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The Annex Reviews, 9/8/02
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh
The stories:
F*U*C*K Radio (Writerzblocked): F/F mc, humor
Panic Attack (Dryad): M/F, rom
Freedom in the New World (Bradley Stoke): M/F, nc, interr, anal, viol,
hist
Website Review: Gromet's Self Bondage, Mummification, and Latex Plaza
Panic Attack [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 8/20/02
Author: Dryad
Author address: gbbjg@NOSPAM.yahoo.com
Author website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Dryad/www
Type: M/F rom, oral
A married woman is feeling overwhelmed by the events of everyday life
(picking up the kids from daycare, worrying about losing her job, etc.)
and is running around frantically looking for her car keys. Her
husband suggests she blow off her meeting and slow down a bit. To
reinforce the suggestion he begins to undress her and forces her to take
a candlelit bath to the dulcet strains of Enya. Oral sex on his part follows.
This was a quick, romantic tale, though somewhat misrepresented as the
"panic attack" of the title was really no more than a workaday
conniption fit. I've seen real panic attacks, and they ain't pretty; to
bring a loved one out of one by using oral sex would have been a real
challenge for the writer, and made a more unusual and distinctive story.
This was, in fact, what I was expecting to see, though the interlude was
pleasant enough. Nice, but not really distinctive.
F*U*C*K Radio [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 7/31/02
Author: Writerzblocked
Author address: writerzblocked@aol.com
Type: F/F, mc, humor
If the above story might have read too blandly, this story goes in the
opposite direction, using one writer's very distinctive voice, characters,
and settings. The narrator is a DA who's best friends with an ex-hippy
lawyer named Bubbles who has a flair for using mind control techniques
on her clients, or those who cross her -- not maliciously, but
mischievously. The story concerns what happens when they decide to
take down a local right-wing radio personality in a spectacular way,
Bubbles calling in and using her voice to force Mrs. Limbaugh to have
an on-the-air orgasm.
Distinctive, no? But that distinctiveness came with a swamp of clever
details and snappy dialogue, so many offhand smirks and witty repartees,
in fact, that I found myself getting befuddled. Granted, the characters
were part of another story series where their backgrounds and powers
would have been explained. But even considering that, the story wasn't
very user-friendly; I felt more like I was eavesdropping on the author,
not invited into the story circle. And though the story concerned sex and
sexual mind control it really wasn't very sexy -- the plot was more like
an extended prank pulled by a Ken Kesey counterculture sort. I found
myself actually feeling sorry for the victim and questioning the
characters' maturity, something one usually doesn't do when reading
erotic fiction of a fantastic nature. Also, the payoff -- the victim's
humiliation -- was too brief and undetailed for all the buildup it got
beforehand.
In sum, I'd say this was an amusing satire about unusual characters, but
not really erotic mind control, despite the title.
Freedom in the New World [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 8/23/02
Author: Bradley Stoke
Author address: bradley_stoke@hushmail.com
Author website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Bradley_Stoke/www
Type: M/F, nc, interr, anal, viol, hist
Lovely Thasra is a slave belonging to the boorish Enoch Evans, who
alternately lectures his slaves about American democracy and bangs the
hell out of them. It is early in the 19th century, and slavery is still legal
in the states. Thasra submits to her master's attentions while reflecting
on their irony:
____________________________________________________________
"You should all consider yourselves lucky to live in the land of
Freedom and Democracy," he would sometimes tell his slaves,
regarding them in their well-worn ragged clothes; their hands and feet
rough from labour in the house and in his extensive farm, and all
struggling to comprehend a language which wasn't their own and of
which they had differing levels of fluency. Thasra was in the awkward
position of sharing with the other slaves no other language than that of
her white devil masters with which to communicate. But she
understood enough to realise that the freedom and liberty of which
Enoch was so proud did not extend to those who so recently had been
free in another continent where white men were rare and it was never
as cold in the dead of the American winter.
____________________________________________________________
Eventually she does something about it.
I'm always a sucker for a historical sex tale, though this wasn't so much a
sex story as a character study, and, as the author explains, a rumination
on American freedoms. Still, the sex was handled well, and if it wasn't
exactly arousing (and I hope no one gets aroused by a young black
woman's humiliation) it was interesting to read and felt true to life -- I
felt like I was present in the scene and feeling all the protagonist did,
the benchmark of any good story.
I do think, though, that it could have used more development. It read like
it had been written quickly in the heat of the moment without much
research, and polished later. For example, at one point the slave thinks
about the zebra, antelope, and lions of her village grasslands, which
implies East Africa; yet most of the New World/Old World slave trade took
place on Africa's western coast. Unless the slave coffle had a trek of
some months, this doesn't seen possible to me. Of course, I'm no history
expert, but it was one of those things that just stood out.
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Website Review: Gromet's Self Bondage, Mummification, and Latex Plaza
Address: http://grometsplaza.web1000.com
Owner: Gromet
Reviewed: 9/4/02
There are bondage stories, and then there are bondage stories, as far
different from scarves-and-bedposts tie-me-ups as Rottweillers are from
toy poodles. I don't mean just leather corsets and whipping frames. I'm
talking about padlocked rubber catsuits, vacuum-pumped body bags, and
full-body mummification. Gromet, the creator of this site, has put
together a prime selection of such stories, all of them free and updated
weekly.
