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Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 1/18/03
Date: Sat, 18 Jan 2003 20:10:05 -0500
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The Annex Reviews, 1/18/03
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh 


This posting:


The Prince (Unknown): m/f, femdom, bondage, fantasy

Working at the Institute, Part 1 (Tom Wayne): M/f+, M/F,
    SF, exhib, mild D/s, bondage, oral, rim, anal, toys,
    latex

Megan's Fantasy (Laura Lynn Davis): M/F, F/F, BDSM,
    slave

Bed and Breakfast, Part 1 (Kelli Paine): m/f, M/F, 
    cons, inc




The Prince [B] 
Where found: Diana the Valkyrie
URL: www.thevalkyrie.com/stories/1misc6/prince.txt
Author: Unknown
Type: M/F, femdom, bondage, fantasy

Sometimes it's refreshing to read a story badly 
translated from another language, like this one. It 
gives you a different perspective on things... world 
culture, and all that.

I don't know what the original language was but I'd say 
it was Japanese going by the long series of adjectives 
before each noun and the anime-ish plot. The ruthless 
girl soldiers of Deviland have invaded Souland, and the 
boy soldiers of that state are helpless to stop them. In 
fact, they are conquered pretty easily and marched back 
to serve Deviland's Warrior Queen as sex slaves, except 
for the nameless crown prince, who is to serve her 
daughter, the Devil Princess. It's a very cute idea, and 
save for all the abuse inflicted upon the kid's cock and 
balls, an agreeable servitude. The fractured prose had a 
rhythmic feel ("In no time at his powerful male body 
spasmed with climax and he pumped his semen, his royal 
boy milk into the air in great spurting globules") and 
though repetition usually gets on my nerves I found it 
soothing here, almost poetic:

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
[The] prince knew that he would be the sex slave of the 
Devil Princess for the rest of his life, and serve his 
princess master with his strong chests muscles, his 
eight pecks, muscular thighs, once proud royal cock and 
manhood. He would be raped, whipped, spanked, tortured 
over and over again by his master, while the prince's 
cock, nipples and balls would be squeezed, twisted, 
kneaded often. The prince would be ordered to lick and 
suck the princess, use his tongue to serve the young 
princess, while his cock was being stroked and manhood 
being milked dry. His muscular smooth body would be kept 
shaved, with no pubic hair and armpit hair. And the 
prince, once a proud young handsome and muscular warrior 
boy, would be violated, degraded and humiliated over and 
over again by his new master, the Devil Princess, while 
he would be always nude except for his slave collar and 
cock cage, spread eagle, showing his muscular torso and 
vulnerable manhood to his master to admire when he was 
on his knees spread eagle. 
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Daffy, no? Especially the "eight pecks" (could the 
writer have meant "six-pack?")

Definitely a different flavor than a Western femdom 
story. Though I can't rate it too highly because of its 
many errors, I did get a little excited reading it.




Working at the Institute, Part 1 [A+] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 1/7/03 
Author: Tom Wayne 
Author address: kinkyhotrod@hotmail.com 
Type: M/f+, M/F, SF, exhib, mild D/s, bondage, oral, 
rim, anal, toys, latex

I always feel like I've accomplished something when I 
discover a new writer this good. He's written a story 
with a number of different sex acts, but the overall 
theme of it is (in the male narrator's words) "I loved 
being a slut. Most men did, but not everyone could admit 
it. I knew my place, and it was right here, being a sex 
object."

It is the 22nd century and the narrator of the story 
works at a high-tech sex education center where he gives 
erotic demonstrations to different classes of young 
people. The future world is well detailed and very real, 
the forced education having eradicated prostitution, 
venereal diseases, and sexual hang-ups. It's all pretty 
plausible, really, up until the time braless schoolgirls 
enter clad in tight latex shorts, thong panties, and 
slave collars for their lesson. Oh well, you can't have 
anything. But then they get their hands on the male demo 
model, and there's the greatest description of 
schoolgirl orgy I've ever read, twenty or so girls 
ravishing helpless male flesh with their lips, tongues, 
fingers, and pussies, the guy loving every minute of it 
even as they invade his ass. What is not to love?

