Rogue Review  No. 47 - June 9, 1998

by Lee Vine

The Swing Man by Chili Peeler

M/F, F/F, M/F/F, Inc

Length: 40,500 words

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NOTES:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME 
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE 
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP 
READING NOW!!!!

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Summary

Jonas has been cheating on his wife, Stella.  She finds out.  She 
calls her lawyer and instructs him to start divorce proceedings.  
Jonas' daughter, Nikki, has a slightly different reaction.


Commentary

This story tried to do too much.  It started in one direction and 
ended in another.  In some cases this works.  In this one it did not.
The author did not do a good job of bringing the husband-cheating-on-
his-wife and father-sleeping-with-his-daughter plot lines together.  

There was a bit too much sex, for my tastes.  A little more plot and 
characterization would have done wonders for this story.  Toward the 
end the plot and characters began to disintegrate and all that was 
left was a stroke story.

Possibly if the author had not spent so much time describing sex and 
left a little more to the reader's imagination this story would have 
worked better.


Judgment

This was not a good story.  I can see the various plot lines working 
in individual stories, but not in a single one.


