A Review by Lee Vine

Janey's April by Janey

M/F, M/F/F

Length: 11,200 words

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NOTES:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME 
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE 
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP 
READING NOW!!!!

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Summary

Mary travels to Switzerland to get laid.  Don is Mary's first fuck, but
Jean-Claude is the first one to show her how much fun sex can be.

Commentary

It is not a good sign when the introduction to a story is better than the 
story itself.  This story did not work for me.  The dilemma, if there was 
one, had already been resolved.  Mary had already decided she wanted to 
lose her virginity.  Everything after that seemed rather procedural.  
There did not seem to be any excitement in any of the acts, including the 
three-way sex.

Another problem I had with this story was that the author told rather 
than described what happened.  I did this.  I felt like this.  She did 
that.  She sat here.  He licked this this.  I licked that.  Almost every 
sentence had a person as the subject.  It got to be monotonous.

I have imposed my standards on this story.  You may like this story.  You 
may hate some of the stories that I give good reviews to.  So be it.

Rating

I give this story a 2 on a scale of 10.


