AB user

04/23/06

oh my God. I don't agree with the last reviewer. Where you jacking off or taking cliff notes while reading the story? Good sex stories let you give in to your depraved lust; this story does that. I'm reaaaaally smart but I could not care less about stylistic issues.

Echo

11/07/05

Good, but there's a couple of buts which stop me rating this higher.

Interesting premise of wealth and power, but while this is only a scene setter it almost could remain a story of kids playing with each other, without any bondage. I hope we will see bondage eventually in this but currently lacks that suggestion.

It certainly needed to be a little longer even as a scene setter and lead us to believe that the privilege these kids enjoy has some relevance to the plot.

Not sure the fact that the nanny is absent at the key moment of this story with baby Alli upset is convincing - an explanation here perhaps that the nanny had too much single malt would have helped.

For a wealthy family, would the girls have shared a bedroom?

I like the playful Elmer Fudd reference but "Be vewy, vewy quiet" is better.

And, "Remember that little yellow bird that used to sit on Snoopy’s dog house with a typewriter". No, I remember the dog at the typewriter typing... or did I miss something in the strip?

Prince Violent (a play on the comic Prince Valiant? Or are we talking the "Mad" magazine character?) has begun what may be an interesting story. I only offer these comments as I think Bloodlines is close to being very good.