Rogue Reviews Digest No. 35 - April 8, 1999


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not 
read what follows.


  CONTENTS

Mailing List Information

Ratings

Note

Reviews

  "The Baby-sitter's Bonus" by Velvet Rose
  "Expert Tease" by Philippe Richard
  "High-Heeled Tease" by Philippe Richard
  "The Maid" by Maria Gonzales
  "Mom's New Love" by Roderigo
  "A New Outlook on Life" by Rosa
  "The Shaver II" by Al Steiner
  "Tease" by Hawk Richards


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  MAILING LIST INFORMATION

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Discussion List.  If you are interested in joining there is a form for 
doing so on my home page.

* Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/
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  RATINGS

Part 1.  OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS

SCORE = AROUSAL SCORE + STORY SCORE

AROUSAL SCORE

0  Not
1  Barely
2  A Little
3  Somewhat
4  Very
5  Extremely

STORY SCORE

0  This barely resembles a story
1  Definitely lacking, but its possible it has a redeeming quality
2  Effort is evident, but I have some problems with this story
3  Nothing exceptional, but on the other hand there are no major flaws
4  Well crafted, but is missing something, or something does not work entirely
5  Beautifully crafted, it does not seem to be missing anything


Part 2.  SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS

Not Good = This was a waste of my time, don't bother reading it

Good = This is a good attempt, but I don't recommend it

Very Good = If you have the time or like this variety of story then I 
recommend this story, otherwise I would go with something that I rate 
as Excellent or Outstanding

Excellent = I recommend that you read this story, and I really liked it, but 
it did not give me the same feeling that an outstanding story does.

Outstanding = This story was not only enjoyable, but it also gave me a 
special feeling that I cannot describe


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Note that there is not necessarily a direct correlation between 
the objective analysis and the subjective analysis.  On the other hand 
the terms objective and subjective as I have used them are relative and 
not absolute terms.  In other words the objective analysis is more objective
than the subjective one, and vice versa.  This new system may not work in 
the long run, but for the moment I am going with it.

This still does not get to one of MichaelD38's criticisms, which is how 
much better is an Outstanding than an Excellent, and Excellent than a 
Very Good, etc.  To be perfectly honest I'm not sure myself.  All I 
know is that I like Outstanding stories better than Excellent ones, etc.
I have a hard time quantifying "like", or "love" for that matter.  I 
can tell you if I liked something better than something else.  I can 
tell you why I did.  I can't put on a number on it however and say that 
I liked it 20% more or twice as much.  That just does not work for me.


BTW you may have noticed that I have dropped Grudgingly Good from my 
rating system.  That rating really represented a case where I did not 
like a story, but only because I was revolted or disgusted by the subject 
matter.  With the new system I'll just say under the Subjective Analysis 
that a story was Not Good.  The Arousal score is somewhat subjective, so 
that score may suffer, but I think that I can recognize good writing 
even when it revolts me.



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  REVIEWS


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Rogue Review No. 341 - April 1, 1999

Tease by Hawk Richards

M/F

Length: 1,200 words

Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 4 (out of 5)
  Story: 4 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  SUMMARY

A man describes how he was teased by his date.


  COMMENTARY

This is a very arousing story.  On the other hand it is not very 
long or involved.  The ending was not completely satisfying, but the 
author does a good job leading up to it.

The story is well written.  I was impressed by the descriptions and 
the narrator's tone.  The plot and characters are a bit lacking, but 
they are adequate considering the length of the story.  The action is
well paced.

So, in summation, this is a well written story that I found to be 
very arousing.  I wish it had been longer.  It belongs on my B-list, 
in other words I have given it a Very Good, under Subjective 
Analysis.


  LINKS

Tease

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=444219286&fmt=raw

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19888.txt

Hawk's Nest

* http://hawksnest.pair.com/


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Rogue Review No. 342 - April 1, 1999

A New Outlook on Life by Rosa

F/M, Exhib

Length: 2,400 words

Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 4 (out of 5)
  Story: 4 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  SUMMARY

Rosa gets a late customer as she is preparing about to close the hair
salon.  He is older, looks richer, and wants a little more than just 
a haircut.


  COMMENTARY

This is a very arousing story.  I enjoyed seeing Rosa experience 
conflicting emotions.  It made her seem more realistic and the story 
more arousing.

This is a well written stroke story.  Rosa wants to close the shop, 
but fate and her customer have other ideas about what she should be 
doing.  The author does take the time to set the mood.  Rosa has 
worries that don't involve her sex life.  These are the sorts of 
things that make her seem realistic, but they are not dominant enough
in the story for me to consider it not to be a stroke story.  The 
plot is well paced.

