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{ASSD}REVIEW - NEXUSWILSON 5
All the reviews in this file may be used by the authors, their webmasters or other
agents in order to promote the relevant story provided that the credit is given to
me using the 4 lines at the end of this file.
Please don't slate the spelling, I just chuck these together and mail them off to the
writers, who nearly all reply 'cos no-one else does. Stories are for reading
pleasure so it matters. These are for info and discussion so it doesn't, and I've
got better things to do than spell checking this stuff. If you find mistakes in my
stories, that's a different matter!
Fair Suck of the Sausage
From: drspin@newsguy.com
http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/DrSpin/www/
Once again Dr Spin gets plucked from the pile and this one is a brilliant continuation
of the genre, although with not too much sex content. More Phillip Marlowe really,
and not bad for it either. Really needs to be read after the previous Dyson stories
to be fully appreciated. See them at the page link above. The drugged beads are
great but their importance to the story line destroys the eroticism. Read to enjoy,
not for sexual gratification!
Overall a great story by ASSM standards, but below par on sex content by same
standards.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar *********
Storyline **********
Originality *********
Wood Factor **
Miss Gia gets an "A" in RaPE!
From: mrdouble@mrdouble.com, mrdouble@mindspring.com, or
mrdouble@ix.netcom.com
http://www.mrdouble.com
This is a story of racially motivated rape. The raped white woman is written as a
strangely naive and accepting type and the style attempts to be arty by moving around
in time. However this does not quite come off and just gives the impression of
moving around in a somewhat jumbled kind of way. Apart from that it's quite well
done. A rather more ordered structure would do it a power of good. The description
of what happens to her boyfriend is a little vague also.
Overall one of the authors better offerings.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *******
Style ****
Spelling/Grammar *****
Storyline *****
Originality ******
Wood Factor *******
THE GOOD NEIGHBOUR by Delta.
From: delta @ nym . alias . net
Whatever next, a story with a moral on ASSM.
A very good one too (story and moral(Don't kill yourself)).
A lady employs unusual methods to stop a suicide. One is tempted to wonder if
sitting in view of bored housewives waving a toy gun around and looking a bit
melancholy would be an effective pulling strategy? This story is good enough
for hard publication but certainly not stroke material. If all Delta's work is of
this calibre (pun) then he really should contemplate writing for income.
The actual sex action is minimal but the story quality more than makes up for it.
Overall a great little story
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment ********
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar *********
Storyline ********
Originality *********
Wood Factor *****
THE EYE OF THE BAD GIRLS
From: MichaelD38@aol.com
This story is well above average in every respect. The sex is very erotic with
recourse to unusual fetishes or acts, the originality is all in the story-line.
My only complaint is that the girls anguish at visiting a fortune teller is a bit
overdone and irrelevant. One is left wondering what might happen if the 2 girls go
head to head for the boys attention both with a magic eye. Wishing for a sequel is
always a good cue for a high reading enjoyment score!
Overall a classy story with no real weak points.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *******
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar ********
Storyline ******
Originality ********
Wood Factor *******
Vicky Takes the Delivery
From: csbadger@hotmail.com
Pure stroke with no storyline whatsoever. man shags a slut wife up the arse and gets
licked clean, that's all there is to it. Paragraphs are a bit overused. Having
said that the description of the act is really pretty good and you certainly get the
feel for the sluttiness of the woman and how the writer is trying to put her across.
The man is almost an irrelevance.
Overall a nice description of a person commiting an act on another, but not much else.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment ****
Style ****
Spelling/Grammar *******
Storyline **
Originality **
Wood Factor ****
From: orestes007@hotmail.com
www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Orestes
missing t - find & replace "hat"
A fantastic story of a young womans dive down into a self inflicted world of
humiliation. The description of her need to expose and humiliate herself is superb.
Her feelings of confusion and the inner drive that makes her continue with her
ridiculously risky actions come across brilliantly. There is a slight anomaly at
the start where she's been in every newsagent in town but has only just arrived for
her 1st class. The writer captures all the feelings I had the first time I went to
a sex shop and then takes it further. This is exhibitionism taken to an extreme, &
I loved it. The actual sex action is minimal but the exhib/sub fetish descriptiveness
more than makes up for it.
Overall a great insight into the world of an unusual woman
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style ********
Spelling/Grammar *********
Storyline *******
Originality *********
Wood Factor *******
The $4500 Bondage Slut
From: ArthurGThomas@aol.com
At least these 4 stupid errors to spoil what is otherwise right up to the usual
standard.
"Ok, buy I want a night"
"I pored myself a glass "
"a sot on her body"
"It had to clamps"
Much harder subject matter than previously with enough uncaring violence to lower
the last rating for me at least, but it's not just for the hell of it, it's all
part of the excellent story. You really do get the feeling that he might just be
recounting something he really did do! The safe ring is a brilliantly simple idea
that rarely makes it into ASSM and I can't recall ever seeing it as a central theme.
I love this idea so much I just can't wait for the next one, and am even toying with
the idea of writing something myself along the same lines!
Overall another piece of AGT brilliance.
Scores (of 10)
Reading enjoyment *********
Style *********
Spelling/Grammar ********
Storyline **********
Originality *********
Wood Factor *******
This review is by nexuswilson@hotmail.com
if you would like a free read, the chance to get your own back, or to collaborate
with him in his writing project then
the reviewers stories and project details are on his site at
www.pornoz.com/alterotica
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