5/5/99 - Wyatt's Fate, Parts 1 - 5 (JRD); The Sorcerer's Daughter (Andy Maynard); The Temple of Size (Anonymous); The Judgment of Paris, Parts I, II, III (Baldsage); Janet for Hire (Taliesin the Bard); Brainiacal Genius, Part One: Death and a Statue (Alexi92); Death Valley (Willy T.)
5/30/99 - A New Beginning (Wyvern); Cliches, A Cyber Mockumentary, Parts 1 and 2 (Dimitri); Zonama (ZorroRojo); Donita's Revenge (JJ); Property of Raging Pythons (Lara V. Cataluna); Fucking the Champion (RedRacer); Movie Notes: A Midsummer Night's Dream
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Wyatt's Fate, Parts 1 -5 [A-/B+]
Where posted: ASS, ASSTG (alt.sex.transgender)
When posted: 4/25/99
Author: JRD
Address: jrdss@micronet.net
I'm always amused when the author of a story sequel warns us, as this one does, that "you really do need to have read that before this." How much character or plot development can occur when all the characters are fucking like rabbits?
Anyway, this story is a transgender one in the revenge/medical mode, and a sequel to the earlier one, Strange Fantasies, which I assume is also a transgender one. The plot is this. Scummy Wyatt has been acting like a cad in his relationship with his wife, Trisha--cheating on her, then divorcing her after making her pregnant. Trisha has gone to gorgeous platinum-blonde Emily Drasberg, Wyatt's new boss, for help, and it turns out Emily is a chick with a dick who asks Trisha to play with it. The two then cook up a nefarious vengeance scheme to feminize poor Wyatt with the help of Lisa, another CWAD who is Wyatt's supervisor. Plausible-sounding near-future psychiatric and medical procedures follow including the use of nanobites and implanted mind-control devices to turn Wyatt into Wanda. This goes on for five chapters. The ending is straight out of a Vickie Tern story: the main character realizes he makes a better she than a he and repents the past mistakes he made as a man.
As in the story above, how much you like this depends on how fond you are of these tales. Though competently and briskly written, I found the characters cardboard and the drama limp; for me, TG needs a good plot to make it interesting (like Ruthless's "Jemilsil" or Waldo's Flash Gordon spoof) or real insight (as Vickie Tern's "Charmed.") This story had neither, dwelling instead on the transformation process and sex between she- males, and the psychological changes that occurred in the protagonist were only perfunctory. The lack of depth made the story only average. But if you want a competent TG tale you could do worse than this.
The Sorcerer's Daughter, Parts 1 - 4 [A]
Where posted: ASS, ASSTG
When posted: 4/26/99, 4/27/99, 4/28/99
Author: Andy Maynard
Address: willdmage@juno.com
Now, this is what a TG story should be like--fantastic situations applied with a light, almost satirical touch. Mark Banyan makes a pass at one of his employees who happens to have a sorcerer for a father, and before you can say "Abracadabra" he's been transformed into Marcia, a big-titted blonde sex toy who is compelled to serve the sorcerer and his daughter. As a TG premise the revenge/supernatural theme is fairly rote, but what makes it fun in this case is the author's boob/nipple fetish: the hero is renamed "Jiggles" and every other paragraph includes descriptions of his/her breasts wobbling around, like this one:
My boobs surged out, and the inadequate triangles that had
covered it seemed to separate from their strings right before my
eyes. Instead of falling off, though, they just formed a ring about
a foot into each vast expanse of tit. The panels supposedly
covering me were getting even smaller, and were held on by
strings attached to the ring farther up eachboob. As I made my
way back to the kitchen, trying to keep upright against the load I
had hanging from my chest, I passed a mirror. An insanely
busty blonde, blue eyes, blonde hair in a microscopic bikini...A
perfect fuckdoll. What little material was left for my bikini top
was rather thin, and the nipples underneath stood out distinctly.
My nipples were now about eight inches wide, and were covered,
but not by much.
