Aslan

11/06/05

I'm afraid that an exciting story was slightly spoiled by the author's apparent thoughtlessness when describing the female character's body. She is eight years old with a three inch clit and nipples that are only slightly large for her age but which protrude beyond the material of her bikini top. I don't care how skimpy her bikini top is, if her nipples are big enough to protrude beyond the fabric then the girl's a freak. And a three inch clit? Seriously, I've never seen one that big on a fully developed adult. Perhaps the idea was to create a kind of freak child but it really spoiled the story for me. Otherwise is was a good effort and I would encourage the author to take this as a constructive criticism and write more.