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Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 1/31/00
Date: Mon, 7 Feb 2000 04:10:01 -0500
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The Annex Reviews, 1/31/00
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR
http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh
As usual, this is a little late, and I apologize.
I also realized I did not give my commentary on the current state
of amateur porn on the net, so I'll rectify that now. Well, things
are just getting better and better. ASSM has been revived, and so
has the ASSTR website, which acts as host for many talented
writers. Website archives have become more cleanly designed
and are easier to use, and more people than ever are visiting
them. With easy-to-use message board software there's been a
trend for many sites to include message boards now, and some
have chat rooms too, or rooms within IRC networks where like-
minded people can connect in cyberspace. There's also more sites
springing up everyday in a variety of fetishes.
On the down side, recent criminal cases involving meeting
minors for sex via the internet (one culprit a Disney executive)
may lead to cracking down on the net freedom of adults. But,
probably not. As I've come to realize, when there is big money to
made in some media, people usually look the other way as regards
regulating the abuses. Look at the handgun industry.
A-hem.
So, I think the 21st century bodes well overall for all of us.
As a side note, I'd like to say that some of these reviews, present
and past, are appearing monthly in excerpted form in the
Cleansheets ezine (http://www.cleansheets.com). So you can say
I'm a columnist now, though I doubt I'd ever get into Salon. Not
that I'm worse than their writers are, just off-center and
irrelevant.
I also want to remind everyone that if I have given your story or
site an A+ rating, you are entitled to display the candy box
sticker/gif on your site. You can see it on my site but must email
me for it; it doesn't come automatically. More than a few of you
have asked me for it in recent months, but I'd lost the original in
a computer crash, and had to redesign it to make it available
again.
The stories:
Sketches, Part 1 (Dragonprince): M/M, teen, mast.
Passenger (Sidney Durham): M/F, mast, oral
Asteroid, Mine, Chapters 1 - 4 (Dino Dave): M/F, BDSM, SF
DS9: The Ambassador (ALurker8192): M/F, Star Trek
Present for Janeway (Boadicea12): M/F, BDSM, Star Trek
Porno 101 (Morgan Preece): M/F, teen
Slaves: The Capture of Elise (EZ Riter): M/F, sex slavery
Sketches, Part 1 [A]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 1/9/00
Author: Dragonprince
Author address: Dragonprince@att.net
A young man stops at a state park during his bicycle ride to use
the facilities. He is surprised to discover the men's lavatory
features all sorts of creative graffiti by men, for men:
'Blowjob', 'cocksucker', 'fuck', '8 inches hard', all these things got
me so hot, but so confused. These were guys! Guys who wanted
other guys to suck their dicks or to suck other guys dicks! Guys
wanting to screw each other!
The narrator also sees pictures, the sketches of the title. He makes
a habit to stop in every day to see what's new, masturbating and
fantasizing all the while. One tragic day the walls are painted. But
soon an exceptional sketch appears:
[It was] the most beautiful line sketch I had ever seen of a naked
guy. He was lying on his side, one hand propped under his head
and one leg flexed. His dick was lying across his hip, long, but
not hard. This was a beautiful piece of meat, uncut, with only just
the tip showing. God, he was totally beautiful! He looked kinda
muscular and buffed, with the beginnings of a nice six-pac. And
it was a particular person, not just a generic nude guy. His face
was a person’s face, dark curly, short hair, a little pug nose and
high cheek bones, in fact, I thought I could almost recognize
him.
Naturally, who should walk in then but the artist...though not
soon enough to spare the narrator the embarrassment of
shooting his cum all over the wall.
This was a very sweet and enthusiastic story, and the voice of the
narrator (and perhaps the writer) comes off as that of an
authentic teen experiencing his first stirrings of lust. An
enjoyable beginning to a longer tale.
Passenger [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 1/2/00
Author: Sidney Durham
Address: sidney_durham@springmail.com
Website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/SidneyDurham/www
One of the most popular subjects for female exhibition stories is
that of a sweet young thing who exposes/masturbates herself in a
moving vehicle for the enjoyment of other drivers on the road.
