• Chapter 251
• Chapter 252
• Chapter 253
• Chapter 254
• Chapter 255
• Chapter 256
• Chapter 257
• Chapter 258
• Chapter 259
• Chapter 260

 

Chapter 251:

Well I have had a chance to read this latest chapter twice more and it is just as tasty and satisfying as the first two times. I just love all the different things you put into your stories. This had the usual great awe inspiring sex but also the other great things I have come to expect. Put the two together and I as usual really enjoyed this latest offering.

I was really surprised to see Taneesha again so soon. I was very happy to see her though. She is a totally new kind of character. She is young, precious and devious all at the same time. I think that all the previous characters have been basically honest in their actions and emotions. Jane comes the closest to being manipulative but she seems honest in it to me. she just gets so jealous that she will do anything to get Laura in her clutches. Taneesha seems to be a sneak by nature. I'm not fazed to much by this because of her lack of malicious intent. She seems selfish and self absorbed and wants to stack everything in her favor, but she seems only to be interested in her short term pleasure. She is not Machiavellian at all, of course, she doesn't seem to have the intelligence for anything grand.

Another thing I liked about Taneesha was how quickly she folded her cards when Laura sort of blew her off. It is strange to me when a seemingly strong, confident woman suddenly loses confidence and gives up. . As usual, Laura, came to her rescue and bucked up her self confidence. I just loved how Taneesha got her confidence back and then got her sass back. She just seems so young and cute to me. I just know that the sex with her will be so divine.

You continue to develop dawn into the most special of characters. She is just so balanced. I love her gentle ways and the way she is just so loving and caring. She is by far the most special woman I can remember in this story. Her ways are just so uncomplicated. She is honest, plain and simple. If Laura were to ever settle down, I would vote for Dawn to be her partner. Of course, I don't want that. I'm just to selfish. Hehehe. The four chapters that have featured her have become my favorite. Part of it is because of the sex for sure but the rest is because of the character development you have done with her. I just love her smile that just touches the corners of her mouth and her smile squint. Wow. I love Mavis and Ada, but, dawn is the "bomb". She seems the total package, great body, pretty, gentle and a giving soul and absolutely great in bed.

The sex. what can I say. I'm very happy to see strap-on use again. I was near ecstatic to see it again so soon. I was afraid I would have to wait a long time to see it again. When Laura ordered the double penetrator I thought dawn would be just perfect for it. Boy, was I right. Again, a big thank you for the strap-on use.

I love oral sex and I got a real squirt of excitement when Laura sucked Dawn's clit and a lot of her cunt into her mouth. Woo wee!!!

The hair pulling, I was glad to see that Laura finally decided to see the thrill and devastating affect having the hair pulled can cause. I'm happy to see she was open to it. This is too much for some women. Before that, Laura got to rub her pussy on dawn's wonderful abs again. I just loved the way how dawn was in a semi sitting position. I can close my eyes and see it all. The sight, sound, smell and feel. It was just so real.

As usual, the sex was great, and each segment just seemed so real and just flowed from scene to scene. I just have to congratulate you again. It seems so real to me. It really seems so natural and real life. I love it so much.

This chapter really brought another facet of the story to light that I like so much. Both dawn and Laura were trying so hard to please each other. They try to tune their whole actions and thoughts on pleasing the other. I think that women are just plain superior on this. I like the way that Laura fought off her orgasm with the sole reason being she Didn't want to take from dawn's pleasure. It was nice touching part.

When dawn first mentioned her interest in BDSM it got my attention. Our previous emails kept me from getting too nervous. You played it just perfect for my taste. You did just enough to heighten the sexual tension without going over the top. It makes sense actually, since dawn likes it rough. Her interest in BDSM would only be natural. I'm glad Laura is there to teach her restraint. In this, a little bit is better than going hog wild.

Thinking about this, I loved the total trust that dawn showed in Laura. There was no fear in her. She had total trust and love in Laura. Again, she is just so special. I loved the way she just opened her mouth for the ball. I loved the way you described the total love and complete opening of herself to Laura when Laura prepared to fuck her with the strap-on. It was touching moment. I have said that dawn is becoming special to me. Geez, its like you're trying to make her just so damm precious and perfect.

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Chapter 252:

I finally got a chance to read your latest chapter for pure pleasure. It was hot and very pleasure inducing. When I can set down and focus on the story and the sex, I'm totally blown away. Sometimes I think you are trying to kill me with these stories. Again it was the combination of the great sex and then the just the story itself. All the additional things that you add.

I really enjoyed getting to know Taneesha better. You were wondering if you captured her in this chapter. As you laid her out in her introduction, she seemed very in character. She seems totally self absorbed (except for Laura touching her with her loving). Taneesha is one very self focused woman. In a way I envy her, since everything is about her from her view point, she doesn't have to worry about others and their feelings. I think that this was perfectly captured by her last comment about Shontay. Coming from her, it was not cruel, she was just making a statement of facts as she sees them. She totally missed all the emotional implications. She simply can't see them.

I really enjoyed all the time that Laura and Taneesha spent with each other before they got back to Laura's apartment. It was like a date. It was just nice to read and go along for the ride. It was nice to follow along and see them have a nice time except for Laura being put off by Taneesha's veiled comments about her and Deshona. Taneesha is always probing looking for an advantage.

When I looked at the photos of Taneesha (thanks!) again on my desktop computer I was really taken by her beauty. She has a beautiful face, lithe body and an all star pussy. I noticed that right away (I hope your not surprised by that - hehehe). It was like wow, what a pleasure treasure.

When I was looking at the photos I was thinking at first that Taneesha had a look of cunning on her face. I almost thought she would seem like an worthy adversary. Kind of like a Rhonda character. But then I went back for another look and discovered something. She has the same look on all her photos. Her expression is almost always the same, just variations of the same basic look. I found it a little disconcerting at first. I could definitely see this person being a little empty up top. Always looking at you like she is trying to get one over on you but doing nothing else. She doesn't have the intelligence or drive to use her craftiness. You redeem her by making her basically cute with her self absorption. Fortunately, I think Taneesha is cute in her coyness. She is not a bitch about it.

I thought that the love making was totally awesome ba-beee. Another winner. I was happy to see Laura give another woman who had never had sex with another woman, the insight that there is no better sex around.

You brought up something in this story that I have meet a few times myself. Some women are just naturally quite. I guess some women just don't have big orgasms. I'm glad Laura was able to hit the magic buttons to get Taneesha off That's one thing I love about this story. Laura always comes through in the end. I just love erotic fiction.

You captured again a quality trait of women that is so positive. I think the vast majority of men are satisfied if the woman even seems remotely satisfied. Women want more. They truly want to pleasure and love their bed partner. They want to truly satisfy the body and thus the soul. Women try to tune themselves into their lovers. You capture this with Laura perfectly. Her immediate reaction was I can give this girl more pleasure than this. I also like the confusion that Laura felt over the first orgasm, paraphrasing, "that's it?". I smiled at that. Laura then tuned all her senses onto Taneesha and used all her focus and all her skills to take Taneesha to heaven. Also, women are willing to try and go for an encore.

I loved the sex acts themselves. I was doing the "squirm" in my chair while I was reading. It was really really good. I liked all the teasing and then the feasting of Taneesha's all star pussy, and then Laura finishing Taneesha off in round one with some good old fashion pussy to pussy rubbing. That really got me hot. I absolutely adore having my ears teased and made love to.

You gave me some more of those little details I like. The way Taneesha was clutching at the sheets. Then the way that one knee spasms during her big orgasm. I really loved how Taneesha arched her body to the point that only the back of her head was on the bed. It's simply beautiful to see that.

I felt you had a truly beautiful line in this story. You said that one can give as much pleasure by giving your body to your lover. Giving pleasure by simply letting your partner use your body. Letting them make love to the sum total of yourself. A complete giving and surrounding of self. This is so true. Lesbians receive almost as much pleasure in the act of giving as they do when they are the ones receiving pleasure. I think lesbians are as a rule, are naturals at this, though, there are exceptions. Men seem to aggressive to understand this.

Then after the sweet sex, you finished the story with some delicious angst. I really felt for Shontay. I felt her confusion and pain. I felt for Laura, caught again. I can't wait to see how she gets Shontay back into her arms. I love all this conflict. It really makes the story kick. It just adds another layer to the story.

You made a comment about writing for yourself. I totally agree. This writing for yourself has made this story so special and you should never change. I hope I never make you feel like I'm trying to influence you with my total love of Laura. I just want to come along for the ride.

I have noticed a few opera allusions in our emails. I love classical music. I'm reminded of "atonal" music based on Arnold Shoneberg's 12 note system (forgive any misspelling). This was trying to take classical music beyond its current dead state as he saw it. If your not familiar with it, let me sum it up.--IT SUCKS!!!!. The reason I mention this I remember an interview with a composer about this kind of music. it was from the 50's. He basically said, "I write for myself and if you don't like, well that is just tough shit". Well, like, yeah, of course no one wants to listen to your stuff any ways. To me it sounds like cats caterwauling. ---- then we have Beethoven. When someone asked him about his late string quartets and that they were not pleasant to the ears, his reply was "I'm writing for a future age" and he was right. 180 years later its still beyond us. It is perfection.

The reason I wrote the above is because your writing is like Beethoven's. People want to read it. We find it to be immensely enjoyable. If your writing for yourself did not produce these masterpieces then your pages would not receive the hits it does and I would have read a few stories and moved on. You madam, are the Beethoven (actually for me, your the Franz Schubert) of lesbian erotica You are writing what we want to read. Please never change, by first pleasing yourself you are in turn pleasing your worshippers. I'm just happy you're willing to share.

Please don't tell me your a huge fan of atonal music.

More thoughts on Dawn:

After I sent you my last email I decided to read all the dawn stories consecutively. I wanted to try and get a better feel for her. I'm glad I did.

I had not realized until I reread the first chapter with dawn just how malleable she was to Laura. It was obvious that she was more than ready and willing to become Laura's love kitten. I can totally understand. Even though she had never had a f/f relationship, she seems like a very open minded person. Being that, if the two women I grew up with were telling me about this woman who was fucking their brains out and taking them to heaven with orgasms that were totally mind blowing, I would be ready and willing to have sex with her. It was almost like she was the one doing the seducing. That was nice to read.

I just have to reiterate again, dawn seems to be a most special person. Her ways are just so gentle. I will always be happy to read a new chapter with her.

I have been thinking for the last few months that you have just the write balance between details and letting the reader use their imagination. I am totally amazed by this. The reason is because your stories are just so hot that I keep thinking that you must be giving me the most detailed descriptions to produce such strong feelings. You do give wonderful visual descriptions of your sex scenes, but you leave just the right amount for us to use our own imagination. I love it when you write (paraphrasing) "you mean like this." "aieeeeeee". You do it right after you give some hot details and then I supply the rest when you leave it to us. Again, your sense of balance is fabulous.

Another thing that your last chapter brought out was the humor between Laura and her lovers. I just loved the banter between her and dawn. Their little game was cute. In the past Laura has often laughed with her lovers. This is something that I love about women. Of course we want to give each other mind blowing orgasms but there is no reason we can't have a little humor along the way. Just from what I've read and watched and discussing with hets and gay men, I just don't get that impression about their relationships. Of course, I could be totally off base. I just want to thank you for showing this in Laura's relationships. Again, I don't think I seen this in other writers. They are just to interested in only giving us sex, not real characters interacting.

I see in your last few emails that you are still not getting much feed back and a lot of what you get is requests for various sex acts. I want you know that I do wish you got more feedback and that people would give you some deserved praise and let you know what they like about the story. I myself cannot understand how anyone can read these stories and not get into the story and flood you with praise. There is just so much to get into.

I think it is a little selfish of people to ask for sex scenes and not "feed the bard". That is just not fair. Also, once people have gotten into this story some, they just shouldn't ask for things that Laura just wouldn't do. The one that struck me was the person asking for oriental women. Its like, hello, Laura is not into Asian women.

I can tell you put a lot of thought and effort into your work and unlike what seems like all of Hollywood, will be true to Laura and her women and not write something that is not first true to them.

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Chapter 253:

Now onto chapter 253. I LOVED it. You might find that hard to believe with the het sex in it. True, it is not my preference, but, for some reason, your stuff is great! I have recently tried to read some stories with "fuck sluts" looking for multiple penetrations and I have been pushing through the chapters of "island paradise" and its het chapters. I just find it so hard.

I've wondered why I don't find your het stuff hard to read. First, fortunately, it is not often. Actually, I think the het chapters are hot when it is Laura with another m & f. After pondering some, I think it is because it seems so real. It seems natural to the story. It is not gratuitous. Plus, it just flows so smoothly. An idea just formed. It is not manufactured. The other stories het sex just seems so forced and contrived while yours flows and burns with true erotic heat.

Also, your pacing with your sex scenes is just dead on. I have always loved this about your stories and it has only improved over the last half of Laura's journey. I think that this gift you have developed carry's over into the het sex. When it is f/f/m I simply love it.

One last thing about the het sex is how you make your male characters okay and enjoyable to read. Rob is a cad, but he was fun to read despite all his faults. In other stories the men are merely cardboard cutouts or lechers.

I loved how the story started. I has been a while since Laura beat herself up over her actions. It was fun to get another dose of it. I think it is touching that she does care about her lover's and tries to do them right. It was pure angst. I liked how she tried to decide what to do about the situation. She is still deciding what is the best action and still being half way honest with herself. I can't wait to see how it gets resolved.

I also loved how she tried to be chaste for her "sinful" actions and lasted for THREE whole days. What a hoot. I loved it.

One thing this chapter reminded me again of is how you make all your women individuals with strengths and weaknesses. Plus, they seem so real and alive. I like how they are fairly well adjusted. They are not victims or nymphomaniacs who only live to be fucked. I like how Shontay acts strong but is really insecure on the inside. I know several people like that. I think Laura was beginning to help her in that regard but now must start over again. I think she has definitely helped Ada and Deshona.

I giggled when I read Taneesha's phone message. It was cute. Laura has once more touched a woman and let her discover the thrilling highs of lesbian sex. Hopefully, another addict for life. I really liked the [] and the descriptions contained within them. It made the message so much more fun to read. I can't wait for the next encounter. My belly flutters a little when I think of the spanking to come. I hope Laura makes her ass flame with pain and pleasure.

Chanitra. What can I say. She was a delight in this chapter and I was so happy to see her again. She has a body that is made to be fucked. I can see why Laura's belly turns to jelly when she is near. She is Fucking hot. I love her nipples.

Just like I like valley girl "speak", I love reading Ebonics. It is just so much fun to read and I'm happy you put into the story. Again, you make it seem natural to the character and not gratuitous. It makes her seem so sassy and sexy and alluring. Also, it adds that humor I like to read. I love chuckling when I read a story.

It was nice to learn a little more about Yvette and Chanitra and their family history. What I really found interesting is the friction between the two. Hopefully, we will find out. But then again, maybe we won't. in life, one doesn't solve all of life's mysteries. It will be interesting to see if the answer leads to hot sex somewhere down the road. Yes, I know, I'm a pervert.

I loved how Chanitra flirted and played difficult with Laura but played up to Rob. I've noticed that. Women really know how dance around each other, around and around. It made for nice interactions between Laura and Chanitra.

It was interesting to read Laura's thoughts on Rob. I had forgotten a lot of his past history with Laura. I remembered the double cocks in the pussy episode. But not the other stuff. It was neat to watch Laura seethe over it. The emotions seemed pure and real. She was very justified in her simmering anger over the past affronts. The guy is a creep. But he was kind of endearing in his male ego kind of way. He is kind of like, hey, its in the past. It's water under the bridge, forget it and lets move forward with some hot fucking.

Having said that, it was a blast to read her overcoming her feelings once her juices got to flowing and she realized that some hot thrilling sex could result. I also, get the feeling that Laura really wanted to make Chanitra's dream of going out on a boat happen. It was nice seeing the two differing thoughts coming together. I could feel Laura's lust rise with the thoughts of her and rob teaming up to make Chanitra scream in ecstasy. Hot!

I really enjoyed how Chanitra showed off her body knowing she is hot and desirable. I love your confident women who are proud of their body's and willing and able to share with Laura. I love this bravado, but I really love the emotion underlying it. They want Laura to ravage them.

The sex was hot, hot, hot!!! I just love the way you cram so much heat into your stories. I think I have mentioned before, but your sex just flows from scene to scene without it seeming contrived. Plus, you make each scene hot. You started with a make out session, Laura gets fucked from the rear, Chanitra gives head and fucks dick with her titties, Laura eating Chanitra out with her knees on the floor and Chanitra's thighs on her shoulders (hot), then Chanitra gets it doggy style in the pussy, then the ass while Laura eats her out, then Laura tongue fucks her ass and finally Chanitra eats Laura out. THAT is a lot of sex and you make it seem like it couldn't have happened any other way. You are a treasure. (I didn't forget the sex on the deck).

You brought out a couple things during the sex I wanted to comment on. one is the way you honestly portrayed 69 sex. Usually one or the other partner gets off in this position. It is just so hard to concentrate when your pussy is being ravaged and driven insane with pleasure. You try to do your duty and then a magic spot is hit and you totally forget what the hell you were supposed to be doing. I have found that one woman has a spectacular orgasm and then positions are usually changed to something else to finish off the other.

You also mentioned the differences between a man and a strap-on. How they were both good just different. You then mentioned the feeling of the raw power that a male has. I have to agree with this. A man who is strong and skilled can be hard to match with a strap-on. It can be done, but a woman has to concentrate to match the power and innate skill that men can achieve with their cocks. Their bodies are so much more dense than ours. They are just naturally powerful. They bring this with them into bed. Its just that most men don't seem to know what to do with it. Rob does. Women must concentrate to generate the power that men just have. Also, we have to make sure that Mr. dildo doesn't misbehave. What women might lack in power they make up with skill and imagination. I did love how Rob changed his angle of attack at the end of his ass "rape" to drill down into Chanitra from more of a 90 degree angle. That was fucking hot.

I like how Laura initiated Chanitra getting her ass fucked. That was just so cute. Her waving the bottle of baby oil in front of him. I had to chuckle. I love how Laura's mind works. She entices rob so she can have Chanitra's beautiful pussy all to herself. What I really loved was how Laura spread Chanitra's ass cheeks for the penetration. I loved all the details of the ass penetration. It. Was. Hot.

Again you had little details that just made the chapter perfect. Most writers just have the person looking back at their partner while in the basic 69 position but you add the detail that Chanitra moves her head to peek under her arm at Laura and then head rocks forward when rob starts to penetrate her ass. That changes the scene from ho hum to fucking hot.

Another example was when Chanitra tried to look at rob but she is thrown forward upon another killing thrust. Other writers don't show the woman struggling to move her head to look at her lover and just as she makes eye contact, WHAM, a killing thrust that makes them melt and moan and flop forward.

