Rogue Review No. 335 - March 22, 1999

Donna's Summer Golfing Vacation by Heatheranne

F/M, Teen

Length: 9,000 words

Objective Analysis: 7 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 4 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Good


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the requires legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not
read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Donna breaks up with her boyfriend, goes to work with her distant 
cousin, and gets some golf lessons.  In the process of doing all 
this, she also help her cousin get off when his wife isn't very 
obliging, and teaches her golf instructor a thing or two about how to
please her sexually.


  COMMENTARY

This story is somewhat arousing.  The sex happens, but it seems a bit
gratuitous. In other words it does not seem to be tied all that 
strongly to the plot.  The story could stand on its own without the 
sex.

The story is well written.  The characters aren't too deep and the 
plot isn't very complex, but the story does have a nice flow to it.  
At times it almost seems to flow too smoothly.  I think I would have 
preferred to see Donna having a harder time overcoming some of the 
obstacles that are thrown in her path.

I was somewhat aroused by this story, but for the most part this 
story was just a bit too soft for me.  After the scene where she 
helps her cousin out, which is relatively early in the story, Donna 
does not seem to be challenged at all.  That is why I have given this
story a Good, under Subjective Analysis.


  LINKS

Donna's Summer Golfing Vacation

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456851036&fmt=raw [1/2]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456851044&fmt=raw [2/2]

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20669.txt [1/2]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20670.txt [2/2]