As this is difficult to do while driving, sometimes there's two
wanton females, or a whole carload of them. The appeal of the
idea for both men and women is that if a gal's gonna do
something like this, it's better to have maximum anonymity (the
open highway) with maximum exposure (the open window or
sunroof) to maximum maleness (truck drivers, bikers, frat boys
on vacation) with maximum safety (speed up and you're out of
danger -- but oh, watch out for that state trooper!)
This story handled the subject matter very well and made it fresh
again. A middle-aged man picks up a gum-popping blonde
hitchhiker in her early twenties with proto-Riot Grrl leanings --
she has blue fingernails, a toilet mouth and the New Age name of
Indigo -- who dares him to push his aging Lincoln Continental up
to the 120 mph it was built for, and as long as his foot stays hard
on the pedal, he gets to fondle her breast. But soon the fondling
becomes exhibitionism on her part:
She was tracing her fingertips around her nipples, which had
become quite distended. Her window was still down and her hair
was floating around her head. I stepped on the gas and caught
another truck. Another horn blew, and Indigo waved again.
Then, as I began to slow the car, she opened the front of her
shorts and slipped her hand inside. "Keep going," she said,
looking at me. Her cheeks were flushed. "They're probably
talkin' about me on the CB," she added, her hand squirming inside
her shorts. "Find another fuckin' truck."
More horny truck drivers follow, and then she says, "Now I blow
you while you pass them again."
An arousing and well-crafted story, and, in its beginning stages,
an interesting character study.
Asteroid, Mine, Chapters 1 -4 [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 1/9/00
Author: Dino Dave
Address: dino@canoemail.com
Susan Rytell is a miner in the 23rd century, operator of the
heavy equipment needed to extract ores from rocky asteroids in
deep space. She is also interested in BDSM, often while working:
I made the adjustment automatically, without taking my eyes
from the story I had been reading. The Marquis had Pauline's
nude body stretched along a ladder, her wrists and ankles tied
tightly to it's sides. The cat whistled through the air, striking her
bottom again and again, her screams of pain and ecstasy filling
the basement room, echoing off the cold stone walls.
My hand reached down to finger the controls of the operators
chair to deflate and harden the seat cushion while I rocked my
hips forward, pressing my clit down, letting the vibrations of the
digger work on me.
However, she is naive about real-life BDSM, so when some
vacation time comes up she decides to spend it on Crydon, an
earthlike planet renowned for its hedonism. There she has a
number of erotic adventures: a solo in a vibrating mud bath; a
three-way with an older couple that involves bondage; and a
BDSM workshop she attends where a woman is flogged, then
bound. The narrator comes to a gradual awakening of her desires,
so that when she meets Mark and Judy, a magnetic dom male and
his female sub, anything could happen.
Unlike Jim Thompson's "Blue Planet" (reviewed in the November
99 Reviews) this story did not have an adventure-based plot along
with the sexual awakening stuff; it was all about relationships,
and having a good time on vacation. This did not make it less of a
story; and though the writing tended to be decorative at times, the
sex scenes shone. The story also evinced a fetish for bare
(female) feet on the part of the author and a love of Pink Floyd,
though I doubt they'd still be pressing vinyl records in the 23rd
century.
Recommended if you like science fiction and BDSM, with the
traditional plot structure of a published BDSM book.
DS9: The Ambassador [C+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 1/12/00
Author: Alurker8192
Address: alurker8192@my-deja.com
Although I am not a *huge* fan of Star Trek (in fact, I snigger at
it for many reasons) I enjoy reading Star Trek fanfic, the erotic
kind, for the attempt it makes to humanize the contrived,
awkward characters of the newer shows. Like the newer shows,
the stories don't always succeed at involving me either, but I find
them all very interesting, in part because of the investment the
authors make in them. The writing is very polished and sincere,
perhaps mulled over for ages during the downtime of workday
commutes and boring meetings, or poured out at white-hot speed
after being struck by a particular idea. The two-dimensional
Starfleet officers and aliens become symbols, a means of
exploring the limits of human desire, that RL men and women
can't.
Unfortunately, this story had none of that. The major clue was
that it was posted in ASSM rather than ASCEM
(alt.startrek.creative.erotica.moderated), and though it started off
with the requisite stiff tone ("Capt. Benjamin Sisko stood waiting
at the airlock. Dax and Major Kira were standing beside him ."Tell
me again why we're doing this?" Sisko always hated diplomatic
functions and he was pulling at the collar of his dress uniform")
the story soon turns into the sort of mindless porn one sees all too
much of on the net, as an alien ambassador introduces rogue
pheromones which cause the crew to have rabid sex with each
other. (Sample: "Dax lay back on the table as Sisko fucked her.
