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Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Review 014 Dog's Body by Stasya T. Canine
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Date: Tue, 21 Feb 2006 03:10:01 -0500
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Review Dog's Body by Stasya T. Canine

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Storyline

<Brief outline only>

The story revolves around the serendipitous meeting of a couple
who have been communicating on the internet for years. For
reasons I won't expand on here, both of them prefer sex with male
dogs. The secret they have shared has brought them close as on-
line persona's but will the magic last now they have met in
person?


Merits

<What was worthy of comment>

The feeling of how being involved in a pursuit thought to be
'unacceptable' by many others affects individuals is carefully
observed. The protagonist's are both to varying extents damaged,
both by societies scorn and actual events. Tom's pain at the loss
of his fertility to a violent, bigoted woman is haunting. Even
more appalling is the treatment of Tom 'the victim' as being at
fault, and responsible for his attack due to his liking for anal
penetration. For any right thinking person this is the anathema
to any form of justice 'natural' or otherwise.


Demerits

<What detracted from the story>

Some of the passages are hard to read, not due to any error of
English or grammar; no the difficulty comes from the bleakness of
the subject matter. If the reader perseveres through the
uncomfortable descriptions there is a heart-warming message of
hope and redemption.


Atmosphere

<How well evolved was the environment> Marks out of  20

<18>

This is impressive, for many readers the world of zoo is as alien
as one can imagine. STC opens a window onto the life style, and
allows us a glimpse of it. This is done with an open honesty that
defuses the controversial nature of the subject, and allow us to
have some understanding of zoo, as just another aspect of human
sexuality. The paranoid aspects of any 'hidden' life-style is
well observed.



Workflow

<How well did the story progress and develop> Marks out of  20

<16>

Very nicely, from the chance meeting, through to the final word,
everything unfolds smoothly. My only gripe would be the scene in
which Tom and Jolene start their sexual relationship. There is
something and I can't quite put my finger on it that rings a
little false. Although they are naturists I feel they would hold
back more from the discarding of clothes. I think it is very
early in their 'real' relationship for this level of intimacy,
neither of them are quite sure of each other away from the
artifice of the internet.



Eroticism

<Just how erotic a read is this (erotic, not sexy!)> Marks out of
20

<12>

The eroticism of the story is tempered by the bleakness of some
of the events. It's hard to be carried away when grim reality
earths you so often.



Mechanics

<The boring bit, grammar, typo's etc.> Marks out of 20

<17>

Of the authors normally high standards.


Impression

<What did I feel having read the story, did I want to read more?>
Marks out of 20

<14>

Now that is hard to answer, I usually read to get away from
reality and grimness. The themes of this story dwell very much in
the arena of 'hard knocks', STC handles this well. Yotna less so,
it tends to distress him. This is a good story and it deals with
several difficult subjects in its stride.




Total score

77 Yotties out of 100. <An average score would therefore be 50>

Readability guide      00-20 must try harder.
                             20-40 needs development
                             40-60 readable
                             60-80 good read
                             80-99 should read
                             100 reserved for my stories :-)

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