Rogue Review  No. 61 - June 18, 1998

A Little Secret by Bartek Boryczko

M/F, Teen

Length: 4,200 words

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DISCLAIMER:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME 
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE 
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP 
READING NOW!!!!

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Summary

Josh and his new step-sister, Becky, get to know each other a little 
better.


Commentary

I like the tone of this story.  The narration, by Josh, is both 
descriptive and real.  He is taken in by his step-sister's beauty, 
but at the same time is apprehensive about doing anything with her.
Becky is not as complete a character as Josh, but she is more than 
just a body.

What plot there was, was very simple.  

This story could have benefited greatly from some editing.  Several 
of the paragraphs were much too long and should have been broken down
into two or more paragraphs.


Judgment

This is a good story, but if it had been edited better might have 
been an excellent one.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11945.txt

