Message-ID: <41471asstr$1048597804@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: <LadyCyrrh@aol.com> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <150.1d4edbb9.2baf8b2a@aol.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-ASSTR-Original-Date: Sun, 23 Mar 2003 17:11:54 EST Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 3/24/03 Date: Tue, 25 Mar 2003 08:10:04 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: <assm@asstr-mirror.org> Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: <URL:http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2003/41471> X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Story-Submission: <ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Moderator-ID: dennyw, gill-bates The Annex Reviews, 3/23/03 by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com) Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh The stories: Slave Sale - BDSM (Argus): M/F, bond, slave, pierce The Virgin Sacrifice (Punchinello): M/F, F/F, bond, pulp, action-adventure Chattel Acres (Anonymous): M/F, slave, cow, pierce, brand, lact, cannib, snuff Ugly: A Monster's Story (Storyace): M/F, cons, wife Website Review: The Purple Herald Slave Sale - BDSM [A] Where posted: ASS When posted: 12/5/02 Author: Argus Poster: Pentland Poster address: pentland@bdsmbooks.com Type: M/F, bond, slave, pierce My, what's to do when you're a gorgeous 19-year-old who's been kidnapped and sold into sex slavery? Not much, except to squat with your hoo-hoo impaled on a lubricated metal rod as would-be purchasers diddle your clit. If you like the idea of naked women pumping themselves up and down like oversexed carousel ponies you'll like this story, which is actually an excerpt from a published BDSM novel. Though it didn't say anything new to me beyond that one memorable slave-pump scene, the excerpt did compare favorably with the amateur erotica I've read, though the voice was less distinct... not surprising because it is, after all, a commercial piece, and thereby trying to appeal to the broadest taste. Still worth a look, though. The Virgin Sacrifice [A-] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 2/4/03 Author: Punchinello Author address: punchinello@pulperotica.com Author website: http://www.pulperotica.com Type: M/F, F/F, bond, pulp, action-adventure Here's another girl-in-peril story, this one by an author who seems to be trying to create an entirely new genre: pulp erotica, a homage to action-adventure magazines of the 1930s and 40s spiced up with a modern sexual explicitness. I suspect the covers of the magazines (which, nine times out of ten, featured some screaming young woman bound and imperiled) have contributed more to such a revival than the contents, which are almost unreadable by today's standards. The author announces the setting in the beginning as "The Amazon jungle, 1937." Luscious young virgin Mary Elizabeth Austin has been captured by a neo-Aztec Indian tribe known as the Mazketl (though what they're doing in the Amazon Basin, thousands of miles away from their Central American origins, is unknown) and is about to be sacrificed to the gods. The whole story is, in fact, an extended description of this setup: the helplessness of the girl, the impassivity and cruelty of the natives, combine with the sexual aspects of the ritual itself to create a word-picture that struck me as an attempt to make one of those lurid covers come to life: >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> The beautiful young white girl stood silent beside the high priest Tiucuaan. Her nakedness before the crowd was now seemingly a natural condition, with only the faintest leftover sensation of indignity. She stood straight and tall, as she had been taught, her small breasts pointing proudly, her hands dangling casually at her sides instead of self-consciously covering the blonde thatch of womanly curls between her shapely thighs. The high priest made a long declaration in his native tongue, half praise and half prayer to Ixitotl, who had brought this foreign girl to them for use as a sacrifice. Then he took Mary by the shoulders and gently pressed her down to sit upon the altar. He turned her about and lay her down fully on the hard stone. She being several inches taller than the traditional virgin sacrifice, the girl's slender legs extended slightly over the end. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> She's rescued in the nick of time; this is no darkfic tale. I thought the story entertaining but not very engaging. I wouldn't read it again, for example, even though I'm inclined to like trashy pulp tales. I think the problem was it was too polite. It wasn't outrageous enough, or porny enough, or cruel enough, or ironic enough; it reminded less of an original story and more of fanfic, where the writer is embellishing on and going deeper into a particular scene from a favorite movie or TV show for a fellow fan, the consumer of such media. As such it's odd beast neither fowl nor fish. This is one story where a touch of self-conscious parody is needed, as in AFresh Sto's "XXPulp: Earth vs. Tyranno-X" (8/10/02 reviews). Nevertheless, the fantasy did do a fair evocation of a 1930s pulp story, if perhaps less purple (and less fun) than the original. Chattel Acres [A+] Where posted: ASS When posted: 1/15/99 Author: Anonymous Poster: Nobody Poster address: none@nowhere.com Type: M/F, slave, cow, pierce, brand, lact, cannib, snuff This story may the ultimate girl-in-peril one, and a candidate for the ultimate girl-as-livestock one as well. It's from way back when, 1999 to be precise, posted to ASS newsgroup only as an attached text file bearing the cryptic title "This group needs some stories." There's no author credit attached, which is a shame, as I'd really like to know who wrote it. Whoever it is, male or female, they have a detailed, fevered imagination for dystopian slave fiction rivaling that of Neuralmancer and Joshua Ryan: "Everyone's heard about Chattel Acres by now, but nobody knows the whole story. Well, almost nobody. You see, we did a real good job on the cleanup. If it hadn't been for that one damn news helicopter's footage, the story probably would never had made the news. But it did, and the Acres decided