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The Annex Reviews, 4/10/00
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR
http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh
Hi y'all.
I've been doing some spring cleaning on my site lately as regards
checking links, and I've come across several good websites that are MIA.
Does anyone know the new URLs for Lord Malinov, Dean Lidster,
Giffstein Productions, November Tuesday, Uther Pendragon, Sneakley's
Pages of Peril, Superheroines in Bondage, or Nova's The Secret Logs of
Mistress Janeway? If so, please let me know. I am almost all done
checking the others, and they should be all in place and updated a day
or so after I post this.
Also, acting on a suggestion a reader made, I will be mailing out copies
of these reviews to the writers of those stories who have received an A,
A+, or A- rating. As to why I won't do this with everyone, well, I'd rather
not get shot as the bearer of bad news; but if an author asks for
feedback as part of their review request, I will give it to them,
unadulterated, as it appears here. And remember, if you get A+, you
are eligible for my award.
FANFIC REPORT - April 2000
I have neglected to give my 1999 Annual Report for a number of
reasons, chief among them that I wasn't on the net that much last year,
and so had nothing to say; but I intend to remedy that now, partly, after
two weeks of intensive web searching on the topic "fanfic." Fanfic, in
case you don't know, is any kind of fiction written by fans, for fans, of a
particular TV show, movie, cartoon (generally known as 'toons),
anime/manga, comic, or, increasingly, musical group. Before the net
these stories used to be self-published in 'zines. With the growth of the
webm however, they have entered a truly colossal period of growth,
with literally hundreds, perhaps thousands, of sites, and hundreds of
thousands of stories. Why should the average reader of the ASS
newsgroups care about this? Because many of the sites and stories offer
truly excellent erotica, much of it gay and lesbian, with varying
degrees of kinkiness and angst.
When I first began writing these reviews in 1997 there were plenty of
sites out there, but most of them stuck to the major Fandoms -- which
were at the time Star Trek, Highlander, Sentinel, JAG, Xena/Herc, and
the X-Files. Well, fanfic writers are nothing if not an artistically fickle
bunch, and as one show is creatively overmined (or goes off the air)
their loyalties switch to the newer, better models, and new Fandoms
spring up. For example, the Highlander and JAG Fandoms seem to
running out of steam, with fewer stories and sites each month, while
last years' Star Wars: The Phantom Menace movie has spawned
innumerable slashy (M/M) fanfic stories, most of them dealing with the
relationship between Qui-Gonn Jin and young Obi-Wan. On the same
note, Todd Hayes' eminently "slashable" glam-rock movie Velvet
Goldmine has inspired at least ten sites, and I've also seen many stories
for the Matrix. (The key to the latter three, I think, is the sexual appeal
of these movies' leading men on the mainly female writers.)
Other Fandoms have crawled out of the woodwork in recent months. I
have seen sites and stories for 1970s shows like Emergency! and a good
number on the rock groups Savage Garden, the Cure, the Monkees,
N'Sync, and the Backstreet Boys. Video game fanfic is increasing every
day, but it is only the little brother of the rapidly growing Fandom
anime, which, like a many-tentacled Power Rangers monster, offers
everything from lemon (explicit) and lime (romantic) yaoi (slash) to
hentai (kink) from hundreds of different shows, most of which are
available in America only at specialized video stores. Anime fanfic
writers have a specialized lexicon of their own by which they rate and
class their stories that is so opaque it baffles even oldtime anime fans
like myself. So watch that sucker; it's getting cancerous.
But, there are also growing Fandoms for daytime soaps and nightime WB
fare; ones for BBC fare such as Inspector Lovejoy and BlackAdder, and a
small but notable showing for "literate" genres in the form of Les
Miserables and The Jewel in the Crown stories.
In sum, it's a feast now more than ever. If you haven't tried fanfic
before, give it a taste now.
The stories:
GI Joe Sexual Missions #1: Scarlett's Training (jzelger): F/M+, comic
DeLaurio's Bar: A New Conception (Alexis Wilder): M/F, voyr, SF
Praying Mantis: Black Window (Lotuseater): F/F, radio serial spoof
Fuad's Hareem (Frenchy the III): M/F, sex slavery, pierce, oral, anal,
thriller
Kelly's Transformation (mark_la688): M/F, mc, sex slavery
Fighting Words, Parts 1 and 2 (Trilby Else): F/F mc, M/F rape
GI Joe Sexual Missions #1: Scarlett's Training [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/23/00
Author: jzelger
Address: jzelger@yahoo.com
The author says, "This story is based on the Marvel Comics version of G.I.
