Rogue Review  No. 59 - June 16, 1998

Dyad by Michael K. Smith

M/F, Teen, Inc

Length: 10,300 words

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DISCLAIMER:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME 
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE 
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP 
READING NOW!!!!

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Summary

Jodie loses her virginity to her father.


Commentary

This is a well told story.  Jodie is the narrator; her descriptions 
of everyday life are related in a believable fashion.  The sex is not
overemphasized, but there are plenty of other details.

This story is lacking a dilemma.  Jodie does not have a very hard 
time deciding that her father is to be her first.  Her father shows a
little reluctance, but after exhibiting token signs of restraint, 
gives in.  I prefer a story which has a real dilemma.

Another complaint I have is that Jodie monopolizes this story.  I 
suppose that is natural, since she is the narrator, but the 
overwhelming majority of her narration only gives us insights into 
what she is thinking.  This may not be a valid criticism.  I wanted 
to enjoy this story, but seeing as that I could not find a real 
dilemma I am looking for other faults in the story.

I do think this story is well told.  It is worth reading.  It reads 
like I would imagine a teenage girl's diary could read if she had 
experienced these sort of things.  Nothing seems planned out.  Things
just happen.

I was aroused at times, but not overwhelmingly so.  This is a nice 
story, I just wish there had been a little more to it.


Judgment

This is a good story, but the lack of a binding plot, a dilemma, and 
better characterization of Jodie's father hurt it.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year97/639.txt 



