Rogue Review No. 301 - January 16, 1999

Summer Camp II by MichaelD38

M/F, M/F/F, Teen

Length: 28,200 words

Rating: Very Good

Arousal Factor: Average
Story Factor: High


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the requires legal age, or
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not
read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Mitch and Beth encounter personal and professional problems during 
the first summer that they are in charge of the camp.

Plot A: Brittany loves Mitch, who happens to be engaged to be Beth.  
Mitch is not about to leave Beth for Britanny, but that does not 
mean that he does not care for her.

Plot B: Brittany is supposed to seduce Rich, and introduce him to 
the sorority.  She gets cold feet, but Karin is more than willing 
to take her place.

Plot C: Someone is spying on the camp.  Mitch's fears that it is 
a child pornographer.

Plot D: Leslie seems to know just a bit too much about sex, for a 
13-year-old.  Beth and Mitch are concerned.


  COMMENTARY

This story is too complex.  It felt like the author tried to jam 
too much into too short a story.  I think it probably would have 
worked better if the author had broken this story up into a 
couple stories.

The serious parts, "C" and "D", were handled too tritely to 
satisfy me.  At the same time, the serious plot lines were not 
arousing.  They made my pickle wilt and made me cringe inwardly.  
They also did not seem to be very well integrated with the other 
two plot lines, "A" and "B".

At least one thing in this story made me laugh.  The scene where 
Mitch gives in and agrees to sleep with two of the campers.  
Their names are Courtney and Monica.  The first thing that came 
to mind is the NBC sitcom Friends.  There is also a character 
named Chandler in this story.  Was this done on purpose?

My basic gripe with this story is that while the individual 
plots are reasonably well handled, I don't think it works to have 
them all in a story as short as this one is.  My favorite plot 
line is "A".


  LINKS

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http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/16827.txt [6/9]
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/16822.txt [7/9]
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/16823.txt [8/9]
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/16824.txt [9/9]

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