Message-ID: <38801asstr$1034766602@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: <LadyCyrrh@aol.com> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <11b.185a965c.2ade4d4b@aol.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 X-ASSTR-Original-Date: Wed, 16 Oct 2002 01:04:11 EDT Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews 10/13/02 Date: Wed, 16 Oct 2002 07:10:02 -0400 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: <assm@asstr-mirror.org> Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: <URL:http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/38801> X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Story-Submission: <ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Moderator-ID: RuiJorge, gill-bates, IceAltar --part1_11b.185a965c.2ade4d4b_boundary Content-Type: text/plain; charset="US-ASCII" Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit --part1_11b.185a965c.2ade4d4b_boundary Content-Type: message/rfc822 Content-Disposition: inline Return-path: <LadyCyrrh@aol.com> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Full-name: Lady Cyrrh Message-ID: <94.2e3a6bca.2adb5e40@aol.com> Date: Sun, 13 Oct 2002 19:39:44 EDT Subject: The Annex Reviews 10/13/02 To: story-submit@asstr.com MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset="US-ASCII" Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-Mailer: AOL 3.0.1 for Mac sub 82 The Annex Reviews, 10/13/02 by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com) Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh I have a soft spot for superhero fiction. I have fond memories of the many stories I've enjoyed in the past, from Ann Douglas' "Ultrawoman and Mega Girl" to Richard Marnet's "The Bondage Perils of Supergirl" so I thought I'd revisit the genre for a mega-review of ten or so stories chosen from various websites I list on my site. Superheroerotica falls into four basic categories. Most common are what I call the Superhero(ine) Fallen type, where the character experiences intense sexual humiliation, degradation, or servitude the squeaky-clean comics code would never touch on. The superhero may or may not come back after the fall, but that's not really the point of the story -- what's important is how they react to it, which can make for fascinating reading. There's also the straightforward adventure story which includes sex as part of the plot, and the flat-out sex story which is little else (like the Green Lantern fic below) and the romantic story, which can be either slash or straight. There are variations and combinations of these, of course. As with the Lord of the Rings stories I reviewed a month ago I have a personal yardstick for what makes a good superhero sex story. First of all, the characters, if borrowed, must be in character, and use/discuss their superpowers in some way (otherwise, they could be anyone.) If there is sexual mayhem and abuse, it can be well-detailed but not gratuitous, and part of a coherent plot, with the reactions of the superheroes presented as true to their character. There must also be adventure of some sort (even if it's only a capture scenario) or a villain who must be stopped, with some relevant tension (will they or won't they get away?) even if the adventure ends badly. Costumes and capes are nice, but not necessary if the other elements are there. Give me all that, and I'll be a happy camper. These are the stories I chose for review. I read others (including Homer Vargas' excellent Wonder Woman pregnancy stories) but those reviews will have to wait for another day. What if: The New X-Men were X-Women? (Tyval): F/F, superhero, BDSM, lact, ws Green Lantern's Emerald Ecstasy, Parts 1 and 2 (Banky): M/M, superhero, cons, bond Bobby Drake Joins a Star Trek Slash List (Scorpio): M/M, comic, slash, humor, parody Bobby Drake Gets Feedback on his Fic (Scorpio): M/M, comic, slash, humor, parody Only Us (Fantasia Keantae): M/M, superhero, slash, rom Wonder Woman: The Conquest of Paradise (Knyght): M/F, F/F, superhero, mc A Matter of Time (Supergirl): M+/F, F/F, superhero, mc, oral The Legion of Super Slaves (Hellion666): M/F, F/F, superhero, mc, ncon, rape, BDSM The Capture of Star Warrior (The Flash): M/F, superhero, ncon, rape, lact Maddening Torture (Kabuki): M/M, superhero, slash, ncon American Dream (KrazyKat): M/F, superhero, mc, transform, lact What if: The New X-Men were X-Women? [D] Author: Tyval Where found: The Sportsman's Lair URL: http://www.superstories.net/sportsman/lsstor/xwmnplg.html Type: F/F, comic, D/s, lact, watersports As you can tell by the title, this story was what is known in movie circles as a "high concept." And as if that wasn't enough, the author goes on to say: "All female mutants were now enhanced in ways no ordinary woman could be. All female mutants would now have the ability to produce breast milk at will according to their bust size from the age of 8 up. In addition, the urine of all female mutants would now be delicious wine. All female mutants now had a life span of 300 years with youth for 299 of those years. All female mutants were also now nymphomaniacs with their own sex. They would now crave both lesbian sex and lesbian pain in their warped minds. The pain of the whip was now equal to the