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The stories:
Bedtime Stories #4: Panties?, by Moontan96 (M/F, femdom, no panties)
Fun in the Sun, by Sympathy (M/F teen, first)
God's Great Plan, by Al Steiner (M/F teen, first, breast, lact, oral, anal)
Critics, by anonymous (M/F teen, TV, humor)
Scottish Dance, by Michael Gouda (M/M, rom, crime drama)
Website Review: Keiko
Bedtime Stories #4: Panties? [A]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 2/19/99
Author: Moon Tan 96
Address: moontan96@aol.com
This is one of those second-person stories where the narrator
tells the reader what she does/wears/feels in his secret fantasy:
"What really knocks me out is your dress. A clinging, short,
black, cocktail dress with a halter top, leaving your beautiful
back and shoulders bare...this sexy dress was never intended to be
worn with a bra and your breasts bounce and sway freely under
the thin material which also does a poor job of concealing the
beautiful outlines of your delicious nipples."
The narrator then dares his date to go without her panties, and
she does. When they get home later they have sex, and
surprisingly she's the one who takes the aggressive role: "You've
got a lot of nerve parading me around all over town in that short
assed dress without panties! It's bad enough that every man who
saw me watched my tits jiggling but did you really have to keep
lifting my dress and squeezing my ass? I' ve never been so close
to naked and aroused in public! You're gonna get it now!"
I admit I'm not as prejudiced against second-person stories as I
used to be (time mellows one in this business) and I found this
story pretty hot, and an entertaining read. The couple had some
good smutty fun without being too crass and no one gets hurt or
humiliated. It was just the sort of thing I wanted to read, and I'm
glad I did.
Fun in the Sun [B-/C+]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 2/15/99
Author: Sympathy
Address: sympathy@hotmail.com
Stories about teenagers are always hard to write. The characters
either come across as sounding acting too adult or, if written by a
teenager, naively psychotic (as in the abysmal "Thrasher Girls"
which I reviewed a few weeks ago.) It's very rare when an
author can capture an authentic voice.
This story, sadly, failed, even though I was rooting for it.
Sympathy is a gorgeous 18-year-old who leaves the family farm
in search of adventure--I guess the story takes places place in
the Midwest somewhere--and soon meets a good-looking man
named Kurt who picks her up in his truck. On the spur of the
moments he stops by a river for a swim--nude, as it turns out--
and after some cajoling she joins him. He tempts her into having
sex with him and there's the added delight of special hot springs
in the river which serve to get them in the mood.
This story had a lot going for it--the unique name of the heroine,
the hot springs, the good-naturedness of it--but the writing was
clumsy needed a lot of work, in particular the dialogue: "Hello, my
name is Sympathy and of I knew where I was going I'd take you
up on your offer. You wouldn't happen to know of any farm
around here that needs a milk maid or extra hand would you?" I
didn't think people talked like this outside of 1950s television
shows.
In sum, this wasn't great, but I encourage the author to keep
developing his or her craft.
God's Great Plan [A+]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 2/10/99
Author: Al Steiner
Address: al_steiner@hotmail.com
This story, in contrast, was a very good example of a teen voice
written well. Thirteen-year-old Jason goes to see his friend, who
comes from a family of bible-thumping religious fanatics, and
winds up spending the afternoon with his friend's mother. She
pulls out a tit to nurse her newborn son Kyle, and the action
starts rolling:
"Kyle only emptied one breast but I have to drain both of them. I
have a breast pump but it's kind of uncomfortable."
"Yeah?" I said, naively not getting her.
"So would you mind, " She continued. "Uh, draining the other
breast for me?"
We proceed there to mutual stimulation, oral sex, genital sex, and
finally anal sex, with each episode dismissed by Mrs. Tilden as
part of "God's Great Plan."
The story is told in first-person voice by a man looking back on
his youth, and his younger self's increasing arousal and
confusion are vividly portrayed as is the slow, sneaky buildup
each sex act got. I began to think, "No, wait, he can't possibly top
this, they can't be doing *that* next," but they did, and continued
to do it, the rationale being that Mr. Tilden, believing he's
reached his quota of offspring, has decoded to abstain from sex
with his wife as his part of interpretation of "God's Great Plan."
Oh yes, and then there's that very catchy refrain which is used
very effectively throughout the piece.
Read this: it's light entertainment with a little bit of profundity,
and oddly respectful to the characters even with all the sex that
occurs.
