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text 1= some stories are erotic, yet easy to read, and yours fall
into this catagory.

 

text 1= I really enjoyed your story and hope to read more like it soon

 

text 1= LOVE your story!

 

text 1= Your story is great, suggestive and opens paths to the imagination. Ê

 

text 1= very good

 

text 1= Entertaining stuff. Emotional at times.

 

text 1= discursive

 

text 1= The mere scanning turned to lingering looks at your stark phrasing. The seemingly vapourous threads of your stories ensnared me. ÊA brief foray stretched to hours, and at an unfinished end the mind now orbits.

 

text 1= I was most disappointed in your stories.

 

text 1= great stories!

 

text1= I enjoy these kinds of stories.

 

text1= A chief effect of today's readings was to instill in me wonder.

 

text1= I enjoy your stories.

 

text 1= really enjoyed your story.

 

text1= tremendous

 

text1= I read another of your stories and was captivated yet again.

 

text1= good story found it very good to read

 

Text1= great Ê keep up the good work

 

text1= Brilliant story, makes me horny as fuck

 

test1= great stories , looking forward to more

 

text1= awesome..

 

Text1 = great

 

Text1= it is a well written, provocative story

 

Text1 = good

 

Text = Love your writing.

 

Text1 = excellent story

 

Text1 = great writing style

 

Text1 = i really like the way you write and how you can capture emotion, i like the dreaminess and the detail.

 

text1= excellent story, I always love stories about wives being gambled away

 

Text1 =  very well written and leaves me wanting more.  Akemi is a woman of dreams!  The story is a story of dreams and of possibilities

 

Text1 =  a very delicate and most sensual story. Superbly written

 

Text1= Been reading them, on and off, for around 2 years. Don't visit asstr that often, so only catch up when you're in the day's posting. Then I remember how much I like the stories, and read all.
 
The pace is so good - slightly discursive, as people are in real life. And good English - such a relief.

 

Text1= I read Studio and kind of like where its going.

 

Text1 = I really enjoy the stories - there's something viscerally erotic about them.

 

Text1 = Great stories, would love to read more!

 

Text1 = It's fine.

 

Text1 = I think you have things to say, and your writing has depth, and causes me to reflect

 

Text1 = I'd appreciate access to some story updates! They are great, and frustrating.

 

Text1 = I am a fan of your stories.

 

Text1 = The background makes it too hard to read the titles.

 

Text1 = i liked your story. is there a writing genre for stoners? if not, you should start it. it always seems to have a slow sadness to it.

 

Text1 = I don't think balls and clitoris contact each other during intercourse. It's a pity, but they don't

 

Text1 = Loved your writings and musings. Would love to read more Chapters when available. Best!

 

Text 1 = luv your stuff, very sensual. man AND woman centred, unlike much writings...

 

Text1 = uncanny, too difficult to beleve is fiction. wow!

 

Text1 = slow buildup and nice asides...almost like catch 22

 

Text1 = Your dialog is a little stiff and unrealistic. My impression is that either English is your second language (as your idiom is clinical and doesn't ring completely true) or that you are simply inexperienced, either in life or as a writer. Your character commentary is a bit too topical and some exchanges and utterances are directionless. This reads more like a play than a story. You take inordinate pride in your vocabulary, but fling words indiscriminately. Bottom line - get to the point and make us want to go with you. 4.3 on a scale of 10.

 

Text1 = Hello, This story is awesome. Ran across it by accident and read the whole thing front to back in one sitting. I'm impressed with the depth of character you've painted in your cast. Your handling of the cross-cultural relationship intricacies are masterful. The emotions of love, lust and loss related to Midori are familiar and haunting. Congratulations on some fine writing and please keep up the good work. Looking forward to seeing the story continue to unfold.

 

Text1 = wow -- more! more!

 

text1 = Intriguing story.

 

Text1 = I'd love to have some pussy sucking action in here somewhere. The hands are fun, but I do love that feel of pussy under my mouth kind of story.

 

Text1 = hot story.

 

Text1 = It seems to be real for me, and that is a compliment that I must pay to you. You have made my dreams seem closer to reality.

 

Text1 = Too much background - psychological out of tune with the main story, anyway too 'cute' and sentimental. Reads like a man's wet dream. Well written though. You are overloading the story with 'background'. what about developing the story-line and let it speak for itself?

 

Text1 = Assuming being cuckolded isn't your thing, you should have another party, stay sober, wait for the same scene to get started again then beat the living shit out of him. Not a tiny push and a punch, I'm talking hospitalization, beating he'll never forget. Just make sure you have a friend or two to keep the crowd off of you. If not, then go for the baseball bat. I prefer aluminum, it doesn't make as nice a sound but you can get a lot more speed, which is what counts in a fight. And don't worry about 'fair', if he deserved a fair fight he wouldn't have tried to fuck your wife. Great story though, you should submit it to the New Yorker.

 

Text1 = keep the fun coming my friend -you are amazing. Akemi is amazing.

 

Text1 = I appreciate what I've been read here so far and I'd enjoy reading more.

 

Text1 = I'm reserving opinion as of right now

 

Text1 = It was a little tough to read because I connected with Mitchell's voice in the story.

 

Text1 = strange disturbing stories. Unique, atomospheric.

 

Text1 = Perhaps a course in high school english would help you. The storyline has promise but the grammatical execution is deplorable.

 

Text1 = Your writing is excellent. I can almost tangibly feel the raw emotion of the narrator through your words.

 

Text1 = Excellent!

 

Text1 = that was a great story!

 

Text1 = What a great story. I liked!

 

Text1 = Good stories.

