Souvie's O's - July 22nd
Definitely not a story for those that are squeamish or have a phobia of spiders. However, if you want a story that will have you checking your room and bed before you go to sleep, then this is the story to read. The narrator, a young college student, abhors spiders. She's not really afraid of them, she just can't stand them. I can't say much more or else I'll reveal too much of the plot. I found the story to be expertly written, in style as well as grammar. Vickie has captured the butterfly feeling you get in the pit of your stomach, when you're watching a movie or reading a book and you know something bad is about to happen. Wonderful, wonderful writing.
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This tale is quite a bit darker than your 'normal' Vickie Morgan story. Nevertheless it is, in my humble opinion, one of her best stories so far. It's an enthralling and well-told tale of a young woman who really hates spiders and how that affects her life.
Rui Jorge
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I liked this story, the writer did a good job in painting the main characters personality and brought the readers into her life in an intimate way. Very nicely drawn characters and believable. I liked the use of language and the natural progression of the story in terms of timeline (leaving home, going to college, making friends & lovers, ending up in the asylum, etc.) Another thing I really liked about this story was how the readers are lulled into a false sense of security at the start. I began the story by completely buying into the main characters claims and feelings. By the last couple of paragraphs, though, I realized that I had been effectively listening to the mad ravings of a lunatic...now theres a revelation. It was done effectively and I liked it. This story has atmosphere, good characters and a nice plot. The ending could have had more of an impact, but otherwise I liked it.
Jasjit Singh, AFO
This is a creepy story, in a number of senses! I really enjoyed it. As someone else commented, I started out seeing it through the eyes of the narrator, feeling that the events happened as she tells them. I thought then that she was committed to the institution because of how unlikely her story was, but that it truly happened. At the end I was convinced she had mental problems. I liked how my view altered, how you acheived this in such a short piece. The characters were well drawn too, particularly the narrative voice. In the begining, she seemed a reliable witness, and it seemed that we could trust her perspective. Just shows how wrong a first impression can be! It struck me that the idea of being able to command an army of spiders was an excellent idea - and I had to smile when I thought of them all lining up on the window sill to be squashed by the goddess. One thing that I thought didn't really ring true, though, is that she sat and wrote all this, in a calm measured tone, going over all the events up to the last, when she was about to be restrained and devoured by spiders. Whether or not the spiders were going to fall through and drain her dry, she, at least, believed they were, and I think she'd be panicky to the point of incoherence. Despite that opinion though, I'm glad I took the time to read the story, as I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks!
Jenn King, AFO
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