Rogue Reviews Digest No. 32 - March 7, 1999


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not 
read what follows.


  CONTENTS

Mailing List Information

Ratings

Note

Reviews

  "Eight Is Enough: And Two's Not Bad, Either" by Uncle Mike
  "God's Great Plan" by Al Steiner
  "Planting the Seed of Intrigue" by Hawk Richards
  "Pure Strip Poker" by Mike CA
  "A Quick Bite to Eat" by B. Peale
  "Sharing a Bed for the Night" by J. Boswell
  "Sheila the Great" by Schulzie
  "StepSis with the Devilish Hands" by Schulzie
  "The Term Paper" by Billy G
  "Wildlife" by Lee Bido


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  MAILING LIST INFORMATION

I send my reviews individually, when I finish them, to the Sex Stories 
Discussion List.  If you are interested in joining there is a form for 
doing so on my home page.

* Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/
* E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com


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  RATINGS

Okay folks, I am modifying my rating system once again.  This due in 
part to MichaelD38's review of my reviews, and in part because I will 
never be satisfied that I can explain in a few words how good or bad 
a story is.  What follows is the new system.

If you are interested in reading MichaelD38's critique then here is 
the link:

http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=449137636&fmt=raw

It includes critiques of my reviews and of the reviews of others.


Part 1.  OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS

SCORE = AROUSAL SCORE + STORY SCORE

AROUSAL SCORE

0  Not
1  Barely
2  A Little
3  Somewhat
4  Very
5  Extremely

STORY SCORE

0  This barely resembles a story
1  Definitely lacking, but its possible it has a redeeming quality
2  Effort is evident, but I have some problems with this story
3  Nothing exceptional, but on the other hand there are no major flaws
4  Well crafted, but is missing something, or something does not work entirely
5  Beautifully crafted, it does not seem to be missing anything


Part 2.  SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS

Not Good = This was a waste of my time, don't bother reading it

Good = This is a good attempt, but I don't recommend it

Very Good = If you have the time or like this variety of story then I 
recommend this story, otherwise I would go with something that I rate 
as Excellent or Outstanding

Excellent = I recommend that you read this story, and I really liked it, but 
it did not give me the same feeling that an outstanding story does.

Outstanding = This story was not only enjoyable, but it also gave me a 
special feeling that I cannot describe


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Note that there is not necessarily a direct correlation between 
the objective analysis and the subjective analysis.  On the other hand 
the terms objective and subjective as I have used them are relative and 
not absolute terms.  In other words the objective analysis is more objective
than the subjective one, and vice versa.  This new system may not work in 
the long run, but for the moment I am going with it.

This still does not get to one of MichaelD38's criticisms, which is how 
much better is an Outstanding than an Excellent, and Excellent than a 
Very Good, etc.  To be perfectly honest I'm not sure myself.  All I 
know is that I like Outstanding stories better than Excellent ones, etc.
I have a hard time quantifying "like", or "love" for that matter.  I 
can tell you if I liked something better than something else.  I can 
tell you why I did.  I can't put on a number on it however and say that 
I liked it 20% more or twice as much.  That just does not work for me.


BTW you may have noticed that I have dropped Grudgingly Good from my 
rating system.  That rating really represented a case where I did not 
like a story, but only because I was revolted or disgusted by the subject 
matter.  With the new system I'll just say under the Subjective Analysis 
that a story was Not Good.  The Arousal score is somewhat subjective, so 
that score may suffer, but I think that I can recognize good writing 
even when it revolts me.



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  REVIEWS


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Rogue Review No. 316 - February 22, 1999

Planting the Seed of Intrigue by Hawk Richards

M/F

Length: 3,100 words

Rating: Good

Arousal Factor: Average
Story Factor: Average


  SUMMARY

Jimmy, the gardener, impregnates Catherine.


  COMMENTARY

This story is bizarre.  I was shaking my head as I finished reading 
it.  On the one hand the sex was somewhat arousing.  On the other I 
cannot figure for the life of me what was going through Mr. Richards'
head when he wrote this story.

It is not that it is badly written, it's just that it was not what I 
was expecting.  If you want to read something different then try 
this, but don't say I didn't warn you.


  LINKS

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19827.txt

http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=442739087&fmt=raw


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Rogue Review No. 317 - February 23, 1999

Eight is Enough: And Two's Not Bad, Either by Uncle Mike

M/F, Teen, Inc

Length: 8,900 words

Rating: Excellent

Arousal Factor: High
Story Factor: High


  SUMMARY

Tommy is fourteen years old and Elizabeth, his sister, is fifteen 
years old.  What begins with a fairly innocent kiss develops into 
much more.