The final example was how Laura struggled to keep her arms around Chanitra's thighs while she had her tongue buried in her ass and Chanitra is spasming though killer spasm after killer spasm. I think must writers would just have Laura with her tongue buried in Chanitra's ass with no struggle to keep it in while Chanitra orgasms. You make it so much more hot by having Laura struggle to hold on and keep her tongue deeply buried in Chanitra's back door treasure.

I like how the storied ended with Laura and Chanitra parting from Rob and Laura discovering that Chanitra felt like her. It was just a sport fuck and nothing more. Chanitra feelings are only for Laura. No future entanglements like what happened with Randi. Yes!!!! The actual ending itself, Puuurrrfffect. I fucking loved it!

In ending, I just want to say that this chapter left me with the feeling of "cuteness". You just had thing after thing that made me smile and chuckle. I really enjoyed all of them.

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Chapter 254:

Your response you sent back to chapter 253 got me to thinking. You brought up some thoughts that got me to thinking. You wrote about you using "pungent" details to make the stories more hot. I agree with this totally and noticed that soon after my journey with Laura began. You seem to have the knack of just using the right balance between giving details where they have the most impact and then switch to letting the reader supply the details. I am always amazed how you are able to hit this balance over and over.

For me though, the details that you supply that make these stories so special are the personal details. I think that is where so many writers make a big mistake. They just have their characters fuck. They meet and almost immediately start to fuck. it is always that "instant attraction". That happens of course all the time in real life, but all that makes for is one night stands. While they may be hot in retrospect, they don't really touch the soul. Reminds me of Wilt Chamberlain boasting of screwing 20,000 women. I thought, geez, that is like having sex on an assembly line. They are just faces that blur together. That is the feeling I get with most erotic writings. They are just sex shows.

As you have intimated, you try and make your characters real. And that is what makes your stories so masterful. I actually care for each of the women in this story and thus I really, REALLY get into their couplings with Laura. My feelings of actually liking these women and caring for what happens to them and makes the sex seem almost real.

This gets back to your details that you provide to your women. It is like how Jane will show an almost shocking vulnerability out of no where. How Shontay will show vulnerability and then try to put on a cold mask and then crumble again. It is making Dawn just so darn special. It is having Charise craving attention. Ada and her religious upbringing hang-ups. You could make your characters "real" without these little extra details, but adding them, makes them truly real characters who almost seem to breath. Other writers don't even seem to try.

Another thing is just the timeline that you have developed. It is the fact that Laura has interacted with Shontay over so many chapters that made Shontay's discovery of Laura with Taneesha so devastating. It is how only after time and couplings that Brenda is only now really starting to feel a strong connection to Laura. This is a journey that is always taking the reader in unexpected directions, with many surprises.

I once more have to applaud you with this ability to keep the story going. No other writer has come close to this odyssey. I can't begin to conceive the imagination and discipline this must take. The only other story that had multiple chapters in the lesbian genre started out white hot. She posted almost every few days but then slowed down until they were months apart. They never had the details you have. Just episodes of sex and towards the end they seemed to get a little forced and bizarre. You keep yours real and natural. I feel like these stories could be happening down the street from me.

The guy who wrote about Laura getting "repetitive" made me think, "like duh". Of course it is going to repeat the basic sex acts. Even if you took all the suggestions I and other readers could give you, and made Laura totally bi and open to all kinds of sex acts it would still repeat itself. Our bodies can only do so many things. You are so totally right about it being the emotion that keeps it from being truly repetitive. Is the emotion that drives the sex in Laura's story. The sex doesn't just happen, it happens because of the love that Laura has for these women or at least a strong feeling of attraction and a real liking of these women. Laura doesn't "fuck" women, she makes "love" to them. This makes all the difference in the world.

I like how the story itself started. It is a change of pace, usually the character development starts the chapter then the hot sex. I really enjoyed it. I got my desired character development with Charise. I loved how you were able to segue between the two parts. Again, another example of your masterful writing.

I loved how the chapter just started with Brenda and Laura loving each other's tits. Since it didn't happen this chapter, I hope for a future chapter where Laura makes it happen. Laura always remembers these promises and delivers if she ever gets the chance. I found it very hot how Brenda closed her eyes, clenches her teeth and moans through them. That is just so fucking hot. That is just so darn real! That is the kind of detail that you are always using that makes these stories so HOT!

I loved how you use " " to be able to describe a sound effect that you just couldn't have the character saying (whoosh). This allowed you put in yet another hot sound that Laura and her lovers could make. I loved your "sounds" from almost the very beginning. All of this together just makes me wonder how you can make this all seem so wonderful. I think a lot of it is because you always make the act of sex seem like the supreme event we always strive to make it. Other writers make it seem so mechanical and wooden by not putting any emotional context around it. They just make into one night stands after another. After a while they almost become numbing. Your women always react so strongly I think because of the underling deep feelings that are involved.

I loved how Laura and then Brenda focus so strongly on each other. Brenda almost turns her fucking Laura into a religious experience because she focuses so strongly on what she is doing. She wants to give Laura everything she can. It is touching. The way she introduces her fist into Laura is just plain tender and very emotional. Again, it is the emotion that you have developed that makes this devotion so natural.

I loved the fun they had in bed. Like when Brenda rolled Laura onto her back so she could feast on Laura's breast. The way Brenda then made comical noises while suckling Laura. I have yet to find another writer show this aspect in lovemaking. I'm so thankful that you do. When lovers show humor, for me at least, that shows a deep connection to your bed mate. Then the way you describe orgasms. That was the first thing that hooked me about your stories. No one comes even close. You are Zeus sitting on mount Olympus. The others are only pretenders.

I really love this line: "Brenda's murky black eyes seemed to show scintillating flashes of electrical fire, like tiny lightning bolts going off within her eyeballs. Fuck me, Laura, she said with her lips, but making no sound. Fuck me." Oh geez. That is fucking hot. The descriptions of what is visible in Brenda's eyes is oh so fucking beautiful. You have a truly great handle on the English language.

Finally, in the segue between Brenda and Charise, it was nice to see that Brenda was not jealous of the situation. She gracefully bowed out, waiting for her next coupling with Laura.

I thought Charise initial reaction was natural. She is only 17 and would naturally be upset to see Laura with another woman. But quickly, she shows the joy she feels being in Laura's presence. It is Laura she goes too, to get her spirits lifted. I really liked the way that Laura caught up to Charise because she is waiting for a light to change. That says so much about Charise; following the rules. Jane would just have kept going.

I love how Charise brings out the mother hen in Laura. I noticed that with Cecilia. Laura's mother instinct kicks in around these women. I love how she keeps making sure that she is gentle with Charise and is extra careful not to hurt her. Laura shows her true gentle nature with these thoughts and actions.

I found it cute how Laura starts out thinking I must not have sex with Charise. I will be strong and resist all temptations. We all know she will fail, but it is a hoot to read her will crumbling. It is humorous watching her journey towards lust. She did try, she really did. Hehehe. Charise didn't help Laura. It was a hoot to see that it was Charise doing all the seducing. She had answers to all of Laura's objections. Laura never had a chance. It was cool seeing the "innocent" lead the chase.

I loved how Laura was so gentle with Charise and called her "inky" with such obvious truthful emotion. It is so clear the emotion that she feels for Charise. Laura does everything she can to make Charise feel happy and to buck her up. Their bond becomes so much stronger with all this tenderness. It is just so touching hearing Laura saying "inky" and "darling" to make Charise happy. I am always happy when Charise is made happy. I just love her. I think she is pretty. Her face just shines when she smiles.

It was cool watching Charise hormones kick in and curse at Laura when Laura tried to resist her sexual overtures. That was a hoot. I loved the way that she saw clearly through Laura's lies about Brenda. She didn't buy it. She didn't really get upset, but, she wanted to make it clear she knew the up and up: ["Ain't gon' hurt the baby," Charise said. "You just don't want me to go in there 'cause you been fucking that beautiful sista you was with in there." Laura blushed as hotly and as red as she had ever done. "See. I knew it." Laura raised both hands to her burning face instinctively, as if that would make it stop, but it lasted and lasted. Finally, without speaking, she reached down and took Charise's hand. She turned and drew Charise behind her toward the bedroom.] This made me really laugh. I loved it.

I am happy that Charise is keeping the baby. I don't think I have to worry about getting pregnant, but, if I did, I think I would keep the baby. I loved how Laura stroked and paid homage to the new life gestating in Charise.

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Chapter 255:

your last few emails got me to thinking about lesbian erotica in general. there are few things that you do in your stories that others just don't. This came to me right after chapter 254 came out, and I was reading a few filler stories to tide me over. I have thought about it since.

First, you are the only writer that really describes the woman's vagina. Other writers just don't describe a woman's cunt. You might read about the hair around it and maybe that they have big lips. That is it. They don't make the reader see just how beautiful a woman's vagina truly is. The more I think about this, the more I find it a little weird. I can understand het sex not focusing on it. I mean that is not the focus of the stories, since the focus is in on the penetration of the vagina by the penis. But with lesbian sex the focus is up close and personal. I mean our focus is predominately oral and digital. This gets us right up and close to the action so to speak. You always give such loving detail about each of Laura's partner's quim. I can sit her and think of the recent lover's and remember each woman's individual vagina. I love it. I think that every woman's vagina is like a fingerprint. It is truly unique. I'm just so happy That you give such loving detail to this with your story.

The second thing I have touched on some in the past. That is your description of the actual orgasm. It just hit me that other writers just don't come close to doing it justice. They just give you the usual lack of details and then give you "they came" or if you are really lucky, "they came hard'. This is just weird. The whole goal of sex is give each other great mind blowing orgasm. Every writer should make the event seem like the supreme spiritual event that you make it. You describe how the body goes through all the physical reactions that a great orgasm gives one. Actually, a writer recently gave a fairly good description, but still no verbal queues. You attack all the senses by giving us sight, smells, tastes feel and sounds. Others only give one maybe two and usually none. After the searing physical descriptions, you then come up with such great descriptions of how they make Laura feel in her mind and her soul. You are constantly telling the reader basically how Laura is being turned inside out by her orgasm. You make it into the divine experience it is. You are the muse of old, spinning out your stories of supreme divine revelations. Keep em coming (pun intended).

Another thing is the after glow of sex, but I will talk about that later. You had beautiful examples of this with Shontay.

Now about chapter 255. I lovvvvved it.

For me, this chapter was primarily about seduction. It had the usual great sex and character development and nice allusions. But it was the seduction that drove this chapter. I guess about forty percent of the chapter was dedicated to this. I loved it. By putting all this attention to this, you were able to make it a sweet, lovingly detailed event. Most important, it was believable, based on real feelings and tender caring. It was not just sex. You invested great time in this, and the pay off was the explosive sex that followed. I don't think it would have had the power without the long seduction. You change the sex from rutting to bonding and healing.

Other writer's wouldn't have gone here to begin with I believe. Or they just would have made it an event for more sex with no sweet emotion tied to it. This was a real event. This was two women finding their way back to each other. Two women who longed for each other and desired a reconciliation.

I like how the story starts out with Laura's obvious pain over the situation. She truly feels pain over the situation. She is not thinking about trying to get in Shontay's pants (though lust does simmer beneath the surface). She wants to make amends. While she is not really at fault, she knows she hurt Shontay deeply. She now realizes the depths of Shontay's feelings and knows she must make it up to Shontay. The only question becomes how.

I know exactly how Laura felt. Trying to go up against that can be truly terrifying, especially when one is in the wrong. I love how she first plays cat-and-mouse with Shontay. Trying at all cost to avoid any potential explosive meeting. But, yet, still, the emotions simmer underneath. Laura's conscious slowly but surely compels her to confront Shontay. To risk and dare for a resolution. To get Shontay back. Slowly her courage increases. Then opportunity literally knocks.

I loved how Laura first freaks and then sees the opportunity that having Shontay upstairs to feed the cat presents. I chuckled a little when she spased about Shontay and feeding the cat. Will Shontay show up? She does. I like how Laura just acted, without thinking about it. If she had thought about it she would have chickened out. Again, like real life. Courage can be a very hard thing to find. I think this puts Laura into a very positive light. She risked and won. And the best part, her reasons are honest and pure. You made this all real and not some parody by the purity of emotion involved between these two "real" women.

The scene at the door was very powerful. You could just feel the tension in the air. Those short clipped answers by Shontay were devastating. They leave one with such little wiggle room. She made sure Laura knew that she, Laura, was at fault. That the relationship was dead. The line that you used here was so beautiful and poetic, "The silence in the hallway where Laura was standing was painful, like a mausoleum, the place where dead dreams went to repose". That pretty well sums up the situation at that time. Finally, she gets inside. Her sincere desire for giving an apology has gotten her inside the door. Finally, I liked how Laura bitched about the peep hole. I've noticed that people tend to bitch and complain when we get nervous and upset. Again it is such a nice human touch.

I really liked the part about the cat rubbing up against Laura and what Laura said about the cat being happy to see her. That is fate. If that cat had not chosen that time to do what it did, there is a good chance that Laura would not have succeeded. That was cool. Life is strange and so convoluted. One must seize what fate hands you.

Laura quickly gives up any pretense and opts for true emotion and slowly she wins. But the reader gets all this great cat-and-mouse. Will Laura win out or not. I have to give Laura credit, for keeping at it, despite all the verbal abuse Shontay was giving her. But finally, Laura gets her chance. I knew Shontay was a goner when she didn't throw Laura back out the door. Shontay never really prevents Laura from having her way. She makes Laura fight for every inch of ground, but never truly prevents her advances. I loved it. It mirrors life. When people truly desire each other, that desire will win out, if fear is overcome.

Finally, Laura can get her lands on Shontay. I loved the cat-and-mouse of the physical seduction. It was just so sweet and tender, this slow seduction. You made it so real by making it so slow and detailed. That was just so sweet having Laura sit by the sofa like that. The physical contact was so gentle and loving. I don't think anyone could withstand those kind of gentle caresses when their so much emotion under the surface. Without the emotion, I think Shontay would have quickly stopped the whole scene. It would have been a crass attempt at only cheap sex. But the underlying emotion caused a slow throbbing to start. The amount of time and dialogue make this all just so real and sweet.

The actual physical elements of the seduction were very hot and yet gentle. All the gentle caresses and gentle rubbing of the cheek on the dress and then leg. Then the slow escalation of lust. I can't figure out how to say it makes me feel exactly. It was simply divine. No other writer with the exception of Ann Douglas (she is good, but still not in your league) makes all this seem so real. This is how real people interact with each. You give us love and desire while almost all others give us only sex and rutting.

With Shontay herself we see that she has grown. With Laura's encouragement she is starting to wear clothes that are more flattering to her slim frame. She is like a lot of women and even some men. They are not happy with the body they are born with. I can see where she was learned to hate her body with the teasing that a skinny girl gets while an adolescent. Her self confidence must be growing. Laura is helping her to see her body for the masterpiece it is. I find her to be a real beauty. It is amazing for someone so slim to be so shapely. It is amazing how one feels better about oneself when you find someone(s) who tell how they find you desirable. I loved how Laura felt compelled to only observe Shontay from around corners at work. Cute as usual. In a way it is a sad commentary about our society. Oh well.

I loved how you describe Shontay's anger. The way she stood with her tall regal baring with her nostrils flaring. I loved the line, "Look at how stiff she is . . . and god, she looks magnificent when she's angry, with her regal, fierce contempt, her nostrils twitching like that". She seemed like the queen looking down on the unworthy subject, waiting to announce sentence. As the story progressed I was sure a cat fight was going to happen. You could feel the palpable anger of Shontay and Laura responding to it and becoming sexual excited. Then it didn't happen. I was actually surprised. Laura didn't want to take it there. I loved it. Laura backed off and gave us the wonderful seduction instead. Again, it felt natural and right to the story.

Then as the story progressed she went form this imperial air to a submissive kitten. I loved how she just stared at Laura as she was lead by Laura through their sex acts. The "starry eyed" look of total devotion. She becomes the innocent. I really liked her love of dirty language. Again you show your women to be individuals. Where Shontay finds it sexually exciting and wants to here it, Ada is still struggling to overcome her childhood inhibitions.

It was fun to discover through Laura that Shontay is actually a warm, caring and funny individual. A lot of the time that is so true. You just need to get though the walls that a person throws up for self protection. I am glad that Laura was able to repair the damage to the relationship and that this side of Shontay can continue to be seen. She even helped her through this chapter to make peace about Laura's other lovers and is even able to joke about it. I really loved that last line. [Shontay trembled but summoned up enough of her old steel for a sharp reply. "Careful what you wish for, girl," she breathed.] What makes this is so great is you have to really know Shontay to get the nuances of this line. One must invest in the story to get it. I love it.

With Laura herself, we see her love for these women. She frets over the situation and does what is necessary to set it right. She realizes that sometimes, when a person has never experienced great sex, they can easily confuse that with love. She will not make that mistake again with Shontay. She now makes an effort to tune into this and not let it surprise her again. At the end she she works to buck Shontay up when Shontay feels insecure about her other lovers and helps Shontay to come to terms with it.

I love how physical Laura is. She is stimulated by Shontay's calves as she walks away and that alone is enough to excite her. This gets her to where she feels like the blood is about to pump out of her body in excitement. Reminds me of once back in high school. I was with a friend, Shannon. We met a girl and talked for a while and then we went our separate ways. I started telling Shannon about how I thought the girl had beautiful eyebrows, her ears were cute and had a pretty laugh. Shannon said, "yeah, but what about that gap between her front teeth". My mouth just dropped. I look for the things that are beautiful and so many people only find the faults. I think Laura is like me in this. She looks for the beauty and thus finds it.

Laura shows her consideration when she feels for Shontay when she doesn't come the second time on the chair. She immediately works to correct that. She stays in tune with her lover. It is that sensitivity that allows Laura to fuck her brains out.

I loved the sweet after glow that Shontay and Laura shared. This is something that you always show with your lover's. This is where a lot of the bonding occurs and growth in their relationships. You can almost feel Shontay and Laura drawing closer to each other during this time. This is another aspect that other writer's don't use. They just have the characters laying together in repose and then sleeping, but no sweet sharing between two spent and caring partners. I'm so happy to find a writer who gives the reader this.

Needless to say, the sex was scorching. When I saw the chair, my pulse immediately jumped. Then the way you were able to segue from Laura seducing Shontay to her putting her mouth on the panties and then started to blow on them. I love how Shontay just turned to jelly and totally lost her will to resist. I loved how Laura jammed her tongue in and then pulled them aside at just the right time to devour her cunt.

