6/13/99 Padme and the Tusken Raiders (Tal); The Phantom Menace - Young love (Cajunboy); Eve's Enchanted Ass (Cactus Juggler); Rogue Anthropologist, Episode One: The Angry Penis (James); Mind Games (Eidolon90); Katrice, Parts 1 - 4 (PowerFool7)
6/20/99 A Fairy Tale About Slavery (AudEgg); Jinaq I - Qapchu (Karanne); Trespass (Touchstone); Workout Lesson (Matthew); The New Pet, I and II (SexySusan69); Movie Notes: The Matrix
6/26/99 Infomercial: The Chastilock 2000 (Chastity); Castle Blackburn (Lisa and Sharon); Ashley and Her Boss (The Midnight Lurker); The Seduction of Kamuela (BuckMan); Saying I Do (Comicality); Washout (Verywierd)
Padme and the Tusken Raiders [C+]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/28/99
Author: Tal
Address: TalnLzus@earthlink.net
The Phantom Menace - Young Love [B+/B]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 6/9/99
Author: Cajunboy
Address: Not given
Taking note of the first installment of the new Star Wars trilogy, I decided to review two Phantom Menace stories.
The movie wasn't that great, story-wise, so these two budding young erotica writers had extremely thin material to work with. In fact, the only part of the movie that had any sort of sexual content at all was Queen Amidala/Padme, simply because she was the only attractive young female. In "Padme and the Tusken Raiders" she's kidnapped from Mos Espa, tied to stakes in the desert, and repeatedly raped, with the oh-so-popular cum-coating of her cunt, face and hair (why the hell do some men take such delight in messing up an attractive young woman's attractive assets? Were they obsessed with silly string as young children? How about blowing vanilla milkshakes out of crazy straws?) As with most rape stories, it was pretty one-note; though, like the movie, it didn't have much of a plot. Recommended only if you like to read about young girls being raped and degraded, without them enjoying it, I'll add.
"Young Love" was a little better in that it played off an already existing element of the movie: young Anakin Skywalker's attraction to Padme. In the movie that's all it was, though there were hints that it would grow into a deeper attachment (there are going to be the parents of Luke and Leia after all.) However, the author has ignored two points: #1 that Padme is 17 and chubby l'il Anakin is 8; and #2 that Padme was really Queen Amidala in disguise at the time. Not many things squick me, but the idea of a teenage girl doing a Mary Kay LeTourneau with a little boy definitely does--she gifts him with a blowjob and everything. Perhaps the author was using artistic license and recasting Anakin as, say, a 12-year-old; if so, please tell us readers so we don't say "What the fu---?"
Eve's Enchanted Ass, 1 and 2 [A-/B+]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/28/99
Author: Cactus Juggler
Address: cactusjuggler@hotmail.com
I just had to read this one because of the title.
The story begins almost like an adult fairy tale, with "The three girls were all attractive. A red head, a brunette and a blond" (and one had a great big voice, one had a medium voice, and one had an itsy-bitty teeny-weeny little voice...uh, sorry) and after this terse introduction they soon set to performing nasty shenanigans with each another. Eve, the redhead, is a practitioner of magic who cajoles the other two into working a spell with her. The spell makes them become Eve's slaves, and she keeps them that way by sitting on their faces and hypnotizing them with her dweomered intestinal gas. There's a bit of rimming, too, and lots of other humiliations as the slaves are forced to pussy-lick each other and their mistress while she gloats.
The story was by no means realistic, but the interplay of personalities between the three girls was fun; the author caught 18-year-old female bitchiness quite well. For me, it was mildly amusing imagining these snots getting so thoroughly humiliated, but if you like F/F mind control and farting/anal fetishes you'll probably like it more.
Rogue Anthropologist [A/A-]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 5/24/99
Author: James
Address: aliceinchains64@hotmail.com
Save for the graphic sex, this humorous piece could have been an anthropology article in the National Geographic. A scientist goes to do research among the Arkaji people of South America, who sound suspiciously like the Yamamomo "[they] average about 5'3" in height, and have hairless bodies with no tan lines. These people live very strenuous lives and have one of the highest protein diets in the world. Consequently, they are all incredibly tough little fireplugs." The men rub their penises with irritating leaves to make them "angry"--that is, red and erect--to satisfy their insatiable wives, and the rogue anthropologist decides to prove to one of them, N'jawnlak, that there is a better way to achieve tumescence.
