Rogue Review No. 462 - November 16, 1999

NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the 
required legal age, or material of an erotic nature 
is illegal where you are, then do not read what 
follows.

TITLE: Dangling By A Thread
AUTHOR: Lambchop
LENGTH: 3,200 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Male
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Strangers
KINK(S): Voyeurism
SETTING(S): Home
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --

SUMMARY: Allan almost falls to his death, while washing 
windows on a skyscraper.  That's how the story begins, more 
or less.

COMMENTARY: This is a nice story, but I found it somewhat 
lacking.  The sex is somewhat arousing, but my biggest gripe 
with the story is that I felt there was too much telling and 
not enough showing.  By that I mean that the author seemed 
to inform the reader rather than simply describe what was 
happening.  It can be a fine line, but the difference seems 
to me to be that in the latter case the author does not 
leave the evidence as open to interpretation as he (in this 
case) does in the latter.

I suspect that I may be blowing this whole showing versus 
telling thing out of proportion.  It is entirely possible 
that I am overlooking a true gem of a story.  In light of 
that, I will point out that this is a romantic story.  So, 
if you like erotic stories that have a romantic flavour to 
them then you may want to give this one a spin.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.0 (out of 10)

        - Arousal: 3/5
        - Editing: 5/5
        - Plot and Characters: 3/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good

LINK(S): Dangling By A Thread

         - http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/20956

         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=547120351&fmt=raw