Then she takes Shontay over to the chair and commences to fuck the hell out of her, pussy to pussy. You are one the few authors to give us tribadism and only you give the details that truly make it hot. I like how Laura and Shontay jammed and grind their cunts together and they way their quims got so juicy and runny when the orgasms hit. I love the power you put into. It does feel like a loving rape. That total taking control and the using all the power that your body has. I like how they did it to each other. Then they talk about doing it again. Once, twice is not enough. Hehehe. I then loved how you finished it off by having Shontay grinding her cunt down into Laura's willing and waiting mouth. I love how Laura brings out this forceful side to her lovers.

A few miscellaneous things I liked in the chapter. You use such beautiful allegory. A couple examples are [Then, as she stood waiting, all her courage suddenly left her, draining away like the water in the bottom of a basin. // She could be an ice pillar of scorn.] I just love this beautiful language.

The last thing is the idea that Laura might be moving in the not to distant future. I find myself hoping she can find a place where she and her lovers can scream their heads off. Hopefully, it will be centered where she has easy access to her various lovers. I immediately started to fantasy about her and beautiful black female real estate agents and hot sex. Can't wait to see what will happen from here on this.

Lastly, I want to compare this chapter with the last chapter of "Island Paradise". It was almost a character development chapter; it had no sex. It fell flat because there was no real emotion in it. At the end of the chapter one of the women slaps the main character when he shows her his voyeur room. It was like ho hum. She was pissed because he had been spying on her and the other women. Again no true emotion. Just anger over manipulation. There is no true emotion between any of the characters. Only sex. If only sex binds you, you are doomed to failure. Sex will always fade with time if there is no foundation. I could care less if the man and the women get together in "Island Paradise". Who cares. The writer gives me no reason to care.

With Laura's Story I do care because these are real people who truly feel. When these characters are in pain it is real. The situations are real and true to life. Thus, the healing, when it comes is so powerful. If you don't care for the person, why should you care for a reconciliation. You give us a reason to care.

Finally, with "Island Paradise" the main character talks about maybe settling down with one woman or another. It was all centered on sex. Not the woman's personality or soul. Only her body and how well she fucked the main character. When I think about the women in Laura's Story I think about their personalities. When I think about these women and which one I would want, it has nothing to do with sex. It is based on who and what they are. I couldn't do this if you didn't give me real characters to contemplate about.

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Chapter 256:

This was a very sweet chapter for me. You gave me a lot of the character things I like in the beginning of the chapter. New things happening and new things to think about. I love having these things to contemplate over. Then the sex starts and you simply loaded it up with a seeming million little details that leaves my pussy pulsing with excitement. Wow, you took my basic "suggestions" and put your own twist on them to make them totally fucking hot. Hot, I'm telling you.

It was nice to see the confirmation that the rift between Shontay and Laura has been healed. I like the idea of them fucking intensely for a week. This is one thing that Laura can't do is turn down a beautiful who is wanting wanton lesbian sex. I can totally understand why Shontay is being so demanding. She is like Lazarus coming back from the dead. She had given up on sex but finally discovered just how wonderful it can be. Then she thinks she has lost it only to get it back. The fact that lesbian sex can be so intense and protracted just makes her feel like she has died and gone to heaven.

I'm really glad Laura got to fuck dawn. I think this is the first time she got to have dawn without it being a dawn chapter. Laura yearns for her so much. I must confess, when I was reading Laura's story the first time I did get a little frustrated from time to time at the lack of lesbians. The only two full time lesbians are Kim and Barbara. Now, I'm very happy that all these women see themselves initially as being totally straight. First, it gives me all this beautiful seduction. Secondly, it keeps the women at bay. If dawn was gay, and Robert was Roberta, she would be much more likely to ditch her current lover for Laura. My pussy simply wouldn't like that at all. Let me tell you. Laura must keep her freedom from entanglements that would limit her ability to service all these wonderful women.

I'm happy that Randi and Laura have finally really started to heal their rift. I see that chapter 193 is where rob reared his unfortunate head (both of them actually) to mess things up. I'm glad that Randi has moved beyond that. Hopefully, Randi will be wiser in the future. She seems to keeping Nate in his proper place. Second place. Hehehe.

I found Randi's reaction to Shontay to be amusing. She can't really know her at all, except through gossip. I'm guessing she feels threatened by Shontay's power. This definitely has possibilities for the future if you choose. Your friend from Greece, Gianias should feel like he died and gone to the Elysium fields over this potential pairing with Laura. We will have to wait and see if you develop this. It will be interesting to see if her dislike will evaporate over time if she can come to know her better like Laura and Rhonda have. Hopefully, after some intense fucking and cat fighting.

I loved how Randi was so aggressive with her flirting with Laura, rubbing her tit against Laura's arm. It was a big turn on to hear Randi talk about herself as "dark meat". That was just so sexual. I loved the effect that this had on Laura, the way that she got so wet and distracted trying to wait for the rest of the work day to go by. I've had that problem a few times myself.

I'm always amazed at how you are able to make these women's appearance seem so right. You make Kim's appearance so natural. It fits her personality from past chapters. Her unexpected appearances. It fits her wild predatory personality. It just fits. I then like how she tells Laura flat out that no woman can fuck Laura like she can. I love that confidence, like telling Laura she knew Laura couldn't have refused her at the airport the first time. Laura and Kim are the same in this way. They are both just so sexual. I loved how you describe Kim as a golden panther. In her pictures, her eyes do have that predatory look of a big cat.

I really like this paragraph. [Kim actually leered at Randi. Laura had been right, Randi was very alluring with her large, swollen nipples sliding back and forth under the red silk when she moved. You could see the thick, protruding centers as well as the soft, swelling areolas. You could also see the round, bulging sides of her breasts peeking out, and of course the rich dark brown flesh of her shapely thighs. She tossed her braids coltishly, reminding Laura momentarily of Taneesha, who was always doing the same thing.] I think that you just caress Randi with all this beautiful loving descriptive prose.

I love how Laura had to go in the bathroom to change into her teddy because she is so turned on my seeing Kim's beautiful body. Laura is such a physical person who is so in tune with her lust. Here you do something that I love so much. You describe the inflection of these women's voices. As Laura goes into the bathroom, Kim uses a "kittenish" voice. This little extra point makes the scene so much more fun to read. I get to use my "kittenish" voice for Kim here. I do this whenever you describe voice inflections.

I found it interesting how Randi reacted to Kim. In some ways she is similar to Shontay in physical appearance. I mean this in the sense that she is not dark and definitely has other nationalities in her background. With no feelings of competition, she finds her alluring. I almost think that if Shontay and Kim could trade places and everything else kept equal, she would be finding Shontay alluring and hating Kim.

Loved the idea of these women getting into teddies first. Women are willing to take a little effort to heighten the mood even more. I really like the fishnet teddy. I love the now you see it and now you don't and the way it just moves across the skin. Really liked how Randi nearly freaked when she became afraid it would get ripped. I can imagine her trying to explain that to Nate.

Now the story got to the hot steamy sex and I was totally blown away by all the hot little details you gave me. I'm going to wax a little poetic about a lot of them. Hopefully, you won't find it a little boring.

First I just love it when I read about women ramming their tongues down each other throats. I like doing that and, thus, I love reading about it. Another thing that you constantly describe is the eyes of your women, especially when they roll to back of their heads. I especially loved it when you describe Randi's rolling back and describe Laura seeing the whites of her eyes since they stayed back. I really like this because as they say, the eyes are the portals to the soul. You give other beautiful descriptions throughout your stories involving these women's eyes as they are transported to bliss.

Another thing that I have been meaning to write about is the way that Laura makes love to breast. I just love the way she attacks them, especially the nipples. What really turns me on is the way that she and in this story Randi use two hands to hold and squeeze the breast they are making love to. Your women are just so intense in their love making.

Another two thing I have always meant to write about is the playing with hair while a woman is loving your breast or quim. I really like how Kim's hands spastically played with Laura's hair and wrapped Randi's braids in her hand. The way your women run their fingers through the hair and caress the scalp. I love it. I also loved it when Laura gently ran her fingers through her lover's pubic hair. That is just so loving and gentle. The other thing is when your women look down their body at the woman devouring their cunt, and look until their strength gives out and then let their head fall back to the mattress as their strength gives out. This is something you use at just the right time and not to much. Again, only you give me this. Thanks!.

Needless to say, I love how Laura and Randi kissed so ardently while they devoured Kim's body. I love how they did this first at her upper body and then again when they eating her beautiful cunt and sharing her delicious juices. You made it so fucking hot.

Oh geez, I love how they put the pillow under Kim's ass to lift it up so they could get good angles of attack. That was just so fucking hot. The whole devouring of Kim's cunt was super hot. You do this by starting with: [She watched as Randi again extended her long pink tongue and slithered it between Kim's long, wavy cunt lips. Laura could feel Kim's supple body quiver and stiffen slightly as it went in.] This is a subtle affect, but your giving them makes the sex so much more exciting and gets the pump primed for the big explosions.

I thought Laura showed her basic sweet easy going nature by letting Randi take over the clit mauling for the ultimate climax. I'm happy that Laura doesn't try to lord it over the women in her life.

I love when you have your women cradle their lover's ass while eating them out. I also love when they wrap their hands around a woman's hips and grab their ass. This is just something I love to do so much, thus, it is a blast when you do it. I just love helping a woman hump my mouth. I love feeling their mound move my head back as they grind it into my mouth.

You again did that beautiful thing where this time Laura looked back over her shoulder to try and look at the person ramming their cunt from behind with a strap on / dick. Then having them rocked forward when a killing thrust is given. Another thing you do that other authors don't is show that a good lover knows how to vary their thrusting. You have slow sensual strokes, rabbit strokes, deep drilling and then really ramming it all the way home. It is the variety that makes it great. Thank you again for doing this. What I really love doing is pulling the dildo almost all the way out and then ramming it home down to the base. Oh yeah, you capture that just perfect.

I love the fact that Laura is using a nice big strap on that crams the women to the hilt

Once more, your women are in tune with the situation. Laura starts out her solo feasting of Kim's cunt by thinking she will take her time, but adjusts when Randi starts to fuck her. Laura realizes she won't last long with the fucking Randi is giving her and adjusts her attack on Kim to bring her to orgasm quickly. This was done because Laura is being considerate of Kim's needs. Laura knows she will lose track of things once her killer orgasm starts. Laura is making sure to take care of Kim's needs.

This paragraph has everything that makes you so great. Hot sex with great little details. Really loved her awkward kissing up Kim's thighs: [She couldn't help lifting her head and turning it to look back over her shoulder one more time, as if she could see the hammering cock drive directly into her crammed pussy, which was of course impossible, though she could catch sight briefly of the wet, glistening shaft each time Randi pulled it out to the edge of her clasping cunt. As soon as her eyes focused on Randi's swaying breasts, and the grimace of concentration on her lovely face, the pole speared her again, and everything dissolved in a red haze as she was driven forward by the force of Randi's thrust. Her mouth came to rest on one of Kim's slender, golden thighs, and she clumsily kissed her way back up to the girl's oozing, shiny slit, which she hurriedly slurped and licked, then sucked in a purple frenzy, feeling Kim's body give another deep shudder in anticipation of her rising climax.]

I was fascinated by Randi's almost hypnotic trance from using the dildo. I guess she she is hooked on the novelty and the power of using a strap-on. She seems to be a natural with one. Of course, Kim seems to really know how to use it.

The handcuffs used as they were totally blew me away. That would never have occurred to me. You are totally evil (in a totally great, thrilling and fucking hot way). The novelty makes it easy for me imagine Randi's shock and dismay. I really loved all her pleading, whimpering and cursing. It is kind of humorous with how rough she likes to dish it out. It makes her cute and very desirable. Plus, her arguments kind of lose their affect when she is also going "ohhhnnnnnnnn". Laura can see right through her.

Then the actual bowing of Randi's body first by the handcuffs and then the hair pulling. You made the arm pulling incendiary with the handcuffs. I loved the fact that Kim pulled her so far back that Laura could slip underneath her. I can close my eyes and just feel Randi writhing on top of me, all hot and sweaty. I can understand Laura's rapture. Then you made the hair pulling so intense by the way Kim just reached down and just yanked Randi's head back with such force. I know Randi must have been in paradise. I can see why Laura has the attraction and fear of a "virgin". I hope she gets her "hair" cherry popped soon.

I wish I could have been a fly on the wall and seen Randi's face when Laura told Randi she didn't have the keys to the handcuffs. That Randi is one cool sassy bitch. I then thought Laura was one sly cookie by breaking the action and letting things calm down, thus, avoiding getting her hair pulled. It is amazing how quickly the dynamic of a situation can change. I do hope she gets her hair pulled soon. If and when, I can't wait to read her internal reactions. Finally, I loved the way that Kim and Laura rested and spent time together before they commenced to rutting again.

All in all, another very satisfying masterpiece of erotic fiction. Keep em' coming.

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Chapter 257:

I really like this chapter. It felt like a three for the price of one.

We start with 'in medias res' between Laura and Dawn. What I like about this is that this allows you show such intimacy between these two women. We can see them just lounging around and having some sweet after glow time. Unfortunately, for Laura, what dawn wants to talk about are Tamara and Shayla, two of Laura's other lovers. I just love the fact that dawn is not jealous at all about them. She just wants to know about them and how the sex was. She is just curious. This is me to the max.

I think the contrast between dawn and Laura is fun to read. Dawn is calm and in control and Laura's stomach is curdling. I like how Dawn stays so gentle with her questioning. She is not trying to hurt Laura or make her uncomfortable like some of Laura's other lovers. Then we see the contrast between dawn and Laura who is feeling extreme discomfort and later extreme jealousy when Laura discovers that now dawn is starting to look at other women. I always find Laura's reactions to be so cute and fun to read, though, I do feel sorry for her. I always feel that her insecurities just make her so human and vulnerable and, thus, make you truly care for her. She is not a cardboard cutout who is just fucking for fucking's sake. It makes me want to protect her.

With this talk of other lovers and how it is carried out makes me think of intimacy. One has to be comfortable with your partner to have this gentle give and take. This is the talk between two women who are close to each other. This shows women who are communicating to each other on a spiritual level and not just two women who are only fucking and then moving on. Again, this is not mindless sex, but making love and all the sharing that goes with it. I love how no rancor crops up and it just remains a gentle conversation. Dawn never makes it into something spiteful and Laura never gets visibly upset and lashes out. I love this gentleness between women, this sharing and communication.

I thought the feeling of intimacy was heightened by the way that Laura was laying half on top of Dawn with one her breast lodged between both of Dawns. Then the gentle non sexual kisses. This is something that other writers just don't write. I feel this only works because you have taken the effort to build a history between these women of coming to know each other and then intense fucking. Without this history, it just doesn't ring true.

As the story continues I just love how your lovers just pepper each other's faces with non-sexual kisses. Not all kisses have to be hot and sexual in nature. It is nice just to kiss for the fun of it. I liked the licking of dawn's skin. This is something I do from time to time. I love to lick a woman's skin and taste her sweat and just her unique taste. I like the fact that Laura starts with Dawn's arm but moves on to other areas of Dawn's body. As I so often say, only you give me this. When I think about it, I find it strange that others don't mention these things. It is these things that make a story more than just mindless rutting. I love how Laura uses these tactics to try and make dawn forget about all these questions and get her excited again and start fucking. You avoid just having her ram her tongue down dawn's throat. Instead, it reads like real life lovers slowly stoking their fires.

I like how Laura compares the color of her lover's skin and delights in their contrast with her own. I do that also. I find color differences even in 'white' women. I always like to find the things that make each woman unique.

I mentioned earlier that I want to protect Laura, but I do hope that Dawn fucks some other women. I feel that once a woman has tasted Sapphic love she should continue to sample. I think Vietnamese girls are cute and hot. Then you mention dawn maybe being interested in Tamara. My gosh, that would be a threesome to burn the house down. While I would love to see that, I only hope that happens if Laura doesn't nearly die from jealousy and pain. If this does happen, I can't wait to see how you develop it. Also, I would hope that Dawn not pull a Randi and Bob. I don't think I have to worry. Dawn wants more than an airhead for company. While she might want to fuck her, she would never want to partner with her. I love how you so subtly put out these possibilities. Again, you must invest in the story toget these little teases.

I like the outright humor of first Dawn and then later Deshona crossing their eyes and looking comical. This again shows me intimacy. Only women who know each other and like each other would do this for each other. This is showing another person a part of your true personality.

I then like how Dawn starts to use Laura's own tactic of using sex to avoid the subject at hand. Now Dawn uses sex to avoid answering the question about whether she will sleep with the Vietnamese girl if she gets the chance. She gently puts her erect nipple back into Laura's mouth (the one Laura had just been giving ministrations too).

Ah, now some nice trib. Other stories have had some triabidasm from time to time. But only you talk about all the sweet sensations of rubbing your inflamed cunt against another woman's cunt. You talk about the slippery rubbing and pressing. How you can spread your lips to get more raw flesh together and aiming your clits together and then the grinding. It really is a connection one makes with your partner. Sometimes you do feel something like a spiritual connection. I really liked that they spent 20 minutes just slowly and sweetly fucking. Again, other authors don't show lovers taking it easy and having a slow simmering, sweetly emotional fuck, a chance to share some emotion. Variation is what makes sex fun.

Then you put a twist and have them get totally horizontal and digging their elbows in the mattress and jamming their cunts into each other and putting all their strength and passion into it. Again you make this so hot with extra little details like [oozing inner sleeves of their pussies grow hotter and become runny and even more slippery with fresh thick fuck juice.] Just the use of these extra details make it so hot. Wow, I just love how Laura rolls over on dawn's leg nestled between her breast and just grinds. Makes me hot just thinking about it. I liked the brief lull to kiss and share and then back to the horizontal grind and the final conflagration.

I really loved all the kissing going on here during the interlude. I just love swapping spit. I then like the extreme passion shown here with their lust causing them to knock teeth a few times. Then they have a slow emotional sharing kiss. A simmering exchanging of tongue and lips. Along with that, I love them grasping each other and digging their fingers into each other. Lovers always want to get closer. Again, other authors just don't show this basic fact.

Enjoyed the judicious kissing of Dawn's feet. I'm not a foot person but will do it when asked or feel it is right. But, I always check them out to see what I'm getting into and how much passion I can give them.

Loved how Dawn's words were cut off upon the onset of her orgasm and then how she shouted "NOW" when it hit full force. As I have said, I absolutely adore the way your women just scream in rapture and body ripping pleasure. I get the feeling that they are being torn apart with pleasure. That is how most of my orgasms hit me. It is divine and that is how your writings make it seem.

I love how they continue to pump their pussies together to continue the pleasure and share back and forth their aftershocks. Your women know how to milk every ounce of pleasure out of their orgasms. This pretty much sums it up [When they untangled their bodies, they could feel their hot, sticky cunts trying to remain together, glued by the warm fluids they had emitted in the throes of their shared ecstasy.]

I'm glad Dawn and Laura lost control and screamed aloud because of what happens later.