But it doesn't stop there. The class's instructor Ms. 
Neubold has her way with the models after the class has 
left, trussing them up in bondo gear as she rides one 
and sucks the other... until she presses the secret 
button on her leather corset that finally lets them cum 
buckets. Very descriptive, and very hot. 

This story had something for everyone. My only nitpick 
is that while lesbianism was mentioned as a sexual 
alternative male homosexuality was not. An oversight?




Megan's Fantasy [A] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 1/10/02 
Author: Laura Davis 
Author address: ldavis4@hotmail.com 
Type: M/F, F/F, BDSM, slave

This author posted a lot of stories under this name in 
early 2002; all of them dealt with dark themes, and all 
were excellent, including the finely crafted short-short 
"Serial Killer."

This story begns with the narrator telling us her 
fantasy has always been to be a slave, and after a 
divorce, she assists her ex-husband's aid in making the 
dream come true. She's soon on her way to a Hong Kong 
clearing house for piercing and training, culminating in 
an auction with a twist: "Before the sale began I was 
put through my paces - I sucked cock, was fucked, and 
took one cock in my ass while sucking another.  Then, as 
a finale, I went down on Willow.  I had to bring her to 
orgasm within two minutes or I'd be strung up by my 
ankles and whipped to death.  There were ten seconds 
left when she came."

She winds up being sold to a wealthy Chinese 
businesswoman who wants a bodyguard/bedmate, and after a 
demonstration of her loyalty (which requires self-
mutilation) the narrator receives training in the 
defensive arts, and in the end is very happy with her 
new life of luxury.

There was enough stuff in here for a novel (or a couple 
of novels) but it was told in under 2,000 words, which 
was fine by me... all the shocking stuff was there 
without the lengthy slave-training passages stories of 
this sort  usually have. Unless you bring some unique 
twist on it -- like having your victim be a petite 
cheetah-girl in a space opera setting (like the furotica 
novel "Trouble's Story" was, which I'll be reviewing in 
a future posting) why bother re-inventing the wheel? 
There's only so many ways you can torment a slave.

More of a vignette than a fully fleshed story, but still 
well done, and the author's other work is recommended as 
well.




Bed and Breakfast (Part 1) [C] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 1/18/02 
Author: Kelli Paine 
Author address: kellipaine1979@hotmail.com
Type: m/f, M/F, cons, inc

I've noticed the number of stories on ASSM has been 
steadily dropping for the last year. It's maybe half to 
one third what it was back in 1997 when I started 
reviewing, which isn't surprising as so many writers 
have their own websites now or submit to specialty 
archives to showcase their work. There's been a 
corresponding rise in story quality as casual writers 
defect to self-posting archives and role-playing chat 
rooms. Happily, though, there are always enough 
atrocious stories around for a reviewer to spit her 
coffee across the room in a wheeze of pure vicious 
pleasure. 

This one was one of the family-that-has-sex-together-
stays-together ones. Not that I have a problem with 
incest per se, it's just that the setups are always so 
laughable. A well-off 32-year-old mother decides to get 
out of the computer business (it isn't explained why) by 
buying a bed and breakfast and pimping herself, and her 
teenage children, out to the B&B's customers (again it's 
not explained why she gets such a radical idea) a plan 
which the kids are very amenable to (once again, it's 
never explained why.) Mom even posts an extensive list 
of rates for sexual services: $100 buys an hour of her 
daughters' whipping and torture, but her own costs a 
mere $30. Sounds kinda low to me. And only $500 for a 
virgin deflowering? For shame! Virgins are worth much 
more these days. 

Actually the whole story was list-like in nature -- Mom 
is 5 feet 7 and 120 pounds, Daughter One, 5 feet 3, 110 
pounds, Daughter Two, 5 feet 5, 100 pounds, in which 
case, please feed her, as she's borderline anorexic. And 
though the author meant by these fact-nuggets for 
everything to seem logical, it wasn't: Daughter One is 
17 and Mom 32, which means Mom birthed her first child 
at age 15. While it's possible for young teen mothers to 
continue school, graduate, and get good jobs, it's not 
very likely if they have two other kids in close 
succession. And where is the kids' father in this 
scenario? 

In sum, silly, unbelievable, and not worth much even as 
a stroke story, because the writing was so flat and 
factual. In fact, the whole thing showed a severe lack 
of imagination.


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