Rogue Review  No. 69 - June 23, 1998

Blood Ties by Inkubus

F/M, Magic

Length: 5,500 words

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DISCLAIMER:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP
READING NOW!!!!

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Note

This is the second story about Byronee.  The first is "Last Night
Together" (Rogue Review No. 51).


Summary

Byronee, a female demon, is captured by a sorcerer.  The sorcerer's
apprentice lets his hormones get the better of him and suffers the
consequences.


Commentary

I like the way the plot was crafted.  It is simple, and not
completely original, but it works.  The characters are believable.

My only complaint is with the descriptions of sex.  The paragraphs
were much longer, in that part of the story, than they were anywhere
else.  If the paragraphs had been chopped up a bit more it would have
made the story more readable.


Judgment

This is a good story, but the lengthy paragraphs should be chopped up
into smaller ones.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11678.txt