Finally, I want to say it was a pleasure to read Laura and Dawn fucking sweetly without the rough stuff. Rough sex is nice, but one can't live on a steady diet of it. You show these two women having sex in different ways and to keep it fresh and hot. They let the moment dictate how the sex will flow and happen.

One last thought about the triabidasm. Other writers just write that their women do some trib. They will say they grind their cunts together. Only you give all the details. Only you show that it can be done from different angles. Others don't come close to making it into the divine event that you constantly convey.

I found the whole dentist thing to be amusing and a very unique plot device. I know about teeth problems. I was wondering how you could make this into a incendiary fucking episode and boy did you succeed. This just shows your masterful writing skills and superior imagination. I really laughed out loud when you described the comatose man. I don't know why, but I found that funny. I love these little zingers from nowhere. I loved how you used this to introduce Sara Pagie and then as setup up for Deshona later.

With your warning about a new woman appearing I had my radar whirring. When Dawn mentioned the Vietnamese woman, I thought, can't be but maybe she found an oriental woman that set her off. Then the dentist was mentioned, okay, a professional. finally, the receptionist.

I can't wait to see her pictures. The way you describe her makes her seem cute pretty. Plus, I like short women. I like her personality, always upbeat and sunny. The kind of person who makes the clouds seem to disappear. I love a woman who smiles, makes me want to smile. The way you describe her, she is not beautiful in the classical sense. I often find that 'cute' can be just as attractive.

I love how Laura is so drawn to her and just wants to kiss her. I myself easily feel lust for women I just met. I can't wait to see the kissing between these two. I thought it was cute how Laura twisted her fingers in nervousness. It was neat how Laura took the opportunity that chance gave her and used Sara's saying from her childhood to get a 'date' setup. It will be interesting to see how this seduction occurs. Sara seems easy going like dawn. It will be interesting to see how much of a fight Laura will encounter. Sara has probably never considered lesbian love before and thus will need some convincing. I can't wait to read it. I LOVE seduction.

I chuckled when Laura in her pain said 'oh the pain'. When I was kid I loved to watch 'lost in space' and dr. smith was always saying the above.

Finally, you make this seem so natural. A chance encounter that can turn into something so much more. Already you are establishing a history between these women and showing us some personality from Sara that makes us start to like her and want to know more about her. It will make the eventual fucking so much more intense and sweet at the same time.

I then had to chuckle again when I saw Mr. Gibson react with horror when he saw Laura. Geez, how typical. I was thinking at the time, I hope this forces the issue, and makes Laura have to move. I wonder if his reaction would have been so extreme if he would have heard a male's voice coming from Laura's apartment instead of two women's voices.

I was curious to see how you would handle the sex with Laura in this state. Of course, you handled it masterfully. Not only was the sex great but I loved the sweet emotion and sharing you showed. Again, you are just so unique and therefore, a real treasure that I am thankful for. Everything seemed natural and not contrived.

Now Deshona calls, looking for some sex, but she immediately goes into mother hen mode and wants to baby Laura who is completely willing to accept. You can see Deshona's caring but you still see some of her commanding presence with her short clipped answers. The sting is taken out by her obvious caring that comes through the tone she uses. Deshona goes into caring mode because she cares. This is because you have made these women friends and not just fuck mates. If the latter, she would have said 'oh okay. I'll call when you feel better.' Instead there is real emotion that makes her want to care for Laura in her hour of need.

Even though Deshona seems to be insulting to Laura it is obvious that this is banter between two people who are close to each other and actually like this teasing. There is no sting to Deshona's words. Or if there is any doubt, Deshona quickly dispels the idea by making sure Laura understands she is only teasing and that she cares for Laura, deeply. Deshona wants to take care of Laura, to love her in a chaste way. Fortunately, Laura quickly develops other ideas.

I totally agree with Laura that it can be almost as sexy to see a woman fully clothed as to see one nude or in something sexy and risqué. I had to chuckle at the whole steam boiler analog. Actually, it is kind of accurate when I think about it. Deshona does try to dissuade Laura in her lechery [Deshona lowered her lovely face so that her eyes peered up in mock menace at Laura from under her forehead. "You're looking at my boobs, Laura, even though you're supposed to be in pain."] Then they talk idly for 30 minutes like friends. I like that you continually show these women as friends who like each other's company. They don't see each other as only fuck bunnies.

I like how Laura can't refuse to talk about Taneesha and is secretly happy that she did get to fuck her and Deshona doesn't know it.

I love how Laura continually applies subtle heat until Deshona's will starts to crumple. The way she lets her robe slowly come undone and how Deshona's breathing starts to immediately hitch up. I love how Deshona's eyes dart to Laura's hidden treasures as they become revealed by her slowly opening robe. It is very hard to resist when your lover is slowly, oh so slowly revealing her naked flesh to you. I like how Laura opened her robe so slowly. Again, you make it so much hotter by taking your time and not having her just rip open her robe and saying lets fuck, now. Instead, you give us sweet seduction between lovers.

I like how Deshona disrobes more provocatively for Laura once she sees her enjoying the show. I like how Deshona quickly changes her disrobing to try and give Laura more visual pleasure.

I was so happy to see the strap-on again and how she briefly contemplated letting Deshona giving her some head because of her indiscretions with Charles. It was nice to see another woman who is completely taken by this new way of fucking. I love it.

This is such a true statement [Sometimes there was no substitute for kissing, no other way to express the deep longing you had for another, no other way to make her feel the flame of your feelings.] Again you are the only author to really make this clear.

Just for the record, I love small women. They are just so sexy and pretty. I think Deshona is the bomb. Your new photos make that so clear. So often, a short woman's stature hides a huge stick of TNT that is ready explode and totally fuck your brains out, as Deshona soon proves.

I absolutely adored the back massage [Dreamily Laura submitted to the most ingenious and tender caresses she had ever felt from Deshona, who began by gently massaging the flesh of her back from the nape of her neck to her sacrum, then back up again. It was such a sweet and blissful feeling to be stroked and caressed like this that she was almost tempted to fall asleep until she felt Deshona's lips now joining her fingers, exploring the small curvature under Laura's shoulder blades, then tenderly kissing the backs of her shoulders.] Again you are the only author who shows their lovers just enjoying each other presences and doing things other than fucking. By taking the extra time and effort you truly bond with your partner and make the actual fucking so much more intense and soul touching. These women are friends first and then sexual partners after that. Then Deshona starts to turn up the heat by using her nipples on Laura's back. To get Laura ready for the hot fucking to come. I love how you describe Laura feeling them grazing her back. Then Deshona frenches and blows softly in Laura's ear. This always makes me instantaneously wet.

Then she teases Laura about using 'mama's big hard cock'. I like how she starts with slow gentle penetration. Again a varying of technique. One doesn't always to have to ram it home from the first second of penetration. Thank you for giving us variation and thus original sex. Your sex seems like real life. I like how Deshona caresses Laura's back as she starts her rhythm. You do feel connected to your lover through the dildo. A giving and taking, melding into one connection.

Your women actually compliment each other and try to make each other feel sexy. Other stories don't show this, this bonding and caring. Your women do it with real feeling and love. It feels like it is generated by true feelings of love.

I love how your women always push themselves back, or up, into the penetration or other stimulation. The way they swirl their pelvis and ass into it, to get maximum pleasure. Again, other writers forget this basic fact. Now the heat gets turned up and Deshona pretends to get revenge for her spanking and really starts to ram Laura. Oh yeah, I love it. Another perfect paragraph of sweet intense fucking [Laura was mewling and whooping softly now, feeling the mattress rise and fall under her with each thrust, feeling her pussy flame and tingle with pulsating pleasure each time Deshona drove the thick spike into her, feeling the convex ridges on the surface of the shaft ripple along the wet inner flesh of her cunt on the way in, then scrape her tender insides again causing a continuous, intense, fluttery sensation on the way out, driving her nearly up the wall with need.] Great details that make this sex just so freaking intense and pleasurable to read.

Now we get to the point where Laura loses her 'hair pulling cherry. Needless, to say I loved it. You as usual capture the feelings perfectly, especially, the tightness of breath and pain and how that just makes everything so fucking intense. I like how you always describe the feeling of being impaled by the strap-on and how Deshona's hands slowly creep up to Laura's hair, prolonging the anticipation. Then Laura screaming out to do it 'NOW". And then you make it extra hot by describing how Deshona has bowed and pulled taunt Laura's sweet body and yet is still impaling Laura's stuffed cunt with her dildo.

I chuckled at the end of Laura's orgasm and she teases Deshona about being heavy. This is something that caring partners can do and it seems right and natural here. Other authors can't attempt this because they don't develop their characters to allow this. If these women didn't love each other, these comments that Deshona and Laura are trading would have been hurtful and cruel, instead of teasing between lovers.

I was very happy to hear that Laura is moving. I was also happy to see Deshona disconsolate when she heard this. Her first thought was that she might be losing Laura. Again a subtle showing of the bond that has formed between these two women. I love how she perks up when Laura informs her that she won't be moving far and they will be continuing to see each other.

Liked how Laura wanted to fuck Deshona missionary style so she could 'love fuck her.' Then Deshona gets soft and compliant and holds her arms out for Laura. This is both tender and hot at the same time. Then you lovingly describe Deshona's pussy and describe the bulbous head penetrating her and then sliding in deep. Oh yeah, I quiver a little just thinking about it. Then I get a little dreamy by the way that Deshona forms a cocoon around Laura with her arms. This is nothing but pure love and sweetness. [Her arms almost fell to her sides before Laura could lean forward and nestle herself between them, but then they fell inward, leaving Deshona's fingertips resting on Laura's naked back. Her eyelids fluttered, and she looked up at Laura, whose face was now only inches from hers.]

I love the short strokes and Deshona spastically gripping Laura's back with her fingers. Love that eye contact and how you accurately portray the difficulty in keeping it when the fucking starts to get really intense. I liked Deshona deciding that she wanted a hair pulling orgasm also, and Laura trying to dissuade her, but of course, she accommodates and gives Deshona what she needs. She even willing fucks her "Charles" style. She understands that Deshona is going to want what she just witnessed.

Just the little detail about Laura sitting back and allowing Deshona to switch positions is so welcome by me. These little details make all the difference. Now Laura starts to fuck her and Deshona really starts to get into it. [Deshona responded instantly, burrowing her face into the sheet, gyrating her pelvis back, pushing her cunt up into the plunging dildo, groaning.]

I like how you have Laura mussing about Deshona as really starts to pummel her sweet pussy hard. I like you describing a woman gripping and digging her fingers into her lover, I dearly love this [Laura continued to hold onto the flesh between Deshona's neck and shoulders, which gave her enough leverage to repeatedly thrust the strap-on dildo deep into the girl's pussy and pull back and up a little on her torso at the same time, again giving Deshona a taste of the ultimate thrill she sought.]

I chuckled at Laura forgetting her situation and biting Deshona. Sometimes, lust just makes you forget things and be a little reckless. I liked how this little squirt of heat pushes Deshona over into a killing orgasm.

Now the hair pulling [The dildo was already buried deep in the girl's body, and so Laura concentrated all her effort on this, pulling Deshona's small, quivering body back so that for a few seconds her back was arched into a C curve.] Sigh, I'm in paradise. Then the earth shattering orgasm. ["Ownnggg! Ungghhh! Ohnnnmmgghiiieeee!" Deshona cried out, undulating almost in mid-air, her face slashed by the anguish of an unendurable rapture.] I can close my eyes and see it. Sheer perfection, that is all I can say. I love her gentle prodding of Deshona ["Oh, come hard, come hard, I love it when you come hard, darling," Laura whispered to her, consumed with the intense love she often felt for Deshona.]

Then they talk and share some sweet emotion and Deshona quickly decides she can stay as long as Laura needs her. I like that. I can picture them fucking a lot more before the night is over.

This whole chapter made me think of intimacy. The familiarity you have developed between these women allow them to share themselves completely. I mean this totally. Your women do so much more than just fuck. They actually live a real life. Of course I love the sex, but I almost enjoy as much the other details that you give me. All this sweet sharing and bonding between characters who seem real to me.

I know that I ran a little long with this appreciation, but I couldn't help it. This was like three chapters in one that I wanted to talk about. Thanks, for giving me so much to think about. And yes, get excited about. Hehehe.

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Chapter 258:

Before I start with my gloss of the points of the chapter I want to take a little more time and talk about your story telling abilities in general. I mentioned in my first blush email that I really like the fact that you spent one half of this chapter doing character development and slice of life. Other authors attempt this and they fall flat or fail to capture my imagination. I feel this is hard in the field of erotica. The reader is basically looking for sexual fulfillment. This of course you deliver in spades. What you do is give us the additional thrill of a story. Other writers try and tell a story but I find them to be boring or just don't do anything for me. For me, it is like they are trying to tell a story and then marry sex to it. Except for a few stories, this just doesn't work. It takes time to develop a story line and build characters. This you have done with your story arc. Your stories started as just sex episodes but you quickly started developing a story of Laura and her discovery of her true destiny.

Along the way you have brought her to life as well as the women she loves. You show us Laura's life. This is the story. You do not constrain yourself by trying to tell a complete self contained story in 60 kb. By making Laura's life real and compelling you in essence give us the story of Laura's journey of self discovery. This you do by creating real people who are as real as you and me. These people have hopes and dreams, fears and weaknesses. They are real. I want to know about them and see how their lives unfold. By devoting so much to time to this, I have already come to love Sara. Fortunately, you never forget that this is erotica and I know that the sex with her in the next chapter will be divine. Ok, now on to the chapter.

Like the lyrics to the song. Like the sentiment, this is how Laura feels about the women in her life. While she is with each women, she gives them everything that she is. I am happy that she is so smitten with both Dawn and Deshona. Laura needs many women to love. I can feel her rueful feelings about these women sleeping with the men of their lives.

With many stories, I can see where the author is going, but I simply can't with you. This is something I love. I was thinking, okay working on the weekend and Laura is walking to Rhonda's office. Okay, April and Rhonda are doing it. I was sure of it. Wrong. Before I proceed, I like the fact that you spent three paragraphs describing the office in general, then Rhonda's office and why Laura put the papers on Rhonda chair. Other authors would just had Laura finish the project and walk straight to her office and put the papers in her chair. Almost as if the character was a robot with no thoughts or emotions. You invest in character development and thus the reader is brought into Laura's world. We get to know Laura and why she does what she does. We see the inner workings of her mind. There is always so much below the visible surface of a person's skin.

Now we get the shock. She has come upon two women fucking. One is April and the other is black also. What? Oh boy, who is she I wonder. I chuckled. I think my eye teeth would fall out in that situation. I have to chuckle, to think of Laura of all women not smelling the smell of excited pussy. She really was daydreaming of Dawn and Deshona. That is about the only thing that would make me miss that heavenly smell.

I think I would have felt Laura's discomfort the way you describe them looking at Laura with no shock and an air of confidence. Their lack of evident fear and clearly waiting for Laura to disappear would have quickly made me uncomfortable also. I wish this could be filmed. I would love to see April and who I later discovered is Yolanda with their bravado so plain and brazen.

I love how you describe April and Yolanda and their state of undress. Again it is the little details I love (and are so real life). April's jeans are off one leg only and her bra just under her breast. Yolanda's bra and shirt are stuffed under her chin. I like how Yolanda's legs are around April's hips. This little visual adds additional heat for me. These are two women who were so hot for each other they couldn't get fully undress before they fall on each other and suck each other off in a 69 on a vice president's sofa. Making it on that sofa alone would be a huge turn on.

Laura makes an admonishment and then retreats. I like how April only nods and the two girls still show no embarrassment. This turns the embarrassment onto Laura herself. I can feel her confusion and desire. I know that would turn me on walking in on that. I know I would have thought about trying to get in on it, but my timid nature when unsure of myself would have stopped that. I too would have spent a lot of time wondering what they were doing and wishing to be part of it.

We then get to see Laura's abundant good nature. She has no intention of using this situation against April. She then thinks of spying but she follows the old adage of doing onto others as you would have them do unto you. Laura never deliberately abuses the trust of the women in her life. She may tell a white lie in the immediate heat of the moment to get some pussy, but she has never betrayed anyone. I really, really like this about Laura.

A little aside, I'm happy to see Shavon getting some intense loving from Laura.

Now we get to the wonderful interchange between Laura and Sara. Laura is surprised that Sara takes her up her offer for a 'date'. I just dearly love getting go along with Laura as they go to Chinese restaurant. I love how Laura gazes at her and longs to kiss her and fights to hid this. I love Laura's total desire for these women [desperately longing to touch them, yearning to brush her lips against their cheeks, feeling not only sexual desire but a need to embrace and murmur to them and pour herself into them that was so intense she almost fainted from the effort to hide it.] This is true desire that only you show. This is how I long for women. I just want to inhale them and merge with them. To be one with them as I make them scream and die from pleasure.

I like how Laura concentrates on the physical beauty of Sara's face. This is where the photos really help. I think she is beautiful. I love Sara's oval face. I just want to rain kisses on it. I know those little square glasses would be killer and pussy tingling. I love all her funny faces. I bet she would light up a room at a party. She seems so funny and alive. She is always making faces and cracking jokes. Plus, you are making her a very smart young woman. I find wit and intelligence to be a huge turn on.

I like that Sara takes her pug nose and short stature and makes them into a virtue. I myself am always having to push my glasses up my nose, so I know the motion. She seems like such a positive person. Now that I think about it, all you women are basically positive and affirming in their basic demeanor. Even the crazy ones like Jane are still basically good, just a little crazy from time to time. I love that just being in Sara's presence is making Laura's arms tingle. She is trying not to be a lecher in this situation but she cant help but respond to the beauty that is Sara.

I have really turned 180 degrees. I was happy to hear Sara talk about the former men her life. All right!, this means that Laura will have to seduce her into her bed. I have come to look forward so much to your stories of seduction. Sara is obviously intrigued by Laura. I think she is still unsure as to what the strange feelings she is experiencing really are. The way that Sara looked at Laura at their parting tells me that she is feeling strong emotions. Laura will have educate her.

Some small things, I love how a simple thing like looking at Sara's bra strap turns Laura on. I'm so guilty of this myself. It is amazing how a woman in full clothing can turn you on so. It is a shame that Laura must be coy about herself. Still, it is to earlier for Sara to know the complete truth about Laura. Laura will reveal all in good time.

I like how they part. They both know that something is going on. Laura just can't be sure that Sara is experiencing what she is. She is pretty sure Sara is, but that little seed of doubt restrains her. I know that feeling. She desperately calls to Sara. She wants to give Sara her phone number. Sara informs her that she already has it. Earlier she had solemnly told Laura they would meet again soon. I can see why Laura feels that they are connecting.

Of course I am happy that Laura is thinking more and more about moving out. She is slowly convincing herself. She is showing brass with the Gibson's about her women and her screaming. One should have the freedom to make noise if one wants. I'm glad she is moving towards moving out.

