"Pentaprism (Chapters 1-3)" by Mary Jorsay Gandmar (maryjg@finebody.com). Guest review by Mark Aster.
A five-sided prism, five images, each a little different, but essentially the same. She is a young upper-class woman in India, firm-bodied, breasts pendulous, cunt dripping, lips smiling, face in ecstasy, the gold chain around her neck slithering over her rich brown skin as her servant fucks her energetically from behind. They do it again and again, in all positions, all orifices, and they whisper and shout tender filth to each other as they fuck for hours. "Do it to me," she wails, "fuck me like a whore!"
This is pure stroke-stuff. I've read only three of the chapters, but I assume from the title that there are five. In the first we see Anuja as a grown and married woman, being fucked repeatedly by the servant Bharat. Some video cameras and her mysteriously-aloof husband are also involved. In the other two, she is young and unmarried, first showing off her young body in some wonderful masturbation while the servant Baban watches through the keyhole, and then inviting him to deflower her, and finally fucking four of his friends more or less simultaneously. She is the classic insatiably lustful woman, a standard dish on the porn menu, and either a tool of patriarchal domination or a symbol of woman's essentially uncontrollable and free sexual nature, depending on your politics.
The "pentaprism" idea is interesting (I'm inferring the idea from the title and the layout of the stories; I haven't read anything directly from the author about it). In a way it's fun, and very sexy, to see this woman's devouring sexuality from five slightly different angles. On the other hand the angles are perhaps not different enough: we see that chain rocking at least five times, which is not a bad image, but we also get told about the kajal around her eyes three times, we see a cock described as "ramming and reaming" three times, we read the adverb "erotically" TEN times, see "spoot" used to refer to semen five times, four different penises which are such-and- such "inches long, and correspondingly thick", and a number of similar repetitions.
But that's probably beside the point for all but the most analytical of critiquers. This is porn, people fucking, orifices penetrated and people cursing and screaming as they come over and over again. A young woman masturbating by fucking the smooth wooden knob on her bedpost. Bodily fluids all over the place. Lots of sex. Very hot screwing, just enough plot to hold it all together, and sufficiently well written that it's mostly a smooth and easy read (although the one really bad typo, "her cock", really MUST be fixed!). Prime masturbation material for bet males at the very least. If the "pentaprism" idea is carried out to the full five faces, and some of the more mundane repetition removed in favor of more shifting reflections, this will be a most memorable piece of erotica: a stroke-story that is also an elegant little carving, neat as the smooth wood that Anuja hungrily anoints with her hot inner juices.