"Have you ever seen anything like this before?...Point your penis
at mine so that it can see how much bigger mine is".
The Indian did as he was told. I brought mine in closer. At 10 by
2.5 inches I knew that I was near the theoretical maximum for a
human.
"Do you have medicine to make my penis as big as yours?" He
asked sheepishly.
"No", I answered. "That is very unfair that no magic will do this, I
know. But that unfairness can be used to make your penis angry
at the whole world, so think about how unequal that is and it will
get a little angrier."
"The surest way to make a penis angry is with...a bigger penis." I
let the enormity of that truth sink in, then slowly pulled my
equipment out of my baggy trunks.
The RA then convinces the Indian that anal sex will make his penis simply furious, so they go at it in the jungle. Be forewarned, there's a fair amount of the description of the products of anal sex, that is various textures of human shit and commingled cum.
A spoof that was both intelligent and humorous, but definitely non-PC. White Man's burden, indeed.
Mind Trap [A+]
Where posted: soc.subculture.bondage-bdsm
When posted: 5/26/99
Author: Eidolon 90
Address: eidolon90@hotmail.com
This brief story was of the literary sort, almost like poetry in its form. Alternating paragraphs of offset text describe the thoughts of a man and a woman as they eat dinner. Gradually it comes out that the female half of the couple has discovered a mysterious box and its shocking contents, and now both are eating in guilty silence, trying to guess at what it means for their marriage.
The sneaky thing about this story is that you have to use your imagination as to what the box contains; the implication is the only thing that makes it erotic. Perhaps it contains some leather gear and a pair of shiny handcuffs. Or woman's underwear. Maybe an enema bag.
A high-concept sex story that never mentions sex. Now, THAT's using your mind.
Katrice, 1 - 4 [A/A-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 5/20/99
Author: PowerFool7
Address: anon8371@nyx.net
This story combined the genres of fur, mind control, fantasy, and TG in one of the more fantastical plots I've seen lately: in this world, Juran Brentano makes a pact with a demon to punish a mysterious woman, who wakes up as amnesiac coyote-girl Katrice in an alternate universe of elves, fairies, and magic-using humanoid animals. Trying to discover her real identity, Katrice falls under the spells of a wolf-man named Tolan, and she is forced to service him orally and compulsively masturbate for his pleasure. Meanwhile Endora the fox-woman is training Francis, another kidnapee, to accept the transition from male to female. More chapters than these seem to have been planned.
The story had a Warner Brothers network comedy feel to it--there was a knowing yet innocent teenage hipness, as if the author was doing a script for a show he/she would like to see. The descriptions were vividly detailed in the manner of private fantasies that may have been inspired by role-playing games or animated cartoons, such as this:
Her muzzle? She had a muzzle? This surprised her for some
reason...She quickly put her glasses back on, holding her hands
to each side of her head as she started to really look at herself. It
just got her more frantic. She could feel her soft hair, and the
fuzziness of her cheek. Facial hair! No wait, it was fur of course.
Was she an animal? Whoever heard of an animal who wore
clothing and glasses and could walk like any other
person...Taking further inspection of herself as she walked
along, it was clear to her that she was some sort of predatory
mammal....Her attire though, was best described as a cross
between punkish and geeky. Large wire rimmed glasses were
perched semi-neatly upon her yellowish brown muzzle,
magnifying the green eyes that they were designed to assist. Her
full bodied hair was only slightly wild. But, it was purple! She
had purple hair! Was that natural or was it dyed? This was just
getting worse. She donned a ripped up tee-shirt, which displayed
her navel as well as her downey white underbelly. Her shorts
appeared as delibrately tattered. Were they some designer label?
She did have on some rather impressive looking boots. This she
was thankful for, after all of the walking she'd been doing! She
bent down further to peer at her face. As she did so she saw her
own ears perking forward. Being conscious of it, it weirded her
out. It felt all at once surreal, yet perfectly natural. She turned
around to get a look at her rear as she put her hands on her hips.
Damn, she thought, she must be the only animal in the forest
with such a full bodied figure! That made her giggle again as she
wiggled her butt. She had quite the nice bushy tail. Not scrawny
like you might expect. Expect? It was dawning on her just what
kind of animal she was as she became more familiar with her
own reflection, and it only raised more questions in her mind as
to why.
She was a coyote.
She slid her glasses from her muzzle to rub her eyes.