Finally, after three days, April appears and asks for lunch. She is still confident and not ashamed in manner. I like that a lot. April has become very confident. Of course Laura immediately recalls their past and finds her definitely alluring. She finds her plain dress and and quite demure manner exciting. She knows the truth about April, she is a complete slut in bed. I mean that as a high honor. April hungers for totally hot sex. April hides her sexual fire behind this innocent façade of hers.

I like how Laura cant help but fantasize about the other women. Laura is drawn to her sultry look and the way she could look Laura right in the eye when caught in the act. She is developing a whole mind view of the girl and how she must be. Laura is usually on target with her perceptions.

I like how Laura immediately lets April know that she has nothing to fear. She doesn't try to use her knowledge as a weapon. They immediately connect again after a few months of being apart. They try to get together, but they can't get in sync. I like how they get jealous of each other over Yolanda. I had finally figured out that April's sex partner was Yolanda. You had never introduced a woman this way. Another surprise which I liked. Laura starts to get curt, and almost gets rid of April. Fortunately, she doesn't and April finally gets out an invitation of dinner with them both. Laura fatal flaw is her jealousy. She loves so completely she can't stand the thought of sharing. Now that she gets a chance to share Yolanda also, she opens her sphere to include her also and her jealousy starts to fade.

I thought it was interesting that Laura deliberately dressed down to put herself on the same level as April and Yolanda. Again, Laura shows her goodness. This is being thoughtful to the max.

Now she arrives and she finds them both provocatively dressed with short shorts, especially Yolanda. They are dressed for sex. Again, Laura is drawn to Yolanda, to the mystery that is present in Yolanda's eyes. You get the feeling that she will be a divine fuck.

I smiled at April being so female. She immediately grabs Laura around the waist and brings her into the house. She is staking her claim to Laura. She's letting Yolanda know that she has a history with Laura and that Yolanda must work a little to get into their intimate circle. She is letting Yolanda know she is the alpha wolf. Plus, she must see Laura devouring Yolanda and especially those long legs (thanks for the photos).

I love how you so lovingly describe Yolanda [She was so sweet. Laura was enchanted. Yolanda had long black hair, like Yvette's, falling all the way to her shoulders, soft, not stiff. She had a long face too with thin, overarching eyebrows, the kind some women actually drew on after plucking out part of the original hair, though Yolanda's were real, only plucked thin. Her face was not conventionally pretty, not even cute like Sara's, but mesmerizing nonetheless, with a deep Native American-mixed-with-African kind of beauty that some black women had, probably the result of some gene drift down the ages. Many blacks had Indian blood, and in Yolanda it showed, and was almost magnetic. Also, her mouth was surprisingly like Sara's, a thick juicy feast of sensual lips.] How can one not desire her greatly after that loving description.

I really love this new April. I simply do not remember her having all this confidence. I am simply hooked on it. She takes charge and leads them into the bedroom and initiates the kissing with Laura. I love how all three confess of their desire for this three way tryst.

I like Laura being totally flabbergasted when she enters Yolanda's bedroom. She had all these visions of a female fatale and she sees a room filled with stuffed animals of all types and bright colors. This is the room of a child woman or a cutup like Sara. I had to chuckle at this turn of events. Laura doesn't usually miss the mark so badly. Doesn't really matter. Now she knows the truth and it doesn't change anything. It makes her cute instead of mysterious.

April is still being incessant and now Laura smells her wonderful scent. I think women smell divine. I like how they start kissing standing side by side and then turn into each other to deepen the kiss. I love the nibbling and thrusting their tongues deep into each other mouths. I love kissing. Glad Laura's mouth has healed.

I love how they have to invite Yolanda to join them on the bed. Yolanda is hypnotized by what she is seeing. She snaps out of it as Laura and April undress each other and expose their skin to her. Plus, the sound of women panting in sexual heat is its own turn on.

I like how both Laura and Yolanda are mesmerized by April's nipples. Doesn't matter they both have made love to her before and know their uniqueness. They are beautiful. I have seen two girls with nipples like this. They do make you want to devour and really maul them. I am so happy to see April now proud of her nipples. I think having women worship and love her nipples has given her confidence she lacked in the past. She just needed someone(s) to tell her how lucky she was to have them. I'm giddy for her.

While kissing April, Laura and Yolanda share a kiss that soon scorches the two of them. Loved the plunging tongues, nibbling and sucking of lips. Love those details.

Like how you describe them undressing each other and the hunger that is so evident. Then Laura starts to kiss Yolanda's midriff and thighs and starts to coax her to spread her thighs which she has closed out of nervousness. I like how Yolanda really starts to moan and Laura discovers that it is April kissing her deeply and mauling her tits that has caused the heat in Yolanda. From time to time that happens to me. I think I'm the one doing the damage and I discover that someone else is doing all the damage.

You as usual take the effort to make Yolanda's cunt unique. [Like Yolanda herself, her pussy was long, a long, narrow slit, a thin crease that seemed at least three inches from top to bottom, slowly puckering, the lips slowly parting as her juices began to flow more steadily due to the way April and Laura were arousing her. Laura could detect a hint of shiny pink between the dark lips, then more as Yolanda's dewy inner labia parted further. She carefully spread them open even more with her fingertips, exposing the hot red interior, filling her nostrils now with the sweet, thick perfume of Yolanda's creamy pussy.] Geez, I would love to bury my face in her sweet delicious cunt.

I like the idea that April has learned to really savage a woman's tits to bring about the most guttural of emotions and reactions. She has learned from the master. Of course I love the way you detail Yolanda's tits. I then like the new look in April's eyes [After all, she realized, she had found April desirable from the start, loving her heart-shaped face and squarish body, her large, delectable round ass that others thought too big but was a huge turn-on to Laura. And the look in April's eyes at this moment was devastating, a hot, smoking, roiling hunger, a kind of deep, throbbing sexual trance that Laura wondered if she had ever seen there before. She also wondered if either she or Rhonda had awakened this voracious appetite.] It took women to awaken this fire that lay hidden even from April herself. She has become a little hellion in bed. She has awakened to her true self.

You then give me paragraphs of wonderful breast worship. I especially liked how Laura and April switched tits and that Laura licked up all the spittle that April left. Yum! I always love it when ["Oh . . . I'm sorry," Laura panted, concerned, releasing the girl's small, tortured nipple from her mouth. "Did I do it too hard?" Yolanda's eyes were watering, but she shook her head. "Oh god . . . no! Please, do it, yes, do it again!" She glanced from Laura over to April, who was just as passionately devouring her other nipple. "Ungghhh! Oh!"] I have yet to find a lesbian virgin who doesn't squeal in shock and rapture when I love maul her tits like this for the first time. I guess men just don't devote the time and energy necessary to give them maximum pleasure.

I love how April makes extreme love to Yolanda's tits while Laura moves south to devour her cunt. You make it wonderful as usual. You give the wonderful details of of licking, then buzz sawing and finally little short love sucks of Yolanda's clit by Laura. Then you give the wonderful detail of Yolanda's clit swelling under all this love. I like how Yolanda's hands are spasing and finally grab Laura's head to help grind her cunt up into Laura's mouth. Finally, you don't just say Laura finger fucked Yolanda, you describe putting one in first and then a second. You tell us how Yolanda warm sleeve feels on Laura's fingers. It is the details that make this so wonderful.

It was nice to see she comes like Jonelle. They are truly something to behold. Of course, Laura is the first to make her come like this. April still has some learning to do. She does help with her constant mauling of Yolanda's tits. Women always help to make an orgasm as good as possible. We find this is the mystery of Yolanda, her ability to come so deeply. Lucky stiff. I mean this literally. Hehehe.

I'm happy Laura only looks for the g-spot on occasion. Not all women have it (I don't seem too) and the story would get boring if she did it all the time. When she does go for it, it is special. I loved it when used it on Taneesha.

Love that sweet afterglow of April and Laura holding Yolanda as comes down from the high of her supreme orgasm. Women are just natural cuddlers. Other writers don't show lovers being gentle in post coital bliss.

As I have said, I can never predict your sex. I was very pleasantly surprised when Laura mounted Yolanda's stomach and started to pump her pussy against it. I have a weight lifter girlfriend whom I love to rub my cunt against her hard abs (it is like rubbing against marble), but I also love that satiny feel of a firm but not muscled stomach. I like how April mounts Yolanda's mouth and rides her face. Yolanda has the pleasure of pleasuring two women at once. That is bliss itself. I love how you describe Laura's pussy juicing and smearing Yolanda's midriff with cunt cream. How Laura grabs her waist to get all the leverage possible and then Yolanda grabs her wrists and pumps her stomach up to help her reach orgasm. Just women being in tune with each other again.

I love how it ends ["Annghiiieeeee!" she screamed, choking and falling forward against April, still pumping and rubbing her flaming pussy roughly against the slippery expanse of Yolanda's wet stomach, gagging and gasping as each new shock struck her. "Ohhhhh! Ungghmmnhhggnnhiiieee!"]

I like how during this flaming sex, Laura thinks about the pain that Rhonda and herself caused April and that she wants to make amends and try and give to April total sexual fulfillment. Laura basic goodness shows again so clearly.

Of course, even after this killer orgasm, Laura's first thought was that she and Yolanda need to give April the orgasm she deserves. I love how Laura gropes her ass and then does her usual breast worship [Laura absolutely loved April's breasts and huge coal-black nipples, and she licked the wide, soft areolas thirstily, stabbing the stiff, protruding centers with her tongue, watching them quiver and stiffen even more as the tip of her tongue lashed them. Then she sucked one deep into her mouth, loving the effort it took to get the whole huge bud inside. April's large nipple seemed to swell and pulse inside her mouth, all soft and pulpy, then growing harder, the center nub growing rubbery and tickling the roof of Laura's mouth as she sucked it hard.]

I love how April just whimpers and whimpers as she is being loved as they sandwich her between themselves. Now Yolanda starts to finger fuck her. They turn her over and Yolanda immediately starts to devour her quim [Yolanda sucking and slurping her small, gaping pussy, fringed with glistening, midnight-black hair.]. Now Laura gets her always present baby oil and lubs a finger and inserts it up April's rectum. I love how you describe Laura fucking her with it and twisting it. Again two women work seamlessly together to bring the third to an earth shattering orgasm.

With the orgasm I love how April's asshole clenches Laura's finger. I always love it when the woman herself or another pinches and pulls her nipples during orgasm. I am so happy at April's orgasm ["Auunggghnnhhhiiieeeeeee!" April suddenly erupted in a fierce scream. Her whole thick, squarish, shuddering body nearly levitated off Yolanda's bed for a brief second in a sharp upward jerk. Both Laura and Yolanda had trouble holding on, but they quickly got back to work as soon as she fell to the mattress with a jarring thud and began moaning and writhing in the grip of a strong, rolling orgasm that hit her in wave after wave.] Only you make it real seeming when a woman's pelvis jumps off the bed and pumps the air and thuds back to earth. Other authors just don't give enough details to make it divine like you do. They only give a detail and not the plethora like you do that make it seem like I am right there with them.

I loved the second orgasm equally. Loved how April pulled her nipples up an inch in her frenzy of coming and the way her sphincter just clamps on Laura's finger and she surges again off the mattress in ecstasy and Laura coaxes her on with soft words of encouragement. Your women come like women should. Other authors just say they "come hard". Please shake me before I fall asleep. How boring. You breath life and heat into these women's orgasms.

Then the ending of this chapter was just precious. I loved the relaxed banter about where to wipe clean Laura's finger. The way that April teases Yolanda about using one of her animals. Then the way they laugh and tickle each other and squeal like women do when they are laughing their asses off. They are just having fun. This is women sharing of themselves. This is two women who love or at least care deeply for each other. They then bring Laura into this circle of gaiety and mirth.

I am so happy that hearing this relaxed and loud mirth and having screamed her head off, Laura finally comes to the final realization that she needs to move out of her apartment and find this freedom. All I can say is hip-hip-hurray. I can't wait for this to happen.

I just want to thank you for making it so clear that April has found happiness. I like to think that Laura and Rhonda have opened her to her true nature. By showing April the wonders of lesbian love she has discovered Yolanda and happiness. I am just happy that they have brought Laura into this ring of happiness, sensuality and hot sex.

Finally, I loved the way the chapter ended. I always want as much sex as I can get, but I also love it when the chapter ends and Laura is in the process of being ravaged. It is obvious that Laura is about to be driven insane with pleasure by April and Yolanda. I love her exultant cries of [Laura surrendered eagerly. "Oh god . . . I hope so," she breathed, feeling her body come alive under their fingers and their lips, smiling up at them as they began to ravish her writhing flesh. "Oh god, yes! Yes . . ."]

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Chapter 259:

You started this chapter like you do many chapters. Even though this chapter is about Sara you spend time developing other characters and developing situations. I love it. You are always developing plot lines. In every chapter you give me new things to think about and things to hope for. What I really like is that you go beyond the superficial. Most other writers don't really develop their creations. Some do a good job, but their stories just don't captivate. You do by creating this saga that is constantly changing and evolving.

Other writers only tell a story that you can't really do in 60 to 100 KB. This is simply not enough time to truly develop characters. Plus, as I have mentioned in the past, I feel like I am reading a story and the characters are just a vehicle to tell a story. Laura's saga is the exact opposite. Laura's life is the story. You have created a world full of great sex and truly great characters. Plus, I never find this saga to be trite, maudlin or boring. This story is filled with vibrant and interesting women who constantly interact with each other.

I am so happy to see that Laura is getting closer to moving out of her apartment. I can't wait for her to find her new place where she and her women can scream in peace. I will be so happy for Laura not having to constantly worry about what the neighbors are thinking. It is none of their business but I can understand her feelings. I tend to think like the women she mentioned. Giving full-throated screams during orgasm is just such a holy event that I feel I have the right to this. I like the fact that you are not making this a simple decision. Laura has to plan and make choices and tradeoffs. This is like real life. I feel most other writers would just have her move without the real life planning and determining what she can afford and the logistics of the move.

Laura reflects on her recent time with April and Yolanda. I know it must have been a wonderful night of divine fucking. Laura is true to form when she reflects that she would love to fuck Yolanda one on one but declines because of her relationship with April. Laura can sense April's happiness and doesn't want to do anything to jeopardize it. I am so happy that April has found a woman that loves her and wants to focus on her and her happiness.

Now Laura thoughts turn to a darker situation. Shontay. Shontay is not calling and avoiding her. Laura knows this can only mean trouble. Shontay has been making large demands on Laura. She wants sex every other night. Shontay feels as if she has discovered manna from heaven and wants as much as she can get.

Laura has pleaded the 'period' excuse but has offered to be with her while Shontay masturbates. This is something I love to do. I love watching a woman masturbate. It shows trust and plus it is just so fucking hot. Plus, you can learn where they like to touch themselves and use that. I can just imagine Shontay's long body all stretched out and stiff with an intense orgasm rippling through her. I know Laura enjoyed the show.

Laura now has the problem of an unattached woman at work making excessive demands for sex. Shontay wants Laura and when she can't get her, trouble is sure to ensue. It will be interesting to see how you resolve this. I hope that Shontay finds another to help satisfy her, preferably a woman from my lesbian perspective. I hope that Shontay can find an equilibrium here. I like her. She reminds me of a little girl who wants a pony and when she doesn't get it, she pouts and gets querulous. Her actions are more innocent and not mean and calculated like Randi or Deshona.

This next chapter has the potential for a real "cat fight". It has been a while since the last one and I can't wait. Of course you could surprise me.

As I mentioned at the beginning of this gloss, I really like the way your story flows through these chapters. First you introduced Shontay in chapters where we don't meet her, but we see that haughty and imperious attitude. Then Laura seduces her. We discover her inability to enjoy sex and the vulnerability she hides behind her mask. Then she gets bitchy when Laura goes to Phoenix but Laura is able to placate her. Then Shontay goes to pieces over Taneesha. Laura repairs the damage with a beautiful seduction. The tension evident at the beginning showed that a "cat fight" was just below the surface. Now this chapter. This history is what makes this so wonderful. There is a past that you are using to build the future. Plus, by starting this now, we get to think and wait for the next chapter. This waiting will make the event all the better when the next chapter arrives.

Now Randi enters the scene. Randi immediately show the difference between herself and Shontay. Laura asks her about Shontay to see if Randi knows of anything that would keep Shontay from returning her calls. Randi immediately gets nasty and vicious about Shontay. She hurls insults at Shontay. Randi simply can't stand her. I think it is because of the power Shontay wields.

Don't know if you will ever do anything with this animosity that Randi feels toward Shontay. There is cat fight extraordinary waiting there to be developed if you ever so choose.

I had to chuckle at Laura immediately regretting bringing it up. I've had that happen to me. I've brought up people to sling a little mud or gossip and had the other person unleash an avalanche. I can't handle that kind of intensity and run for the hills. I loved how Laura got hot just fingering Randi's braids. Plus, it was so cute Randi shaking her tits for Laura. Randi is such a flirt and is so cute when she wants to be.

Now Sara finally makes her appearance. I love how you started this chapter and so many others with other things. Character development of other women in Laura's life and the setting up of future situations. Life is full of intertwining events and forces. You capture this so well.

I chuckled again at how startled Laura got at hearing Sara's voice on her speakerphone. The diving to turn it off. I love how Sara is so perky, upbeat and pleasant. I love Laura's reaction to the message [She knew she was blushing, her face all hot and red, her nipples tingling, her whole body thrumming with heat and luminous sexual yearning.] I love how Laura is so physical. I can react that strongly at the most strange and sometimes embarrassing times myself. A woman's laugh or a twinkling eye can make me hot.

I always smile when Laura goes through her litany of don't get over excited. Don't read too much into it. It makes the eventual coupling all the more hot when it happens. I like how here, Laura thinks about Sara and Yolanda's mouths and how she wants the former and loved the second. I love all this kissing. I enjoyed watching Laura walk around before calling to calm down. Finally she calls to arrange a date and freaks that she might be coming on too strong by telling Sara that she 'really likes her.' Sara is not put off. Another hint that Sara is interested.

You then introduce Sara's drug addicted sister. Sara is helping to keep her alive. What I like about this, beside the fact that it shows Sara's loving and caring personality is the fact it is a nice humanizing touch that you didn't have to add. The story still would have moved forward without it. This is just superior to what you get in the field of erotica. This little fact just adds so much to the story. This adds a touch of realism into the story, which I really appreciate.

Finally, they get together after one delay caused by the sister problem. Sara has appeared in her now normal white blouse with stiff color but now is sporting a red wig and no glasses. I know Laura is floored like I would be seeing this fetching transformation. Kind of like getting two women for the price of one. When Sara talks about her eyes getting tired I love Laura's response ["I wish you would. You don't have to worry about me, I already know you're smart."] Again, you must remember the last chapter to get this. I love it.

