Rogue Review No. 343 - April 2, 1999

The Baby-sitter's Bonus by Velvet Rose

f/M, Teen

Length: 3,300 words

Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 5 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not
read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Anna spends the summer after her junior year in high school baby-
sitting Mark and Mary's children.  She has the hots for Mark.  He is 
35, used to be her history teacher and, of course, is married.


  COMMENTARY

This is an extremely arousing story.  It does not begin with Anna and
Mark in the sack.  It takes its time and works up to that.  The 
little, real life details that the author includes help to flesh out 
the story.  Without them it would have been too one-dimensional and 
definitely not as arousing.

This is a well written story, but it needs to be proofed.  There are 
a number of spelling and grammatical errors.  They are not so 
numerous that they caused me to enjoy the story less, but they are 
numerous enough such that it seems appropriate to give the story a 
lower mark than I otherwise might have given it.  The characters are 
realistic enough.  This is a stroke story.  The plot flows smoothly 
enough.  It is a simple story, but it works.

I really enjoyed reading this story.  If not for the fact that it 
needs to be edited for spelling and grammatical errors, I would have 
given it a higher objective score.  As is, I liked it enough to put 
it on my A-list.


  LINKS

The Baby-sitter's Bonus

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456054814&fmt=raw [1/2]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456054816&fmt=raw [2/2]

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20626.txt [1/2]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20627.txt [2/2]