At this point the story becomes a transgender version of Suzie
Sleaze's trashy meisterwerk "Beach Slut" as the hero jiggles and
undulate his way across the sand, suggestively licking a popsicle
in true beach slut style before his tits finally burst free from the
skimpy bikini and "GANG BANG IN THE VAN!!!" is declared. After
the beach experience, there's one as a hooker, and one as an
exotic dancer. Though humiliated, he loves every minute of it.
Recommended, though the eight-inch nipples strain credibility somewhat.
Temple of Size [B+]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 4/15/99
Author: Anonymous
Poster Address: muscle-stories@usa.net
There's a certain subcategory of gay stories known as "muscle growth." The genre is pretty self-explanatory. A man, or men, quoffs some secret formula, or invokes some ancient spell, and turns into a massively muscled bodybuilder with all the works, including a massive penis. There's some sort of sex, and the story ends, the transformation process, as with a lot of TG stories above, being the only plot the story needs. In some ways it's even an inverse of TG, as the subjects become stereotypically masculine men.
This is the plot. Jack, an adventurer, is exploring the South American jungles with his stalwart native guide and comes upon the Temple of Size, where both men are transformed into musclebound golden-skinned supermen, the process causing them to release copious amounts of cum. Then they set off to conquer the world.
Not long on realism, but that isn't the point of a story like this: the scenes of exploding beefcake are. The story was well done in that sense, but I'd prefer more of a plot, or maybe more humor.
The Judgment of Paris, Parts I, II, III [A-]
Where posted: ASS, ASF (alt.sex.femdom)
When posted: 4/26/99
Author: Baldsage
Address: baldsage@my-dejanews.com
This story actually goes on for nine parts; I grabbed the first three.
Based on the beginning of the Iliad, the story departs in a big way by having the who's-the-fairest famous judgment of the goddesses Aphrodite, Athena, and Artemis occur after Paris has wed Helen, not before, and furthermore recasts Paris as a sculptor and not the dim-witted prince who causes the Trojan war. Inexplicably, the goddesses' visit makes the artistically burned-out Paris very passive all of a sudden. He finds himself submitting eagerly to the whims of Helen, who has responded to his recent neglect of her by becoming a domina, and she forces him to lick her asshole after tying him up on the floor.
The writing in this story was very slick and I didn't have a problem with it, save it was missing the color and drama of ancient Greece...sheer flimsy chitons, naughty vases, phallic sculptures...the beautiful Helen herself was rather inadequately described, and there seemed to be no reason for her becoming a domina or Paris's acceptance of it. On the other hand, the prose did have a ponderous, mythic quality about it that seemed right for the subject matter, and the femdom parts were well done. In sum, if you like femdom tales the unusual setting of this one may float your boat; but if you don't, the alternate take on Greek legend isn't enough to warrant the read.
Janet for Hire [A-]
Where posted: ASS, ASSD
When posted: 4/28/99
Author: Taliesin, the Bard
Address: yourpaltal@taliesinthebard.com
Websites: http://www.taliesinthebard.com;
http://www.paganpleasures.com
With all the craze for 1970s-chic the latest stylistic statement is porn chic, where fashion spreads strive to emulate the sleazy, haphazard, ill-lit look of adult movies' in their heyday. Ahhh. I can almost smell the polyester.
This story has jumped on the bandwagon, featuring a group of adult "swingers" known as S.L.U.T.--(Swinging Lifestylers United Together)--whose credo is "to be ready for any sexual activity at any time, and to initiate such activity whenever the opportunity arose." The happy foursome entertain themselves with group sex and the videotaping of that sex, and in this story they hire a hooker to provide extra thrills. Then the cum starts flying.
This was a stroke story, make no mistake about it, but a cheerful sleazy one that should appeal to fans of adult movies. The sex was pretty conventional--no kink here--and was heavy on the cliches of adult vids, like the lap 'em up female cum swallowing scene, and the two pigs in the poke (two dicks in one asshole.) Hmm, if a gal does that regularly, she'd gonna need an industrial- sized buttplug to prevent her fecal matter from leaking out whenever she gets excited.
