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{ASSD}REVIEW - NEXUSWILSON 5
All the reviews in this file may be used by the authors, their
webmasters or other agents in order to promote the relevant story
provided that the credit is given to me using the 4 lines at the end
of this file. Please don't slate the spelling, I just chuck these
together and mail them off to the writers, who nearly all reply 'cos
no-one else does. Stories are for reading pleasure so it matters.
These are for info and discussion so it doesn't, and I've got better
things to do than spell checking this stuff. If you find mistakes
in my stories, that's a different matter!
Fair Suck of the Sausage
From: drspin@newsguy.com
http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/DrSpin/www/
Once again Dr Spin gets plucked from the pile and this one is a
brilliant continuation of the genre, although with not too much sex
content. More Phillip Marlowe really, and not bad for it either.
Really needs to be read after the previous Dyson stories to be fully
appreciated. See them at the page link above. The drugged beads are
great but their importance to the story line destroys the eroticism.
Read to enjoy, not for sexual gratification!
Overall a great story by ASSM standards, but below par on sex
content by same standards.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar *********
Storyline **********
Originality *********
Wood Factor **
Miss Gia gets an "A" in RaPE!
From: mrdouble@mrdouble.com, mrdouble@mindspring.com, or
mrdouble@ix.netcom.com
http://www.mrdouble.com
This is a story of racially motivated rape. The raped white woman
is written as a strangely naive and accepting type and the style
attempts to be arty by moving around in time. However this does not
quite come off and just gives the impression of moving around in a
somewhat jumbled kind of way. Apart from that it's quite well done.
A rather more ordered structure would do it a power of good. The
description of what happens to her boyfriend is a little vague also.
Overall one of the authors better offerings.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *******
Style ****
Spelling/Grammar *****
Storyline *****
Originality ******
Wood Factor *******
THE GOOD NEIGHBOUR by Delta.
From: delta @ nym . alias . net
Whatever next, a story with a moral on ASSM.
A very good one too (story and moral(Don't kill yourself)).
A lady employs unusual methods to stop a suicide. One is tempted to
wonder if sitting in view of bored housewives waving a toy gun
around and looking a bit melancholy would be an effective pulling
strategy? This story is good enough for hard publication but
certainly not stroke material. If all Delta's work is of this
calibre (pun) then he really should contemplate writing for income.
The actual sex action is minimal but the story quality more than
makes up for it.
Overall a great little story
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment ********
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar *********
Storyline ********
Originality *********
Wood Factor *****
THE EYE OF THE BAD GIRLS
From: MichaelD38@aol.com
This story is well above average in every respect. The sex is very
erotic with recourse to unusual fetishes or acts, the originality is
all in the story-line. My only complaint is that the girls anguish
at visiting a fortune teller is a bit overdone and irrelevant. One
is left wondering what might happen if the 2 girls go head to head
for the boys attention both with a magic eye. Wishing for a sequel
is always a good cue for a high reading enjoyment score!
Overall a classy story with no real weak points.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *******
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar ********
Storyline ******
Originality ********
Wood Factor *******
Vicky Takes the Delivery
From: csbadger@hotmail.com
Pure stroke with no storyline whatsoever. man shags a slut wife up
the arse and gets licked clean, that's all there is to it.
Paragraphs are a bit overused. Having said that the description of
the act is really pretty good and you certainly get the feel for the
sluttiness of the woman and how the writer is trying to put her
across. The man is almost an irrelevance.
Overall a nice description of a person commiting an act on another,
but not much else.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment ****
Style ****
Spelling/Grammar *******
Storyline **
Originality **
Wood Factor ****
From: orestes007@hotmail.com
www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Orestes
missing t - find & replace "hat"
A fantastic story of a young womans dive down into a self inflicted
world of humiliation. The description of her need to expose and
humiliate herself is superb. Her feelings of confusion and the inner
drive that makes her continue with her ridiculously risky actions
come across brilliantly. There is a slight anomaly at the start
where she's been in every newsagent in town but has only just
arrived for her 1st class. The writer captures all the feelings I
had the first time I went to a sex shop and then takes it further.
This is exhibitionism taken to an extreme, & I loved it. The actual
sex action is minimal but the exhib/sub fetish descriptiveness more
than makes up for it.
Overall a great insight into the world of an unusual woman
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar *********
Storyline *******
Originality *********
Wood Factor *******
The $4500 Bondage Slut
From: ArthurGThomas@aol.com
At least these 4 stupid errors to spoil what is otherwise right up
to the usual standard.
"Ok, buy I want a night"
"I pored myself a glass "
"a sot on her body"
"It had to clamps"
Much harder subject matter than previously with enough uncaring
violence to lower the last rating for me at least, but it's not just
for the hell of it, it's all part of the excellent story. You really
do get the feeling that he might just be recounting something he
really did do! The safe ring is a brilliantly simple idea that
rarely makes it into ASSM and I can't recall ever seeing it as a
central theme. I love this idea so much I just can't wait for the
next one, and am even toying with the idea of writing something
myself along the same lines!
Overall another piece of AGT brilliance.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style *********
Spelling/Grammar ********
Storyline **********
Originality *********
Wood Factor *******
Little Tammy's Sleepover (ggg,preteen)
From: msnerdwax@yahoo.com
These 'learning about life' stories are always a bit of a favourite
of mine, particularly the ones that are recolections of true
experiences, although only for the social psychology side of things.
This is quite obviously not one such, but it's still quite good.
Unfortunately the one boy mentioned somehow gets his name changed to
Tammy, probably the result of an over exhuberent spell check. The
sex moves on at a reasonably believable pace as one experienced 10yo
teaches her friends all she knows. By the end she has moved a lot
further than is believable for the age group. The writer warns -
"Pre-teen sex in reality is very harmful and should be avoided..".
Well I managed to avoid it without even trying, and look how I've
ended up!
Overall a story that would benefit from a quick re-write to make the
girls older (and please don't think I'm just saying that because I
can't do 10yos).
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment ******
Style *****
Spelling/Grammar *****
Storyline ******
Originality *****
Wood Factor ******(using the mental age change method!)
My Day with Mistress and Her Friend
(FF/m, B/D, D/s, spank, anal, oral)
From: p8730@aol.com
This story is one of the best pieces of Msub stroke work I've read.
Unfortunately the writers grammar and spelling are not the best but
it is not really serious enough to detract much from the reading
enjoyment. The story does not contain anything particularly
outstanding in the originality stakes but the writing style flows
quite nicely, the action progressing in an orderly, building manner
to keep the interest throughout.
Overall a great M-sub fantasy.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style *******
Spelling/Grammar *****
Storyline *******
Originality ******
Wood Factor *********
Lou's Girl (corrected and complete) (lesbian, FF)
From: katherinet_@hotmail.com
The story of an old dykes conquest of a younger woman, this is a
really well written piece and, unusually, very erotic with it. The
woman plays her hand with a mastery that seems to surprise her and
certainly attracted my admiration. The writer draws you into the
plot so well you almost feel like an observer to a real event. The
sex is also quite 'real' and as such is fairly normal, nothing more
than a strap on.
Overall a rare combination of writing skill and eroticism.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar *********
Storyline ********
Originality *****
Wood Factor ********
This review is by nexuswilson@hotmail.com
if you would like a free read, the chance to get your own back, or
to collaborate with him in his writing project then the reviewers
stories and project details are on his site at
www.pornoz.com/alterotica
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