  COMMENTARY

This is stroke material, but it is well written stroke material.  The
story is based on the television program "Eight is Enough".  Unlike 
Tommy and Elizabeth, the other characters from the show only make 
token appearances.

What makes this story work for me is that the author seems to have 
injected a bit of reality into it.  Tommy and Elizabeth do not have 
tons of opportunities to get together; their large family tends to 
get in the way.  I also like the pace of the story.  It does not 
begin with brother and sister in the sack, but rather works up to it.


  LINKS

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19930.txt

http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=444527814&fmt=raw


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Rogue Review No. 318 - February 25, 1999

The Term Paper by Billy G

M/F, Teen

Length: 4,500 words

Rating: Excellent

Arousal Factor: High
Story Factor: High


  SUMMARY

Billy and Jenny are working on a term paper together.  The paper is 
for a class in 'Erotic Themes in Contemporary Theater'.


  COMMENTARY

This story is a lot of fun.  It is about foreplay more than it is 
about sex.  That may turn some people off, but I like to think that 
there are an equal amount of people out there who will find this 
story very enjoyable.

There isn't too much at stake in this story, but I could still feel 
the tension as Billy and Jenny began to disrobe.  To a degree the 
story is about exploring possibilities, as much as it is about sex.


  LINKS

The Term Paper

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20238.txt

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=448655236&fmt=raw

Stories Written by Billy G

* http://www.mrdouble.com/htm/raauthors/billyg.htm


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Rogue Review No. 319 - February 27, 1999

God's Great Plan by Al Steiner

m/F, Teen, Pedo

Length: 5,300 words

Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 4 (out of 5)
  Story: 4 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  SUMMARY

Jason spends some quality time with Sarah, his best friend's mother. 
She is breast feeding her newborn son and is feeling horny.


  COMMENTARY

I enjoyed this story.  It seems to have two things working for it, in
my book.  Number one is the fact that I found it arousing.  The idea 
of losing my virginity to my best friend's mother, at the age of 13 
sounds appealing.  That does not mean that it gives me warm fuzzies 
though, just that I find it sexually exciting.

The other thing that this story has working for it is humor.  Sarah 
justifies their relationship by saying that (a) she is teaching him 
about "God's Great Plan", and (b) she has needs that her husband will
not fulfill.  Some Christian fundamentalists might feel that their 
toes got stepped on in the process, but I don't think that this story
is too insensitive.  It does not suggest scrapping everything and 
starting over from scratch.  It does suggest that one should be more 
considerate of the needs of others as well as open to new ideas.

While I enjoyed this story and felt that it was both arousing and 
well written, I still can't help but feel that there was something 
missing.  Possibly it was some inconsistencies in Sarah's 
personality.  I'm not sure.  Anyhow, I gave this story a Very Good, 
which is the equivalent of putting it on my B list.  If the plot 
sounds like one that particularly interests you or you have a lot of 
time on your hands, then I recommend this story, otherwise I would 
read something that I gave an Excellent or an Outstanding.

I coded this story Pedo because Jason is only 13.


  LINKS

God's Great Plan

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19839.txt

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=442739134&fmt=raw


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Rogue Review No. 320 - February 27, 1999

Wildlife by Lee Bido

M-solo, F-solo

Length: 4,200 words

Objective Analysis: 7 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 4 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Good


  SUMMARY

Theo and Susan, coincidentally, decide to masturbate in the great 
outdoors.


  COMMENTARY

I like the idea behind this story, but I think that the author missed
something in the execution.  It alternates between Susan and Theo, 
describing first what one is up to and then the other.  It provides a
certain amount of symmetry.  I like that.

Where I think the story falls short is that Theo and Susan seem to 
have no other function in life other than to masturbate.  Believe it 
or not I think it would have made the story more arousing if the 
author had worked up to the sex, instead of more or less beginning 
with it.

I gave this story a Good, under Subjective Analysis, because while it
is a nice story, it is also a bit lacking.  If there had been more to
the plot or some build up before revealing why Susan and Theo were 
hiking in the hills of southern Indiana, then I might have given this
story a Very Good.


  LINKS

Wildlife

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=430807319&fmt=raw


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Rogue Review No. 321 - February 28, 1999

A Quick Bite to Eat by B. Peale

M/F, M/F/F, Exhib

Length: 3,700 words

Objective Analysis: 9 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 5 (out of 5)
  Story: 4 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  SUMMARY

Sara's husband talks about how she likes to "show him off" for other 
women to see.