I suppose some of you are now scratching your heads wondering why
anyone would want to mummify, or be mummified by, someone else. It is
an unusual fetish, even taking into account the mummy aspect is more
figurative than literal. But there are many ways to make a human
mummy. Rubber, latex, saran wrap, bandages, duct tape, all suffice, as
long as the person is immobilized completely by having their limbs
pressed tightly against their body so that the blood throbs through their
veins; in such an immobilized, suspended state the mummified one finds
sexual ecstasy. The stories go about this end in a number of ways.
Sometimes the plot concerns revenge, or people experimenting with
their home grown techniques. Sometimes a machine is used, with or
without a high tech or science fiction setting. A few stories had mythic
Egyptian tones, or involved fantasy characters or aliens.
For my review I picked eleven stories from the mummification and latex
sections, which together held about two hundred stories. The quality
ranged from very good to eh, not so good. Some writers made the
fantastic nature of their bondage setups seem real and convincing;
others did not. In the poorly written "The Slave Trial" by Matt L., for
example, three gorgeous slaves vie, through being as submissive as
possible (which meant doing nothing) to win a place as their Master's
"permanent latex bondage submissive" locked in a rubber sheet on a
strapped table -- a dubious honor, if you ask me. Silliness also reigned in
RbrBill's "Alien Rubber" in which the whole human race is transformed,
by aliens into rubber bondage slaves, not so much Ricky Horror as
Rocky Horrible. But Fringe's delightful "The Rubberisation of
ElectraWoman and DynaGirl" took the silliness and turned it into camp,
with the two eternally perky heroines threatened by "Rubber Queen"
and her community of bondage aficionados. Unfortunately, after an
excellent start, it was left unfinished, ending at the point where the
"rubberisation" would begin.
Other stories were quite serious, reaching a level of intensity and
imagination rivaling that in regular bondage fiction. Perhaps the most
intense of these was Toran's "Do You Want to Continue?" written as a sort
of love letter from Toran, one of the site's principle writers (and a dom
male) to another writer, Jenny (a sub female.) The idealized affair takes
the two from a polyamorous Master/slave relationship with two other
submissives to a fulfillment of Jenny's most extreme fantasy, that of
being mummified and buried alive in a faux-Egyptian tomb, which Toran
is only too happy to grant her. The story strains its plausibility in places
(such as the contact lens/cameras glued to the victim's eyes so she can
access live action views of her entombment) but the overall effect is
dark, majestic, and deliciously cruel, an A+ work of fiction in any genre:
____________________________________________________________
Jenny tells herself that this is what she wants. Enjoy it. Savor it. It's
at
this moment, as she focuses on the feed from the tiny camera inside with
her the one that shows her mummified body rigidly trapped in her
sarcophagus, a bound girl for which there is now no escape at this
moment the vibrator comes to life with the first of its damnable bursts of
power. She feels the first uncontrollable ripple of giddy warmth race
through her body and the feeling builds and the fear that is racing right
along with the warmth only adds fuel to the fire. Forever she could be
here forever. Fucking forever... The massive hoist is attached to the
entire sarcophagus now and with barely a tug, it lifts the heavy wooden
tomb a few feet. The floor underneath the sarcophagus trembles then
and slides away to reveal a huge and gaping black hole. Inside the
sarcophagus, sealed in by elaborate locking mechanisms that now not
even the hoist could rip the top off, Jenny doesn't feel any movement as
she's lowered into the black darkness. He's going to bury her!
____________________________________________________________
A little while later she's sealed in for good, with cement. But her lover
still gives her a choice:
____________________________________________________________
"Do you want to continue?" There is already hundreds of pounds of
cement, a heavy wooden coffin, six layers of linen and sealing compound
wrapped around her. She's sealed in. Totally sealed in. But he can still
stop it. She knows it. He's surely thought of how to get her out,
otherwise he wouldn't ask her, now, when she's making the last decision.
She has to say no. She has to put a stop to this right fucking now because
this is real, this is no turning back.
She moans her answer. "Yes."
The vibrator kicks in just as the cement fills the pit completely, and its
panic and fear and arousal and everything that she's ever dreamed about
and fantasized about and when she sees Teri, naked, fighting furiously
against the chains that bind her, being attached to the hoist and when
she hears Toran's voice in her ears telling her that every mummified
queen has her pets sealed in with her forever and Teri surely qualified
as her closest pet, and when she sees Teri, crying around her thick gag,
being lowered into the still liquid cement until only bubbles, lazily
popping at the surface shows she's ever existed the biggest hardest
longest orgasm erupts from deep inside Jenny and as she's powerless to
stop anything now, it rolls through her and sends her into satisfied
blackness.
____________________________________________________________
Probably the quintessential mummy story, and one of the best pieces of
gothic erotica I've read. Poe would be pleased.
