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From: "Yotna El'toub" <yotna_eltoub@hotmail.com>
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Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Examlpe review with annotations [Yotna El'toub Reviews]
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Date: Sat, 14 Jan 2006 17:10:04 -0500
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Yotna's Review template


Storyline

<Brief outline only>

What is the story about?
What are the main themes?
Give an impression of the text without revealing too much story line.

Merits

<What was worthy of comment>

Well written phrases/paragraphs.
Good use of characterisation.
Novel ideas or approaches.
Good flow, beginning, middle, end.


Demerits

<What detracted from the story>

Poorly written/spelt phrases.
Bad grammar.
Poor flow, jumps in story line - continuity.
Unfinished/unresolved.

Atmosphere

<How well evolved was the environment> Marks out of  20

Could you be there?
Whould you want to be there?
How real was it (includes characters.

Workflow

<How well did the story progress and develop> Marks out of  20

Did the story drift along without you noticing.
Were you pulled out of the story by discontinuity or anything else.
Did it evolve, and close out effectively.

Eroticism

<Just how erotic a read is this (erotic, not sexy!)> Marks out of  20

Details of who plugs what where can be as stimulating as a laundry list!
Were the emotions and feelings palpable?
Were you 'involved' in the 'feel' of the piece or detached from it.
How real were the episodes of action in the text (be they sex, discussion,
conflict or whatever).

We are talking sensuality here, it has a much broader brief than sex.

Mechanics

<The boring bit, grammar, typo's etc.> Marks out of 20

Oh, who invented this stuff, and why? Well so we could understand each other 
;-)
Too many grammatical, spelling or even formatting errors will divorce the 
reader
from the story.

We aim to suspend disbelief, make the reader forget they are reading a 
story, this is
hard to achieve if the reader is mentally editing the text.

Impression

<What did I feel having read the story, did I want to read more?> Marks out 
of 20

A good whisky is fully appreciated after you have swallowed it. The best 
stories leave
a distinctive flavour in our mind.

What was it.
Did you like it.
Would you want more of it?


Total score

xxx Yotties out of 100.  <An average score would therefore be 50>

Readability guide           00-20 must try harder.
                                  20-40 needs development
                                  40-60 readable
                                  60-80 good read
                                  80-99 should read
                                  100 reserved for my stories :-)

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