Though the writing here was more than a little teenage (the
spelling errors, the abruptly changing POVs, the constant use of
!'s, substituting 'hear' for 'here,' and boners of anatomy like "the
other one kept pumping in and out of her clitorus") the story
moved along well with a brisk energy and showed plenty of
imagination. The author had a good ear for dialogue and an
excellent hand at creating intriguing characters. Unlike many
sex stories, there was also an interesting plot--Katrice has to find
out her identity and who has done this to her before more
mayhem occurs--and it had some of the best depictions of the
actual thoughts of a mind-controlled victim that I've come across.
Though the writing is rough, this is definitely good work.
This week's reviews feature BDSM and D/s stories.
A Fairy Tale About Slavery [A+]
Where posted: ASCEM
When posted: 6/3/99
Author: Aud Egg
Address: eggblue@hotmail.com
Website: http://internetdump.com/users/egg/eggpage.html
As I stated in last week's reviews, the realm of Treksmut often offers far more violent levels of kinkiness than anything you'd see on ASS, or SSBB or ASSGM, for that matter (as many of these stories feature BDSM and M/M sex.) The impulse that drives the creation of such stories seems to be a different one than the one that drives the creation of fictional dungeons and kidnap victims. In the classic BDSM scenario the interrogation, sex slave ring, or whatever is there only to provide a plausible (and often not so plausible) background for the kinky acts that occur; in Treksmut BDSM, the background is an integral part of the story and serves to spotlight the characters' interior lives. Therefore, it's not really the tight black leather or whips that arouse, it's the particular characters' reactions to them. I suppose this take on it makes the writers feel more ennobled about what they are doing, because they aren't "just" writing about violent sex acts; there's a plot and characters involved.
This story takes place in the DS9 universe. Peter Toole-esque Dr. Julian Bashir and his Klingon friend Martok have been captured by the brutal, scaly Jem'Hadar, the genetically engineered warrior race of the Dominion, and placed in a prison camp run by the amoral, by-the-book Vorta, the administrator race of the Dominion. (They also have ears that run down to their chins.) Utra is the camp's female administrator, and she's learned how to use the prisoners to slake her kinky desires. Poor Dr. Bashir finds himself chained over a bondo bench in a room full of mirrors with his ass in the air, and Utra commands the Jem'Hadar to gang-bang him as a bound Martok looks on. The rest of the plot had a brutal effectiveness that was right up there with the well- written, disturbing work of Steven S. Davis and Akasha; the very daring and extremeness of it earned it an A+
One reason for the story's effectiveness (and also what made it so interesting) was the employment of a narrative style not usually found in Treksmut or sex stories; a first-person voice taking the role of a storyteller transporting us to make-believe land ("That reminds me, first things first. I shall tell you this tale as well as I know how, but before I do, a warning. Don't expect me to give you a happy ending, or an easy escape, because that is not the way it happened.") The naive logic of it enabled the writer to keep switching back and forth from the domina's, victim's, and watcher's POVs, telling us what each said, did, and felt while allowing the writer to get in some explanation of the strange alien races, a necessity for non-Trek fans. It also created the distancing factor so common in fanfic, allowing the reader to see the story as if on a TV screen rather than spuriously experience it along with a character; all the sensations were once removed. Add to this the precise, antiseptic tone of Star Trek fanfic, which avoids the heavy use of magic words like ass, cock and cunt and magic phrases like "Jets of creamy white cum gushed all over her tits" and you have a reading experience where the author makes no excuses about being perverse and disturbing yet takes no responsibility for being perverse and disturbing.
Was this story intended to be porn or fanfic? I am not sure what the author wanted, but to me, the giveaway is in how the pathos and horror of the situation are maximized and dwelt on: "[Julian] followed the Klingon's gaze to the large monitor in front of them. It was the one showing the angle from behind. He could see his ass and legs in it clearly, red, raw, and bloodied. Large scratch marks stood out in relief, and glistening lines of liquid red still rolled down the backs of this thighs.") Porn in effect if not in intent.
It's a funny thing, isn't it, that Trek fans love the show so much they'll torture their favorite characters to death.
Jinaq I - Qapchu [A]
Where posted: ASCEM
When posted: 6/5/99
Author: Kara Anne
Address: karanne@mindspring.com
This was another Treksmut tale that involved D/s and BDSM. Voyager discovers a derelict starship floating near a wormhole (black hole) with a humanoid life-form in a stasis capsule. This turns out to be Number 28457049998, a Klingon/Ferengi halfbreed slave girl. The Ferengi, apparently, get their ideas of female slavery from John Norman and Thundershark: slave girls are kept naked, have their nipples pierced with bells, are branded with their serial numbers; they are expected to maintain the ship, help capture new slaves, sexually service their masters, *AND* occasionally fight each other to the death for the Ferengi's amusement. I didn't know the little big-eared twerps were so kinky.