Now Sara drops a bombshell when she makes a comment about Laura making the guys and women pant. I find this so cute and exciting. Like Dawn, we find Sara taking the lead in the seducing. She is planting little seeds. Laura the supposed seducer is the one who is discombobulated and blushing. Sara seems a little more circumspect than Dawn, but now the reader knows of her interest.

I really feel sorry for Sara's sister. To have a life ruined by drugs and alcohol. Like so many others before her, it has ruined her. Living this lifestyle has ruined her morals and thus the abortions. I really compliment you on adding this to the story. It shows Sara's sense of caring and compassion trying to care for Dee Dee. Despite all this, Sara is able to keep her sense of humor and Laura feels and shows her empathy.

Now Sara asks her for a drink at her apartment. It is interesting to read about the areas around San Francisco. It sounds like parking is a real bitch. I smiled about the name of "Ocean View" for the neighborhood. We have that here. All these grand names for developments. It's one of my pet rants. If a development is called Camelot, it should be something magical. It never is.

Once in the apartment, Laura finally allows herself to look at Sara. She discovers that Sara though small is not petite. She is a woman who has curves and real meat on her bones. She has a nice ass and big tits for a small woman. Yum! Laura's desire to ravish this beautiful body is starting to ignite.

Now we have Sara asking Laura to take to off some of her outer clothes to get more comfortable. Laura does and they start to drink a little alcohol to unwind. Sara sits on her legs, which of course allows her skirt to hitch up. Now Sara tells Laura to remove her suit jacket to get more comfortable. Of course Laura gets all flustered and blushes. I love how again the "innocent" is the one who making the situation slowly move more and more towards seduction. It is almost as if Sara, maybe subconsciously, is steering the night in this direction. Of course it could just as easily be newfound friends over indulging and nothing more. (I can't help it if I am a lecher – heehaw.)

After an hour and half they are getting a little woozy. Laura comments that she shouldn't drive. Sara immediately lets Laura know she can stay on the sofa. In this Sara is completely right, friends don't let friends drive drunk. This I'm not sure I can read anything into, but it sure helps the seduction to make it so that Laura can't drive home. Sara fixes the sofa and they change into their adorable extra extra large men's pajamas. Plaid and strips, how adorable. I can close my eyes and see these women with these getups on. Puts a smile on my face. I love how the joking stops for a moment of connection ["I don't want to get lost," Laura said. "I like it here." Sara gave her a half-tipsy but meaningful stare, though Laura could not interpret its meaning at all.] I love these little gearshifts in mood and meaning. I can feel the throbbing between them.

I love how Sara is continually making faces and cracking jokes. She must be a total blast to be around. This is a woman that can help to buck Laura up. Some of her other lover's can take a little out of her. It looks like Sara (like Dawn) will be a woman to soothe and re-energize Laura. Now Sara makes a clown of herself and lays on the sofa and rolls off to demonstrate its being unsafe as a place to sleep. Like Laura, I know my eyes would have been glued to Sara's swaying breast.

Again I have to chuckle at Laura's reluctance to sleep in the same bed as Sara. It is just so CUTE. Sara almost demands that they share. I liked Sara joshing Laura by asking her to choose sides and then play bitches. Sara just makes me smile and feel good inside. Again Laura hesitates and Sara once again cajoles Laura into compliance. Sara is once more setting up the situation for something to 'happen'. I like how Laura is trying to keep her desire in a dream like innocent state. She is trying to be virtuous. Fortunately, destiny has other ideas. I liked the crack by Sara about white girls and slumber parties and Barbies.

Now in bed, Laura can't sleep because [Her nostrils were filled with Sara's delicious warm fragrance. She wore no artificial scent, Laura was sure. It was just the clean, aromatic fragrance of her natural body, her hair (now that she had removed the sexy red wig), maybe a faint whiff of the shampoo she had used that morning, nothing else. This sweet natural fresh odor, and nothing else,]. I thank you for describing this wonderful attribute of a woman. No one else does. This is part of the very essence of a woman.

Laura's pussy starts come alive with fresh nectars. We then find Sara can't sleep either. We quickly discover that she has pretty much given up on men, uses a vibrator and best of all had an affair with a woman and wonders if Laura has. Now Sara allows Laura to back off in case she has gone to far. Laura rises to the bait and asks if Sara has ever wanted to do it again. At first Sara doesn't answer and Laura asks again. Now Sara admits she has and is right now.

I love how all this story took place before the first kiss is made. This is what makes your story so superior to others. Of course the fact that you have absolutely scorching sex doesn't hurt either. Sex that makes this reader at least feel as if she is in the bed with them. (I sometimes fantasize about being 18 again and going to south California, finding the adult movie industry and somehow doing these chapters as movies and fucking these wonderful women myself as Laura's doppelganger.)

Now they kiss with their heads lying on the pillow. I really like how they start so slow and gently. They are content to merely meld lips and lick each others lips. I really love how Laura luxuriates in the feel of Sara's sensual lips. You are the only writer that has her characters start and slow and easy. You even have Sara getting ticklish at Laura's licks. Laura constantly restrains herself from thrusting her tongue into Sara's mouth. She lets the situation come to her. Laura tries to convey her emotion of budding love through this sensual assault.

When they break for breath Sara again makes faces and cracks a joke. This all stops with the next kiss. Now they are ready to let their tongues roam. [This time the tongues were active from the start. They met again outside their mouths, but Laura quickly pushed her own past Sara's straight, even teeth, into her warm, wet mouth, licking and stabbing Sara's wriggling tongue, feeling them both begin to breathe harder, feeling their hot breath collide and rush past their coiling wet tongues.] This is how kissing is supposed to be described.

I love how your lovers caress each other. They lovingly touch their lover's face and warm flesh in general. Now Laura unbuttons Sara's tent top and reaches in to cup and caress her breast. [Sara had large breasts for a short girl, like Deshona, and yet they were not like Deshona's at all. They were not phenomenally, perfectly round but instead a little oblong and plump at the sides, and tilted outward, more like Cecilia's friend Bernice's incredible breasts, though not so gourd-shaped, and firm but not as hard as Bernice's. All this Laura learned simply by cupping and squeezing the delightful firm globe.] You are the only author to give these women individual breast. Other authors just give cup size and the fact that they are so beautiful and full. You then give such loving details of her nipples. I can now close my eyes an imagine Sara's breast. As Laura gets to each part of Sara's body, you give vivid exquisite details of that portion of Sara's body.

Laura removes Sara's shirt and I just love how you describe Sara's breast jiggling. Laura asks Sara if she knows what she wants to do? We all know. Instead of just attacking them as other authors do, you again take it slow. She cups these jewels and starts by kissing her neck and throat and then her upper body all the while inhaling her heavenly aroma. She then kisses the skin between her breast and then oh so slowly climbs the slope of her breast to those mouth watering nipples. Then she next runs the tip of her tongue around the swollen areola and flicks the stiff nub.

She teases Sara a little more and makes her beg for it. Finally, Laura gives in and does what she does best [Feeling a quick little twist of guilt for having prolonged Sara's sweet agony this far, Laura smiled and nodded. "I am," she whispered, opening her mouth and taking the large, satiny, dark bulb into it, closing her lips over it, drawing it slowly in deep, caressing it lovingly with her tongue. Sara's head fell back. At first no sound came from her, but when Laura went from licking to sucking her large, soft nipple, and it began to harden into a wet, gummy knot between her lips, a low moan of fierce intensity began to flow out of Sara's lungs and up into her throat. "Aaannnngghhhhh . . . aaannngghhhh," she moaned, now twisting, her hands dropping away, quickly replaced by Laura's, who held Sara's breast gently in her own hands now and let the girl's excited wet nipple slide in and out of her mouth, lashing it with her tongue, teasing it with her teeth] You must forgive me for nattering on like this about your breast worship, but I just can't get enough of it. No one else, period, comes close to this. You give ton more details after this. You actually describe what Laura is doing when she makes love to a woman's breast. Other writers just say they are doing it without any details. This really keeps the reader from being able to truly get into the sex.

Finally, Sara can't take anymore and stops Laura and kisses her ravenously and then they strip naked and embrace and Sara kissses Laura's body with hunger. Laura wants more of her tits, but Sara has other ideas. As she moves to love Laura's breast, Laura is caressing and squeezing Sara's meaty, firm and springy flesh. I love how your women's hands are never still. They want to feel their lover's body. I love how Sara scissors Laura's nipples until her mouth can get there. Then the way that Sara looks up to gauge Laura's reactions. I love it. I'm always looking to see the effect I'm having. I can just see this. Plus you state what we women already know [catching Laura's eyes in the darkness, her own eyes flashing with sexual heat and fervent pleasure derived from giving so much pleasure to Laura.] By loving your partner we derive almost equal pleasure, by giving we get back in return.

Now Sara moves up and dangles her breast in Laura's face, who is laying on her back. Laura finds her breast to be the pinnacle of perfection at the time. I love this about Laura. She gives each woman her all and in turn finds each the pinnacle of perfection at the time.

Now we have yet another round of exquisite breast worship. This time they are more passionate in the lovemaking. I love how Laura guides the breast into her hungry mouth with both hands. I love how you describe the nipple getting all rubbery against her tongue and the way that she grips Sara's flesh along her sides and back and the feel of it quivering with need and desire. Finally, the moans of rapture from Sara. I especially loved all the little details that draw me in, but other authors don't add because they are not central to the tit mauling going on at the time [Laura realized that her own thighs were scissoring involuntarily in the air, knees leaping, next to Sara's hip, and her ass was squirming against the sheet. With an awkward loud slurp and wet pop, she released Sara's shiny wet nipple and hurriedly, hungrily guided the other one into her mouth, now rolling Sara gently but forcefully onto her side, then her back, now sucking her nipples and squeezing her luscious breasts in a heated frenzy.] It is these little details that make this so wonderful.

Now Laura heads south for nirvana. Sara is 'almost' beyond joking and urges her on. I love how you describe Sara's thigh as being "thick, smooth, beautiful thigh." Your are always so loving in your descriptions of any part of these women. You as usual describe the beautiful scent of an aroused woman. Laura discovers her 'captive bead ring' or pussy / clit ring. I love the description of Sara getting on her elbows to tell Laura about the ring [Again Sara propped herself up on her elbows, which made her incredibly beautiful large breasts jiggle. Her big round black nipples were flecked with bumps, and Laura was strongly tempted to devour them again. Sara grinned.] You are such a visual writer, thank goodness.

There is no way I would do this to myself. They are hoot to play with, though I would prefer not to mess with them. I would never tell a lover that. I don't want anything to mar the beauty of a woman's body. I have been told by these women that clit rings do give that buzz and can cause an actual orgasm sometimes. It is a nice change of pace for Laura to discover this and what she does with it later. Liked this line from Sara [Sara shook her head. "Oh no. Far from it. In fact, when I walk it rubs a little against my clit and makes me tingle all over." She lifted one hand, sitting up further, and caressed Laura's cheek with her fingers. "Like I do when I look at you."] That is just so tender and loving. My heart did a little flutter when I read that the first time. Hum, maybe Sara did want this night to occur and helped the seduction proceed when she needed to act.

After this confession, Laura is naturally filled with deep emotion. They still flirt even now. Sara plays the coquette asking what will Laura give her and Laura reply is make her the happiest girl in a thirty mile radius. Again, another killer paragraph [Sara beamed, giving Laura her broadest smile now, her white teeth gleaming brightly in the semi-darkness. Her voice, when she spoke again, was lower, smokier, and vibrant with anticipation. Slowly, her breasts jiggling again, she leaned back, straightening out her elbows and settling onto the mattress.] Stuff like this thrills me a little. This is just so loving. This is love, not mindless rutting.

Now Laura parts Sara's willing thighs and gets to heaven. She starts to flick the clit ring, which makes Sara whop a little. I'm happy that Laura doesn't digress here to long but instead moves south and buries her tongue in Sara's honey pot. Which you describe so well [It was a small, plump, meaty pussy, which Laura determined from her tactile senses more than her eyes, since in the darkness only the inner pink sleeve glowed and occasionally flashed in wet fiery effulgence. But her lips, and her tongue, and her fingers detected that Sara's labia were thick and spongy and fleshy, that there was a sparse little patch of curled hair above her treasure, and that her clit was small and perfectly positioned to act as a resting place for the ingenious little silver ring.] You are absolutely the only writer to describe a woman's cunt. As I have said, I find that to be so weird, I mean this is the promise land so to speak.

With all these loving descriptions of Sara I feel that I could set down with a sketch artist and describe her well enough that one could find her by it. Other stories leave the women as blank slate. You get the standard (not always that) height, hair and eye color, general build and cup size. After that the reader is generally on their own. It is nice to have this wealth of detail to help visualize them. Having their pictures allows me to really see how well you describe these women.

Sara tells Laura that she is a slow comer. Of course, Laura embarks to show her just how wrong she is. She is in the hands of a true master. I love how Laura caresses her thighs and runs her thumbs into her crease all the while Sara is running her fingers through Laura's hair. I love all this tactile stimulation. When Sara starts to get overheated and Laura moves to kiss her belly and belly button. Laura moves up and they kiss heatedly again while fondling those great tits. I love how Laura tries to make it last. Other writers try to show this but just don't put enough into to make it work. They only give it lip service. Laura really does do it.

Sara gets Laura to move down again with [Sara shivered, then laughed. "Then get back down there and finish the job. I'm only the happiest girl in ten miles right now. I think I need a little more action."] I love Sara's easy going happy with life way of speaking.

Laura once more gets in between Sara's thighs and starts to work on bringing her to orgasm. I love how Sara's pussy is all puckered and her inner lips opening like a seashell. I really love how you describe Laura tongue invading the mouth of the shell. That is cool allusion. Love this reaction [This time her body clenched, and she arched her back stiffly, her breasts rolling as she pushed her upper body into the air briefly, then fell back.] Oh yeah! As Sara's tension mounts I love how she digs her fingers in more forcefully into Laura's scalp as the glues Laura's mouth to her streaming cunt.

I love how Laura is sorry that the orgasm has arrived. She wants to feast forever. I love all the tension and anguished pleasure that is so apparent on Sara's face. It is obvious she is about to be destroyed with pleasure. The sensual thick lips part to moan and her eyes go to the back of her head. I can never get enough of this with my lovers. I love that total loss of physical control. Now it hits [Sara exploded in tumultuous shrieks and spasms. "Annngghiiieeee! Ohhnnggmmmmnnnggg! Ungghhh! Oh . . . oh Laura! Auunggiiihheee!" she cried out, rocking and jerking, her hips pumping wildly, so much so that Laura could only pull back to avoid being hit in the face by her jerking pelvis.] This I know about. I always try to hang in there as long as possible and sometimes I get a sore lip or knocked cross-eyed.

I love how Laura then rubs Sara's cunt with her fingers to keep the stimulation high and increase Sara's orgasm. Thanks for showing this. This is something no one else has ever written. I love having this done to my cunt when I'm coming. Then as she starts to come down Laura gently licks her open cunt and flicks her ring. Other writers never show this. This trying to draw out the orgasm and then gently bringing your lover down with mild stimulation. Not trying to trigger another, just helping them to have a feather soft landing. Finally Laura caresses and kisses Sara's body as she comes down from her orgasm. Then they kiss languidly to seal this wonderful moment. Other writers just have their lovers come and almost immediately have their lovers stop in their love making, almost like a light switch is thrown.

Now Sara is ready to reciprocate ["My turn," she said, nibbling Laura's lips, pinching Laura's nipples, making the juices suddenly flow hot and fast in Laura's pussy.] I love how you describe this. You make it so hot. I like Sara's vulnerability when she says she never thought she would have such a beautiful creature wanting to make love to her. I can totally understand Laura's blush. I don't think Laura has a vain bone in her body. Yet another marvelous trait she has. Laura accepts her beauty without gloating in it or letting it go to her head.

I can never get enough of how your lovers will stop their breast feasting to move up to kiss their lover ravenously. You alone have your lover's press their bodies heatedly together, their tits mashing together. Other writers keep their lover's bodies apart almost like they have poison ivy or something. Now it is Laura's turn to moan for Sara to finish her off. It is so nice to read about Laura just falling for Sara so hard and giving her heart so openly. Laura and Sara are in total sync with each other.

Now Sara attacks Laura's body [Sara was all over Laura's lean, slender body, kissing and rubbing her, sucking her flesh, then slipping her tongue into Laura's burbling, frothing pussy, making Laura cry out.] This is the way to make a woman explode in orgasm. Laura explodes into an all caps orgasm. You just make these orgasms so supreme. As Laura comes down you again have your women cuddle in post orgasm bliss [She felt Sara sliding up beside her, felt Sara's unbelievably soft lips on her cheek. The tenderness was almost painfully moving to her.]

I love tasting my pussy on my lover's mouth so I really dug this [Instead of answering, Sara kissed her mouth first. Though some girls Laura knew could not bear the taste of their own pussy on another's lips, Laura luxuriated in it, and apparently Sara did also, since they kissed voraciously with open mouths for a full minute.] I love that you stated this so explicitly.

I like that Laura finds Sara's thick thighs so engrossing. I like women with big thighs. That is just a huge turn on for me. I like how Laura tells Sara she loves them when Sara gets a little self-conscious about her "fire plug" thighs. Laura has helped several women overcome their self-consciousness about their bodies. This lack of confidence doesn't apply to Sara when she talks about her pussy. She knows it is a killer cunt and is proud of it. Good for Sara. Laura agrees ["I think you have a gorgeous pussy," Laura said, in a low, suddenly clotted voice, feeling herself blush, not with embarrassment this time but renewed sexual desire.]

Up to this point they have made love by moonlight. Now Laura wants to turn on a light to see the clit ring better. Sara makes a remark about her body looking good by candlelight. Laura leaps on this. That is such a neat idea. Candlelight does kind of create that ethereal aura. I'm not sure if you ever watched "Moonlighting" but Maddie Hayes always had that glow about her. This just sets up the situation for some more romantic fucking.

Laura is now ready for some nice trib; she wants to feel that ring on her pussy. Laura gets to initiate another woman into this wonderful act. Sara is right; dorm beds are too fucking small. I love how you always heat things up before the main course is served [In a gentle, fluid motion, Laura eased Sara down on her back and began to kiss her again in a slow, searching, emotional way, not fast or urgent, but smoldering and relentless. Their naked breasts squirmed and rubbed together, and their hands roamed.] Other authors would just maybe have a little kissing and then straight into the sex position of choice.

I like how Laura gets between her thighs and moves her body up and starts rubbing. I really like this a lot. Just gently humping my partner with me on top and pressing down into her body. Getting face-to-face and setting up the rhythm of fucking. Of course Sara swoons at first contact. I love how Sara starts to immediately get wetter when Laura fingers her pussy. Laura is overwhelming her [Sara had stopped giggling. Her breathing was growing too labored for her to laugh. She was now even whimpering softly, faintly. Her wet cunt was now open again, gaping, oozing, very receptive.] I just can never get enough of these little details.

