Rogue Review No. 488 - January 7, 2000

NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the 
required legal age, or material of an erotic nature 
is illegal where you are, then do not read what 
follows.

TITLE: Blue Sky
AUTHOR: DG
LENGTH: 11,400 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Male
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Relative Strangers
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Boat
            Home
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --

SUMMARY: Noel catches Jim's eye when she steams into the 
marina on Mort's arm.  It isn't too long before Jim manages 
to get himself wrapped up in her problems.

COMMENTARY: I like the idea behind this story.  I think the 
author did a pretty good job with the characters.  Some of 
the sex scenes are arousing.  Despite all this, there is 
something about the story that strikes me as being wrong.  
The pacing could be better.  It feels rushed in some places.

Also, there is a bit too much dialogue, in certain scenes.  
I feel that, those scenes would benefit from having a bit 
more narration thrown into them.  I'm not sure that this 
would make the story as a whole eminently better, but I 
think it would improve those scenes and give them a more 
natural flow.

By the way, if you are interested in reading a story that 
happens to have sexual elements in it, then you may want to 
try this one.  If you are solely interested in sex scenes or 
being aroused, then you will probably find this story 
somewhat lacking.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10)

        - Arousal: 3/5
        - Editing: 5/5
        - Plot and Characters: 4/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good

LINK(S): Blue Sky

         - http://assm.asstr.org/erotica/assm/Year97/4199.txt

         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=273662435&fmt=raw

         DG's Story Page

         - http://baird.pair.com/dg.htm