to make one last profit by taking advantage of the publicity to sell this story." And what a story it is... hapless female captives ruthlessly exploited for sex, snuff entertainment, human milk (through lactation drugs) and forced pregnancies for black market baby adoptions. New arrivals get the full slave treatment (collaring, branding -- both cheeks -- and nipple and labia piercings) and are milked with sadistic humor described as thus: >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> The milking was the most pleasurable part of a cow's life at Chattel Acres, and something the whole herd looked forward to each day. One reason was that by the time they got to the milking parlor, their tits were rather painfully swollen with milk. The other was that the act of having the milk sucked from them was pleasurable and with the vibrating shaft working in and out of their cunts, they often had orgasms just from being milked. We had found that contented females give more milk, which is something dairymen have known for centuries. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Later, when the slaves' usefulness is over, they give up their skin ("tanned and used to produce a leather which was the finest and most supple anywhere"), their edible flesh ("very special bratwurst made right there at the farm"), and even the hair from their heads, which is sold for wigs. At this point the story takes a serious turn into snuff and cannibalism as a human cow's last moments are vividly described and a decadent couple purchase another two cows to be heavily tortured, then barbecued together over a firepit. Not for everyone (and I hope not) but if you like your reading material to go to extremes, you can't get any more extreme than this. Ugly: A Monster's Story [A+] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 2/4/03 Author: Storyace Author address: storyace@hotmail.com Author website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/aceinthe_hole/www Type: M/F, cons, wife Here's a story told from the viewpoint of the monster, a human one, who sexually menaces a young human female. The narrator is a 'coyote' who smuggles illegal aliens into the United States for a hefty fee. An accident has left his face horribly scarred and cut off his right arm below the elbow. As such, he has no recourse but to visit prostitutes to have healthy sex life (if one can consider such a practice an element of a healthy sex life.) One day an educated couple and their children come to him wanting his services, and he is struck by the deep bonds of love between them. Finally acknowledging what he so deeply wants, he cuts a deal with them to have the wife serve as his "mistress" for four days: >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Her name was Elizabeth, and during those four days, she did try her best to honor her side of the bargain. But the reality is, love cannot be traded, love cannot be sold. Oh, sex is no problem. Sex can be performed, but love is more subtle, it does not bend to the will of man. Elizabeth cooked for me, she washed my clothes, she cleaned my house. She performed the duties of wife. Yes, all the duties of wife... I had resolved that by the end of the four days, at least she should not hate me. Love was out of the question, I'm not a fool. But if I could keep house with this good woman for four days, and at the end she should not hate me, that would be something. Something small perhaps, something insignificant to you readers, whole of body and mind. But for me, something to cherish. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> However, the brief affair has consequences he didn't foresee, and the story took off in another direction altogether, surprising me. Nothing is resolved in a 100% happy way, yet it's very true to life, where there are gradations of relative happiness rather than absolute. This was an excellent story, a bit rough in the first quarter (where there were more than a few grammar and spelling errors) yet it kept me reading. I was drawn into it by the author's total sympathy with his character, who is dignified, not self-pitying, yet very aware of what he lacks. I also liked the story's structure, which for a change was not linear (as the previous three stories were, and most of porn is) but jumped back and forth in time, comparing and contrasting; a little confusing to read at first, but very effective for the tale that was being told. Website Review: The Purple Herald URL: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/PurpleHerald/www Owner: The Purple Herald Date reviewed: 3/24/03 The Purple Herald has come up with a different twist on the writer-as-persona: he or she writes under a variety of different names, each nom-de-plume serving as the narrator of that story. At the same time an upper level identity known as the Purple Herald is maintained, whose creative goals are put forth in a manifesto on the site. It's a different way of writing fiction, one which allows the stories to be interconnected rather than a random agglomeration. Such connections consists of mentions to a mysterious double- penised god of lust, strange spells and compacts, and the color purple as a symbol of raw erotic desire. Despite the pseudo-scholastic tone of the manifesto I don't think it quite gels, seeming, to me at least, to be a partial ripoff of H.P. Lovecraft's Cthulhu mythos (especially in the mentions of ancient gods and the Purple Book, which is all too transparently globbed from the Necronomicon and other imaginary tomes) yet the fiction is very good, a thinking adult's erotica. The author first showed up on my radar with "Taste of What You Want" (7/10/02 reviews) which, though it left me unsatisfied, inspired me to explore other stories by the author, and on their site I've found several gems that might, in fat, stand as classics of their kind. In "The Stroke Club" (patterned after Fight Club?) the narrator visits a swingers' club set up, like so many swinger's clubs, in an average suburban household on the edge of town, run by average, if slightly different, managers (a family of hard-working Native Americans.) The purpose of the club is for two men and two women to loll around on barcaloungers masturbating in front of each