The main reason I write erotica is to entertain myself. I would not continue to write erotic fiction if I didn't get a jolt from it, or if I couldn't picture the story in my head. Despite my selfish reasons for writing, I enjoy making other people happy and horny with the power of my words. That's why I post my works online. This site- and the presence of my stories on other sites- is for you, the reader. I love getting positive feedback. It encourages me to focus more on this part of my life.
I have posted positive feedback and comments so that you may see what others think of my writings. And because I have a large ego that needs constant fueling. I haven't posted all of my comments, but I have posted most of them. I have also put the less-than-positive feedback I have received, to balance out the positive and to see if any have legitimate claims. Feel free to send me constructive criticism.
Most of my comments have come from my postings at other erotica sites, either
White Shadow's Nasty Stories or Literotica (http://www.literotica.com). I
really hadn't gotten any negative feedback until today (10-8-02). Donkey
Punch was a little controversial for Literotica. Email me to tell
me if you want your comment or name removed, or have a disagreement with
how the comment is edited.
General Comments
Hi, I have read all the stories on your site. They are real absorbing... Ashleys' little show is my #1 pick, but the journal entries are damn funny too. Your stories have a nice icy, futuristic quality to them. It adds. [....] Have you heard of Kevin Taylor? He generates a similar
mood to your stories in my mind.
-Piper
do you have any incest pics? I enjoyed your site.
-jordan
I don't know if I have any incest pics. I hope not.
Well, I have some pictures (and video) of these East Indian twin sisters, but it's different because they're twins, and plus, I feel really guilty about it.
Comments on "Ashley's
Little
Show"
(available at Literotica)
Hi, Mech:
Enjoyed your story (Ashley's Little Show)! If the other erotica you've
written is like this, you should definitely post it!!!
(Or send me a copy!) (:
-Gibby
Now details....[sic]Well mostly I like the fact that you addressed
a major part of the terrorist thing that no one seems to ever want to talk
about...People are made uncomfortable to the max...easier to control...but
some get deparate too...all in all very interesting... What I have been
trying to figure ...Are you writing from the stand point of woman or man....You
seem to bond with both...Maybe you could send me directions to compose a
tasty meal...Writing is a trip for sure.........
-Robert
To begin with I think that story was shit. Scat disgusts me. Don't get
me wrong, the rest was good. [....]
-Mike
hello
dear writer
i liked your story very much i was hoping if u could sent me some more
to read like the ones about the girl and classroom also write on subjects
like female teacher and fifteen year old student or visa versa.
-John
(Some spelling corrections made for legibility.) John
inspired me to write
"Extra Credit"
which, to his disappointment was not a scat story like he wanted. Ah
well.
Hey there!
I?ve been thinking about writing you a long time. I wanted to thank
you for your truly wonderful story Ashley?s Little Show. I cannot tell you
how many times I?ve had an orgasm when reading it. I?m a 26 year old
girl from Sweden, [....]
-Madita
Dear MechB
I read your story with interest, (Ashley Wells). The whole idea was good
and put together very well. I had little quibble with the construction of
the
story and it seemed to flow naturally. Have you posted any more stories
of this kind on the net and if so What are the web sites you've posted them
to? [....]
-Trevor
Trevor sent me a rewritten version of "Ashley's
Little Show," from which I made a lot of good changes. Trevor gave
Ashley her last name.
Hello,
Your shit story was great. I could picture every second in my head.. I
was wondering why there aren't very many diarrhea stories out there. You
know, about cute young girls blowing mud all over the place, or riding the
gravy train while someone is porking her doggystyle... Or swallowing
pennies and sifting through her own shit to find change for a soda..
Wonderful poop stories like that...
-Tim
Eventually I will write one...
I truly enjoyed your stimulating literary work.I love a good scat story.
"Ashley's Little Show" brought me tremendous pleasure.The thought of an attractive
young lady expelling a beautiful perfect masterpiece of a turd turns me on.
[....]
-Paul
I had to write to tell you that I loved your "Ashley" story. It really
made my panties go moist inside.
I'm a bi girl and I loved to imagine myself as Ashley and feel her pain and
embarrassment. I find scat really sexy.[...]
-Kristina
I would love to be one of the terrorists - i would fuck her shitting ass if i were
-tittyguy
Comments on "Journal of Events: Donkey Punch"
(available at Literotica)
[....]
'Donkey Punch'? And they say I'm sick! :-)
Of course 'they' say we're all sick, don't they. HAHHAHA
[....]
Thaddeus
Thaddeus had an erotica site, but it no longer
exists.
"Donkey Punch" is one of the funniest stories I've ever read. I gave it a
5.
Well done, dude!
-Anonymous
the male character in your story has a rotten attitude towards women.
His girlfriend lets him fuck her ass, and he's thinking of dumping her?
Awesome stupidity, and it detracts from the story.
-Anonymous
Thanks for writing. Yeah, it's hard to understand the character's motivations from reading only one story in the middle of the series, so let me clear up a few things: Yes, the character does have a rotten attitude towards women. But as for dumping her, some guys want more than anal sex. He's dumping her mainly due to her awesome stupidity.
I'm no prude (obviously, since I'm reading this site [Literotica]), but that story was awful. Punching a woman in the head so that you can anally rape her?? Tht is as despicable as anything I've come across here.
-Anonymous
Plenty of prudes visit Literotica. They tend to stay in the Erotic Couplings section. Maybe you should stay there, and stay out of the Incest section where I'm told that some deviant acts also occur. The Interracial as well, which is mainly full of big Black men humiliating White women, plus the Celebrities section, which is just full of hate it seems; oh, and the BDSM section has lots of pain being inflicted on people that sometimes like it and sometimes seem not to. I read a NonHuman story where a vampiress killed someone; stay out of there. Oh, and for the love of all that is holy, stay out of the NonConsent section.
