Rogue Review No. 350 - April 10, 1999

Getting Wet by Belfast Bloke

M/F, Teen

Length: 4,900 words

Objective Analysis: 7 {out of 10)

  Arousal: 4 (out of 5)
  Story: 3 (out of 5)
  Stroke: Yes

Subjective Analysis: Good


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not
read what follows.


  SUMMARY

A young man, presumably in his late teens, arrives at his friend's 
house soaking wet.  His friend isn't home, but his friend's 15-year- 
old sister Katie is.  The narrator seems shocked when Katie insists 
that he take off all his clothes in front of her.  Eventually he 
mellows.


  COMMENTARY

This is a very arousing story.  The fact that the narrator seems to 
have some sense of loyalty to his friend made the situation more 
interesting.  Katie's forwardness also made the story more arousing. 

There are things I liked about this story and things I didn't.  I 
liked the plot.  It could probably flow more smoothly, but I still 
liked it. It seems logical enough.  I liked the characters.  They 
seem realistic enough, for the most part.

I did not like the fact that the author did not have a line break or 
an indentation at the beginning of each paragraph.  I also felt that 
the narrator did a bit too much "mind reading" instead of just 
describing how he was feeling or what he saw.  There is also the fact
that the narrator twice takes off his jeans without seeming to put 
them back on after his removes them the first time.  It sounds like a
neat trick, but I think it would have been less distracting if this 
problem had been eliminated in the editing process.

The author is from Ireland, or so he seems to imply by his moniker.  
Some of the vocabulary in the story also leads one to believe that 
the author is from the British Isles.  What I am trying to get at it 
is that there is a good deal of slang and other terms used that most 
Americans are unfamiliar with.  There is nothing wrong with that.  It
probably makes the story more attractive to some people.  Personally,
I struggled with the vocabulary.  The struggle made the story a 
little less fun to read.

I enjoyed reading this story.  If you have an easier time with the 
language then you might like this story more than I did.  I have 
given it a Good, under Subjective Analysis.


  LINKS

Getting Wet

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=455562484&fmt=raw [1/2]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=455562487&fmt=raw [2/2]

* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20592.txt [1/2]
* http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20593.txt [2/2]