Not original, but interesting in a Boogie Nights kind of way.
Braniacal Genius, Part one: Death and a Statue [A-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/3/99
Author: Alexi
Address: alexi92@my-dejanews.com
The Legion of Superheroes are the protagonists of this story, and apparently they run into a clone of Brainiac, one of Superman's arch-foes, who takes them prisoner. He forces one of them, Jazmin, to become his slave and masturbate herself:
As she reached orgasm Brainiac 5 pressed a button on his
throne activating a stasis field around the pedestal. She was
frozen in a moment intime, her hands pawing at her cunt,
fingers stroking her clit, her face locked in eternal pleasure.
Jazmin had become his first sculpture in the throne room.
"Mmmmmm! Ooooooh my lord Brainiac! Unh! Master! Master!
AAAAAAAAA..."
Like a lot of comic fanfic this was written more for hard-core
fans than casual readers, and the author doesn't bother to
enlighten us as to who was doing what to whom and why. But the
writing was good--a lot better than many comic stories I've seen-
-and if you do know and care about the convoluted relationships
between these characters, you'd like this very much.
Death Valley [B+]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 4/26/99
Author: Frederick T.
Poster: hangten
Address: hangten@nym.alias.net
Willy and Carol, two aging hippies, share a bong on the road to Death Valley. They pass a motorhome where wide-eyed teenage Marci is impressed by their hipness. At a rest stop later that night Willy and Carol meet up with the teen and invite her to their motel room to share some marijuana and, as it turns out, wild three-way sex.
The author of this seems to have Libertarian leanings (the preface says "Commercial use in any form requires the written permission of the author and will ensure a portion of the proceeds goes to the National Organization for the Reform of Marijuana Laws and/or the American Cancer Society" and he later thanks "the founding fathers and the U.S. Constitution") but I was uncomfortable with the idea of a naive fifteen-year-old being the target of two swingers; if the story wasn't written so realistically, it might have sat better with me. The author also skipped at will between the girl's third-person POV and the man's first-person POV, leading to confusion in that I couldn't figure out who was doing what to who.
Summation: Hot sex, if you can figure it out, but nothing else.
Sorry I am so tardy with these reviews, real life intrudes. Yes,
sometimes there are more interesting things than reading
cybersmut out there.
As for the recent--as of roughly a week ago--discussion on ASSD about why straight women don't seem to be squicked by reading F/F stories as they are by reading M/M ones (mirroring the reactions of straight men, in other words)--I have this to say: since this was originally a man's opinion, I think he was projecting his own preferences onto the female gender. There are literally hundreds of thousands of explicit M/M stories written by straight females floating around on the net, but you won't find them on the ASS newsgroups or even the sex stories websites--they exist in the world of fanfiction, in the Star Trek, X-Files, Sentinel, and other media newsgroups and websites, which easily outnumber the "straight" sex ones I've seen. So I guess that puts the lie as to straight women being squicked by M/M fiction.
To make things more complicated, some of these same women also write F/F stories, which leads me to believe women are probably more curious about sexual matters then men, in the realm of fantasy anyway. For a sampling of what I'm talking about, try the alt.startrek.creative.erotica.moderated newsgroup, or the sites of prolific authors like Torch (http://www.strangeplaces.net/torch) or Alexis Rogers (http://www.calweb.com/users/a/arogers/) or webrings like The Adult Fan Fiction Webring (http://www.marysia.com/adultfic/).
I think also, that if women *seem* not to take objection to F/F stories or scenes in adult movies, it is because, as a culture, we are so used to it anyway...women's bodies being sexualized that is, whether they are nudes in an art museum, applying lipstick in a TV commercial, or swinging a sword on a Magic: The Gathering card. An M/M story or visual depiction, on the other hand, sexualizes male bodies, which means erections, ejaculations, and detailed penetrations, and as a culture we just aren't prepared for it. When was the last time you saw a sexualized male body--that is a naked man with an erection--on public view?
