Rogue Review  No. 38 - May 29, 1998

by Lee Vine

Hank by Greatness

M/F, Inc, NC

Length: 5,200 words

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NOTES:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME 
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE 
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP 
READING NOW!!!!

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Summary

Hank's beautiful sister, Caroline, gets drunk and passes out.  He is 
drunk himself, so he takes advantage of her.

Commentary

This story bothered me.  The only character that seemed a little more
than just a caricature was Hank.  Caroline was just a body.  She may 
have been conscious for part of this story, but her only role was as 
a receptacle for Hank's cum.

The author tried to make this story appear consensual by saying, at 
the end, that Hank's sister was never asleep.  She wanted exactly 
what she got and more.  Whether she wanted what she got or not, Hank 
took advantage of her believing that she was unconscious.  Of course 
this character, Caroline, was just a shell, without much of a 
personality, so maybe the author is right, and maybe the sex was 
consensual.  To me, non-consensual sex means that one partner has 
not in some way indicated a willingness to participate.  Passing out 
drunk, or appearing to pass out drunk, does not indicate willingness 
to me.

There was not much to this story to begin with. The cop out excuses 
and the lack of plot or character development did not help.  If you 
are going to write a non-consensual story then label it as such.  
Trying to avoid the non-consensual label by including a half-assed 
explanation, at the end, makes your writing even less credible.

Judgment

This was not a good story.  The set up was not bad, but once the sex 
began plot and character development went out the window.