joy of sex to all female mutants on Earth." Sounds like mindless slutty fun to me. Oops... perhaps a bit too mindless... the author had no idea how to tell a story, even a parodic one, teetering between poorly written by-the- numbers sex scenes and long stretches of exposition which read like an outline for a story rather than the story itself, The heroines themselves were handled, uh, sensitively, sort of, especially in this scene before poor Professor Xavier's memorial service: _________________________________________________________ Storm let loose her own stream of pee into Jean's eager mouth. Jean drank as much of Storm's piss as she could, licking up the stray droplets as Storm's piss ended. Storm tasted her own pee as she deeply french- kissed Jean. "Please, Ororo, whip me some more. Please! It feels sooo goood!" Jean begged. "I'm sorry, Jean," Storm sadly shook her head. "We have to get ready for the funeral. Later we'll whip and fuck each other some more." _________________________________________________________ What a way to show respect for the old guy. In sum, unconvincing BDSM, laughable attempts at characterization, and a lack of slam-bang adventure. Not even the tit-squirting and watersport kinks were put to good use. Green Lantern's Emerald Ecstasy, Parts 1 and 2 [B-/C+] Author: Banky Where found: Men on the Net URL: http://www.menonthenet.com/eroticstories/es004122.html Type: M/M, superhero, cons, bond Superhero Green Lantern has been experiencing a resurgence of popularity lately, perhaps because of the animated Justice League series and the queer-friendly writers of his comic book (one recent storyline was about his gay teen assistant having a crush on him.) At any rate it's about time for GL to join the ranks of more established icons like Superman and Batman, who have long been the subjects of gay and slash fanfic. The story's plot is a simple one: the AI inside the XTC 6900 (a new jet) has, for unknown reasons, planted some erotic fantasies in GL's mind ("fantasies of hot, gorgeous twinks running through the locker room sword fighting and rubbing each other's muscular chests") so, after a shower, GL indulges in them, using his power ring to create an "Emerald Love Master" clone of himself, a revolving wheel the clone straps him into, and a "cat of night tales" for whipping purposes. As you can tell by the preceding element, the story wasn't proofread too well, with other terms... "love jewels" in particular... breaking the Christopher Street momentum the story got going, and the rampant epithetitis annoyed rather than entertained ("the love pole in his backdoor grew to twice its length and exploded its green goo all over Hal's insides.") Not a bad premise for a superhero sex story, but there wasn't much of a plot, and the absence of an evil villain or conflict requiring someone to save the day (this IS a comic superhero story, after all) was a big minus. Also, the writing left a lot to be desired -- less descriptions of muscles, and more action, please. Bobby Drake Joins a Star Trek Slash List [A] Bobby Drake Gets Feedback on his Fic [A] Author: Scorpio Where found: X-Men Slash URL: http://www.slashcity.org/~xmenslash/scorpio/bobbyslashlist.html; http://www.slashcity.org/~xmenslash/scorpio/bobbyfeedback.html Type: M/M, comic, slash, humor, parody This is what happens when slash writers spoof themselves and their medium. The X-men, as everyone knows, are a group of young-adult mutant superheroes living in Professor Xavier's roomy mansion, where they receive instruction in using their awesome powers for the good. Bobby Drake (Iceman) is one of them. As the title says, he joins a Star Trek slash mailing list (the main venue for slashers' story exchange, criticism, and feedback) to feed his latent homosexual fantasies. The banal, earnest story he posts, "Tom Paris has a Wet Dream" is hilarious in itself ("In his dream, the door to his bedroom slid open and a large, muscled dark figure walked in. The big man had short cropped dark hair and deep gentle eyes. An erotic design was tattooed along his left temple and his cooper skin gleamed. Tom moaned in delight at the beauty before him and threw back the blankets") and in the next story he receives an email about it from a poster who is revealed to be the hairy-chested Cajun stud Wolverine, a student at the same academy... though you wouldn't know that unless you have a passing acquaintance with the X-men fandom. A parody in a parody, you might say. What the hell, I thought it was funny. Only Us [B] Author: Fantasia Keantae Where found: X-men Slash URL: http://www.slashcity.org/~xmenslash/fantasia/onlyus.html Type: M/M, superhero, slash, rom Bobby Drake and the Xmen figure again in this slash story, which was of the romantic/sexual encounter type. I admit I'm not too fond of these. There's barely any plot, for one thing, and in slash in particular the overwrought drama becomes tubs of frothy, sweet-scented bubbles for the reader to wallow in: _________________________________________________________ Cannonball woke up the next morning. Funny. He hadn't even noticed he'd fall asleep. Then he remembered. Remy . . . He smelled the pillow and tears filled his eyes. He remembered the night they'd shared and then how