Then you get into a real cool variation of trib [Laura released her wet black nipple, now shiny and more erect, the center pushing up from the soft, swollen areola, though Sara's huge soft nipples never really got as erect as Laura's did. With her hands Laura lifted Sara's delicious thighs, hooking her arms under her knees, forcing her legs back and up, splaying her groin. Sara looked up at her expectantly, her dark eyes swirling and throbbing in the warm glow of the candlelight.] This really increases the torque and pressure and you still get to suck nipples and kiss, though a little awkward it is totally worth the effort.

I think it is so cool that Laura hesitates before making contact. Laura knows how to make the moment special. [Sara and Laura were approaching it as if they were celebrants in a holy, stirring mystery, their breath pausing as their cunts came close, there flesh tensing, their eyes streaming hot emotion back and forth between them.] You are always able to bring out the emotion in sex. Others try to convey this but they just don't invest the time and energy to really show the special connection that lovers make. It is so much more than just the actual fucking.

I also liked how Laura contrasted the emotion with this trib and how it contrasts so completely with the rough and violent coupling with Shontay. It was explosive but without any deeper emotional coupling. That was just simple hot fucking, plain and simple. It really makes me look forward to the next chapter and the potential explosive sex waiting within.

Now that I think about it, I don't think another writer ever has tried to make this act of sex special. They treat it as just another position. Trib is often just good fucking, but that intimate contact is just so fucking special that one can reach that special plateau. They make contact ["Ahhnnnn!" Sara moaned, very softly. "Oh yes . . . honey . . ." Laura panted, moving her hips slightly, giving a slight but very gentle forward thrust, sliding her hand out just in time as their slick, squinchy cunt lips slid together. "Unhhhhh . . . oh god!" "Oh Jesus . . . oh Jesus . . ." Sara whimpered, tossing her head, but also grinding upward rhythmically with her pelvis too, meeting Laura's gentle thrusts.] What makes this special is not the actual fucking (though great) but how you verbalize the sweet feelings. Other authors just have their lovers fuck in silence until they scream in orgasm (one yell and no great vocalizations like you). Makes it seem so bland and it is definitely not hot they way have their lovers just fuck like mannequins. They forget to show the heat and emotion.

Once in the rhythm Laura gets the thrill of the clit ring. That added stimulation would be a blast. You have them meld into a languid coupling of emotional kissing and gentle humping. No wild thrusting that I can guarantee ninety five percent of authors would have them do. This is so fucking true [Though slightly uncomfortable, with Sara bowed back underneath her, with Sara's feet flailing in the air and Laura's thrusting body responsible for pinning her back into this odd position in which they both were quivering and straining, they both nevertheless were in the grip of a shared mania of scorching passion that neither wanted to relinquish.] I love seeing my feet in the air like that when I'm on the bottom. You concentrate on emotions. I am so thankful that I discovered your writings.

Just another perfect paragraph for me [Laura was still sucking her large, pulpy, soft nipple, feeling its consistency thicken and swell inside her mouth, and she released it slowly, smiling at Sara. Now they kissed for perhaps the hundredth time, and now they began to move more urgently too, as if even the desire to prolong this beautiful moment could not overcome the frantic need for release they were creating in each other. Their wet, slimy cunt lips mashed together, and Laura could feel the small ring graze her own sensitive clit each time Sara swirled her hips.] This is just another example of where you blend hot fucking sex and soul soaring emotion.

I love how they to keep the rhythm slow but the need becomes too great. They can't but help increasing the force and rhythm of their fucking. Their need becomes too great. I love how Sara starts to twitch and dig her fingers into Laura's flesh as she starts to lose control of her body. Again these are the little details that other writers never put in, that slow build up to orgasm. These are the things I revel in while my lover builds towards the big O. This following orgasm should be used in a writing school for lesbian erotic writers ["Aunngghhh!" Sara groaned, her face torn by a quick reflex of sharp sensation, which Laura recognized as the first small tremor of a coming earthquake. She slid her hands down to Sara's churning hips and gripped them solidly, then jammed her creamy, throbbing pussy hard into the girl's, rubbing it quickly and violently into Sara's spongy, slippery cunt lips, feeling the momentary bite of the little ring into her own clit as it slid past in a chaos of squealing, pumping, surging desperation. "Mnnggggiieeee!" Sara suddenly exploded in piercing, whinnying cries, her body flexing and jumping under Laura as the first spasms of another wrenching orgasm shook her. "Ohhnnnggggg . . . ummnngghiiiieeeee! Oh . . . Laur—" "Yes . . . honey, yes!" Laura panted back to her, slowing the pace, relaxing the top-down pressure of her own body on Sara's a little so that Sara would not be seized by a cramp. "Annngghhiiiiieeee! Ungghhh! Oh god!"] Great details and screams of rapture, this is the kind of stuff I masturbate too (quite devastating orgasms actually). I always look forward to each new chapter because I know you will deliver these mind-blowing scenes of great lesbian sex. It is your details that make this so supreme. I'm sure that the vast majority of authors would have paired the above down to two or three sentences, which just doesn't cut it.

I love how you describe Sara's slow descent from the heights of bliss. You capture that slow descent into after glow so perfectly. The way the body becomes so heavy and languid. I like Sara's whimper of complaint when their cunts separate. There is of course some gentle kissing and caressing in afterglow.

Now Sara decides to return the favor and mounts Laura in the same exact way. You show how not just the physical can excite a woman [aroused Laura, and the sight of her large swaying and bobbing breasts and the huge black circles of her soft nipples glimmering in the soft warm candlelight was enough to make Laura's pussy ache and throb.] Just looking at Sara excites Laura.

I like how you describe the shift in the dynamic between them. Now with Sara on top she becomes the aggressor and actively rams her cunt into Laura's wet willing cunt. Sara quickly makes Laura's eyes roll, her flesh quiver and guttural groans of ecstasy escape from her throat. Now Sara is the one who feels the passion of raw hunger. Again, only you show this raw emotion to begin with and then how it can flow between partners.

I get to experience yet another mind blowing orgasm with your beautiful prose to make it so special [Sara said nothing. She was breathing very hard now herself, and her eyes were glazing over again as she rammed and crunched her sweet pussy down into Laura's, making Laura see stars and then explode in a thousand fiery small mushroom clouds of fierce rapture that went off throughout her body, followed by a convulsive inner blast that nearly knocked her unconscious. "Auunggghhhhh!" she groaned in a fierce outburst, grimacing, her body seized by the intense, wracking spasms. "Ungghh! Oh! Oh! Aunnnggghhhiieeee! Ummmnnggeee!" Everything, the entire universe, was concentrated for Laura into the instant of this excruciating, paralyzing orgasm, with Sara awkwardly leaning forward on top of her shuddering, twitching body, with Sara's marvelous breasts filling her hands. Laura did not release them even in the midst of this horrific climax, which continued to flow through her in spasm after spasm, until finally the effort to breathe became too severe, and she had to gently urge Sara off her pinned-back body so that she would not suffocate.] I know I keeping harping on this, but it is just such a supreme joy and pussy twitching pleasure to read more than she same old stuff. You are able to make each orgasm so unique. With other authors, after you have read a few of their stories you can pretty much predict how the sex will go and be almost be guaranteed that the sex will be boring the same. In this story you gave us four mind-blowing orgasms. I have masturbated to this story several times already. Thank you. I use your stories to get my fire going. I timed my orgasm to hit right when Laura or Sara are coming. It really is mind blowing.

I chuckled when Sara has to ask Laura to let go of her tits so they can uncouple. Then the way that Laura whimpers when they start to separate their mated cunts. It is so tender how Sara keeps them mated until all the aftershocks have passed through Laura's body. I love how you have those oh so sweet aftershocks passing through your lovers. They just make me tingle and shudder all over in post-coital bliss.

The ending of course is beautiful. They way they snuggle in afterglow and clutch each other under the covers. I was touched by the vulnerability of Sara asking if Laura will be there in the morning. The last sentence was the perfect way to end the story [Laura kissed her with deep feeling, though not with sexual insistence. She was sleepy herself. "I promise I will be here," she whispered. "Put out the candle. When we wake up, I'm going to light your fire all over again."] Sweet emotion after intense fucking. I think Laura has found another Dawn.

This was a wonderful chapter where you have described yet another truly unique woman. You have made Sara Paige into a wonderful woman that is just so lovable with her humor, intelligence and her great view on life. It is no wonder that Laura has fallen for her so hard. You continue to introduce women that are so multidimensional. These women are real. They have personalities that are full of unique traits and the quirks that make us each unique. Each of the women in this saga have been unique and a wonder to discover. I always look forward to new women to discover how the new woman will be.

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Chapter 260:

First I want to say that I really like the link you have to the pictures of Shontay. I think this will add a lot for your readers. I thought that your selection of photos captures her essence very well. Looking at these photos prepares the way for the sexual fireworks to follow. I can't wait to see the photos you select for your future chapters. I can't wait to see the photos of Sara.

I like how this chapter starts with Laura feeling a little trepidation over the fact that Shontay has not called for ten days. She is thinking (correctly) that Shontay's parents have spilled the beans about her and her women screaming out in exctacy during their crushing orgasms. Laura's decision to move out and the resulting freedom she has felt to vocalize her rapture during coming is about to unleash a storm.

This is the chapter where Laura gets her new condo. I for one am totally ecstatic about this. Ever since Kendra started cramping Laura's style and making her feel guilty for having great sex, I have looked forward to Laura getting into a situation where she can have sex with no fear of eavesdropping. Of course, over the chapters, she has constantly lost control and screamed anyways. I can't wait for the next chapter. I remember clearly Shavon telling Laura to christen her new bed in chapter 239. I can't wait for the sex that Sara (I hope) and Laura will have in her new residence.

I did get into the reminisces that Laura had while looking out her window. I too have many wonderful memories of the women she has devoured on that white sofa. I loved the little geography lesson we get and where some of her lovers live in relationship to her apartment. It will be interesting to see how some of her old lovers discover her new digs. I'm thinking mainly of her younger lovers like Jane, Inky and Mavis. I can just see them getting very panicky when they discover she no longer lives there. That will be a blast to read.

I chuckled at the description of the real estate agent. Not the most appealing physically but probably a nice fellow. Liked the fact that the person was referred to Laura by Rhonda. It is nice to see them helping each other.

I liked the comment that was made about no one would be able to hear a murder being committed in Laura's new condo. Of course the gentleman doesn't know that Laura will be murdering her women, only that it will be with pleasure. They will be dying from extreme pleasure. I think this example from chapter 251 will suffice [But even though her cries were muffled, her lovely hard body flipped and levitated off the sofa, straining and shuddering as she came. God, it's like I'm trying to kill her or something, Laura realized, as she became aware of the way Dawn was undulating and whimpering and shaking, as if she were being throttled by Laura, whereas in fact she was only quivering with bliss as the last jolting waves of a thrilling orgasm passed through her body.] I had to chuckle at Laura's comment about odious rock and roll. Any Rolling Stones after 1967 is ear-splitting music I agree.

I love how Laura reflects on Sara. She reflects on the great sex but it so much more than that. I am reading a few other multipart stories now, when the characters think about their lovers it is only as sexual. Laura always remembers the total person and what makes them so special to her. [The thought of Sara brought her full circle to her obsession of the past few days, since she could not shake Sara out of her mind now, or the memory of Sara's caresses from her body either, or her funny faces, or her big soft black nipples, or her twinkling little silvery captive bead ring.] I just love how you have made her so special with such a wonderful personality. This is not unique. All your women are unique women with many personality traits and qualities.

Once more Laura hears Shontay upstairs. I thought it was great insight into Shontay's motivation. Laura knows of her intense jealousy and that she herself feels the same way when she thinks one of her lovers is sharing her body with another. What I thought was intense was the idea of Shontay listening to her mother go on about that "slut" Laura and her black women screaming in ecstasy. It must have killed Shontay to have to listen to that and not be able to let on that she is one of those women.

This makes me feel sorry for Shontay. Then the fact that she is so jealous. She has yet to make peace with the idea that Laura sleeps with other women. I have had that problem a few times. One tries to make it clear, but sometimes a woman wants more than you can give them. I can totally understand the fury Shontay must be feeling.

Before I go on, I want you know that I chuckled throughout the whole scene up in the Gibson's apartment. The reason I chuckled is because I had this vision in my head. I had this picture of a middle age man (a Peter Seller's type of character) getting into his apartment. He is a very conservative man who never even knew woman could have sex together. I have a vision of Laura marching past him not even seeing him and pounding on Shontay's door. This man stands transfixed and just observes everything and then with burning curiosity puts his ear to the door when it is shut. I just have a picture of his face reacting to all that happens between Shontay and Laura.

I like the contrast between this episode at the door and the previous one. The last episode only hinted at the violence possible. This one delivers it. I know that Gianias must have been in heaven. I loved it, needless to say. I like how Shontay goes immediately for intimidation by opening the door suddenly and then rising to her full height (which I now know is four inches taller than Laura). I can just see Laura cringing before her. I love how Laura immediately starts to stutter and get discombobulated.

As usual, Laura immediately responds to her woman. Shontay has her hair down and Laura's body immediate responds to this. It is only with Laura that Shontay lets her hair down from its severe bun. Laura has helped her to loosen up. Now that I think about it, Shontay did make enough noise for Laura to know she was there. If I had been her, I would have been in socks and gliding along being as quiet as a mouse. Now we see her with her hair down, the way Laura likes it. Of course her demeanor belays that [but the look in her eyes spelled disaster, not delicious sex.] I love the fire in Shontay's eyes and body.

I love the way you are able to describe Shontay and her anger. You are able to give such a vivid picture of her anger and the way it affects her body. You go way beyond the pure physical by the adjectives and word pictures you paint of Shontay. [I'm always a hopeless sucker for her when she gets this cold, aloof, imperial manner, she realized. It's her 'Off with her head!' manner.]

I can just hear the pleading tone in Laura's voice as she starts trying to reason with Shontay. She tries to use smoldering looks to get Shontay to give in. Shontay is nowhere near ready to give in. Now the struggle with the door begins. I can just see this in my mind. The back and forth, first Shontay then Laura having the advantage.

Now Shontay starts to curse Laura and using dirty language. I'm a sucker for that. I love for a woman to call me names, especially if we are having "frisky" sex. That is my euphuism for rough sex. I feel a little flutter when Shontay uses "bitch, shit, cunt, etc., against Laura. It is just so hot. Outside the bedroom I never use this kind of language, but I love it in the bedroom. I do fit the angel in the kitchen and whore in the bedroom cliché.

I really like how you describe each blow, counter blow between the two. You describe it so well; I can see it all. You make it so real. This is so good; I could use it to do a movie scene. You show the action and give us the emotions for the actors to show. I love it.

I like how the scene between them ebbs and flows. Laura is able to force her way into Shontay's apartment but then, through the force of Shontay's ire, she allows herself to pushed back out. I just don't feel any other writer would have the imagination to have this. I love the dialog throughout this confrontation. ["I . . . I really care about you," Laura said feebly. "The fuck you do," Shontay hissed. You care about black cunt, that's all."]

Now the fun starts [Laura started to raise two fingers to Shontay's face, to caress her cheek, as she often did in moments of tenderness. Shontay's hand came up, and Laura was afraid she was going to knock her own hand aside. Instead, Shontay slapped her hard on the cheek, a ferocious slap, so hard that the force of it swiveled Laura's head to the side. Her palm against Laura's face made a loud crack.] Again you paint the whole picture. I just know that other authors would just say that Shontay slapped Laura. Whoopee. I need the details you give for me to really get into it. No wonder Gianias worships these cat fights.

Of course Laura strikes back. I absolutely adore Shontay's reaction. "Ynnnee". I had to chuckle. I think it is right on target Shontay acting so surprised when Laura strikes back. When a person is haughty and conceited they just expect things to go their way. I know Shontay feels she has the right to strike out at and suffer no retaliation. Now Laura advances into the room and closes the door behind her. My "Peter Sellers" character is now at the door. Inside Laura tries to reason with Shontay. Again this shows Laura's positive side so well. She tries to assuage Shontay's hurt feelings and reason with her. She still has a ways to go.

Shontay goes back on the counterattack. I love how you describe Shontay here. Again you describe her in such a beautiful, caressing way [Though very tall and skinny, Shontay was physically imposing merely because of her height, and she was, Laura realized, very much stronger than she looked, with a wiry, tensile force that could easily be underestimated.] You are always giving further descriptions of these women. You are always adding details to make these women more alive.

Now Shontay slams Laura into the door. I love how you describe it so physically. I can feel the air whooshing out of my lungs. She continues to slam Laura around and drops into slang kind of speak. She is losing control of her regal bearing and is getting down and dirty. I just love how you use dialog ["Wait a . . . wait a minute," she cawed, gagging softly, gulping for breath.] Your dialog is always so sharp and descriptive.

Now instead of feeling anger or fear at the situation, Laura [At the same time, in a split second, she was very aware of Shontay's scent, the fresh, sensual odor of her body, and her hair, which brushed Laura's cheek as Shontay shoved her violently around. Just as she had responded so sharply to Sara's fresh, unique bodily fragrance, she now found herself mesmerized by Shontay's, a scent different from Sara's but so familiar and erotic that she realized she was becoming aroused even as they were fighting.] I love the smell of women. I love the smell of their hair, skin and just their essence. I also love the smell of their sweat when I get them all lathered up. Laura wonders why she is doing this with Shontay throttling her. I know why, because this situation is fucking hot. I love to be roughed up like Laura is right now.

Then Laura trying to keep her balance shreds Shontay's expensive blouse. I wish I could be inside Shontay's head at this point. I know she must have been totally aghast. Shontay shows her strength again by knocking Laura to her knees with a glancing blow. Laura being my girl only feels arousal. We see that Shontay feels it too. I chuckle at the picture of Laura holding onto Shontay's leg as she tries to carry Laura while getting to the door. I love the fact that Laura is still trying to apologize and Shontay is still cursing her (which makes me hot).

Shontay finds a chink in Laura's armor and Laura gives in again. Laura's sudden surrender causes Shontay to fall to the floor. Love that yell "Ynnneeee". Now we get some more cursing and Shontay strikes Laura again. Finally Laura gets really pissed and starts to choke Shontay. Of course, she doesn't do it violently or really try to hurt her. She wants to try and control her.

Shontay retaliates with the pummeling of Laura's back and racking her fingers along Laura's back underneath her sweatshirt. I notice that Shontay is following my rules of getting rough and "frisky". Do not strike with a closed fist and do not draw blood. I think she herself is not going over the line. I think she is feeling the same sexual tension that Laura is feeling. I love how Laura is besotted with Shontay's sensual body and how Shontay is still cursing with lots of "fuck you". That makes me hot.

