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2011-12-06
Commentary and Analysis of "Empty Nest Slut"
by Prettz007
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comments = Been reading other stories you posted on the site and I will
try to leave some comments on them later.
I started reading this story and found that where the story
was heading (more on that below) wasn't exacting what I was
looking for but I did finish it. At the end of the story I
can't help but wonder if she intended to get a divorce two
weeks before the actual divorce or as other stories you
wrote have, force a confrontation were Milt either chose to
be a swinger or divorce her. First Susan pulls 50% of the
assets jointly held before she screws Claude and puts it
entirely in her name and then fucks a man (well technically
on the yacht it was men) that she knows would force a
confrontation. The whole: 'I never mentioned my last name to
anyone nor your name. If the other men knew your name, it
was because your law partner told them.' seems like an
extremely poor defense for screwing him, unless she just
didn't give a damn. While I do not believe she actually
agreed to stay away from certain men she knew it was going
to do something or she would not have been ready for the
divorce.
The biggest reason I am leaning towards the idea that Susan
was more interested in a divorce then staying with Milt is
that this situation is similar to Liberated housewife and
Switch. In those stories when confronted (both by angry
'macho' husbands) with a Divorce both wives fire right back
with a defense, just like Susan did, but they give options
that would allow the marriage to continue. Those husbands
were more bound by the adolescent macho ego Susan talks
about and those wives still gave the option, Susan did not.
So the whole confrontation left a sour taste in my mouth
because of that.
I do disagree with Susan's idea that Milt had a adolescent
macho ego, he did seem pretty open about her having sex with
other men and didn't seem to bothered with it. When Milt
shot down swinging with: 'I would constantly be nervous that
the other people might talk. If word got around, it might
ruin my law practice.' it didn't strike me as ego more as
fear of what others would think. Now while many people would
envy Milt, especially because in a Swinger environment he
could screw anything around and get his wife to help, Milt's
problem wasn't a macho ego, in my opinion, but the feelings
of nervousness, embarrassment, fear and probably a dash of
humiliation to. This is the point of the story were I
dislike the direction it to goes (but that's personal
taste). Me personally, I would have rather had Susan take
this as a challenge and create sensual and sexing situations
that open Milt to the idea. You have used a husband with a
rule/idea that he thought he needed but his wife convinced
him otherwise before. My hope when I got to that part was
that it would be used again. Instead you have Susan give a
shrug of her shoulders and go on her merry way.
That said I do believe that the ending of this story would
have been divorce for Milt and Susan for two reasons. 1)
Susan wanted a swing and Milt did not. As I stated before
Milt had certain 'rules' that Susan had no reason to follow
or care about and she had no interest in changing his mind
about. 2) You developed Jim as a character. Seemed strange
to develop him so well if he was going to be tossed away and
he was to far away for threesomes and swinger parties so it
seemed he was going to play some role in the end of the
story.
Overall I enjoyed the story. Thanks for sharing.
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