 

Text1 = i enjoy your writing

 

Text1 = Love the stories

 

Text1 = good stuff

 

Text1 = I like this. You have more undressing stories maybe?

 

Text1 = Hmmmm...

 

Text1 = nice stories

 

Text1 = if you cannot use the words "lie" and "lay" correctly, then you should avoid them

 

Text1 = Too short, too vague, not interesting, should not be on this site

 

Text1 = that was really weird

 

Text1 = What you have here is interesting

 

Text1 = WOW!!!!!!!!!

 

Text1 = very good stories

 

Text1 = I like the fact that there is more than just "Stroke Stuff", but a depth of character and story.

 

Text1 = i really like the details and descriptiveness of your stories.

 

Text1 = i was just wondering if there was an ending to the "to jd" short story or something.

 

Text1 = I have always been intrigued by the Miniskirt stories.

 

Text1 = Love your stories

 

Text1 = that fuckin sucked

 

Text1 = Your writing is very evocative and the attention to little details paints a clear picture in the readers' mind.

 

Text1 = Hi, I like this story, keep writing and enjoy.

 

Text1 = it was so fucking gud

 

Text1 = Love your work

 

Text1 = hi, i enjoyed some of the recent stories that were put up, very well written.

 

Text1 = fabulous stuff

 

Text1= Absolute shite! The style is flat (reminds me of my stories when I was 14), no build up, no nothing! I can't believe that anyone would have the slightest interest in what's published here.

 

Text1 = fantastic..

 

Text1 = love your stories

 

Text1 = Thank you for this lovely vignette.

 

Text1 = I'm somewhat confused but want to read on.

 

Text1= Your work really stands out from what I usually see surrounding it. Id like to read a little more in depth and offer some feedback if possible.

 

Text1 = Whetted the apetite, good job! Please send stories, or url for story site, thanks!

 

Text1 = Your stories are amazing and what a treat after a hard day at the office.

 

Text1 = stories are very good and interesting.

 

Text1 = pretty nice

 

Text1 = very good

 

Text1 = beautiful start for further stories

 

Text1 = I enjoyed this story very much

 

Text1 =its good story

 

Text1 = interesting

 

Text1= Great read!!

 

Text1 = guy! it was horny spine-tickling i had a real turn-on reading those keep going

 

Text1 = fantastic..

 

Text1 = most beautifull photo leaves much to the imagination one can only but explore ones mind to fully express the site and taste of such beauty

 

Text1 = I like that I've read so far.

 

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Text1 = Fantastic.

 

Text1 = love it please send stories will read and reply

 

Text1 = Way too much rhetoric. Nice, but just too much.

 

Text1 = I really enjoy your writing and would love to read more...lots more

 

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Text1 = the lady is a fuck whore man. seeing her (i printed the photo) i cummed on that. I loved her man. Give me her address , I will fuck her till i cum almost 15 times. Look at her breasts and her beautiful fuckable ass.what an ass man. I can fuck that 1,000,000,000 times.

 

Text1 = I think the picture is great but would love to see more, a lot more. Thanks for the stories.

 

Text1 = no, finally, not the themes which are turning me on. I am much more into d/s, reluc, etc... so your stories are somewhat much too consensual for me :). good luck

 

Text1 = good

 

Text1 = interesting writing style and content.

 

Text1 = the concept of the vague pic is quite genius, actually. what i mean is, i read erotica to escape the explicit and predefined nature of photo porn. this is an interesting concept and i can't wait to see how the story meshes.

 

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Text1 = There should have been cum splattered all over her body.

 

Text1 = still gives people a chance to dream. A bare back takes nothing away. Just the color of her hair and length are shortcomings to those who where dreaming of color or length.

 

Text1 = cool photo I like

 

Text1 = I enjoyed reading your miniskirt gamble and would love to see more from you

 

Text1 = turn her around without the bra and take a pic

 

Text1 = very nice very tastefull photo that gives a good starting point for a work of imagination thanks

 

Text1 = personly i dont think that by showing a picture of someone that its a mistake to do, kinda adds to the favor in a different way....

 

Text1 = Your writing is amazing, your feelings open. My heart does soar with the joy you express. Love is something that can transcend the problems of marriage as you have shown. Please write more for it would be a penalty to the world should you stop.

 

Text1 = This story is insanely good.

 

Text1 = What happened at the end? It all fizzled out into nothingness! Please write more!

 

Text1 = elegantly done

 

Text1 = Your story archive is really very good

 

Text1 = awesome stories so far

 

Text1 = I Love this the stories

 

Text1 = they are wonderful

 

Text1 = good show

 

Text1 = Love them!

 

Text1 = u have a nice stories

 

Text1 = You've caught the essence of feminine appeal. It's the ability to evoke desire without speaking or motioning. It's the wanting of the mind and heart as well as the body. But, if only the body, one to be admired for it's perfection. I like your writing.

 

Text 1 = i really like your story

 

Text1 = send stories. Plain and simple. I liked the story but the end left me hanging.

 

Text1 = Akemi is sexually desirable but always polite and respectful. Never the less she is a tease. Mitchel truly wants her close, he wants to protect her but her Japanese customs get in the way. He finds it so hard to be his self and feel relaxed when with the girl he truly desires. Akemi is a beautiful girl and knows how to attract men. Short skirt and smooth shapely legs add to her attractiveness.

 

Text1 = good story,well witten

 

Text1 = would LOVE to read more

 

Text1 = good

 

Text1 = brilliant

 

Text1 = they're fantastic!

 

Text1 = Well written erotica... leaves your imagination free to see as it chooses. My wife and I enjoyed it thoroughly.

 

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