Most of the stories, however, had less dom-sub interaction. I found self-
bondage machines figured strongly in a lot of them, ranging from
virtual reality units that fulfill one's every fantasy to coin-operated
amusement machines that offer unspeakable delights. The genre
inspires far more of these than other I've read, besides ASFR. In "The
Factory" by Tr_Veller, an amateur spy gets sucked into a machine that
dresses and poses life-sized dolls in rubber fetish gear, with the same
results for herself. In "Virtual Bondage" by Russ, the machine is a
virtual reality headset, causing the user to experience what it's like a for
a fly to be trapped in a spider's web; the writing here was especially
gripping. XVX'S "Bound to Happen" features a self-mummification device
that binds its victims in decorative wrappings that simulate those of
nature: butterfly chrysalis, bat, mermaid, the process coordinated with
pieces of classical music. As in so many of these stories the device
malfunctions or works too well, treating its goth-chick victim to a three-
day orgy of mummification, after which both it, and her, are
repossessed. Silly or stimulating? You decide. In Jenny's "The
Entertainment Center" the device is more sinister: it literally mummifies
its victim alive, Egyptian-style, which includes having your brains
sucked out of your nose by a straw. Definitely not for the squeamish.
The other strong theme of these stories is that of revenge. In RubberH's
"The Effects of Downsizing" a surly, unemployed husband becomes a
rubberized pleasure slave when his wife gets fed up with him; in "The
Widows' Surprise" by Glassmummy a gold-digging widow is mummified
and placed in public with a sign around her neck denoting her misdeeds
(not much of a revenge considering her face is covered.) "The Sentence"
by Filador50 has a more extreme punishment: the male victim is
mummified alive and plastered into a coffin, the story going into
fetishistic levels of detail about it; no two stories had exactly the same
process, which made the long passages interesting, if not exactly
arousing, to me. This story also utilized mythic elements of wetwi,
ancient Egyptian specialists in making mummies, though they didn't
disembowel him and put his guts in a jar, as the real <i>wetwi</i> did.
(There were just as many male mummy victims in these stories as female
ones.)
<P>
But the best revenge story for my money was "Emily's Folly" by Tom. Tom
was a particularly sadistic writer whose stories have no happy endings,
though the victims do get what they deserve, or what the author thinks
they deserve. Poor Emily is after Tom's job and pays the price when he
drugs her and sticks her in a pallet wrapping machine:
____________________________________________________________
Now John, controlling the winch, moved her up and into the machine.
What was she going to do if it covered her nose? Surely she would
suffocate. She was lowered down towards the floor and then jerked to a
stop. John with a look of pure malevolence and pleasure flicked the red
switch and the machine began to wrap. It started at the top with her feet
and pulled them snug together as the wrap was wound round and round
Emilys squirming legs. The wrap was overlapping every time creating
an incredibly tight shrink wrapped package. Emily could feel her legs
being constricted together as they were being forced into each other.
The machine reached her thighs and bottom and squeezing her ass into a
pert peach and continued its journey enslaving her tied hands and
stomach. Emily was being mummified in the black shiny wrap and there
was nothing she could do about it. John was stood there with his erection
plainly showing through his trousers still glaring at the marvelous
spectacle before him.
The machine encircled Emily's chest and breasts with hundreds of
metres of wrap and carried on towards her neck and face. She could not
even wriggle through the numerous layers and she truly though she
would die. The wrap connected with the neck and tightly bound it stiff
but left her enough room so she could breathe.
That's not going to help once my nose is covered thought Emily darkly.
Then her vision and air supply were completely cut off and she was
thrust into darkness. She could feel her head being securely bound.
Then there was a pause while the machine made ready to wrap her
vertically. Then it began again but this time it only took 20 seconds. She
felt her body being lifted out of the machine and laid out on the floor.
Almost at the point of blacking out from lack of oxygen and being hung
upside down for so long she was almost exultant with joy when John
carefully opened the wrap at her nose so she could breathe.
"How do you like that," laughed John while he stood over her like a
hunter who has caught his prey.
____________________________________________________________
Don't try this at home, folks! I mean it.
This story ends when Tom hoists his mummy into the rafters and leaves
her there: "With a last lingering look at the shadows far above him he
turned of the lights and headed home. Emily never did get to ring her
Mum that weekend, or ever again for that matter."
Strong stuff, this.
The site was for the most part clear of annoying ads, and well organized,
if garish (lots of bright reds and blues) and easy to navigate. In addition
to the mummy archive and latex archives there were self-bondage,
vacuum pump (with warnings), regular bondage, and guest archives,
each searchable by author and title. There were also sections on bondage
techniques ("The Beginner's Guide to Clingfilming"), reader
correspondence, the experiences of Gromet's "other half" regarding her
SO's startling hobby, and a writers' guide. There were also lots of mummy
photos, though I couldn't tell if there were real people in there or not.
It's clear the site's creator is doing all of this as a labor of love for his
community.
All in all, the site is a good place to get your mummy fix in a friendly
fashion and perhaps pick up some pointers along the way.
Interface: B+
Content: A+ to C+
Will I visit again: Yes.
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Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com
Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh
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