Reviews for The "LG Orgamism Machine"

01/18/06

An interesting little fantasy, but some of it got in the way of itself. I get the impression that English is not your first language. You might want to consider having one of the people here proofread it for you.

For instance, an "organism" is a living thing, from an amoeba to a tree or a whale. An "orgasm" is a sexual climax. It can be a cute bit of character building to have the LGs use the wrong word, but the engineer - and especially the pediatrician - would use the correct one.

Also, watch your punctuation and spelling. ["Great. He though."] was probably meant to be ["Great." he thought.].

All that aside, a creative little story. Keep up the good work!