  COMMENTARY

Exhibitionism, if handled properly, is a wonderful element to have in
a story.  I think this author has done a great job with it.  This is 
still just a stroke story, in my mind, but it is a very arousing 
stroke story.

One thing in particular that I like about this story is the tension. 
The narrator gets a sexual thrill from being showed off, but at the 
same time he seems a bit apprehensive.  Possibly this is because he 
is letting his wife decide how much he will be shown off.  Another 
thing about this story that I like is that the plot has a few twists.
It isn't too direct.

I gave this story an Excellent, under Subjective Analysis, because I 
enjoyed it a lot.  It was not special enough to rate an Outstanding, 
but I would definitely put it on my A-list of stories.  I recommend 
that you read it.


  LINKS

A Quick Bite to Eat

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19327.txt

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=436623692&fmt=raw


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Rogue Review No. 322 (1) - March 1, 1999

Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA

Chapters 1 - 3

Exhib, Voy

Length: 25,000 words

Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  SUMMARY

Larry, an eighteen-year-old virgin, manages to get himself invited 
to a strip poker game.


  COMMENTARY

There isn't any sex in the first three chapters of this story, but I 
still found them somewhat arousing.  On a slightly different note, 
the story would probably flow more smoothly (and be more arousing) if
it were not for the extreme amount of detail.  The author seems to 
feel that it is necessary to describe every hand of poker that his 
characters play. It got to the point where I felt like I was watching
a sporting event, rather than reading an erotic story.  Some details 
are necessary to set the mood, but too many details result in the 
details dominating the story.

It would also help if the story had been proofread a little more 
closely.  Although, considering the length of the story there aren't 
all that many misspelled words.

Despite finding the first three chapters only somewhat arousing and 
being distracted by the huge amount of detail I enjoyed them enough 
to give them a Very Good, under Subjective Analysis.  This is 
probably because I liked the premise of the story.

If you are looking for stroke material then I would advise you look 
elsewhere.


Rogue Review No. 322 (2) - March 2, 1999

Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA

Chapters 4 - 6

M/F, Exhib, Voy

Length: 17,800 words

Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  SUMMARY

Larry participates in yet another strip poker game.  His relationship
with Mary continues to evolve.


  COMMENTARY

There is very little sex in chapters 4 - 6, but I still found them 
somewhat arousing.  As with the first three chapters I felt that the 
author focused a bit too much on the mechanics of the poker games.  I
did not find the glut of details quite as distracting, this time 
around; possibly because I expected them.

These three chapters would also have been an easier read if they had 
been proofread more carefully.  In some cases it was a matter of 
misspelled words.  In others it was a matter of words being misplaced
or verbs being in the wrong tense.

Despite the fact that there is a little bit of sex in this story, it 
is still extremely tame, for ASS.

I enjoyed this segment of this story about as much as I did the last 
one.  The story has continued to develop.  The author's depiction of 
Larry is realistic enough.  It is not A-list material, but I am 
enjoying it enough to give it a Very Good.


Rogue Review No. 322 (3) - March 3, 1999

Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA

Chapters 7 - 9

M/F, Exhib, Voy

Length: 16,700 words

Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  SUMMARY

Mary decides to organize a strip poker game.  Larry and Mary both 
participate in the strip poker game.  They also have a side bet 
going.


  COMMENTARY

In chapters 7, 8, and 9 the story continues to develop.  Some new 
characters are introduced.  Mary learns something about Larry's 
background that she did not know before.  I would not say that there 
is a lot of tension in this story, but there is some and I like it.

I did not find the details of the poker games quite as distracting as
I did in the first three chapters.  This may be because the author is
doing a better job working them into the story.  It may also be 
because I have become accustomed to the author's style.

I enjoyed these three chapters enough to give them a Very Good.  It 
is nothing over the top.  It is rather mild, but I enjoyed it.


Rogue Review No. 322 (C) - March 3, 1999

Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA

Chapters 1 - 9

M/F, Exhib, Voy

Length: 59,500 words

Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  COMMENTARY

This is not the best story I have ever read, but I did enjoy it.  It 
is long.  I took three nights to read it all.  I do not recommend 
trying to read this entire story in one sitting.  The details of the 
poker games, if nothing else, will bog you down.

The author definitely has an affinity for the mechanics of poker.  I 
do wish that he had integrated the poker details with the rest of the
story a bit more smoothly.  There is nothing wrong with wanting to 
give the reader a feel for what the stakes are and how the game is 
played, but getting too technical can turn some people off.

In all fairness to the author these are just the first nine chapters.
From his notes it appears that he is currently working on the next 
few chapters.  The story may not be complete, but for the most part 
I believe it is both readable and enjoyable.


