Rogue Review No. 379 - May 26, 1999

NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the required legal 
age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, 
then do not read what follows.

TITLE: Moving Day
AUTHOR: Bob Peale
LENGTH: 8,600 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Solo (Female, Male)
                Twosome (1 Female, 1 Male)
                Group (1 Female, 3 Males)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Male, Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Hired Help-Employer
KINK(S): Toys
         Voyeurism
SETTING(S): Hotel
            Public Restroom
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): Nonconsensual

SUMMARY: Andrea gets some help moving and some much needed sexual
satisfaction from the three hunky guys who move her belongings 
from Washington, DC to Louisville, KY.

COMMENTARY: There are scenes in this story that I found arousing,
but the focus seems to be just a bit too heavy on the sex, to 
suit my tastes.  The characters, in particular the three guys, 
were indistinguishable personality-wise.  Descriptions of sex are
nice, but without something else to balance them out I don't find
them as arousing.

The story itself is divided into two basic parts.  The first part
describes Andrea's trip to an adult bookstore.  I was enjoying it
until towards the end she was forced to do something she did not 
want to do.  It made me cringe.  The second part of the story is 
about the move from DC to Louisville.  The plot was okay, but the
characters were definitely lacking.  In my opinion in would have 
helped if the author had not focused quite so much on the sex.  
There are also a number of spelling errors.

I did not enjoy this story.  The lack of strong characters or a 
strong plot and the inclusion of a non-consensual sex scene all 
contributed to how this story made me feel.  Unless what I have 
described turns you on, I can't recommend this story.  I have 
given it a Not Good.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 5.5 (out of 10)

         - Arousal: 2/5
         - Editing: 4/5
         - Plot and Characters: 3/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Not Good

LINK(S): Moving Day

         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=477598570&fmt=raw [1/3]
         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=477598585&fmt=raw [2/3]
         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=477598596&fmt=raw [3/3]