he just left . . . to find Rogue. He had cried himself to sleep. It was only a one-night-stand. They had both agreed on that. But Sam just couldn't shake off the feeling of last night. His body pressed against Remiss, the Cajun buried deep inside of him and that incredible heat and pleasure. He sobbed quietly in his room. _________________________________________________________ That pretty much sets the tone for soap-opera angst wherein Cannonball, in anguish over Wolverine's rejection, tries to kill himself by jumping into a creek. He is rescued by fellow student Bobby, who proceeds to have some psyche-healing sex with him. The sex was OK (most slash sex is) but everything else was dull -- not badly written, just not distinctive. The characters could have been Gundam Wing ones for all I knew, their atrocious accents aside. No high-flying adventure, no superpowers demonstrated, not even any goddam lycra. Probably acceptable if you like slash and have a crush on these characters, but personally, I like more substance. The Legion of Super Slaves [C-] Author: Hellion666 Where found: The Grey Archive URL: http://www.greyarchive.com/Hellion2.html Type: M/F, superhero, ncon, rape, lact Often in these stories I wonder if the writers are really fans of the superhero(ines) in question, or secretly resent them. Ten female Legionnaires are on a routine mission when they are captured by Marlk Desaad ("an infamous torturer, actual kicked out of the Krund Empire for being too effective") who tells them they are to be broken and trained as his slaves. Not being a very imaginative sort, he goes about it in the most cliched of ways: _________________________________________________________ A voice boomed over the loud speaker, "Welcome back to the land of the living, Apparition. I will give you a chance to spare yourself some harm. Admit that you are a slave and a fuck toy. If you do so now you wont be harmed. Well, much." It chuckled. "Never! When Ultra Boy finds me, they'll have to pick you up in pieces." She yelled. "Have it your way, then." The voice said. In her anger Tinya failed to notice a vine that creped up to her leg. Tinya saw it to late, and it wrapped around her leg. She immediately tried to phase away, but couldn't. Another vine grabbed her other leg and pulled her into the bushes. She fought with all her might but the vines wouldn't give an inch. After a few minutes, Tinya saw what was pulling her towards it. It looked like a huge bulb, but with vines coming out of it. All of a sudden a voice came over the loud speaker. "Welcome, Ms. Wazzo. This is our little green house. That is a plant nicknamed the manplant in front of you. It survives on certain fluids, fluids that come from certain female races." Tinyas face went pale when she suddenly realized what he was referring to. "I see you understand what I mean. A few more things you should know. One, this is not the only plant here. Two, this plant has been without its food for months, so its very hungry. And lastly, I will send a tape of what happens here to everyone your family, but with a little editing and postdating. Everyone will think that you were a secret porn star." _________________________________________________________ Oops, guess the old boy forgot he told everyone the superheroines had been killed in a supernova a few paragraphs earlier. And it's loudspeaker, not loud speaker, dumbass. (The rest of the writing was atrocious as well.) Now, I can understand a comic fan's wanting to put their idols through sexual ordeals, even hellish ones, because that is subject matter the comics never touch on; even if, in the end, evil triumphs (as in the Knyght and Supergirl stories below) it's an interesting exercise to see how the superhero would react to his or her defeat. But sadly in too many stories the humiliation and abuse have no point at all -- the victims could be any hapless females, and I wonder if the writers are indulging in the male prerogative to take their favorite babes down a peg or two (or more than a peg) and render them submissive and docile as part of the natural order of things. Such was the case of this story, which made no excuses about its purpose ("Please give me some freakin suggestions! Should I turn Triad into a dildo? Have Dawnstar raped by a birdman? What? I have barely gotten any feed back on ideas. Come one, if people make just one suggestion on just one character it would make this thing go much faster.") And so I make no excuses about my assumption that the writer is male, and young, and hasn't had the life experiences to write a more nuanced fanfic, porny or otherwise. In short, gratuitous, poorly written, and ugly. The scary thing is that these stories are pretty common. A Matter of Time [A] Author: Supergirl Where found: The Grey Archive URL: http://www.greyarchive.com/dc/mayyer_time.htm Type: M+/F, F/F, superhero, mc, oral Black Canary and the Huntress team up for this adventure which pits them against mind-controlling villain H. R. Mesmer. He's been hypnotizing young woman and selling them as sex slaves, and BC and the Huntress don't fare much better. They're overpowered and hypnotized by high-tech earcuffs, after which Mesmer forces them to reveal their mundane identities; he then gives