The conflict of the story, as you can tell, comes from what happens when Miss Submissive suddenly finds herself a free woman, and the amusing interplay between ex-slave and crew was very readable:
Anne instead asks me to lay on the table again, and asks Kes to
scan me for cellular decay. She does, then does it again, and then
calls the doctor back.
The three of them start to discuss something, and Kes starts to use
some of the equipment in the room. {This must be a master's
sickbay. The slaves had a very simple one, with a rack to be
examined on.} After a while, Doctor Anne comes back to where
I'm waiting and actually apologizes for making me wait! I smile
shyly, and Anne gives me the red jacket to put on and says, "Shall
we go see your new quarters?"
I hear Kes approach, and Anne has gotten quite excited for some
reason. I remain sitting on the bed, until Anne helps me to stand.
They manage to unlock the belt {A relief to be able to remove
those metal balls one of the masters locked inside me. All those
months ago when I was last used, he said it would keep me
'simmering'.}, and I turn to struggle into the red pants. I feel
clumsy, and I have to apologize to them, and say "I'm not very
used to wearing clothes."
However, the story takes a conventional turn when it turns out
the slave is really a long-lost member of Klingon nobility who is
the only one able to command the lost starship; in a reversal of
fortune she is commissioned a captain and quickly sheds her old
beliefs. This was too bad, as the tale of a slave's struggle out of
ingrained bondage would have been very interesting, as would
the Voyager crew's reactions to it. As with the story above, I
wonder if the author meant it to arouse or entertain; I suspect the
plot served partly as an excuse to elaborate on the kinky bits,
while giving the impression of a legitimate story. But this was
still a good read, if a bit heavy on the techno-babble.
Trespass, Parts 1, 2 ,3 [A]
Where posted: SSBB
When posted: 5/31/99
Author: Touchstone
Address: touchstone@my-deja.com
This story takes the form of a discussion between a male writer and a female friend; the subject is a D/s story he's written. The woman suspects the story is true, or should be true, for it to arouse, while the man is of the view judicious embellishment is necessary. The two play mind games with each other as the woman reveals some kinky desires of her own.
This was more a story *about* sex stories than a sex story itself, and offered some thoughtful commentary on erotica writing and the motivations that drive that writing. An enjoyable read.
Workout Lesson [B]
Where posted: SSBB
When posted: 6/13/99
Author: Mathew
Address: seeker7050@aol.com
A Dom prepares a special scene with his female sub. He makes a few changes to their workout room and then runs her, naked of course, through a series of sadomasochistic exercise routines such as doing jumping jacks while nipple-clamped and then performing pushups on a bed of thumbtacks while bungee cords stretch out her pussy lips.
As BDSM fiction this was only average, though the exercise routines show a mild sort of originality. I'm surprised, given the similarity of the equipment used, that there aren't more BDSM/exercise stories out there; but I can guess the heightened breathing and heartrate associated with aerobic workouts tends to push the sexual sensations into the background--when two highs compete, one of them loses. The stilted speech of the Dom was also annoying to me--the "My dear's" punctuating every other sentence that made him sound like Vincent Price in a Roger Corman movie.
The New Pet I and II [C+]
Where posted: ASS, ASSB, etc.
When posted: 6/11/99
Author: SexySusan69
Address: SexySusan69@aol.com
Website: http://members.aol.com/sexysusan69
The author of this story had such confidence in its universal appeal that she cross-posted it no less than twelve times, to such obviously unsuited newsgroups as alt.sex. stories.tg and alt.sex.stories.babies.
Male Dom Donavan and Harriet, a female sub who occasionally doms, kidnap a virginal teenage runaway named Jolene and chain her in their dungeon to be their "pet." The two shave, whip, and nipple-clamp her, then uppity Harriet gets angry when Donavan claims the teen first, prompting the Dom to strap her to a sawhorse and whup her ass: "She made soft whimpering sounds but Donavan knew it was more from anticipation than from the prospect of being punished. Harriett enjoyed being punished and it seems that Donavan had not properly been doing enough lately. He stood there and watched her ass, she was softly wiggling her ass at him waiting for the spanking to commence." As you can tell, the prose is more than a little rough.
