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Subject: {ASSD} Self-Spot: HeartStrings, Chp. 2 (mf, mast, rom)
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Date: Thu, 08 Sep 2005 23:54:13 +0000
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I posted two chapters of HeartStrings to ASSM today (well, submitted them
for posting, at least).
The first is materially identical to my Glass Lounge submission of several
months ago.
The second is a new chapter, and I'm spotlighting it because it contains my
first up-close, descriptive narrative treatment of sexual activity.
... And I'm proud of it.
It doesn't compare to some of my favorite authors, but it's a damn sight
better-written then many scenes I read, and even manages to maintain some
eroticism absent bywards such as 'cock,' 'cunt,' and 'pussy.'
Having said that, the writing is still very uneven. Dialogue is stilted,
and descriptions are sparse.
I'm in the middle of writing the third chapter now, and I'm amazed that I
can follow this *amazingly conceived* oration with dialogue so completely
pedestrian.
~ The Confessor ~
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