Rogue Review No. 390 - June 9, 1999

NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the required legal 
age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, 
then do not read what follows.

TITLE: The Handyman
AUTHOR: J. Edwins
LENGTH: 8,700 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Male
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (1 Female, 1 Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Acquaintances
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Home
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --

SUMMARY: A handyman becomes friendly with Pam, the 32-year-old 
daughter one of his clients.

COMMENTARY: This story is somewhat arousing.  The author takes 
the time to build the story up, and I can appreciate that.  
Unfortunately the author also goes into a little bit more detail 
than I care for when it comes to the sex.

This is a well written story.  It flows well enough.  The 
characters seem real.  In particular, the way that the narrator 
has to push Pam, to get her to tell him what she wants him to do,
struck a chord with me.  I liked the tone of the narration, but 
prefer more dialogue than is present in this story.  Some of the 
paragraphs seem longish and unwieldy.

This story has potential, but it isn't quite there.  It is well 
written and somewhat arousing.  The main problem that I have with 
this story is that the author explicitly gives too much away in 
the narration.  I feel that it would work better if he gave less 
detail and allowed the reader to fill in the rest with his/her 
own imagination.  I have given this story a Good.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.0 (out of 10)

         - Arousal: 3/5
         - Editing: 4/5
         - Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good.

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