them post-hypnotic instructions intended to humiliate them, and they're soon having abandoned sex with anyone they meet, including each other. This was one of the best stories I've read because it did everything very well: there was sex, suspense, costumes and capes, action-adventure, and some kink (mind control). The superheroes were in character and did what superheroes are supposed to do: hunt down criminals and be captured... and although humiliating things happened to the gals, it was integrated into the plot and not so glaringly gratuitous as in the former story. Some humor was there, too, such as Black Canary's compulsion to have sex with a cop who stops her on the street: _________________________________________________________ With the quick moves only the Huntress could do, she whisked a hand out to his holster and grabbed his gun. He backed off a couple steps. "Now look, lady," he bargained. "This ain't gonna do either of us any good!" "Sure it is, handsome!" she laughed. "Drop your drawers!" She'd never once stopped fingering herself. "I can't do that, ma'am. Not out here in public." "Well, then I'm gonna have to shoot you, Officer", she squinted to get his name. "McClusky. That or tell Commissioner Gordon how you lost your gun!" That wouldn't look good on his record, McClusky knew. "Please, lady," he began. "Oh it's lady nowahhh! Oooohhhhhis it?" she laughed. "Drop your trousers, officer!" _________________________________________________________ Later there's a neat bondage scene where the two superheroines are tied back to back and forced to perform fellatio on three thugs apiece, with the instructions not to let any of them go soft. The problem is the thugs are standing some distance away, which means a suspenseful tug of war between the two as they attempt to position their mouths... a unique twist on the "superheroine in peril" formula. The story was so well written, in fact, I expected the two to be saved, perhaps by Batman and Robin, who make a cameo appearance, and continue their hapless adventures in another tale. But alas, the two remain in permanent thrall (you'll have to the story to find out how and why.) Though it's very clear that even in the end the writer has an affection for these characters, even as their downward spiral continues. The Capture of Star Warrior [A/A-] Author: The Flash Where found: Superheroine Central/Mr. X URL: http://www.superheroinecentral.com/mrx/xpage/stories/sw1.htm Type: M/F, superhero, ncon, rape, lact This story was another one of "Superheroine Fallen" type, but surprisingly sensitive to its victim's fate. Star Warrior is a well- regarded superheroine who is captured when she tries to rescue a young man from a group of muggers. Unfortunately she is captured in turn when they squirt her with a kryptonite-like potion ("lacitite") that causes her to lose her super powers. It also causes unbearable sexual stimulation, and she is bound, stripped, and teased unmercifully by the thugs until she reaches the villains' hideout, where she is to be unmasked by the villains Warlord and Dark Mistress with pics snapped for posterity. Tit-milking follows, the milk later ingested by Dark Mistress to give her the same powers -- a neat excuse for a lactation scene, instead of having the villains do it out of sadism. The story departed from the norm in that it was told from a sympathetic male POV -- that of the young man dragged along as a hostage. Though horrified and shocked, he doesn't hold back any details of the superheroine's demise (but does not revel in them.). It's a interesting, if melodramatic plot device, and provides a way to sidestep the cruelty associated with the genre ("Tears began to stream down the heroine's face. I can only imagine the pain she must have been feeling.") Said cruelty included the milking, which was a common element of superheroine stories on the site it came from, where it's also depicted in explicit cartoon panels. It's too common a theme to be random, so something archetypical must going on: a powerful woman's breasts, her most visible female attribute, sucked dry as part of her submission. Hmmm. In sum, a tale more emotionally gripping than the standard unmaking scenario; a shame it was left unfinished. Wonder Woman: The Conquest of Paradise [A+] Author: Knyght Where found: Superheroine Central/Mr. X URL: http://www.superheroinecentral.com/mrx/xpage/stories/wwconqu.txt Type: M/F, F/F, superhero, mc Of all the superheroines, Wonder Woman is the most fun to exploit. Not only is she the most powerful, but she is also the most beautiful, the most idealistic, the most popular, and... she's a virgin, as well! Consequently she is both idol and victim to many, the tale of her corruption being a most delicious challenge for a writer -- the depth of her fall from good roughly equal, in degree, to her original purity and righteousness. In this story, not only she is transformed into a willing sex slave under the villain's control, but her whole island of high- minded amazons is as well. BWAH-HAH-HA! And who isn't to say they didn't deserve it, for being such virginal goody-two-shoes? (OK, now the truth of the matter is that WW's creator, Charles Moulton -- a pseudonym for Dr. William Marston, a self-aggrandizing