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Reviews for A Fucking Life, Part 4 DAM'O 11/02/05 Haven't read past this chapter and don't know if others think as I do. But, to have the dialog and monolog appear as coming from an adult is kind of a downer. This the first chapter I've scored and not to say I don't like the story but a 5, 6 or 10 year old kid just doesn't speak in such terms. I'm not referring to "cock", "fuck", "cocksucker", "cunt", "asshole", and all that. Little kids used to getting fucked and sucking cock probably do use those words. But, some of the terms and ways of speaking just aren't in a kids vocabulary yet. Listen to how little kids talk. I would try to emulate that style. But, as before, it's mostly a turn-on. jack 08/22/05 just sooo very good... would love to be the fly on the wall witnessing all the boy's activities with their clients. Also getting the boys to scout out some new boys would be great- fresh meat to be broken and trained.... |