A New Beginning [A+]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/15/99
Author: Wyvern44
Address: wyvern44@hotmail.com
There is a certain subgenre of D/s known as Gorean where the participants play at being cruel, whip-wielding masters and chain-wearing slave girls. It's based on series of trashy science fiction novels written by author John Norman which has accrued quite a reputation among lifestylers over the years.
In this story average guy John puts the make on a new neighbor- -he stalks her, actually--and discovers she shares the same fascination with the books that he does. Within seconds of their first meeting she's calling him "Master" and the subbing begins:
Her breasts were splendid. High and firm, not too large, capped
with teats like long cherry red spikes....she was on her knees
before him, legs spread, her slave-heat on perfect display. Her
love cradle was magnificent. He knew he would enjoy subjecting
her to numerous slave rapes.
This was a very hot story...much hotter than the original Gor
ones...and it's a credit to the author that he did this while
remaining true to the coy, stilted language of the originals, using
archaic terms like teats for nipples and love cradle for cunt, for
example. After the oral sex that starts things the story gets
kinkier (and the language modernizes) when the neighbor meets
John's whip collection--"SWOOOOSH!!! SPLAT!!!"--and cuffs and
collar--"I Nancy Morgan, beg to wear the collar of Master
John..."--then presents her ass--"the delightfully curved
buttocks, submissively held apart like the halves of a ripe peach,
an open invitation for him to pierce her two lower slave
openings; the upper hole, from this angle, a brown rosette,
clenching and releasing in a wanton display of unbridled lust"--
and we move from anal to oral to vaginal again, to the satisfaction
of both participants.
This was stroke, but well-written stroke you can "enjoy" (hee hee) again and again. Recommended for BDSM and D/s fans, or anyone who likes a sex story on the brutal side.
Cliches, A Cyber Mockumentary, Parts 1 and 2 [A]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/19/99
Author: Dimitri
Address: dimitri_resides@hotmail.com
Dimitri is an author who specializes in long, complicated tales of superhero sex that are as hot as they are confusing, with superpowers from a multitude of different universes coupling and uncoupling like rabid amoebae in a petri dish. All share a genial, smart-ass, slightly mocking tone that will be familiar to readers of MichaelD38 and the late Mike Hunt, a tone that lets us laugh at the characters and situations even as we are getting turned on by them.
In this story Dimitri attempts a satire of the ASS experience and gives it a near-future science fiction setting: ASS has become a net-based "virtual world" instead of a newsgroup where readers become avatars of Roman warriors, gorillas, and bunnies as they experience the stories in a manner similar to the Star Trek idea of the holodeck. The documenters encounter amusing spoofs of several different story genres which will be familiar to readers of ASS: the Star Trek/media tale ("I'm busy right now Captain," replied Dr Crusher,"I have to get down to my quarters and catch Wesley masturbating, then give him a blowjob and then have sex with him") the semi-literate racist rape ("I'm fucking this 12 year old white bitch and sucking her huge tits and she cums as I rape her with my 14 inch black dick and I cumming and she is getting pregnant") the perfume ad soft-focus erotica tale ("She rolled from the sheets, silken sheets of gossamer fury which clung to her body angrily, holding her to the bed like a spider's web and tugging her back to the world of dreams and relaxation") and then the author's idea of a "good" story, which means Jennifer Love Hewitt, Neve Campbell, Michelle Williams, Katie Holmes and Christina Ricci altogether in a hot tub, committing kinky acts with each other and with him. On the way there's various barbs at the biz, like story sites that charge readers for access and the average mentality of ASS readers (some of which laud the racist rape tale as "the best fucking story in all of recorded history, man.")
