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Reviews for Family in Bondage bigdaddy 05/02/06 The Idea of the story was GREAT. however it was very uneasy to read. The paragraphs and sentances went on and on for miles and You need to learn how to use spell check. I did like the story though all aside. Just a little constructive critisism. Mike 02/13/06 Nice subject but needs editing, especially the syntax. Steve 12/01/05 i thought this story was great i can't wait to read more from you Xander 09/24/05 This story might have been good, but you jumped back and forth between first and third person. Plus, it all runs together to the point where I can't tell where one sentence ends and the next begins. Rick 09/23/05 great story i hope you write more bondage brian can't wait to read more from you l wm smythe 09/23/05 poorly written, unimaginative story. Croaker 09/22/05 This is nearly unreadable. The story changes perspective from first to third person, the sentances run on without thought, and its not even that sexy. JS 09/21/05 Interesting premise (as far as I could tell) but the punctuation, spelling and grammatical errors make it a very difficult read. Scavenger 09/21/05 I found this to be a poor story. Very bad grammar, doesn't flow well (if at all). |
