Rogue Review  No. 58 - June 14, 1998

Hot Tub Fun! by Michelle

M/F/M, Teen

Length: 2,800 words

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DISCLAIMER:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME 
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE 
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP 
READING NOW!!!!

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Summary

A twenty-something couple, a sixteen-year-old boy, and a hot tub.


Commentary

This story was different.  Seeing two men going at it, without one 
dressing as a woman, was a switch.  For all the F/F and M/F/F stories
out there, it is nice to see one that is willing to go the other 
route. 

The characters were average.  The plot was pretty straight forward.  
There was no twist at the end.  This story worked for me, because it 
was different.

I do have a problem with the blocking in this story.  I do not think 
it was necessary.  It ends up being a tangle of directions.  There 
are plenty of good stories that leave body positioning up to the 
reader's imagination.

[Definition: Blocking - "to work out or chart the movements of (as 
 stage  performers)" (WWWebster Dictionary).

 Note:  I do not think it is a commonly used term except on the stage 
 or in writing.  I did not know that definition of the word 
 'blocking' until I took an acting class several years ago.]


Judgment

This is a good story, but the blocking does get in the way.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11810.txt