This story, like all of Dimitri's work, is frantic, tight, and uses dialogue effectively; it shows off the author's talent for parody, and some of its targets richly deserve it. But ultimately it says more about the author than the current state of the newsgroup OR erotica on the net: namely, that he's of the same generation as the ASSD reader who wondered why straight women find lesbian sex more appealing than gay sex, the kind of guy the current big-business sex industry is aimed at--oodles of look-alike, naked females eager to please you and eager to please each other to please you--which is ultimately the antithesis of the net, which thrives on diversity.
The author also seemed to be bellyaching about the lack of free stories on the net. Well, I've got a list of about 150 free story sites on my website, all with a minimum of spam and banners, and the list is growing monthly and by no means complete. Free erotica, even of the kinkiest sort, is widely available to anyone with a net connection, but you won't find it with a YAHOO! search--you do it the hard way, by following links and using resources like webrings, archives, and personal sites. I list the sites I do because I'm continually amazed by the diversity of them and all the hard work that goes into their creation and upkeep; plus I truly feel I perform a needed service in putting people in touch with reading material that appeals to their specific tastes, whatever they are.
In sum I recommend this story--it's funny and sharp, and the writing is excellent. But the particular ax it's grinding doesn't exist.
Zonama, Parts 1-7 [A/A-]
Where posted: ASCEM
When posted: 5/5/99
Author: ZorroRojo
Address: zorrorojo@slashcity.com
Website: http://www.slashcity.com/zorro/home.htm
This is only a review of the first half of this story; it actually goes up to Chapter 15. The whole thing may be available on the website listed.
Most Treksmut stories have plots and concern M/M or F/F pairings, unlike the picture you'd get from the Star Trek story in the Dimitri story above. (Yes, I know it's a spoof, but what it's spoofing is only a small number of the Star Trek stories out there.) The pairings are denoted by a / in the header line-- pairings being as important Treksmut fans as story codes are to ASS fans--with initials indicating the characters involved. This one was C/P, which means Commander Chakotay and Tom Paris of the starship Voyager.
The plot is a long and involved one, though the premise would fit within the boundaries of the weekly TV show. Chakotay and Paris are on a shuttlecraft when an alien race forces them to land on a strange planet where females are the dominant sex. In an added twist, all of this planet's couples are homosexual; they only have het sex when they want babies. So Chakotay and Paris find themselves enslaved and sold off as a pair to serve as stud stock in a prison-like breeding center full of other male couples, where they are forced to get it up in a clinical way for the females; along the way they're subjected to humiliations like branding and the removal of one testicle, and there's the constant threat of brutal punishment and rape from the other captive males.
For slash fans this fits the bill--lots of angst, physical and emotional brutality, and emotions running high--though as with many slash stories, the sex acts depicted aren't exactly erotic, though the *ideas* of them are (similar, in a way, to some of Spoonbender's or Tigger's TG work). It's a dirty secret that many slash fans and readers are interested in kink you'd rarely find publicized in a wholesome, rosy-cheeked forum like ASS or the Celestial Reviews.
Looking at it as a slash story though, and not erotica (the genres, believe me, have different standards) I question the lack of description of the alien world. The natives are only "beautiful" with skin the "color of blackened coal and hair so dark it almost seemed to absorb light" while the planet wasn't described at all; vehicles look like "old Earth cars" while the unelaborated mentions of cells, desks, clipboards, and buildings made me think of the generic mid-1960s Paramount backlot sets like the one used for the original Star Trek episode "Patterns of Force" (you know, the Nazi one.) Of course, since this is fan fiction the reader is assumed to carry most of the visuals in his or her head based on repeated viewings of the show. But while this works for familiar settings and characters, it shows up as a flaw when the story ventures into new territory.
In sum, an interesting novella-length story that could have been improved by some knowledge of descriptive writing basics.
Donita's Revenge [B]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/19/99
Author: JJ
Address: Thomas_J_J@hotmail.com
This story is one of those told in the present tense: "Nikki squirms in horror and shame as her young coworker struts around the bedroom, crop in hand." Nikki is white; Donita, her tormenter, is a young black woman, and this is the story's premise: an interracial domination.