other, all the while noting each others' reactions. No touching is permitted, but the voyeurism aspect is satisfying enough for the participants. It's a whopper of a idea, and is beautifully detailed, the author having an excellent touch at portraying the sexual aspects of everyday life and giving them a slight turn that pushes them towards the bizarre. In other stories, the bizarre takes on the comfy aspect of the normal and mundane. In "Crystal Impalement" a woman recently broken up with her sex-addict boyfriend receives a beautifully fashioned crystal dildo as parting gift from him. The total inappropriateness of the gift, and her disgust with him, isn't enough to prevent her from giving it a test run, and what follows is the most erotic description of a glass dildo I've seen: >>>>>> As unique as it was, it was already turning me on. It was exotic and a little naughty. Crystal shouldn't be used for things like this. Crystal was meant for wine glasses and delicate works of art, maybe that was what was arousing me. So sitting on my bed I spread my legs and placed the tip against my pussy. It felt warm and I prepared myself for a few moments by rubbing it against the lips of my sex. I enjoyed just looking at the thing as it was about to enter me. It had a faint purple tint to it that I hadn't noticed before and for some reason, that just made me more wet. I parted my lips with my fingers and slipped the tip of the dildo into me. Good God, it was so thick! My lips stretched to take it in and I shuddered as I kept pushing. The dildo expanded me from the inside, pushing and filling me with a liquid smoothness that plastic could never compete with. Slowly I kept pushing it inside me and it was a guilty satisfaction I felt when I had pushed all of it inside me. That's when I felt a pulse. It might have been from my stuffed pussy, clenching in tense delight. I didn't think it could have come from the crystal dildo because the thing was transparent and I didn't see any machinery inside it. All I know is that something pulsed once and the feeling had almost brought me to climax right there. My fingers couldn't hold the dildo anymore because most of it was inside me. What I could do though was push at it with my fingers, and my natural resistance would push it slightly back out. It was only a slight movement but God, it was wonderful. I looked down at my pushed apart lips and wondered what it would look like from down there. Just seeing the small end of the dildo emerging and then returning from my pussy was driving me crazy. I had never been filled so completely before and the crystal was as warm as flesh inside me. Little shocks were running through my body; exciting my nipples all the way down to my curling toes. >>>>> Whew! I'll be rereading that one for a long, long time. Later it comes out the dildo is magical, entrapping her, and events come to a head and end rather quickly. I usually rag on stories for being too long, but this is one case where more would have been better: three times as long, giving more setup, detail, and resolution to the tense situation between these two characters. The strongest of the three I read, in my opinion, was "What Bad Girls Want." Bad girls, the narrator informs us, "... glowed like brilliant stars to my eyes. These were whom I hunted. These were the women who searched for me when they tortured their husbands. These are the teases that leave their top buttons undone in the office. These are the women who refuse to swallow for their boyfriends but happily suck down the man next door." The narrator makes it his business to locate such nefarious females, seduce them, and humiliate them in a game of sexual one-upmanship to see which gender can be the most treacherous, the most conniving and erotically controlling. In the end the chosen bad girl victim is rode hard and put away wet, robbed, rendered half-naked, and cold-cocked (cold-cunted?) while the narrator goes about his merry way feeling he performed a public service. In spite of its brevity this was a very complex story, dwelling on sexual rage, sexual attraction to the taboo, and male-female sexual rivalry, all infused with a near- combustible erotic danger that made all of this a real turn- on. It annoyed me at first for its exaggerated notions of bad-girl behavior (that they systematically torture the male who "possesses" them by catting around with everyone else) until I realized the story was a sort of magic realism, a funhouse mirror that exaggerated yet reflected certain ugly truths. A very good, thought-provoking story that'll get an award this year. I liked all these stories a lot and rate them A+ for being memorable reads that will stick with me for a long time. To be frank, however, I don't quite think the overarching elements of the sex god and Purple Book were needed in any of them. The stories were strong enough to stand on their own merits, and though the mentions didn't really hurt, they did scream "HP Lovecraft pastiche!" at me every time I saw them. If this writer does intend to go pro -- and by the quality of the prose, he or she might -- I think they should be excised, as they weren't strong enough to merit a horror theme, or subtle enough to be throwaway mentions. For that matter, the different pseudonyms for each story aren't really needed either; they don't detract, but they add anything, either. They are also confusing for a reviewer such as myself (I credited the author's first story to its narrator and not the Purple Herald) a mistake that may be inconsequential now, but disastrous in the future when a publisher or editor comes a' knockin'. In sum, quirky, thought-provoking, and strongly recommended. Interface: A Content: A + Will I visit again: Yes. _______________________________________________________ Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: <ckought69@hotmail.com> | | FAQ: <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/faq.html> Moderator: <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Discuss this story and others in alt.sex.stories.d, look for subject {ASSD}| |Archive at <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org> Hosted by <http://www.asstr-mirror.org> | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+