On a serious note, "Donkey Punch" is hardly a rape story and I refuse to label it so.
when do you start killing and eating your lovers?
-Anonymous
Interesting question. I'm not into the snuff/cannibalism fetish, but if you paint me a scenario I might try to write it. But if this question was directed to me personally, then I must say that I will never kill and/or eat my lovers, just as I don't rape them despite having written rape erotica.
Thats shocking. I can;t believe anyone would write about something like that. Freedom of speech and all, but punching your lover in the head?
-Anonymous
I know, I know, but you should hear the guy above you who wanted me to write a cannibalism story. Sicko. Regardless, I know what you mean and I'm sorry. I'm going to gag myself now and then go support the Patriot Act.
-------- The next series of emails gave me a clue why people seemed to mistake the yummy goodness that was "Journal of Events: Donkey Punch" for a horrible insult to writing in general.
you're a pig! i am only including my email so you can't think i'm a coward and don't face you. but you are a pig
Okay, I am guessing you read "Donkey Punch." What specifically about my erotic story led you to believe I am a pig? Please understand that I only write fiction. [...]
yes that was the story and it was just so demeaning it really bothered me i felt that someone who could write that would just by nature be too nasty to deal with
I assure you that while I enjoy writing nonconsent and rape erotica, I am a caring and gentle lover. One who never initiates any sexual contact without asking twice if it's okay.
The Narrator of "Donkey Punch," on the other hand, is a complete bastard.
well i agree the narrator is an asshole and a pig, and i find it hard to separate the writer from the story, who would write a story like that and expect people to find it erotic? its just plain disgusting. non consent and rape are never amusing in any way shape or form and those who think it is have serious psychological problems.
I guess we will have to agree to disagree.
I strongly encourage you to open your mind and not judge those with different fetishes from yours.
my mind is open it is totally open to anything SAFE SANE AND CONSENSUAL anything else is not proper.
but for the sake of argument i will not argue with you anymore but i will argue against anything nonconsent
I see now that a non-consent story upsets people that aren't expecting it. Despite the definition of a donkey punch being clearly written right above the first line of the story, readers were still somehow misled and then infuriated when they realized the story was indeed about a nice girl getting donkey punched. And evidently, while some enjoy a nice non-consent story every now and then, many people gasp in shock and tightly grip their Bibles for comfort when they realize they've just read a semi-rape story.
To readers who think like my critic above, I must inform you that not everyone who likes non-consent and/or rape stories has psychological problems. Reading erotica, whether online, in a book, in Spanish or in Braille, is always a safe, sane, and consensual act between a reader and his text. The same can usually be said about fantasies reenacted between two people. I apologize to those whom were offended and those who are about to be, because I sure as shit ain't moving it or editing it unless I decide to touch up the story.
"No fantasy is sick or evil. Only nonconsensual actions in real life can be sick or evil."
-thralldom.org
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Your story STINKS. Please don't ever write anything again (for the love of God please refrain from doing so, I'm begging you). And please would you learn the proper use of grammar, you can do that by going to [...] as you seem to have little or no no knowledge of how to (get someone to beta your story if you must post. At least it won't be nearly as shitty). If this story is true (which I highly doubt) then I hope your girlfrind dumps your scanky little ass in the trash where it belongs.
Thanks,
Anonymous.
You're welcome.
I'm going to stop posting negative feedback for this story because everything that can be said has been said already.
Thank you very much. Donkeypunch popped up randomly when I hit the anal section during the Star Trek commercial break [....] Squirted down my PJs before the Pepsi commercial was over. Now that's an effecient story.
Good to see a butt story that's not all namby-pamby mutual pleasurey.[...]
-"Kate"
"Donkey Punch" just had me laughing. It actually had erotic potential (which I daresay deliberately took second place in your list of priorities) but it was an extremely amusing story. Still, can't help but be really really glad that it's fictional. Nice method of portraying 1st person character as a total bastard through action and reflection without overdoing it--I bet most readers went through it and didn't even realize what they'd learned about him. Hence the sorrowfully low score.[...]
-Quint
Comments on "Robberies 'N Shit"
(earned a "star" at White
Shadow)
Dear Mecha,
Original and excellent story[...] Look forward to more from you.
-Sally [of White Shadow's Nasty Stories]
I think your robber scat story was great. You should've made her poop
her pants though but otherwise it was perfect, keep writing!!!
-Anonymous
Comments on "Quarter 'Til"
(available at Literotica)
That was really well written...
Good job!!!!
-doormouse
A fine tale of sexual rage; told by a promising youth.
-rosco rathbone
Comments on The Dungeon Series
It was an inventive death for Janet, very original. The stories were well written and entertaining. Keep writing.
-msboy
Comments on "To Entreat Don Vinzetti"
For those that are looking for a few first impressions before you invest the time, Marquis says:
[....]"A triple knock-out of dicktion, sintax and juxthaposition that will have your eyes begging for more like the slathering dogs you are!"[....]
No, but seriously, it was fucking awesome man. Exactly what I want in a porn story, is there more stuff like this out there?
-Marquis
You've really got a knack for correct diction and tone.
This has always been one of my hot buttons--sex not as equality, love and mutual pleasure, but as something extracted in such a humiliating manner.
Some of my favorite lines:
"I'm overly lenient, he thought. That's it, if she sucks cock as lazily as Barzini's daughter, Morrocchi is going back empty-handed."
Vinzetti coughed. "I know you're a very young, naive girl, but do you see those things below my cock? Yes, those balls. They're rather dry."
The girl sped up her rhythm, producing the gaiety and optimism that he felt--that all men felt--when approaching orgasm.
His calm, world-weary manner is captured perfectly...the butler putting the music on...