The story was energetic, but suffered from the same problems many amateur pieces of neterotica have--first we're in Whitie's head, then Donita's, then the author's; Whitie is a housewife, then she's the boss; and while the incident is described, how exactly Whitie got tied to that bed in the first place isn't, a certain of laziness in the writer.
Short, but nothing special.
The Property of Raging Pythons, Parts 1 and 2 [A-/B+]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/18/99
Author: Lara V. Cataluna
Address: lara_v_cataluna@my-dejanews.com
Snooty blonde Lara, an upcoming lawyer, lives next door to a rock band known as the Raging Pythons, who she disdains as "trailer park white-trash." William Richard Stauntun III, her 33-year-old yuppie boss, is more to her taste. The plot picks up when she mistakenly rents a videotape on mind-control techniques aimed at turning women into sluts. When the Raging Pythons knock on her door, she becomes their sex slave. There's more than a little Tommy Lee and Pamela Anderson flavor in this, and as with all snooty blonde bitch revenge pieces what follows is straightforward: the victim is forced to strip, spanked, gangbanged, forced to model lingerie, and tattooed, all the while suffering delicious pangs of humiliation. In the end she eventually winds up as the submissive trophy wife of her lawyer boss:
She knew her place, she was always a scared little wife, fearing
failure to please her man. She always dressed seductively,
running huge bills on Victoria's Secret and Fredricks of
Hollywood among other posh brands - bills Richard gladly paid.
She always awakened her husband in the morning with a gentle
blow job and in the evening greeted her husband at the door in
sheer lingerie. There was nothing she wouldn't do of course,
anything that caught Richard's fancy was fair game in the
bedroom and Lara was expected to watch Playboy TV and read the
most outrageous sex magazines to improve herself and find
creative ways to entertain her husband.
Or is she? There's a twist in the ending that suggests she
machinated the whole thing.
For a female humiliation/maledom story this was acceptable, but it suffered, as many pieces of amateur netfic do, from lack of focus--it needed tightening and thinking-through, and a more realistic ear for dialogue, especially with the rock band. The author must have lived in California in the 80s, going by all the "dudes."
Fucking the Champion [A]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 3/16/99
Author: RedRacer
Address: red-racer@iname.com
Available from: The ASSGM Archive
There's a small subgenre of gay stories which center around sports and the men who compete them. You won't find an equivalent in the straight world. The main theme is the one of friendship and mutual respect--playing as the members of a team--and rivalry--playing on opposite teams, or against each other on the same team--and what happens when that friendly/hostile relationship turns sexual. In this story the sport is the exiting world of professional racing and the couple two racers on the same team who win a big race and recognize their attraction for each other.
One guy's straight but curious, Italian, and married, the other a single, rugged, bi America, and there was lots of will-they-or- won't-they tension as they dance around each other, wondering if they misread each other's signals. The author that this may be a sort of celebrity fanfic as well: "Though any resemblance to actual persons or localities is entirely intentional, this does not in any way make any allegations as to activities past, present or future." Unfamiliar as I am with pro racing, I couldn't tell who the "real" participants were supposed to be, but if you are, it may give the story an added pleasure. The focus in the story was more on emotions than sex (though there was some very nice, first- time sex) and there's room for a sequel, and some more adventures in the world of auto racing, as well. Vroom VROOM!
Movie Notes: A Midsummer Night's Dream
This picture has been touted as the most "Shakespeare" version of the play to hit the big screen--almost all the dialogue is lifted straight--and thus may be a little windy and confusing to non- Shakespeare fans. But it has a lot to recommend it. Namely, skin. Half-naked female sprites, bare-chested Rupert Elliot, Michelle Pfeiffer as a lascivious fairy queen, and two (human) couples who get progressively more undressed as the play unwinds, including a female mudfight in Edwardian undies. And it's "Culture." What more can you want? As one teenager remarked as we were coming out, "They should have shown us movies like this in high school, it would have made it way more interesting."
So if you have a teenager, indulge him or her with some wholesome, slightly erotic nudity.