Joe." That is news to me, for the last time I encountered GI Joe, he was
being blown to bits by black cats in the dirt-hill forts of the little
neighborhood boys I grew up with. Childhood memories aside, Joe's had
a second plastic reincarnation in the Reaganistic 80s as a special op of
sorts, followed by an animated series in the early 90s. I guess comics
weren't so far behind, and following them, a Fandom (note the capitol F)
tailor-made for adult content. In fact I was rather pleased to see him get
a sex life.
In this story, though, the "Joe" refers to an elite group of paramilitary
professionals, and Scarlett is their new hand-to-hand combat trainer.
Yes, she has long red hair, and she quickly whups all the men's asses,
winning their grudging admiration for her skills (they already had it
for her body.) Afterwards, she notes the session has made her more
than a little turned on:
For the first time, as Scarlett looked at all these men, she noticed that
they all were at least kind of attractive. Maybe it was the workout, but
she was feeling flush and her whole body was hot. She unconsciously
licked her lips. "Good to know," she said. She glanced around and saw
that the other Joes' uniforms were quite clingy, too. And many of them
had obviously raging erections. As she stood their nearly naked before
them, she decided she was feeling very aroused. Having all these men so
close to her as she tried to catch her breath... Their heavy breathing
filled the room, but otherwise there was an awkward silence. All these
men... all so hot and bothered...
So she takes on all of them, barking orders all the time.
I liked this story; it was unique (for a male-oriented comic story that is)
in that the female lust object was neither a victim nor a slut but a very
strong, very self-confident, very horny woman capable of being the
controlling party in a gangbang, and enjoying it. Despite the machismo
of its title, I strongly recommend it to female readers, as a way to share
in the main character's adventures without feeling demeaned.
Preying Mantis - Black Widow [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/23/00
Author: Lotuseater
Address: kim_lotuseater@hotmail.com
Radio plays have gone the way of the rotary telephone these days, but
there once was a time (so my mother told me) when families gathered
together to hear the tales of the Shadow or the Lone Ranger. As that
form of drama is now dead or dying, I give Lotuseater high marks for
attempting a loving spoof of one of those 1940s serials complete with
sound effects, outrageous accents, and "stings" (a burst of music, or
jarring chord, inserted in the play to heighten the dramatic effect.)
As this is a sex story, the altar ego of the heroic Preying Mantis, Kitt
Meade, a socialite, is surprised in her office by the Black Widow, a
French criminal who proceeds to work her over:
FX: Zipper
Kitt: "What - what are you -- hey - mmmmm! Mmmmm! Mm!"
Arachne: "Ahh, what divine treasures you 'ide beneath all
zose confining clothes! Anuzzer kiss, I think?"
Kitt: (gasping) "You...you...have me at a disadvantage,
Black Widow. I'll give you just two hours to stop that..."
Arachne: "Zen we've lots of time. First I slide your
skirt down like so...my, your legs are quite shapely...
I see you like to shave down zere as do I...hmmmm...
your titons, zey are very nice as well, n'est ce-pas?"
Kitt: (moaning) "Uhh...your...tongue...is...extremely...
talented...Widow...oh!"
The ending comes too soon, and is typical for a sex story; but I
encourage the author to attempt more radio-recreations, as this one was
quite entertaining. It left quite a bit to the imagination, you see.
Dellaurio's Bar: The New Conception [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/4/00
Author: Alexis Wilder
Address: alexis_wilder@hotmail.com
"Dellaurio's was a combination restaurant, rest house, and bar. It was
the
only place at Luna station offering "all" the services--including the
setting for various trysts--that a space hound of any sexual preference
might want."
This sets the stage for what may be intended to be a new series of
voyeurism in an SF setting. The narrator is an A/V aide whose job it is to
supervise, and sometimes tape, what goes on in all the various trysting
rooms, and for this night, he begins to tape what is a fairly normal
romantic encounter in a romantic Terran dining room:
He broke their kiss, and planted dozens of kisses all over her face. He
kissed his way down her neck and onto her shoulder. She gasped as she
felt his warm mouth cover her breast, softly licking at her nipple. She
arched her back, trying to get more of it into his mouth. He licked and
sucked, getting both nipples completely wet. He didn't stop until both
nipples were extremely hard and sensitive.
