Rogue Review  No. 143 - August 11, 1998

Wraith by BitBard

F-solo, F/M

Length: 8,200 words


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended or under the age of eighteen then please
do not read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Gail escapes her loneliness and her aunt with the help of a ghost.


  COMMENTARY

My heart went out to Gail.  I felt sad at the beginning when I saw 
the predicament she was in.  Seeing her get away from her aunt and 
start a new life for herself, made me happy.

This story did feel like it was missing something.  I would like to 
learn more about the ghost.  Considering the title and the author's 
preface I was expecting much more.  The ghost played a key role, but 
did not get very much time on stage.  From the author's descriptions 
it was hard to tell if the ghost was even intelligent enough to know 
what it was doing.  Gail apparently thought so, but I was not 
completely convinced.

I think this story lacked passion, for the most part.  I can 
understand how someone in Gail's position would not have much hope.  
I just feel as though the build up should have been a little more 
dramatic.  I realize that in life things do not always work out like 
that, but after all this is a story.  In the final analysis it is not
 my story and the author is free to do as he pleases with his 
characters, but I was left feeling a little empty.


  JUDGMENT

This is a good story.


  LINK(S)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12836.txt