Critics [A]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 2/5/99
Author: Anonymous
Poster: Articera
Address: endlend@hotmail.com
I downloaded this story a while ago and put it on the back burner,
but the recent death of Gene Siskel inspired me to review it, and I
was glad I did. A teenage couple (yes, another teenage story) go to
a motel to have sex, but unbeknownst to them their actions are
being broadcast across the country. Siskel and Ebert then review
the sex in progress, making comments:
"Tim is showing exceptional patience," Gene stated, "and an
apparent willingness to satisfy the Sheila's sexual desires before
satisfying his own."
"I wouldn't be so sure of that," countered Roger. "A strong,
experienced tongue such as his is bringing him as much pleasure
as she is receiving! It is clearly mutual and simultaneous
satisfaction. Certainly a good performance."
In the end they both give the act a strong thumbs-up.
This one of the stories periodically posted by Articera, a pay
source for stories, and I don't usually review them because they
aren't very interesting. But this humorous piece surprised and
delighted me. I only wish the author was listed so I could give him
or her proper credit.
Scottish Dance [A+]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 2/6/99
Author: Michael Gouda
Address: stachys@eurobell.co.uk
Michael Gouda has written an absorbing series of tales, of which
this is the fifth, about Keith Hatch, a gay police officer in the
United Kingdom. I reviewed the first, "Killer," last year and it
made a good impression on me, so I picked up this one.
These stories have a very different flavor than American ones.
The characters inhabit a comfortable gay subculture that exists
side-by-side with the straight world, but it has its problems
(prejudice, outing, finding a good gay bar, etc.). They also aren't
afraid to indulge in the razor-sharp repartee of flaming queens
and laugh at themselves for it. The emphasis is on relationships
and romance with some true-crime and mystery thrown in, and
in "Scottish Dance" it's the arson of a gay Internet cafe.
Sergeant Hatch has gone to Edinburgh for the August arts
festival with his young partner Phil (who kept me in stitches
with his sarcastic asides) and his former lover, Alan, whom he
had remained friends with. Intrigue develops as an old enemy
butts into Keith's and Phil's relationship and Alan picks up a
young Costa Rican student who gives him the "el beso negro," also
known as the black kiss (you can guess what it is.) But when the
cafe is torched the student becomes a suspect...along with a young
actor and the two thugs who've been harassing the quartet, and
Phil and Alan decide to play detective to get to the bottom of the
mystery.
This was an excellent story with a lot of meat to it (pardon the
pun) and the mystery kept me guessing until the end. The author
has really done his work in capturing the flavor of the
Edinburgh arts festival; I know, because I was there. In fact, I
even ran into Margaret Thatcher. But that's another story...
Anyway, read this for excellent romance and relationship drama,
and look up the previous stories, which are archived at the Nifty
Archives, as well.
Website Review: Keiko's Home Page
Address: http://members.aol.com/keiko19/index.html
Owner: Kieko19@aol.com
This page is an odd mixture of porn and Hello Kitty. Keiko, a
Japanese student attending college in Honolulu, is an avowed
exhibitionist and invites us to read her accounts of the naughty
things she was done. The background is of yellow smiley faces,
with some gifs of coyly posed anime (Japanese cartoons) girls
with big innocent eyes; it makes a rather alarming contrast with
the stories, which contain lines like: "I slowly spread my legs
apart and he is able to clearly see I now have a wet spot on my
sheer white bikini panties. I am sure he is able to view my pussy
lips easily through the panty material." This, however, we can
put down to cultural differences, as in Japan it's not all unusual to
mix raunchy sex with a syrupy cuteness. And that's just what
Keiko has done, which is quite an accomplishment as she also had
to translate the stories from Japanese.
In "A Fantasy" Keiko reveals her undies to young artist in a cafe,
while in "My Paperboy Adventure" she allows a young boy to
peak in as she gets dressed and undressed. She even indulges in a
little bit of bondage in "Tied on the Balcony" for the benefit of
some stuffy Japanese businessmen below (she's in Waikiki when
she does this.) But she gets the last laugh, as she's not really tied
at all, and teases them unmercifully as she sheds her dress.
How well you like this site depends on how much you buy into
these fantasies. Keiko's voice seems like a genuine one and
realizing that it is a real person living and describing these
stories, an amateur, lends them an arousal quotient that goes
beyond their literary qualities. I suppose that if Keiko really got
off on exhibiting herself, she would have included some pictures;
but given the danger of stalkers, perhaps she was just being wise.
If you want some mild cross-cultural entertainment, and some
tales of self-display, check out this site.
Interface: B+
Content: B+
Will I visit again: Not sure.
Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com
Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh
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