Actually, the writing in the whole thing is pretty bad: "the 2 watched there pet struggle in her bonds" "I want to brake her cherry" "devoured his cock with a verocity" "retrieved another set of nipple clams" "changed into there attire." These were a few of the more obvious. Although the story wouldn't have been bad as a cheap, quick stroke read, these mistakes made it laughable.
Movie Notes: The Matrix
After the cruddy experience of Star Wars Ep. 1: The Phantom Menace (absolutely no erotic content at all!) it was a relief to see The Matrix, which was almost pure technokink. It was about BDSM, what else? Silently suffering Keanu Reeves--who may turn out to be the Charlton Heston of the late 90s/early 00s--is a computer geek who is courted by a black leather and rubber-clad gang of rebels who are out to show him the true reality of what he thinks is life. Along the way he has his mouth sealed shut (a nice variant on a gag), has a metal insect inserted into his navel (a nice metaphor on penetration, the navel was even hairy, like an asshole); he emerges from a bio-organic cocoon nude, hairless, and shining with secretions; he's penetrated by metal tentacles, stuck with acupuncture needles, and studded with plug- in computer sockets; he interfaces with a computer and drools and grits his teeth, giving some excellent approximations of orgasm. And there was a plot too, and characters, and action, and an SF cautionary tale to mull over. It was as much fun as seeing Heston whipped, caged and leashed by the chimps and gorillas in Planet of the Apes.
Infomercial: The Chastilock 2000 [A-]
Where posted: SSBB
When posted: 6/16/99
Author: Chastity
Address: chastity@connect.ab.ca
There's a particular kind of sex story I call the marketing spoof. There's more of them than you'd think. I put it down to the large numbers of frustrated writers in the advertising industry. Or maybe some people just can't resist warping consumer culture along sexual lines. Of course, consumer culture is pretty warped as it is.
This story took the form of infomercial patter between a hostess and her audience. The product is the Chastilock 2000, a chastity belt that molds itself to the interior of a woman's vagina using nanomachine technology. It comes with mild stimulation, shocks, a lock, a plug, and a ring so the wearer can be led around by her pussy.
I enjoyed reading this story, but to me the content wasn't very arousing. Rather, it was about the lack of genital feeling. I am not sure if this can be considered erotic, though the writing was very well done.
Castle Blackburn [A-/B+]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 6/19/99
Author: Lisa and Sharon
Address: bymsap@aol.com
Website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Kristen/www/bymsap/
A young man visits an English castle where a tale of horror is told. In Medieval times, Princess Gwenyth offers to marry Sir Broderick, a boorish, brutish knight to save her father's kingdom from destruction. He is the sort of man who prefers fat kitchen- sluts to refined noble ladies, and instead of marrying the princess he rapes her, has his men rape her, then murders all the castle's inhabitants. The young tourist thinks the story is bunk. But then he meets a mysterious woman who lures him away to have sex on battlements, and it turns out she's the ghost of Gwenyth out to take her revenge on all men. There's a second surprise ending that feels tagged on and doesn't make much sense.
This wasn't a bad read--it seems the authors were trying very hard to combine history, erotica, and a supernatural horror story--but it could have used more refinement; it would have been an OK effort for a basic writing class. If all you want is something OK, you'll be happy with this. The sex scenes were good, and my only criticism is that the authors' skill fell short of their ambition.
Ashley and Her Boss [A]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 6/19/99
Author: The Midnight Lurker
Address: tmidlurker@aol.com
Ashley is the secretary every corporate wife has nightmares about: a young, dumb, blonde bimbo who was hired for her sexual skills rather than her work skills. But this is better than it sounds. Ashley actually enjoys it, seeing the sexual service of her superiors--even elderly superiors--as her main joy in life, and the boss, too, is unapologetic about it, and this lends the story a cheerful, oddly innocent tone:
"They don't have to beg," Ashley gagged, her mouth full of
cock. "Asking will usually do the trick!"
"Slut!" the boss laughed, repeating himself. "I'm so lucky;
I have the sexiest, most desirable slut secretary in the world!
A secretary who does DICKtation!"
"I prefer DICK by itself," she squealed.
"You really are special, Ashley," Stan told her. "Any man
in his right mind would beg on their knees to get their hands
on that hot body of yours."