psychologist -- was hardly a straight-living guy himself. According to Les Daniels' "Wonder Woman: The Complete History" he was polyamorous, living with two women and having children by both of them, and keenly interested in mind control -- he invented the lie detector -- and believed bondage and helpless restraint was actually good for a person's psyche. If you want to know more read this fascinating book for yourself.) In this story The Warlock, the logical, mild-mannered villain of the piece, subdues Wonder Woman and her sister Drusilla (Wonder Girl) quite easily with their own magic lassos, and converts them through a mechanical dildo/nipple electrifying machine into sex slaves subservient to his will; as part of the conversion he also destroys their sense of namby-pamby goodness and decency. He then gives them devices to take back to Paradise Island to convert all the other amazons as well. But for a change the villain has thought to justify his actions: _________________________________________________________ "Now tell me, Wonder Girl, how many times have you used your lasso on people the same way I'm using it now." "Gosh, hundreds of times!" the memories of her triumphant adventures came rushing back to her, allowing her to cast off some of her fear and apprehension. "And you sister, Wonder Woman, how many times has she used hers?" "Oh, even more! Probably thousands!" "Yes, I'm sure. So it stands to reason that you and your sister have performed this action upon thousands of different people." "Yes, that's true." "Now tell me, Wonder Girl, do you enjoy being ordered in such a fashion?" "Wha." a confused look on her face answered his question. "Do you like what's happening Now? Do you enjoy being probed and questioned this way?" "No!" she finally answered emphatically. "Not at all!" "It feels like a violation, doesn't it? It feels like your mind and spirit are open to the manipulation and control of another." "Yes, it does." she answered. "Like I'm being." "Like you're being raped?" "Yes! That's it," she beamed, her confused mind latching on to the lasso's commanded truth. "It's like you're taking my mind away without my letting you." "Indeed. Then every time you or Wonder Woman has used your lassos, you have committed a form of rape." She stopped, suddenly, the words ringing through her mind. "But we only used it on bad people." "IN YOUR OPINION, they were bad." _________________________________________________________ After many hours of endless orgasms in the machine Wonder Woman reacts thusly when she is released: _________________________________________________________ [The Warlock] pointed at a glowing platform in the center of the room. A black leather uniform hung there, suspended to match her perfect dimensions. Like Drusilla's, it was a mockery of her old strapless costume. Black boots, black gloves and a black tiara hung in their appropriate positions, a black leather bikini bottom covering the crotch. A strapless brassiere designed to look like an eagle in flight covered the chest, leaving just enough to the imagination to arouse the onlooker. Diana shuddered and stared at her sister. Submit, as she did? become a willess agent of evil? Never! Yet at the same time, an unknown longing rose from the depth of her soul. To be stimulated as she had... to taste the pleasures that came with such slavery... and that new uniform, for all its twisted mockery, seemed strangely. arousing. _________________________________________________________ The end result is the fall from grace isn't so bad after all; at least the gals know what all the man-woman fuss is about now. An excellent story, one of the best Wonder Woman ones I've read. Maddening Torture [B+] Author: Kabuki Where found: Batman Slash URL: http://www.geocities.com/blairsdream/batslash/maddeningtorture.html Type: M/M, superhero, slash, ncon In slash, it's the male superheroes who experience the abuse. Batman is captured by the Joker in this story, where he is forced to sexually service the villain as Barbara Gordon is being held hostage on the other side of town; if he refuses, Harley Quinn will off her with a guillotine. The story starts off with a bang as the insane Joker teases and torments his captive: _________________________________________________________ All Bruce could do was endure the torment until Dick or Tim could discover where Harley was hiding, but by then the Joker would have gotten what he wanted. He would have seen his arch-enemy grovel at his feet in the throes of a most human and base physical need. For at least three hours, by Bruce's internal clock, the torment upon his body had been going on. First with a variety of cheap plastic toys designed to humiliate and penetrate. Then large and cumbersome vibrating devices had been shoved crudely into his body, eliciting pain and pleasure at once though they did not delve too deep. For a man who kept his emotions and sexual desired under wraps, it was too much to bear. _________________________________________________________ The rest of the story was powerful but confusingly written, events presented out of sequence with the POV fluttering back and forth with no warning. On the plus side, however, the writer did a good, if melodramatic, job in