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"Frank McCoy"
> But that, as he's explained (cumming many times) is *his* fantasy ... and
I
> can't fault him for writing what *he* finds erotic and arousing ... Though
my
> "willing suspension of disbelief" begins to falter after about the tenth
time he
> ejaculates (copiously) inside of ten minutes. Dry hunches and empty
> ejaculations I might buy. After all, it's the *brain* that's the main
sexual
> organ, not the balls, prick, or even prostate.
Finding that "willing suspension of disbelief" is the holy grail of writing.
If you can write a story that you, as the author, and the reader can delve
into and put yourself into their place, no matter how you get there, that's
the fun part. Write for that, don't worry so much about the seminal output,
unless, of course, you are running low on tissue paper.
>
> However, what bugs me *most*, is finding *myself* doing something similar
...
> and I can't seem to stop!
>
> I keep going back to some particular stories I write ... and adding more
> "detail" to each ... But, if you examine the story, it's mainly just
> more-of-the-same. Each is yet more emphasis on what I've already
> overemphasized; adding word after long weary word to what has been beaten
to
> death earlier in the story.
>
> I *try* to vary my sentences and sound by using a thesaurus, my own
memory, and
> as many variations as I can think up to not bore the readers to death with
the
> repetitive "dribble, dribble, dribble", but after about the tenth time of
saying
> the same thing ... no matter how differently phrased, it just is more
> propaganda, if nothing else.
>
There are only so many words in the English language. It's too bad we get
away from using the complete thesaurus for writing. Take a hint from
Shakespeare, he used the most words in the English language than any other
writer. Let it be eloquent. See how that works.
> Well: OK. So I *do* write propaganda, and press a point so hard it
snaps.
> Still, is that any *real* excuse? I think not.
Perhaps, but if it's a point that needs to be made and it works for the
story, then do it.
>
> In fact, the only *real* excuse I have for doing this, is that it makes it
more
> erotic for *me* to read ... screw any potential later readers of my
stories;
> it's ME that is reading it now ... and wants those extra redundancies,
> repetitions, duplications, and copies put in ... because to me they seem,
well,
> sexier.
>
Then that's what needs to be there, then. If it works for you, then that's
what you need to write.
Islador
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