This is pretty standard fare for most readers here, I'd guess, and I
continued to read on, waiting for the SF element to pop up -- that one of
the partners is an alien, or something. But the romantic encounter soon
turns into stroke, as the modest, romantic lovebirds suddenly break into
language the likes of "Oh, God, I have all your stud meat. I want all of it.
I want your cum in my pussy. I've never had a cock so deep before," and
"Jeez, Laurie, the waves of pleasure are washing over me, as you rub my
jewels," as if they've been reading one too many bad ASS stories, or had
swallowed a thesaurus of sexual lexicon.
Now, I've got nothing against dirty language in bed; I like it myself. But
cliched dirty language out of the blue, and out of character for the two
people we've just been introduced too, is just lazy writing. Not only that,
but the story ends on a rather lame revelation that had nothing to do
with SF. Why go to the trouble of creating this otherworldly
environment, if you don't introduce otherworldly elements into it?
That said, I can't knock *too* many points off the story for the above
issues, as it was well written otherwise, and delivered the sexual goods.
But for me, it turned out to be a disappointment.
Fuad's Hareem [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/2/00
Author: Frenchy the Third
Address: FrenchyIII@hotmail.com
This novella-length story is a cross between a political thriller and a
captive slave girl/BDSM piece. The narrator has been tricked into
served as a security aide to General Abdel-Kerim Fuad of Iraq, and part
of his job is preparing kidnapped American girls for his "hareem,"
which the General shares with his favorite officers. So there's plenty of
bondage, training, D/s, and piercing; but there's also an espionage
subplot in that China is planning to attack the General's bunker in
revenge for holding some Chinese scientists against their will. All the
James Bond action made an excellent backdrop for the slave scenes in
this story, which were by turns humorous (in a dark vein), detailed,
arousing, and frighteningly plausible. But more than that, the story had
good characterization. From the egomaniac anti-American General
("When we win the war, I shall own a grand whorehouse outside of Las
Vegas. I will permit you to run it for me. All that American women are
good for is to be whores. We will stock it with the most beautiful
survivors.") to the chauvinistic dim bulb narrator ("I do remember true
love number one insisting that since she was swallowing my come and
letting me fuck her in the ass, when she wasn't even having a period, I
shouldn't be seeing any other women. How was I to know I was
supposed to take a comment like that seriously. Women! Go figure!")
and, the most well-drawn of all, Charlotte, once a down-home southern
girl, now the General's favorite slave. Here she gives the other girls a
description of what they are to do at one of his parties:
"Okay, now y'all are the fluffers for the boys coming up next. If'n they
pick a red ping pong ball with her number on it, they're gonna fuck
her mouth. If'n they get a white ball, they're gonna do her pussy and I
guess y'all can figger where it goes if'n they pull out a black ball. If it
ain't red, they're gonna come up ta y'all fer a blowjob first, afore they
stick it ta the girls. Y'all stay kneelin behind yer girl the entire time
and maybe even help 'em get it in the hole that goes with the ping pong
ball. While their humpin' away, y'all just face away from the action and
stay on yer knees. Patty, honey, remember: y'all gotta keep yer knees
spread wide. They wanna see yer pretty pussy. Arighty?"
What set this story apart from the run-of-the-mill slave factory is the
sense of sympathy shown for the slaves, most of whom have been
sexually exploited or damaged even before they became a slave. It's an
interesting tone for a torture sex story, which by its nature is out to
exploit and dehumanize its victims. The author has stated in his forward:
"I apologize to the A.S.S newsgroup that this should have been a much
longer story, but I ran out of willingness to keep going "back into the
bunker" to finish it. It was some sort of a mental escape from what had
become a rather depressing story, in some parts at least. " Well, that's as
maybe, but it's still an excellent piece of work.
Kelly's Transformation [C]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/13/00
Author: mark_la688
Address: mark_la688@hotmail.com
Many of the sluts I read about in sex stories have the first name of Kelly.
