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gommy

11/21/05

I donīt see so much Problems there....I like the Sotry...O.k the Spell and Gram. is really not good, but the Contain and ideas...So I give Full Points....!!

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Scavenger

11/15/05

I stopped reading this story less than halfway through. If you don't know proper grammar, then find someone who does, had have them fix it for you. I had no idea what you were talking about.

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Echo

11/13/05

There may be a good idea in here but how would anyone know? It's virtually unreadable.

If Jester can't write in English then he/she should write in his/her own language. It may get fewer readers but at least they can tell what's going on.