Her long black hair fell off the edge of the table. O'brian quickly
positioned himself at her mouth, she sucked him in as Sisko
continued to work on her pussy. She couldn't believe it as O'brian
started to fuck her mouth, she tickled the underside of his prick
with her tongue. She felt him jam his prick into her face and
spewed his load down her throat.") There's much more, in a
similar vein. Yawn. Double yawn. Now, there's nothing wrong
with having the crew of DS9 have sex with each other, buy by
god, make it interesting, and throw in some of the relationship
issues, D/S elements, and homosexual leanings of the Real Thing
on ASCEM, and not the standard male trilogy of male-female
vaginal/anal/girl-on-girl, in that order.
Oh, and Dax has brown, not black, hair.
A Present for Janeway [A/A-]
Where posted: ASCEM
When posted: 1/15/00
Author: Boadicea12
Address: Boadicea12@aol.com
Author's website: http://members.xoom.com/Devorephile/
This story, in contrast, was more satisfying for me, even though
it was shorter and more cryptic. Captain Janeway finds a tape
showing her bondage encounter with a man named Kashyk (not
named in the story, but in the foreword) and replays it in her
mind. I guess Kashyk was up to no good with both the Captain and
her crew, but left before he could be apprehended, leaving the
tape as a gift, for, as the Captain thinks, "There's no point in
hiding a file on a ship you are about to impound. Or leaving it for
a woman you mean to kill. "
I didn't quite "get" this, but the writing was good and conveyed a
good sense of frustrated desire and a relationship left unexplored.
In the foreword, there's a note that this story has different
endings on the author's home site, enabling one to choose a
different ending through the magic of hypertext.
Porno 101 [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 1/15/00
Author: Morgan Preece
Address: morganpreece@anon.nymserver.com
Website:
I enjoyed the author's website the last time I visited, so I thought
I'd check this out.
This story was as brief as the one above but more
straightforward: A college boy talks about his breast obsession
and his first girlfriend, who has a 42DD chest. The first class they
take together is Modern Erotic Film Appreciation, where the
professor is a looker too. During one particularly stimulating film
boy, girlfriend, and professor get so turned on they all start
masturbating. You might too.
Lively writing, funny at the same time, and not meant to be taken
seriously at all -- a giggle on the pillow.
Slaves: The Capture of Elise [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 1/9/00
Author: EZ Riter
Address: ezriter@hotmail.com
EZ Riter has been around for a while now, and this story
showcases some of his finest writing. Elise is a middle-aged, but
still hot, housewife captured along with her two teenage
daughters and their friends on the soccer team when their school
bus blows a tire. As is hinted from the title, they're to become sex
slaves. But not the bubbly, silly kind you're probably thinking of.
Their heads are shaved, they're tied and put in bondage gear and
shoved into kennels, all this for the Master who will use them and
breed them.
The story starts off on a harsh tone that is almost too realistic for
porn, as Elise is captured and thinks desperately on her fate:
Elise struggled against her bondage, her muscles tight, but she
couldn't move.
"Doctor!" It was a different voice, a cold, commanding, male voice.
"Yes, Master," the woman replied.
(She called him Master. Who could be master of that devil woman?
Oh, God, what's happening?)
"Have you identified the ones we've sold?" the male said.
(Sold? Someone's been sold? No. I didn't hear that. Not slavers!
Not in this day and age! Not in California! I can't be living this.
It's a nightmare.)
Later the girls are taken to their new home where lives of
endless degradation and physical punishment -- along with, some
admit, pleasure -- await them, and Elise is destined for "special"
treatment at the hands of the master. But towards the end the
story leaves Silence of the Lambs territory to land with a light
thud into PornoSillyland, where it's revealed poor Elise has been
a raving slut all along and that she just needs to release her
"natural passions" to enjoy the hellish situation she's been put
into, and there's an interesting, ironic twist at the end.
Although I like slave fiction, this wasn't exactly an arousing to
me: it was, as I've said, perhaps too realistic and complex. But the
author handled it very skillfully, and I did love that touch of
cynicism at the end.
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