I liked this story, it is well written and very arousing, but I'm not
wild about it.  I like it, but it belongs on my B-list not my A-list.
So, if this sounds like something that interests you or you have the 
time I advise you read this.  It is a fun read.


  LINKS

A New Outlook on Life

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=445265104&fmt=raw

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20013.txt


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Rogue Review No. 343 - April 2, 1999

The Baby-sitter's Bonus by Velvet Rose

f/M, Teen

Length: 3,300 words

Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 5 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  SUMMARY

Anna spends the summer after her junior year in high school baby-
sitting Mark and Mary's children.  She has the hots for Mark.  He is 
35, used to be her history teacher and, of course, is married.


  COMMENTARY

This is an extremely arousing story.  It does not begin with Anna and
Mark in the sack.  It takes its time and works up to that.  The 
little, real life details that the author includes help to flesh out 
the story.  Without them it would have been too one-dimensional and 
definitely not as arousing.

This is a well written story, but it needs to be proofed.  There are 
a number of spelling and grammatical errors.  They are not so 
numerous that they caused me to enjoy the story less, but they are 
numerous enough such that it seems appropriate to give the story a 
lower mark than I otherwise might have given it.  The characters are 
realistic enough.  This is a stroke story.  The plot flows smoothly 
enough.  It is a simple story, but it works.

I really enjoyed reading this story.  If not for the fact that it 
needs to be edited for spelling and grammatical errors, I would have 
given it a higher objective score.  As is, I liked it enough to put 
it on my A-list.


  LINKS

The Baby-sitter's Bonus

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456054814&fmt=raw [1/2]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456054816&fmt=raw [2/2]

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20626.txt [1/2]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20627.txt [2/2]


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Rogue Review No. 344 - April 3, 1999

The Shaver II by Al Steiner

F/F

Length: 5,400 words

Objective Analysis: 10 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 5 (out of 5)
  Story: 5 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  SUMMARY

Three weeks have passed since Jen got her pussy shaved by Charlie, 
her sister-in-law.  David, Jen's husband and Charlie's brother, was 
excited about his wife's new look, at first, but his interest has 
faded.  Jen starts to think about how much she enjoyed what Charlie 
did to her and decides that she wants more of the same.


  COMMENTARY

This is an extremely arousing story.  Having read the first story in 
the series probably helped.  I had an idea of what was to come.  I 
think it also helped that Charlie does not just jump back into bed 
with Jen.  She has needs too.

This is a very well written story.  I enjoyed reading the verbal back
and forth between Jen and Charlie, as well as Jen's narration.  There
are both internal and external and external conflicts, unlike the 
first story where there just seemed to be an internal one.  In the 
process, Charlie becomes a more interesting character.  The first 
story seemed to revolve, to a large degree, around how Charlie came 
to shave Jen, in other words it was more plot oriented.  This story 
seems to revolve around the characters, Jen and Charlie, what makes 
them who they are and how they see their relationship changing.  Both
stories have plot and both have character development, but that is 
the way I see them when I compare them.

I really enjoyed this story.  It is extremely arousing and well 
written.  Some readers may disagree with me, but it reminds me of 
some of Ann Douglas' better lesbian stories.  It definitely makes my 
A-list.

While it is not essential, I recommend that you read the prior story 
in this series, "The Shaver".  It is also worth noting that the 
author has left the ending open, in other words he might write 
another story about Jen and Charlie.


  LINKS

The Shaver II

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=459282442&fmt=raw

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20784.txt


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Rogue Review No. 345 - April 5, 1999

Mom's New Love by Roderigo

m/F, Teen, Inc

Length: 9,000 words

Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 3 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Good


  SUMMARY

Mom is horny.  Dad hasn't been too interested in sex lately.  Enter 
teenage son.


  COMMENTARY

I found this story to be somewhat arousing.  In this case that means 
that I found the story arousing at first, but as the story progressed
I found myself wilting away.  The reason for this is probably the 
abundance of sex to the exclusion of plot.

This is a stroke story; no doubt about it.  I had no problems with 
the plot until the author decided that graphic descriptions of sex 
can stand on their own.  In other words once the sex begins it 
doesn't stop for anything, more or less.  The characters were pretty 
standard for a stroke story.  They did not have much on their minds 
other than sex.