I often wonder why this is so. Why is Kelly so closely interconnected
with slutness, and not Kristy or Karen?
Whatever, this was one of those magical transformation stories where
an average young woman receives a strange drug/item/medical
treatment/brainwashing that causes her to gradually metamorphosize
into a Slut. (To make us aware of the importance of this, slut is
capitalized throughout the story.) As Kelly works for a computer
company, the means comes through a flashing email message. The
transformation starts with high spike heals, short skirts, and see-
through blouses, and progresses through clit piercings (with a bell
attached), tongue extensions, and breast implants that squirt whole milk
from the right and chocolate milk from the left, with a tattoo on each
that says "TITTS," our gal's new name as the official company fluffer.
(Boy, I love that word "fluffer!" Not only does it imply a certain
irrelevancy and disposableness, but it's the same word my English
riding teacher used when instructing us how to give "leg" to our
mount.)
If all this sounds batty, it is; but I admit I'm fond of this kind of junk,
and I enjoyed it, the same way I enjoy an earnestly cheesy,
overproduced movies such as, oh, Dino de Laurentiis's "Flash Gordon."
Even the writing, though atrocious, had a certain charm in its typos and
mistakes, and a lot of the entertainment I got from the piece came from
gleaning them out. Here are a few of them for you:
"After a couple of minuets she brings herself to orgasm."
"Kelly takes it off and puts on a thin white shit"
"Kelly's boss came to Kelly' desk "Hay Slut, Aren't you supposed to be
leaving for a weeks leave a noon."
"Hello! I'm TITTS the company sex slut, can I offer you my pussy, ass,
mouth or tong?"
"She new that she had been turned into a wonton 14 year old sex slut. "
[I'd love to see an illustration of *that.*]
It all only got worse towards the end, as if the author was by then too
sexually excited to keep his or her hands on the keyboard. I should also
note they had no idea how to use quotation marks properly.
In sum, if you want a good laugh, read this; but as it wasn't intended to
be humorous, I'm forced to give a C, for the general low quality.
Fighting Words, Parts 1 and 2 [A+]
Where archived: The Mind Control Archive
Address: http://www.mcstories.com/FightingWords/index.html
Author: Trilby Else
Address: trilelse@mail.anonymizer.com
The author sent me a note requesting that I review this. I've been slow
in doing personal requests, but now I'm going to try to do one per ish.
Wendy is a young woman taking a self-defense class to start a new
career as a bodyguard. She begins to experience a strange attraction
toward her teacher, Bonnie, who uses hypnosis techniques to help her
female students relax:
It's just a dream, [Wendy] told herself. No reason to look around; I'm still
with Bonnie on the practice floor while she hypnotizes me to help me
meditate. She found a gap in the tarps and turned to step through, into a
little room. Two other women, nude like her and with the same shiny
collars, stood motionless at attention, staring ahead of them. As Wendy
looked at them, she felt herself moistening. They were both pretty
enough, but what was sending Wendy gently over the edge was the way
they stood as if under a powerful command, the way they stared as if
their minds were transfixed by a single idea that had flattened any
other thought and feeling, the way they were naked and exposed,
wearing only someone else's badge of ownership. What a strange and
arousing wet dream Bonnie was letting her have, as she murmured too
quietly for Wendy to hear.
As time goes on Wendy suspects she is having more than just dreams,
and decides to investigate. It's a tribute to this writer's skill that I was
truly disturbed by what happens next.
The author states in the beginning, "It's more about mind control than
sex. I'm a fetishist: point isn't using MC to get sex, it's sex being
something interesting to do with MC. " I disagree; I thought the story
was very erotic, and if it wasn't quite the pumping organs of stroke, it
evoked a sensual, sinister mood equal to the best psychological horror
and suspense. The story also made good use of a number of contrasts,
such as the one between the womens' wish to defend themselves against
rape and "take control of their lives" and their eventual mass-
hypnotized fates. It was also a raring good short story as regards plot,
character, development, and build-up -- is Wendy having erotic
daydreams, or is her kindly teacher up to something sinister? -- that
kept me hooked. Lastly, the author had one of the best writing
techniques I've seen for depicting the conscious/unconscious actions of
a hypnosis victim. All aspiring MC authors should take a look at this for
a good example how it's done, and done well.
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