Rogue Review No. 479 - December 16, 1999

NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the 
required legal age, or material of an erotic nature 
is illegal where you are, then do not read what 
follows.

TITLE: Phone Sex Diary
AUTHOR: Paris Waterman
LENGTH: 5,000 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females)
ORIENTATION(S): Homosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Cousins
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Restaurant
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --

SUMMARY: Rachel tells her friend Lisa about her two cousins, 
Brenda and Josie, over the phone.

COMMENTARY: I thoroughly enjoyed this story.  I think that 
it has two strengths.  The first is the omnipresent 
dialogue.  Almost the entire story consists of dialogue.  
The author uses it quite effectively.  In particular, it is 
a medium that allows the author to reveal how Rachel and 
Lisa differ.  He does so quite effectively.

The second strength of this story is the manner in which the 
author weaves two narratives together.  The story begins 
with Rachel and Lisa talking on the phone.  Soon there 
after, Rachel begins to tell Lisa about her night on the 
town with her cousins.  I suppose that this could also be 
referred to as a story-within-a-story.  Either way, the 
author does a very nice job jumping back and forth, quite 
seamlessly I might add, and in the end tying the two 
together.

If you don't care for stories of lesbian lust, then this may 
not be the story for you.  Other than that, I can't see 
anything else that should bother most avid readers of 
erotica.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.5 (out of 10)

        - Arousal: 5/5
        - Editing: 5/5
        - Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent

LINK(S): Phone Sex Diary

         - http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/21364

         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=551056435&fmt=raw

         Paris' Place

         - http://www.asstr.org/~Paris_Waterman/