If there had been less sex and more plot in this story then I might 
have liked it more.  If the subject matter is something that pricks 
your interest, or you think plot is overrated, then you might enjoy 
this story.  As for me, I have given it a Good, under Subjective 
Analysis.


  LINKS

Mom's New Love

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=240595780&fmt=raw [1/2]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=240596223&fmt=raw [2/2]


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Rogue Review No. 346 - April 7, 1999

High-Heeled Tease by Philippe Richard

M/F

Length: 2,600 words

Objective Analysis: 7 {out of 10)

  Arousal: 5 (out of 5)
  Story: 2 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  SUMMARY

Philip meets Jessica in a Paris nightclub.  She loves to tease men.  
He becomes her latest victim.


  COMMENTARY

This story is extremely arousing.  Despite the fact there is no 
actual intercourse, of any sort, this story really got me going.

The story could use some work.  In particular, the paragraphs are a 
bit too long.  My advice to the author is to break most of the 
paragraphs down into shorter ones.  An occasional long paragraph is 
one thing.  A story that has almost nothing but very long paragraphs 
is another.  There isn't much to the plot, but then it is stroke 
material and it is rather short.  There is nothing special about the 
characters, but there is nothing seriously lacking in them either.

I enjoyed this story quite a bit.  It is extremely arousing.  I wish 
the paragraphs were shorter.  It belongs on my B-list.


  LINKS

High-Heeled Tease

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=409247649&fmt=raw

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/17025.txt


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Rogue Review No. 347 - April 7, 1999

Expert Tease by Philippe Richard

M/F/F

Length: 5,700 words

Objective Analysis: 8 {out of 10)

  Arousal: 5 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  SUMMARY

Philip runs into Jessica in the same Paris nightclub where he met her
before.  This time she does more than just tease him.  She tells him 
how she got to be an expert tease.


  COMMENTARY

This story is extremely arousing.  It is worth noting that there is 
no actual sexual intercourse.  I'm not too sure how realistic some of
the action is in this story.  Maybe it is physically possible and 
maybe it isn't.  I'm just not sure.  I do know one thing, I found it 
arousing, extremely arousing.

This story has plot and characters.  The characters are there to 
forward the plot, and not the other way around.  In other words there
is nothing extremely special about any of the characters.  On the 
other hand this is a tale of sexual fantasy.  It is designed to 
entertain, not enlighten.  I did like the format of the story.  The 
author employs flashbacks quite usefully to allow Jessica to reveal 
her past.  I wish the author would write shorter paragraphs.  There 
is nothing wrong with breaking up a paragraph that consists of 22 
sentences and over 500 words down into a few shorter paragraphs.  The
information conveyed did not seem to be superfluous, but the manner 
in which it was conveyed was not entirely pleasing to the eye.

I enjoyed this story a lot.  In particular I liked the author's use 
of flashbacks.  As I mentioned before I found the story extremely 
arousing.  I have placed it on my A-list.


  LINKS

Expert Tease

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=438275619&fmt=raw

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19393.txt


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Rogue Review No. 348 - April 8, 1999

The Maid by Maria Gonzales

F/M, Exhib

Length: 5,200 words

Objective Analysis: 10 {out of 10)

  Arousal: 5 (out of 5)
  Story: 5 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  SUMMARY

Isabel is a maid.  John is a writer.  He is staying in the hotel 
where she works.  After Isabel acts as though she does not speak 
English, John admits that he thinks she's gorgeous and would like to 
fuck her.  Isabel decides to do something about John's crude remark. 
She teases him over the next few days by wearing less and less 
clothing.


  COMMENTARY

This story is extremely arousing, probably because the author takes 
her time in leading up to the sex.  The author does not focus too 
much on physical descriptions and actions.  Instead, she focuses on 
how her characters are thinking and feeling.  I think this also makes 
the story more arousing.

This is a very well written story.  It has a plot.  The plot flows 
nicely.  It seems logical enough.  The characters seem real.  They do
not seem to exist for the sole purpose of having sex.  This is a 
stroke story, but the characters are more interesting than the ones 
you find in your average stroke story.

I definitely enjoyed the story.  I was pulled into it early on and 
thoroughly enjoyed the ride.  It belongs on my A-list and that's why 
I have given it an Excellent, under Subjective Analysis.  Unless a 
story has to be really nasty and disgusting for you to enjoy it, I 
highly recommend that you read this one.


  LINKS

The Maid

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=463415578&fmt=raw

Maria Gonzales' Bibliography

* http://bitbard.pair.com/library/maria/


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