[Laura loosened her grip, melting. I want her. Oh god, I never wanted her as much as this! I wonder if she feels that way too. She realized that her own pussy was burbling and flooding with juice. The wetness in her crotch was amazing. I wonder if she . . .] This is how I get when I am being physical, especially when I'm receiving it. My pussy just floods and runs down my thighs. I love how Laura maneuvers Shontay so she can rub her crotch. Of course her crotch is swimming with juices.

Laura has her proof. Now she assaults Shontay's exposed skin with passionate kisses. Shontay once more rebels with physical effort and more great cursing ["Arrngghhhh!" Shontay grunted loudly, flinging Laura off her body with almost supernatural strength, extending her arms and violently pushing Laura away. "Let go of me, you cunt! You dyke, you fucking perverted dyke! Let go of me! God, I hate you! I hate you!"] Now Laura has her confidence and proceeds with her love attack.

Laura jams her thigh into Shontay's cunt and kisses her neck after removing the tatters of Shontay's blouse. Shontay's angry retorts are starting to sound more like whimpers of sexual excitement. Of course Shontay can't just give in. She gets her fingers on Laura's nipples and gives a harsh twist. I think Laura is painfully surprised. I think she thought she was starting to get Shontay under her sexual spell. Laura cracks Shontay's face with a slap. I love how you say that [Shontay's eyes, already hot with anger, suddenly flared with a thermonuclear fire]. That is just a cool description. Now Shontay pulls hair with vicious pulls. I love how this has the opposite affect that she is wanting. Laura has come to love the pain that this causes. She is giving Laura pleasure, despite the screams of her to stop.

I love how Laura finishes Shontay's upper clothes by ripping off her bra. Pretty hot. She immediately devours the little lovelys. When she goes to remove Shontay's jeans, Shontay lifts her ass to assist. Her curses are now weakening. She is still cursing but one knows she is letting the pretense of fighting dissipate. She caresses Laura's flesh when Laura removes her sweatshirt. She wants to fuck.

I love the "I'll kill you" quotes. I notice while she is saying that as Laura is stripping off her pants and panties. If she were truly serious she would attack Laura while she was vulnerable. More hair pulling, but I know this only flooded Laura's cunt with fresh nectars. A little more fighting and Laura runs her fingers under Shontay's only remaining clothes her panties and grasps her ass checks. She finds them bathed in cunt juice. I know my cunt would have exploded with fuck juice at this.

I see Laura gives her a hickey. I have never mentioned my desire to see this, but I really, really love getting and giving hickeys. It just makes me cream. I love getting love bites all over my body. I love how Laura after spotting it, she sucks it some more and deepens the love bruise.

Now it is time to remove the panties. [Laura slid down, pinning the girl's thrashing legs under her, and forcibly tore Shontay's panties down and off her feet. Oh god, I want to eat her pussy, she realized, suddenly inhaling the hot, pungent odors of Shontay's aroused slit, but she knew it was too risky, since Shontay was still seething with anger. Instead, Laura slid back up, embracing her, pinning her to the floor, but dropping one hand again to Shontay's thighs, dipping it between them.] Love the smell of excited pussy. Laura is still thinking and plans her love attack according to the threat level. She now runs runs her fingers into Shontay's lovely tight cunt, with the desired devastating affect. I love how your women gag at the first penetration. Shontay's pussy is just flooding with cunt cream all over Laura's fingers. My pussy is twitching and creaming while I'm writing this. Your sex is just so fucking hot. Hope she does fist Shontay sometime in the future. Shontay deserves that special pleasure and would really love that intimacy with Laura. She wants Laura to prove her desire and affection.

I love how Laura talks to Shontay telling her how she is going to "fuck" her. I love talking like this while making love. Telling my lover how I'm going to fuck her blind and if she likes it, I love to call her a whore / bitch and such. Of course, I love having my lover talk to me like this. Now Shontay slips a finger up into Laura's cunt and starts to fuck her. I love how Laura decides to aggressively kiss Shontay without warning.

Thought it was cool how Laura has observed Shontay masturbation practices and now uses it to circle Shontay's clit the way Shontay does. This has to be devastating for Shontay. Then Laura uses her free hand to cup and dig her fingers into Shontay's beautiful ass. You again are the only writer that has her lover love and caresses her lover's ass. Other writers just totally ignore this. Thank goodness you are always showing this.

I think it is cool how Laura has to buck her hips to get Shontay to fuck her in earnest. Shontay is still thawing and needs to be helped along. She is still harboring some anger. I love how you have Laura press her body upon Shontay (something you alone show) and alternates between love mauling her nipples and forcing her tongue down Shontay's throat. Your loving descriptions are so romantic [luxuriating in the feel of Shontay's silky wet pussy flesh against her probing fingers, loving the soft chewy sensation of Shontay's stiffening nipples against her tongue.] I can't really express how much I love this writing of yours.

Now the first heavenly orgasm is arriving and now they both run their hands into each other's hair. I love how Shontay still can't keep from reviling Laura one more time, of course her groans belie this [Shontay bit her lower lip, panting, her eyelids fluttering, her pelvis swirling and bucking under Laura's body. "I . . . hate you," she gulped, glaring at Laura, then groaning softly as her eyes rolled up. "I hate you . . . Laura . . . unngghhh! Oh god!"] Geez, only you give the intimate details I so love [With two fingers sunk in the girl's warm, buttery slit, her palm facing Shontay's pubic bone, Laura scissored Shontay's clitoral hood between her forefinger and middle finger and began to rub up and down, forcibly, passionately, sucking her neck again, and softly whinnying as her own climax began to overwhelm her.] Sigh.

Now they come in squealing splendor, yanking each other's hair. I love the details as usual [A surging, roiling orgasm wrenched her body, but through it she could hear Shontay's ecstatic groaning and feel her gyrating hips almost rising off the floor, shuddering, bucking, as Shontay too erupted in a thrilling climax right behind her. "Ohhnnmmmgggiiieee!" Shontay squealed, writhing in a fierce seizure of ecstasy under Laura, her hands both pulling Laura's hair still with amazing strength, sparking to life new hot jolts of coming in Laura's throbbing pussy.] You are so on target how a good hair yank can bring on more killing spasms after the first shockwaves have past.

I love this description of Shontay coming off the sexual high [relishing the glow that was now clearly visible in Shontay's pale, burning eyes, the unmistakable lingering heat of a stupendous sexual explosion. Shontay might still hate her, but she would remember this fuck for a long time.] I smiled when Shontay continues to tell Laura that she "hates" her. Finally, though, she starts to give genuine smiles. This wonderful fucking can't but help to thaw the must frozen heart.

Now you give me a nice romantic moment. Shontay pleads with Laura to remain on top of her. She loves the weight pressing down on her. If there is a bottom to a position, I want it. I dearly love feeling my lover's weight pressing down into me. This whole section of story is just so romantic. I love the deep tongue kissing and Shontay caressing Laura's back, some sweet emotion to go with the scorching sex.

Now they talk between themselves and we discover that Shontay is simply amazed at how Laura can bring this wanton hunger out in her. I love how you are able to bring these little facets out of your women. Shontay is now ready to go downstairs to Laura's apartment for some more hot fucking. First they take care of Willie's needs. I love it when you show mundane tasks. These real life episodes make the story so real seeming to me.

Shontay is somewhat mollified, but not all the anger can be erased. This again is real life. Laura has reduced the anger to manageable levels but it can't really be totally removed [Shontay shook her head. "I guess not. You are a liar and a bitch, though. Don't think I don't see through you."] In the past I have had some women get angry with me when they couldn't have me all to themselves. Some came to make peace with it and some I lost forever. I am happy that Laura and Shontay are able to come to an accommodation.

Down in Laura's apartment, Shontay becomes stiff again. It will take some time for Shontay to accept that Laura has other lover's. Any time she has to reflect at this point causes her to tighten up. She will need some more hot fucking and reassurance and simple time to make a peace with the situation. I love how Laura tells Shontay as soon as she locks the door, that she invited her down to fuck and not eat dinner. Shontay is able to smile while she calls Laura a fucking liar.

Laura wants to take off Shontay's mother's kimono. Shontay makes the comment [Shontay remained coy. "I kind of liked it when you ripped my clothes off. It made me realize you really wanted me."] I think this is kind of telling. Laura almost had to pass a ritual of lust. She had to prove to Shontay her desire. If Laura had not forced the issue and "forced" herself on Shontay she would not have proven worthy in Shontay's eyes. She needed to force her love on Shontay for Shontay to believe her desire and love. Laura may have other lovers, but she doesn't have to fight for their love. By fighting for Shontay's affections, she ratifies her love, Shontay can grasp onto this.

I really chuckled when Shontay first spied her hickey in the mirror. It seems that anger comes easily to Shontay. I think having that superior attitude makes that a little easier. I love how she wails to Laura about getting the hickey. I then love how Laura's hunger for Shontay grows as Shontay examines herself in the mirror. All that neck being exposed works its affect on Laura. Of course Laura gets all flustered. Shontay's anger quickly fades away. [All the quick fury had drained out of it, and she was soft and sexy, her eyes alluring, flashing with invitations.] Again she says that no one has ever given her one before. Again Laura wins Shontay over by the sheer force of her passion for Shontay. Again I think that this makes Shontay feel special. She needs to have Laura show her love in extreme measures.

Shontay refuses an invitation for dinner, she has another meal on her mind. Now in Laura's bed she is pure sensuality. She is past her anger and is now ready for pure sex. She is so turned on, she takes the lead, evidently for the first time. She asks Laura to let her ram a finger up Laura's ass. This is the first time she has shown this kind of initiative. I swoon when a passive lover gets aggressive like this. Laura has broken through another barrier. Now Shontay returns the favor and gives Laura a hickey. I love Laura's response ["Oh god . . . I think you're doing it!" Laura squirmed, feeling hot fire squirt through her pussy as Shontay sucked her neck.]

I love how Shontay first attacks Laura's body with extreme passion, kissing and stroking her body and going after Laura's nipples with a vengeance. Like the little touch of Shontay holding onto the oil bottle and Laura feeling it rub against her body.

I love how Shontay goes after Laura's cunt [In keeping with her present mood, Shontay did not waste her time on tenderness or subtlety. Whether it was her desire for Laura or her residual anger from the fight they had had upstairs, she was rough and hungry, spreading Laura's cunt lips with her thumbs and slurping Laura's hot, achy trench passionately. Shontay licked and fingered her cunt rapidly, hungrily, sucking Laura's clit, sliding her fingers between Laura's buns]. I like how you observe that Shontay is using all the techniques she has learned from Laura. I always try to learn from every lover. I just love the idea of Shontay doing to Laura what Laura does to her.

Shontay taunts Laura ["You want me to fuck your little white ass, don't you," Shontay panted, eyes flaring.] I really like your observation about how sophisticated and reserved Shontay is. I love how the lust and anger of the situation has turned Shontay into this wanton lover. I love it when I can break down a woman who has this reserve and bring out the animal in her. Make her admit her lust and give in to it. Shontay has given into the lust that dwells inside her. I hope she finds it a little liberating. I revel in it, but I can understand Laura being intimidated by it a little. Seeing that kind of fiery demeanor and lust can be a little overwhelming.

Now Shontay lubes her finger for the ass fucking. I love how you describe Laura lying on her back with her thighs spread, totally vulnerable, waiting to be taken. Shontay asks ["You want it?" Laura nodded. "I want you to do everything to me."] I love this evident love and trust that Laura is showing. A little nice dialog and then [With a raised eyebrow, she slithered down between Laura's thighs again. Laura felt Shontay's other hand pulling open her ass cheeks, then felt Shontay's greasy fingertip press against her asshole, then felt the long digit slide up into her so deep that it felt twice as long as she knew it was.] Again, all those lovely details that I so crave.

[She began to fuck Laura's asshole very fast with her finger, plunging it in deep, giving Laura short rabbit jabs with it, biting her lower lip in concentration at the same time. Laura was slightly afraid of the glint in Shontay's pale brown eyes, .......... but she was also very aroused by this sharp, thrusting attack. And now Shontay bent her mouth to Laura's pussy too, tonguing and sucking the inflamed cunt lips, taking Laura's throbbing clit into her mouth as her long finger continued to pierce Laura's anus in quick jabs.] I like this paragraph because it shows so many things that other authors just don't do. First, you describe how Shontay fucks Laura's ass where others would just say she inserted the finger and fucked her; you tell us how. Then you have the little detail of Shontay biting her lip and actually concentrating on what she is doing. Then you describe Laura's reaction to Shontay's look in her eyes and how her body responds to the ass fucking. Other writers never delve into what the women are thinking and actually feeling beyond the basic sex. Then you give nice cunt slurping details while making it clear that Shontay is still ramming her finger into Laura's anus. Lucky girl.

Again you describe details that leave other writers just grasping at straws as far as I am concerned [Her torso and her arms were so long that she could do this with relative ease, and as they coiled their tongues together, panting and mewling, she kept fucking Laura's ass slowly and relentlessly with her finger. At the same time, she rubbed her forearm above the wrist into the sopping-wet crease of Laura's swollen pussy, pushing it hard into Laura's splayed cunt, mashing it against Laura's clit, then furiously jabbing Laura's asshole again with her long finger. "Unhhh! Ohnnn! Ungghhh!" Laura grunted softly, her eyes rolling up, nearly losing it until she felt Shontay's mouth again on her own, tearing savagely at her lips, Shontay's strong, probing tongue nearly sliding down her throat. "Oh shit! Unh! Yes! Oh god . . . Shontay . . . ungghhh!"] I think you are the only writer that talks about using your wrist and or forearm to rub the pussy. Love the kissing and Shontay ramming her tongue down Laura's throat. I always feel like I'm being possessed when I'm kissed so hotly and deeply. Love Shontay jabbing Laura's ass without mercy, ramming her finger in deep.

I really liked how Shontay finishes Laura off by scooting up and embracing Laura with one arm and fucking her wildly in the ass and mashing the clit with the forearm. Of course Laura comes in wild abundance. I thought it was cute how Laura couldn't grasp Shontay's squirming body, but Shontay was able to clasp her even tighter by rolling half on top of Laura while Laura came. I think Shontay really needed to feel that closeness to Laura at this moment. I love how you describe Laura losing all touch with reality for a few moments. That is how I get; I just float onto a cloud with just me and my conscious focused on the sweet pleasure coursing through me.

I smiled when Laura came back to Earth and asks Shontay to release her death grip. Shontay really got into it. I love the total change in Shontay [Shontay, in contrast to being stiff with anger and spite, was soft and pliant, warm and affectionate, stroking Laura's shoulder, cupping Laura's breast, her lips parted and inviting.] For now at least, Shontay is happy. Hopefully, she can find balance in the future.

I love how you so glowingly describe Shontay's body. You focus on all the things that make her so beautiful. You mention her skinny frame but you make it clear that this is of no importance. She is a woman whose body is full of treasures that most would overlook by not taking the time to see what is right in front of them the whole time. This was a very nice touch [kissing the velvety skin of Shontay's taut midriff, letting her lips skim the light, invisible down that rose in infinitesimal soft filaments from it, then pausing at Shontay's deep navel to toy briefly with her in this sensitive region.] Need I say it; no one else has come close to this description of a woman's midriff.

This is something that I love to do [It felt marvelous to Laura. While she was kissing and sucking Shontay's small, firm breasts, she slid her hands down the girl's long naked back to her hard little buns, cupping one in each palm and digging her fingers into the resilient flesh, about the size of two round grapefruits. She squeezed them and sucked harder on one of Shontay's nipples.]

Again only you lavish such praise on a woman's vagina. Only you take the time to describe the paradise that lies between every woman's thighs [She had tasted it often before but rarely got enough. Even though Shontay's lovely long naked body was a delicious light molasses hue, her small, gaping cunt lips were black as night, and now oily and shiny with flowing nectars, very wet and tongue-tempting. Between the parted inner lips was a squinchy wet pink feast of raw flesh, and Laura immediately slipped her tongue right into the center of it.]

I won't wax poetic here, but I love how you describe Laura devouring Shontay's quim while squeezing her asscheeks. Now Shontay begs for a finger up her ass. Evidently, Laura imitated Shontay into this early on and she has developed a hunger for it. Smart girl I must say. Now I am lucky enough to get a repeat of the devastating sex I describe earlier. I love Shontay's killing orgasm of course ["Auungghhh!" Shontay roared, flexing so hard that her long, supple body made a huge, awkward flip off the bed, then fell back into it, writhing and squealing as shattering spasms of coming wrenched her. "Iiiiieeeeennnggghhh! Ungghiiieeeee!" she yelped, again flipping, surging off the mattress, jamming her ass down into Laura's finger, grinding her pussy into Laura's mouth as each succeeding shockwave struck her.] Whoa! Love that last detail of Laura looping her arm around Shontay's waist to ride out the storm. I really love how you describe the orgasm's end, again, this is just so special, almost like something from a dream [When her pelvic girdle finally came to rest, Laura could still feel distant rhythmic contractions going on deep inside Shontay's body somewhere. Shontay's soft, sensitive mewling seemed to grow out of the deep hum of ecstasy that still flowed through her slackening body.]

Loved the cuddling, which is mingled with sweet sad sorrow. I do feel for Shontay. She is just now coming to grips with the fact that Laura will see other women. She will have to journey within her mind to discover a path that will take her to the daylight. I hope she finds it. All people have the answer; they only have to look within. (Of course that is easier said than done, but it can be accomplished).

As I write these glosses I focus on the now, the part I am reading. Here I see that Shontay confirms my earlier hypothesis [Shontay put her own fingertip on Laura's lower lip. "I'm glad you want me, Laura. Nobody ever wanted me the way you do. Nobody ever wanted me enough to rape me, and you've already done it twice." Her eyes were big and round and pale brown, so unusual and hypnotic.] Shontay needs the extreme passion at this time. Laura must prove that her passion for Shontay is so powerful that it will overcome all barriers.

It is cute how this chapter ends with Shontay wanting to take a bath now instead of eating. She is turning into a sex hound, can't say I blame her. The ending brought a big smile to my face.

I have really enjoyed the contrast between Sara's chapter and this chapter. You show the two extremes of love and passion. With Sara you show the deeply romantic and with Shontay you show the fierce and raw passionate sex that two women can achieve. Both are special and to be deeply treasured. I am so thankful that you capture both extremes and all the variations in between. I can't conceive of the intellect that is able to conceive of all of this and then to be able to execute so skillful. Then we have Sara again in the next chapter. I love the contrast soft/hard/soft romantic/fiery/romantic and all such comparisons.

I love the fact that Sara is to appear again so soon. I love how you cement the love and passion between Laura and the women she loves deeply with another coupling so soon after the initial love making (like Dawn). I of course can't imagine what will happen and what the sex will be, but I do this, it will be WONDERFUL! I patiently await the next masterpiece.

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