This wasn't really a story, just a description of a basic situation and two different sexual encounters in the office, but I liked it for its over-the-top descriptions of stereotypes. It was as if the author knew perfectly well he or she was writing about a cliche yet decided to run full throttle anyway and milk it for all it was worth, which amounted to good, clean, slutty fun, the well- buttered popcorn of ASS.
The Seduction of Kamuela [A-]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 6/11/99
Author: BuckMan
Address: buckinbc@hotmail.com
A gay guy is stranded at Vancouver International Airport during a snowstorm. He meets an intriguing stranger who offers to let him share his hotel room. They get ready for bed, and there's lots of nice tension as the narrator tries to conceal his attraction to the (unknowing) straight. Being as there's only one bed, they have to sleep together. The narrator just can't resist:
I moved my hand toward you, intending to give you a little shake
and bring you out of the clutches of the dream, but when my
hand touched the warm hard flesh of your stomach I couldn't
resist the temptation to linger. Your movements eased and I told
myself that I would take just one feel. Just one gentle light
caress of your crotch. My hand drifted down, barely grazing
your skin and passed over the warm cotton of your briefs. The
big bulge that met my hand came as a jolt. It was evident now
that you were not in the throes of a nightmare. I wondered if
your wife was the object of your dream. I let my hand rest there,
your heat and hardness pressing against my palm.
This was a basic but interesting gay man seduces straight man story, romantic yet hot. The second person voice was handled well, making it into a hot yet romantic valentine. And I had no idea a male asshole is sometimes called a "man pussy."
Saying I Do [A-]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 6/19/99
Author: Comicality
Address: comicality@webtv.net
Website: http://www.kanza.net/Comicality
A 14-year-old teenager preparing for his sister's wedding meets his cousin Jordan, and it's love at first sight. Jordan has to spend the night in the narrator's room and the narrator is hard-pressed to ignore him, slipping into the shower for a jack-off session:
As soon as I got in the shower I lathered up my aching cock and
stroked it fiercely! I was going at the speed of light! I pictured me
and Jordan wrapped around each other in positions that weren't
humanly possible! I was sucking my tongue hard, imagining that
it was his hard cock between my lips! I pictured us clawing and
biting at one another in a fury of lust...things that only a
depraved teenage mind could possibly conceive! Then I came! BOY
did I cum! I fell to my knees in the bathtub as my orgasm drained
me for all I was worth! I squinted my eyes tightly as the hot jets
of my cum sprayed the shower walls! I was breathless, and even
after I was through, I continued to stroke my shrinking 5 inch
cock, thinking of Jordan laying by my side, feeling me up and
down. It was the most exhausting shower of my life.
It's clear by the gung-ho enthusiasm here the writer is a teenager, or was recently a teenager; the intense yet amorphous sexuality that pervades the piece is also adolescent in attitude. This made it very different from a story written by an adult--less earthy, more emotional and transcendent. Everything is fresh and new and it feels great; there's no violence, no separation into doer and done by, no hidden agendas, no one-upmanship. This made the piece very refreshing to read, and it was funny, too.
Washout [A]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 6/20/99
Author: VeryWierd
Address: verywierd@my-deja.com
This story had the classic setup of setup of kinky blackmail fiction:
Joanne was dead. Unless she could find a solution to her latest
problem, her life insurance was about to become a good
investment. At 5ft 8inches, with the looks of a top model, long
glossy brown hair and a body that was a teenager's wet dream,
Joanne did not look like she had a probable lifespan of mere days.
Unfortunately, her recent addiction to gambling and a really
prolonged loosing streak had put her in massive debt to a loan
shark who had a reputation for making permanent "examples" of
defaulters. Unless she came up with $15,000 in two days time she
was doomed. Ironically, she had enough money coming to her
from advances on a book and video deal that she had signed to be
able to cover her debts easily, but the money was due only in
three weeks time.
What follows next, hmmm? Slavedom? Doggydom? Exotic dancer- dom?
As it turns out, though, Joanne decides to get the money from her publisher, Nicole, who dislikes her intensely. Nicole is also a lesbian, so Joanne puts the two together and offers up her body, specifically her clit, labia and vagina, for sexual abuse with a bottle brush. Not smart, but characters in sex stories are rarely smart. Though Joanne masturbates to get her lubricants flowing, the bottle brush is every bit as painful as she predicted.
Not a believable story by any means, but the writing was vivid and well-done, and if you want to read about an act like the one portrayed, you will be well entertained.