particular feel or any nuances.  It seemed too regimented.  I only 
felt a spark or two of life within it, and that was not enough for 
me.

I did enjoy the part where they get caught by George.  


Judgment

This was not a good story.

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Rogue Review  No. 53 - June 12, 1998

Wager by Alcibade(?)

M/F, M/M/F

Length: 13,900 words


Note

E. Z. Riter posted this story to ASSM.  At that time he said he was 
not the author and that he did not know who the author was.  A few 
days later in a post to ASSD he said "the author probably is 
Alcibade".


Summary

After losing a game of Scrabble to his wife, Peter lets her call the 
shots for a while.


Commentary

The first one-third of the story was great.  It was tense, 
suspenseful, and arousing.  The characters were not great, but they 
seemed realistic.  

The last two-thirds of the story, unfortunately did not measure up.  
A new character is introduced, William, and boy is he a talker.  He 
drones on and on.  Peter's narration leads me to believe that he was 
not too terribly wild about William either.

The author did such a good job with the first one-third of the story.
I was shocked by the last two-thirds.  The whole mood changed.  The 
change was a horrible choice, in my opinion.


Judgment

This was not a good story, but the first one-third of it is 
definitely worth reading.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11623.txt

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Rogue Review  No. 54 - June 13, 1998

Erotic Foolishness by Renae Nicks

M/F

Length: 5,700 words


Summary

Renae learns more about sex while spending time with another woman's 
man.


Commentary

I liked the way this story was split up.  The four parts all worked 
very well.  Both characters in this story felt very real.  The sex 
was not over the top.  They practiced safe sex.

This is a simple story.  There is not much to it, but I liked the 
author's touch.  The characters were likable and the sex was 
arousing.


Judgment

This was is an excellent story.  I would not change a thing.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11718.txt [Parts 1 & 2]
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11719.txt [Parts 3 & 4]

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Rogue Review  No. 55 - June 14, 1998

A Great Beach Day by Bioya

F/F

Length: 2,300 words


Summary

Jan goes to the beach to catch some rays; after getting a bad 
burn a beautiful nurse takes care of her.


Commentary

I like the way the author gives insights, throughout the story, into 
how Jan is feeling.  She never completely accepts the situation, and 
yet at the same time she has an understanding of what is going on.  I
thought Jan was handled very well.

There is not much of a plot.  It is a simple and straight forward 
story.  The ending is not final or conclusive.  It was a nice, light,
arousing story.


Judgment

This is an excellent story.  I would not change a thing.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11805.txt

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Rogue Review  No. 56 - June 14, 1998

Every Lollipop Loves A Licking by Erin Halfelven

F-Solo

Length: 1,500 words


Summary

Ruth prepares for a rendezvous with an old flame.


Commentary

The plot is simple.  The anticipation builds throughout the story.  
I liked the twist at the end.

There is a definite sexual component to this story, but it is not 
overplayed.  All in all this is a nice, fun read.


Judgment

This is an excellent story.  I would not change a thing.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11809.txt

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Rogue Review  No. 57 - June 14, 1998

On Her Leg by LeAnna

M/F

Length: 1,300 words


Summary

A woman sits in a park and thinks of the badge she wears for her 
boyfriend.


Commentary

There is not much to this story, but I liked what there was.

LeAnna does a masterful job of switching back and forth between the 
present and past in such a short story.  She breathes life into all 
the characters, even the minor ones.

The ending was delightful.  It was not what I expected.


Judgment

This is an outstanding story.  I would not change a thing.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11540.txt

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Rogue Review  No. 58 - June 14, 1998

Hot Tub Fun! by Michelle

M/F/M, Teen

Length: 2,800 words


Summary

A twenty-something couple, a sixteen-year-old boy, and a hot tub.


Commentary

This story was different.  Seeing two men going at it, without one 
dressing as a woman, was a switch.  For all the F/F and M/F/F stories
out there, it is nice to see one that is willing to go the other 
route. 

The characters were average.  The plot was pretty straight forward.  
There was no twist at the end.  This story worked for me, because it 
was different.

I do have a problem with the blocking in this story.  I do not think 
it was necessary.  It ends up being a tangle of directions.  There 
are plenty of good stories that leave body positioning up to the 
reader's imagination.

[Definition: Blocking - "to work out or chart the movements of (as 
 stage  performers)" (WWWebster Dictionary).

 Note:  do not think it is a commonly used term except on the stage 
 or in writing.  I did not know that definition of the word 
 'blocking' until I took an acting class several years ago.]


Judgment

This is a good story, but the blocking does get in the way.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11810.txt

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