  LINKS

Pure Strip Poker [Chapters 1 - 9]

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20123.txt [1/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20124.txt [2/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20125.txt [3/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20126.txt [4/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20127.txt [5/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20128.txt [6/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20131.txt [7/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20129.txt [8/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20130.txt [9/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20132.txt [10/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20134.txt [11/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20135.txt [12/13]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20133.txt [13/13]

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446663572&fmt=raw [1/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446663580&fmt=raw [2/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665140&fmt=raw [3/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665148&fmt=raw [4/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665161&fmt=raw [5/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665154&fmt=raw [6/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665179&fmt=raw [7/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665167&fmt=raw [8/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665174&fmt=raw [9/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665187&fmt=raw [10/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665199&fmt=raw [11/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665205&fmt=raw [12/13]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665193&fmt=raw [13/13]


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Rogue Review No. 323 - March 6, 1999

StepSis with the Devilish Hands by Schulzie

m/F/F, Teen, Exhib, Inc, Pedo

Length: 3,200 words

Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Good


  SUMMARY

A man reflects on the first hand job he ever got.  He was thirteen at
the time.  He got it from his sister.  She was eighteen.


  COMMENTARY

I found this story to be somewhat arousing.  The buildup was better 
than the ending.  The ending left me feeling a bit unsatisfied.

For the most part this is a well written story.  The only problem I 
had was with the flow of the plot.  Everything seemed to be rolling 
along smoothly until the transition to the last scene.  It was not 
smooth enough for me.  There is also a character introduced in the 
last scene for no apparent reason.  I think the story would have been
better with out her.  It left me wondering why she was even in the 
story in the first place.

I did like the two main characters.  They both seemed realistic, at 
least to the extent that the author described them.

Due to what I felt was a let down at the end of this story I did not 
enjoy it enough to consider it A- or B-list material.  It is still 
well enough written and has enough that I do like for me to say that 
it is a Good story.


  LINKS

StepSis with the Devilish Hands

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15335.txt

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=391325070&fmt=raw

Stories Written by Schulzie

* http://www.mrdouble.com/htm/authors/schulzie.htm


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Rogue Review No. 324 - March 6, 1999

Sheila the Great by Schulzie

m/ffff, Teen, Exhib

Length: 1,700 words

Objective Analysis: 9 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 4 (out of 5)
  Story: 5 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  SUMMARY

A man reflecting on his teen years remembers the summer that Sheila, 
another teenager, taught him a game called Trust Me?


  COMMENTARY

I found this story to be very arousing.  If it had been a little 
longer I might have even said it was extremely arousing.

I cannot find any faults with the story.  I like the characters, but 
then the author does not spend too much time describing them.  He did
give enough details to get my imagination rolling in the right 
direction.  They did seem realistic.  There is not a whole lot to the
plot, but what there is seems to flow together quite nicely.

I really, really liked this story.  The only problem I have with it, 
is that it is as short as it is.  This is another way of saying that 
I wish that it had been longer, not that there was anything missing. 
Even though I wish it were longer, I still enjoyed it enough to 
consider it to be Excellent.


  LINKS

Sheila the Great

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year97/6778.txt

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=310348816&fmt=raw 

Stories Written by Schulzie

* http://www.mrdouble.com/htm/authors/schulzie.htm


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Rogue Review No. 325 - March 7, 1999

Sharing a Bed for the Night by J. Boswell

F/M, Inc

Length: 5,200 words

Objective Analysis: 9 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 4 (out of 5)
  Story: 5 (out of 5)

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  SUMMARY

Rocky, Roxanne Chase, visits Denny, her son, on his 21st birthday.  


  COMMENTARY

I found this story to be very arousing.  The author does a wonderful 
job building up to the sex.  He does not jump into it from the 
get-go.  Instead he has written a story which ends with sex, instead 
of being nothing but sex.  Its not that hard to see where the story 
is leading, which can be bad, but the author nudges it along, rather 
than shove it in the reader's face, which is good.

I think this is a very well written story.  There was an occasional 
misspelled word.  There were also three places in the text where a 
sentence is repeated for no apparent reason.  While these errors 
could have been avoided, they occurred infrequently enough that they 
did not detract from my reading pleasure.

I like how the author plotted the story.  It has a nice, natural 
feeling flow.  I like the main character, who is the only one you 
really get to know, and the tone the author has given her.  This is 
definitely an A-list story, and I have given it an Excellent.


  LINKS

Sharing a Bed for the Night

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year97/6778.txt

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=310348816&fmt=raw 

J. Boswell's Bibliography

* http://www.bitbard.pair.com/library/boswell/


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3/7/99