Rogue Review No. 159 - August 23, 1998

Coming In My Heart by Irish Lass

F/M

Length: 2,300 words


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended or under the age of eighteen then please 
do not read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Cat meets Brian at the beach.  They have fun that afternoon, with 
their clothes on.  Cat contacts Brian a few days later.  A couple 
days after that they go out on a date.


  COMMENTARY

This is a nice, light, romantic story.  I like the characters and I 
think the author did a good job with the plot.

I would have liked the story better if not for the need for editing.
There were many places where words were missing, or left 
uncapitalized.

This story is rough around the edges but, putting aside the rough 
edges, I like it a lot.


  JUDGMENT

This is a very good story, and it would be an excellent one if not 
for the fact that it needs to be edited.


  LINK(S)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13868.txt