describing the scenario, especially the Joker's dialogue ("You've been taken before, have you? So much for the clean and pure hero-type. Was it Super-Ham perhaps, or is that why you keep the kiddies around?") and the overall cruelty of it was deliciously subversive, as a slash writer would put it. Altogether it would have been a very nice character humiliation study, but the writer muddied the water by revealing to us (the readers) that Batman has been homosexually inclined all along, and has been fooling around with Robin -- the two are not strangers to D/s games. Neither is Batman a stranger to humiliation -- in fact, he comes to enjoy the Joker's attentions in a sick way. So hey, being butt-raped by a psycho isn't so bad, really! I've encountered these excuses many times in slash stories and I'm not sure why the writers feel obligated to put them in. I can only guess they might feel bad about torturing their heroes, so they insert the caveat that they (their bodies and "dark sides," if not their intellects) secretly enjoy it. But the story was deliciously mean-spirited as it stood, with Batman's sexuality left hetero, or possibly bi... and while I might believe Batman and Robin have a thing (who doesn't?) I can't see Batman reveling in his own humiliation. He takes his crimefighting career too seriously for that. If he wanted to be sexually humiliated, he'd go to a professional -- he has the megabucks of Bruce Wayne, after all. American Dream [A+] Author: KrazyKat Where found: Superstories URL: http://www.superstories.net/stoy/Author/KrazyKat.htm Type: M/F, superhero, mc, transform, lact This story features the superheroine team of Hi-Tech, China Doll, and Piktur Perfekt, original creations of the writer; they have other adventures besides this one. They are unusual in that they aren't quite heroes, or villains; they seem to be mercenaries who get into amusing scrapes, always with mischievous sexual overtones, more Playboy cartoon than Marvel comic. In this story they have been contracted by the Geek, an amusing teenage villain who is just what his name says, to take down superhero Captain America, so they hook Cap into a virtual reality machine which puts him through a number of strange, dreamlike scenarios, including being a seedy drunk in a ghetto flophouse. (The writer shows a great knowledge of the facts of the comics multiverse.) To subdue Cap further they turn him into a baby, but find the Geek has trapped them in the machine and has turned the tables on them. Things end poorly for the gals, with one transformed into a wind-up doll and the other a happy naked housewife and sex slave to The Geek: _________________________________________________________ Her husband... the boy... he was VERY good-looking. Dreamy creamy slightly chapped lips, beautiful skinny body with just a hint of a couch- potato potbelly, lovely pale skin, and dark circles under his eyes. A hint of dandruff in his hair. Everything... everything... she wanted in a man. In a husband. Was he her husband? Hi-Tech closed her eyes and tried to concentrate... Her brain seemed to be moving in slow motion, but she was not really alarmed. It was a pleasant feeling. She felt like honey dripping from a spoon, shiny and slow and golden. The martini sparkled. "Some deep, instinctual part of your brain is still resisting," the boy explained. "It's pushing against the false reality. Seeing me, for instance, that caused a surge of resistance. But I had expected that. I factored it into the equation. I factored EVERYTHING into the equation. I'm a genius, you see." She remembered something about her husband. Her husband was a genius. He was amazing and strong and smart and sexy. He was the love of her life. She couldn't help but smile. "You are such a FINE piece of ass," he explained, as he walked around her again. "You and your two teammates are just the most AWESOME babes around. Honestly. I'm not just saying that, you know. You three are sexier than all those other super nobodies combined. I've wanted to add you to my collection for SO long. I just needed the right way to do it. And after I invented my virtual reality transmogrifier, well, I KNEW you were going to be mine." _________________________________________________________ This was a very funny (and hot, if you're into mind control) passage that may be the "American Dream" of the story's title, at least for a class of young male readers of comic books. The two gals are hopelessly enslaved (what happened to the third?) but that's all part of the fun of the story. No overt sex, but lots of excellent mind control scenes and a truly creative imagination. _____________________________________________________________ Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh --part1_11b.185a965c.2ade4d4b_boundary-- -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: <ckought69@hotmail.com> | | FAQ: <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/faq.html> Moderator: <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Discuss this story and others in alt.sex.stories.d, look for subject {ASSD}| |Archive at <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org> Hosted by <http://www.asstr-mirror.org> | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+